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* SitcomArchnemesis: Towards Jiraiya: While they actually fought each other in a NoodleIncident during the Third Shinobi War, their rivalry is about their literary work. Jiraiya mocks Roshi for his low sales figures, whereas Roshi accuses Jiraiya's work of [[SexSells only selling because it's smut]].
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* SitcomArchnemesis: Towards with Jiraiya: While they actually fought each other in a NoodleIncident during the Third Shinobi War, their rivalry is about their literary work. Jiraiya mocks Roshi for his low sales figures, whereas Roshi accuses Jiraiya's work of [[SexSells only selling because it's smut]].
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The Sandaime Tsuchikage and Korutsuchi's grandfather. [[spoiler:Following Han's report of their C-Rank mission, he cautiously tries to open relations with Konoha, even having Iwa-Genin participate in the Chunin-exams. After getting caught up in the Sound/Sand invitation, he and the Iwa-nin side with Konoha.]] After the time-skip [[spoiler:the returned Kamizuru-clan leads a growing opposition against his alliance with Konoha, leading to Suzumebachi challenging him to a "Yama no Osu", a [[ChallengingTheChief duel for the position of Tsuchikage]]. He is defeated by a ressurrected Mū and [[KilledOffForReal killed]] by him on Suzumebachi orders.]]
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The Sandaime Tsuchikage and Korutsuchi's grandfather. [[spoiler:Following Han's report of their C-Rank mission, he cautiously tries to open relations with Konoha, even having Iwa-Genin participate in the Chunin-exams. After getting caught up in the Sound/Sand invitation, he and the Iwa-nin side with Konoha.]] After the time-skip [[spoiler:the returned Kamizuru-clan leads a growing opposition against his alliance with Konoha, leading to Suzumebachi challenging him to a "Yama no Osu", a [[ChallengingTheChief duel for the position of Tsuchikage]]. He is defeated by a ressurrected resurrected Mū and [[KilledOffForReal killed]] by him on Suzumebachi orders.]]
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* RedLightDistrict: He actually lives in Iwa's, due to having troubles finding good a apartment elsewhere as a jinchūriki.
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* RedLightDistrict: He actually lives in Iwa's, due to having troubles finding a good a apartment elsewhere as a jinchūriki.
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* {{Steampunk}}: [[spoiler:His [[SuperMode chakra-cloak]] has gears and steam as it's main design-element, giving him this aesthetic.]]
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* {{Steampunk}}: [[spoiler:His [[SuperMode chakra-cloak]] has gears and steam as it's its main design-element, giving him this aesthetic.]]
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The Sandaime Tsuchikage's granddaughter and a genin under Han. She meets Team 3 during their first C-Rank mission, striking up somewhat of a friendship with them. She later participates in the Chunin-exams, [[spoiler:where she is beaten by Naruto]]. After the timeskip [[spoiler:, during which she is made a jonin, she opposes the Kamizuru-clan's chauvinistic rethoric. After Suzumebachi defeats and then kills Onoki, she promptly challenges her for the title of Tsuchikage, becoming Gondaime Tsuchikage after her victory.]]
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The Sandaime Tsuchikage's granddaughter and a genin under Han. She meets Team 3 during their first C-Rank mission, striking up somewhat of a friendship with them. She later participates in the Chunin-exams, [[spoiler:where she is beaten by Naruto]]. After the timeskip [[spoiler:, during time skip, [[spoiler:during which she is made a jonin, she opposes the Kamizuru-clan's chauvinistic rethoric.rhetoric. After Suzumebachi defeats and then kills Onoki, she promptly challenges her for the title of Tsuchikage, becoming Gondaime Tsuchikage after her victory.]]
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* AdaptationalBadass: She learns how to use the [[spoiler:Dust Release]] shortly after the timeskip.
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* AdaptationalBadass: She learns how to use the [[spoiler:Dust Release]] shortly after the timeskip.time skip.
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* ChallengingTheChief: [[spoiler:Upon Suzumebachi becoming Tsuchikage and killing Onoki, she immdiatley challenges her for the position.]]
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* ChallengingTheChief: [[spoiler:Upon Suzumebachi becoming Tsuchikage and killing Onoki, she immdiatley immediately challenges her for the position.]]
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* ShipTease:[[spoiler:With Shikamaru prior to the timeskip. She even visits him and his parents for a dressed-up dinner.]]
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* ShipTease:[[spoiler:With Shikamaru prior to the timeskip.time skip. She even visits him and his parents for a dressed-up dinner.]]
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A scion of the Kamizuru-clan and granddaughter of the Shodai Tsuchikage, she returns to Iwa shortly after the timeskip, starting to rile up the population against Onoki's alliance with Konoha. [[spoiler:After ROOT agents kill her brothers and try to kill her, she challenges Onoki to a "Yama no Osu", a [[ChallengingTheChief duel for the position of Tsuchikage]]. Thanks to Kabuto resurrecting the Nidaime Tsuchikage as her partner, she defeats him and Roshi, killing Onoki afterwards. Thus having become Yondaime Tsuchikage, Kurotsuchi promptly challenges her in return, defeating her, Mu and Kusari alongside Shikamaru and Han.]]
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A scion of the prestigious Kamizuru-clan and granddaughter of the Shodai Tsuchikage, she returns to Iwa shortly after the timeskip, starting to rile up the population against Onoki's alliance with Konoha. [[spoiler:After ROOT agents kill her brothers and try to kill her, she challenges Onoki to a "Yama no Osu", a [[ChallengingTheChief duel for the position of Tsuchikage]]. Thanks to Kabuto resurrecting the Nidaime Tsuchikage as her partner, she defeats him and Roshi, killing Onoki afterwards. Thus having become Yondaime Tsuchikage, Kurotsuchi promptly challenges her in return, defeating her, Mu and Kusari alongside Shikamaru and Han.]]
Suzumebachi's brothers, who support her opposition to Onoki's alliance with Konoha. [[spoiler:They later are killed by a contingent of ROOT-agents.]]
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Suzumebachi's brothers, who support her opposition to Onoki's alliance with Konoha. [[spoiler:They later are killed by a contingent of ROOT-agents.]]
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* InsultOfEndearment: [[spoiler:She picks up Shikamaru's]] EmbarrassingNickname "Lazy Ass"]].
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* InsultOfEndearment: [[spoiler:She picks up Shikamaru's]] Shikamaru's EmbarrassingNickname "Lazy Ass"]].
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* AristocratsAreEvil: {{Downplayed}} with the non-canon Kurogane-clan, who's elitist mannerism [[WordOfGod where stated to be inspired]] by overly negative depictions of the Hyūga.
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* AristocratsAreEvil: {{Downplayed}} with the non-canon Kurogane-clan, who's elitist mannerism [[WordOfGod where stated to be were inspired]] by overly negative depictions of the Hyūga.
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* BattleCouple: With [[spoiler:Shikamaru during her 'Yama no Osu' and later the Kumo-Invasion.]]
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* BattleCouple: With [[spoiler:Shikamaru [[spoiler:With Shikamaru during her 'Yama no Osu' and later the Kumo-Invasion.]]
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->'''Kurotsuchi''': I will not kill you. You'll die here, a criminal who committed treason against this village. You'll die, having disgraced Iwa through sinister actions during the 'Yama no Osu' duel. And you'll die here as the last [[spoiler:Kamizuru]], your clan's long history ending in disgrace. All. Because. Of. You.
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* InsultOfEndearment: She picks up [[spoiler:Shikamaru's]] EmbarrassingNickname, [[spoiler:"Lazy Ass"]].
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* InsultOfEndearment: She [[spoiler:She picks up [[spoiler:Shikamaru's]] EmbarrassingNickname, [[spoiler:"Lazy Shikamaru's]] EmbarrassingNickname "Lazy Ass"]].
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** As [[spoiler:Shikamaru's]] foreign LoveInterest, she also mirrors [[spoiler:Canon!-Temari]].
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** As [[spoiler:Shikamaru's]] [[spoiler:As Shikamaru's foreign LoveInterest, she also mirrors [[spoiler:Canon!-Temari]].Canon!-Temari]].
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* ShipTease: With [[spoiler:Shikamaru]] prior to the timeskip. She even visits him and his parents for a dressed-up dinner.
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* ShipTease: With [[spoiler:Shikamaru]] ShipTease:[[spoiler:With Shikamaru prior to the timeskip. She even visits him and his parents for a dressed-up dinner.]]
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* YouKilledMyFather: Against [[spoiler:Suzumebachi, upon her killing Onoki after their duel.]]
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* YouKilledMyFather: Against [[spoiler:Suzumebachi, [[spoiler:Against Suzumebachi, upon her killing Onoki after their duel.]]
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* DefeatMeansFriendship: When he [[spoiler:meets Naruto during the Kumo-Arc, he immidiatley treats him like an old friend.]]
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* DefeatMeansFriendship: When [[spoiler:When he [[spoiler:meets meets Naruto during the Kumo-Arc, he immidiatley treats him like an old friend.]]
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* TheProudElite; He starts out very prideful of his pedigree, [[spoiler:although he evetuall has to give it up.]]
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* TheProudElite; He starts out very is immensely prideful of his pedigree, [[spoiler:although he evetuall has to give it up.]]
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* FriendsTurnedRomanticRivals: {{Downplayed}} with [[spoiler:Naruto]]. Both of them warm up to each other, before Roto starts chrushing on [[spoiler:Hinata]]. [[spoiler:Naruto's envy over this actually helps him realise his feelings for Hinata.]]
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* FriendsTurnedRomanticRivals: {{Downplayed}} [[spoiler:{{Downplayed}} with [[spoiler:Naruto]]. Naruto. Both of them warm up to each other, before Roto starts chrushing on [[spoiler:Hinata]]. [[spoiler:Naruto's Hinata. Naruto's envy over this actually helps him realise his feelings for Hinata.]]
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* AdaptationRelationshipOverhaul: He trains with [[spoiler:Shikamaru, giving him the IfYouEverDoAnythingToHurtHer-talk and questions his intentions and loyalties, but comes to respect him. He even teaches him ''Earth Style: Moblie Core.'']]
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* AdaptationRelationshipOverhaul: He [[spoiler:He trains with [[spoiler:Shikamaru, Shikamaru, giving him the IfYouEverDoAnythingToHurtHer-talk and questions his intentions and loyalties, but comes to respect him. He even teaches him ''Earth Style: Moblie Core.'']]
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* RelatedInTheAdaptation: While his canon-relation to Onoki is [[AmbiguouslyRelated never stated]], in this fic he is his son.
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* RelatedInTheAdaptation: While his canon-relation to Onoki is [[AmbiguouslyRelated never stated]], stated outright]], in this fic he is his son.
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* FishOutOfTemporalWater: [[spoiler:He is unable to recognize the changed times he finds himself in, berating Onoki for joining Konoha's alliance.]]
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* FishOutOfTemporalWater: [[spoiler:He is unable to recognize the changed times he finds himself in, in and quickly starts berating Onoki for joining Konoha's alliance.]]
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The Shodai Tsuchikage and ancestor of the Kamizuru Clan, who founded Iwa. [[spoiler:He is resurrected by Orochimaru during the Sand-Sound-Invasion and fights Onoki.]]
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The Shodai Tsuchikage and founder of Iwa. he is also the ancestor of the Kamizuru Clan, who founded Iwa.Claa. [[spoiler:He is resurrected by Orochimaru during the Sand-Sound-Invasion and fights Onoki.]]
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* AscendedExtra: She goes from a FillerVillain to a full-blown ArcVillain.
* AssassinOutclassin: Fights off [[spoiler:''fifteen'' ROOT agents who try to kill her, after killing her brothers]].
* TheCaligula: While [[spoiler:rising to power justly, she very obviously doesn't handle her new power well.]]
* DeathSeeker: When [[spoiler:Kurotsuchi visits her in prison, she tries to [[PleaseKillMeIfItSatisfiesYou goad her into killing her]], but she opts for the CruelMercy of a life-imprisonment instead.]]
* AssassinOutclassin: Fights off [[spoiler:''fifteen'' ROOT agents who try to kill her, after killing her brothers]].
* TheCaligula: While [[spoiler:rising to power justly, she very obviously doesn't handle her new power well.]]
* DeathSeeker: When [[spoiler:Kurotsuchi visits her in prison, she tries to [[PleaseKillMeIfItSatisfiesYou goad her into killing her]], but she opts for the CruelMercy of a life-imprisonment instead.]]
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* AscendedExtra: She goes from one third of a FillerVillain trio of FillerVillains to a full-blown ArcVillain.
* AssassinOutclassin:Fights [[spoiler:She fights off [[spoiler:''fifteen'' ''fifteen'' ROOT agents who try to kill her, after killing her brothers]].
*TheCaligula: While [[spoiler:rising TheCaligula:[[spoiler:While rising to power justly, she very obviously doesn't handle her new power well.]]
*DeathSeeker: When [[spoiler:Kurotsuchi DeathSeeker:[[spoiler:When Kurotsuchi visits her in prison, she tries to [[PleaseKillMeIfItSatisfiesYou goad her into killing her]], but she opts for the CruelMercy of a life-imprisonment instead.]]
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** To Kurotsuchi. She is also the granddaughter of a previous Tsuchikage, but leaves her village shortly after the Third Shinobi War, instead of Kurotsuchi, who works hard for her village, breaking new records for completed missions. When Suzumebachi returns, she only stirs up political trouble, and while outwardly being a staunch traditionalist, [[spoiler:[[{{Hypocrite}}she ends up breaking tradition]] when she kills Onoki]], whereas Kurotsuchi is more weary of blindly following traditions, [[spoiler:but still chooses to spare her, even if it is a form CruelMercy.]]
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** To Kurotsuchi. She is also the granddaughter of a previous (previous) Tsuchikage, but leaves her village shortly after the Third Shinobi War, instead of Kurotsuchi, who works hard for her village, breaking new records for completed missions. When Suzumebachi returns, she only stirs up political trouble, and while outwardly being a staunch traditionalist, [[spoiler:[[{{Hypocrite}}she ends up breaking tradition]] when she kills Onoki]], whereas Kurotsuchi is more weary of blindly following traditions, [[spoiler:but still chooses to spare her, even if it is a form CruelMercy.]]
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* {{Hypocrite}}: As pointed out by Kurotsuchi [[spoiler:during their 'Yama no Osu': She calls her out for hiding underground while hiding inside her beehive, she calls Mu and Onoki "weak" despite having to use the former to defeat the latter, she accuses Kurotsuchi of conspiring with Konoha while being helped by Kabuto and still claims to care about Iwa despite abandoning it right after the Third Shinobi World War.]]
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* {{Hypocrite}}: As [[spoiler:As pointed out by Kurotsuchi [[spoiler:during during their 'Yama no Osu': She calls her out for hiding underground while hiding inside her beehive, she calls Mu and Onoki "weak" despite having to use the former to defeat the latter, she accuses Kurotsuchi of conspiring with Konoha while being helped by Kabuto and still claims to care about Iwa despite abandoning it right after the Third Shinobi World War.]]
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* SoleSurvivor: [[spoiler:Of Clan Kamizuru, after ROOT-agents kill her brothers.]]
* TyrantTakesTheHelm: After [[spoiler:defeating and killing Onoki, albeit she ends up being Tsuchikage for less than a day.]]
* UnwittingPawn: [[spoiler:To Kabuto, who uses her to get Onoki's corpse and either start a war againts Konoha or orchestrate Danō's downfall.]]
* TyrantTakesTheHelm: After [[spoiler:defeating and killing Onoki, albeit she ends up being Tsuchikage for less than a day.]]
* UnwittingPawn: [[spoiler:To Kabuto, who uses her to get Onoki's corpse and either start a war againts Konoha or orchestrate Danō's downfall.]]
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* SoleSurvivor: [[spoiler:Of Clan Kamizuru, after ROOT-agents kill both of her brothers.]]
* TyrantTakesTheHelm:After [[spoiler:defeating [[spoiler:After defeating and killing Onoki, albeit she ends up being Tsuchikage for less than a day.]]
*UnwittingPawn: [[spoiler:To UnwittingPawn:[[spoiler:To Kabuto, who uses her to get Onoki's corpse and either start a war againts Konoha or orchestrate Danō's downfall.]]
* TyrantTakesTheHelm:
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* TheProudElite: Iwa's three great clans seem to be a lot more classisist than other prestigious clans.
* ReallyGetsAround: The Kinryū-clan, one of Iwa's three great clans and the original bearers of the Lava-Release are noted to be rather... promiscous, leading to a lot of Lava Release user outside nof Iwa or even Tsuchi no Kuni.
* ReallyGetsAround: The Kinryū-clan, one of Iwa's three great clans and the original bearers of the Lava-Release are noted to be rather... promiscous, leading to a lot of Lava Release user outside nof Iwa or even Tsuchi no Kuni.
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* TheProudElite: Iwa's three great clans seem to be a lot more classisist elitist than other prestigious clans.
* ReallyGetsAround: The Kinryū-clan, one of Iwa's three great clans and the original bearers of the Lava-Release are noted to be rather...promiscous, promiscuous, leading to a lot of Lava Release user outside nof of Iwa or even Tsuchi no Kuni.
* ReallyGetsAround: The Kinryū-clan, one of Iwa's three great clans and the original bearers of the Lava-Release are noted to be rather...
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* RuleOfThree: The upper echolons of Iwa were long dominated by its the three great clans: the [[BeeAfraid bee-controlling]] Kamizuru who produced the Shodai Tsuchikage, the elitist Kurogane who bear the [[ExtraOreDinary Iron-release]] and the proud, yet also [[ReallyGetsAround promiscous]] Kinryū who bear the [[MagmaMan Lava-Release]].
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* RuleOfThree: The upper echolons ranks of Iwa were long dominated by its the three great clans: the [[BeeAfraid bee-controlling]] Kamizuru who produced the Shodai Tsuchikage, the elitist Kurogane who bear the [[ExtraOreDinary Iron-release]] and the proud, yet also [[ReallyGetsAround promiscous]] promiscuous]] Kinryū who bear the [[MagmaMan Lava-Release]].
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The Sandaime Tsuchikage and Korutsuchi's grandfather. [[spoiler:Following Han's report of their C-Rank mission, he cautiosly tries to open relations with Konoha, even having Iwa-Genin participate in the Chunin-exams. After getting caught up in the Sound/Sand invation, he and the Iwa-nin side with Konoha.]] After the time-skip [[spoiler:the returned Kamizuru-clan leads a growing opposition against his alliance with Konoha, leading to Suzumebachi callending him to a "Yama no Osu", a [[ChallengingTheChief duel for the position of Tsuchikage]]. He is defeated by a ressurected Mū and [[KilledOffForReal killed]] by him on Suzumebachi orders.]]
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The Sandaime Tsuchikage and Korutsuchi's grandfather. [[spoiler:Following Han's report of their C-Rank mission, he cautiosly cautiously tries to open relations with Konoha, even having Iwa-Genin participate in the Chunin-exams. After getting caught up in the Sound/Sand invation, invitation, he and the Iwa-nin side with Konoha.]] After the time-skip [[spoiler:the returned Kamizuru-clan leads a growing opposition against his alliance with Konoha, leading to Suzumebachi callending challenging him to a "Yama no Osu", a [[ChallengingTheChief duel for the position of Tsuchikage]]. He is defeated by a ressurected ressurrected Mū and [[KilledOffForReal killed]] by him on Suzumebachi orders.]]
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* AdaptationalEarlyAppearance: He makes his first apperance during the Chunin-Exams, observing his Granddauthger's fights.
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* AdaptationalEarlyAppearance: He makes his first apperance appearance during the Chunin-Exams, observing his Granddauthger's granddaughter's fights.
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* AdaptationExpansion: He tells Naruto a story of how [[spoiler:he lost control of the gobi while defending a fort during the Thrid Shinobi War, killing every single person within it. This became known as the "Tsuchi no Yama" incident and was one of the reasons for Iwa's evntual surrender.]]
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* AdaptationExpansion: He tells Naruto a story of how [[spoiler:he lost control of the gobi while defending a fort during the Thrid Third Shinobi War, killing every single person within it. This became known as the "Tsuchi no Yama" incident and was one of the reasons for Iwa's evntual surrender.]]
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** He is the Jonin-Sensei of Kurotsuchi, while their canon relationship is unkown.
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** He is the Jonin-Sensei of Kurotsuchi, while their canon relationship is unkown.unknown.
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** His relation with Roshi, Iwa's other jinchūriki, is unkown in canon. Here, they are close friends.
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** His relation with Roshi, Iwa's other jinchūriki, is unkown unknown in canon. Here, they are close friends.
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* BirdsOfAFeather: As a fellow painter, he hits it off so well with Susmu that [[spoiler:Tayuya]] briefly considers setting them up in one of the [[TheMatchmaker matchmaker]]-omakes of the Iwa-Arc, although they both have an IncompatibleOrientation.
* DefrostingIceKing: He starts off cold and aloof towards everone but Roshi, but after seeing the acceptance of Naruto's friends and his own Genin's loyalty to him, he starts to gradually warm up.
* HiddenDepths: He enjoyes drawing and is actually very good at it, even illustrating Roshi's books.
* DefrostingIceKing: He starts off cold and aloof towards everone but Roshi, but after seeing the acceptance of Naruto's friends and his own Genin's loyalty to him, he starts to gradually warm up.
* HiddenDepths: He enjoyes drawing and is actually very good at it, even illustrating Roshi's books.
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* BirdsOfAFeather: As a fellow painter, he hits it off so well with Susmu Susumu that [[spoiler:Tayuya]] briefly considers setting them up in one of the [[TheMatchmaker matchmaker]]-omakes of the Iwa-Arc, although they both have an IncompatibleOrientation.
* DefrostingIceKing: He starts off cold and aloof towardseverone everyone but Roshi, but after seeing the acceptance of Naruto's friends and his own Genin's loyalty to him, he starts to gradually warm up.
* HiddenDepths: Heenjoyes enjoys drawing and is actually very good at it, even illustrating Roshi's books.
* DefrostingIceKing: He starts off cold and aloof towards
* HiddenDepths: He
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* RunningGag: Him making scorching hot tea. While his close friends get accostumed to it over time, [[spoiler:Yugito is the first one to complement him on his tea.]]
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* RunningGag: Him making scorching hot tea. While his close friends get accostumed accustumed to it over time, [[spoiler:Yugito is the first one to complement him on his tea.]]
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The Sandaime Tsuchikage's granddaughter and a genin under Han. She meets Team 3 during their first C-Rank mission, striking up somewhat of a friendship with them. She later participates in the Chunin-exams, [[spoiler:where she is beaten by Naruto]]. After the timeskip [[spoiler:, during which she is made a jonin, she opposes the Kamizuru-clan's chauvinistic rethoric. After Suzumebachi defeats and then kills Onoki, she promptly challenges her for the tilte of Tsuchikage, becoming Gondaime Tsuchikage after her victoriy.]]
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The Sandaime Tsuchikage's granddaughter and a genin under Han. She meets Team 3 during their first C-Rank mission, striking up somewhat of a friendship with them. She later participates in the Chunin-exams, [[spoiler:where she is beaten by Naruto]]. After the timeskip [[spoiler:, during which she is made a jonin, she opposes the Kamizuru-clan's chauvinistic rethoric. After Suzumebachi defeats and then kills Onoki, she promptly challenges her for the tilte title of Tsuchikage, becoming Gondaime Tsuchikage after her victoriy.victory.]]
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* AmbiguouslyRelated: To the Kinryū-clan, given her Lava-release, possibly through her [[MissingMom unknown mother]]. She only vaguley mentions having some of their blood.
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* AmbiguouslyRelated: To the Kinryū-clan, given her Lava-release, possibly through her [[MissingMom unknown mother]]. She only vaguley vaguely mentions having some of their blood.
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* DidntThinkThisThrough: PlayedForLaughs in an OMAKE. [[spoiler:After becoming Tsuchikage, she tries to combat the spreadof Lava-Release users in other nations by forbidding bearers of the bloodline to pursue relationships with foreigners. The Kinryū -Clan's head is quick to point out that this ban would include her ''own'' relationship with Shikamaru, causing her to quickly drop the idea.]]
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* DidntThinkThisThrough: PlayedForLaughs in an OMAKE. [[spoiler:After becoming Tsuchikage, she tries to combat the spreadof spread of Lava-Release users in other nations by forbidding bearers of the bloodline to pursue relationships with foreigners. The Kinryū -Clan's head is quick to point out that this ban would include her ''own'' relationship with Shikamaru, causing her to quickly drop the idea.]]
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* PoliticallyActivePrincess: Being the granddaugther of the ruling Tsuchikage, she is basically a princess (with Suzumebachi outright calling her one), and she openly supports Onoki's alliance with Konoha and opposes the traditionalist faction under Suzumebachi.
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* PoliticallyActivePrincess: Being the granddaugther granddaughter of the ruling Tsuchikage, she is basically a princess (with Suzumebachi outright calling her one), and she openly supports Onoki's alliance with Konoha and opposes the traditionalist faction under Suzumebachi.
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A scion of the prestigious, but decimated Kurogane-Clan, Risho's defining trait in his first appearances is his [[FantasticRacism buring hatred of Konoha]]. During the Chunin exams, [[spoiler:he fights and defeats Kiba, but loses to Naruto, kicking of his CharacterDevelopment]]. During the timeskip, [[spoiler:[[DefrostingIceKing he gradually mellows out]] after being forced out of his clan's compound. He also is promoted to Jonin.]] After the timeskip, he [[spoiler:fully supports Kurotsuchi and Onoki against the traditionalists.]]
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A scion of the prestigious, but decimated Kurogane-Clan, Risho's defining trait in his first appearances is his [[FantasticRacism buring burning hatred of Konoha]]. During the Chunin exams, [[spoiler:he fights and defeats Kiba, but loses to Naruto, kicking of his CharacterDevelopment]]. During the timeskip, [[spoiler:[[DefrostingIceKing he gradually mellows out]] after being forced out of his clan's compound. He also is promoted to Jonin.]] After the timeskip, he [[spoiler:fully supports Kurotsuchi and Onoki against the traditionalists.]]
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* ExtraOreDinary: His clan's bloodline-release involes the manipulation of iron.
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* ExtraOreDinary: His clan's bloodline-release involes involves the manipulation of iron.
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* {{Foil}}: To Kiba, who also has lost a lot of Clan-members during the Thrid Shinobi War, and hates Iwa because of it.
* FreudianExcuse: His Clan suffered tremendous losses during the Thrid Shinobi War, resulting in a lot of pressure being put on the youngest generation, resulting in his stand-offish behavior.
* FreudianExcuse: His Clan suffered tremendous losses during the Thrid Shinobi War, resulting in a lot of pressure being put on the youngest generation, resulting in his stand-offish behavior.
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* {{Foil}}: To Kiba, who also has lost a lot of Clan-members during the Thrid Third Shinobi War, and hates Iwa because of it.
* FreudianExcuse: His Clan suffered tremendous losses during theThrid Third Shinobi War, resulting in a lot of pressure being put on the youngest generation, resulting in his stand-offish behavior.
* FreudianExcuse: His Clan suffered tremendous losses during the
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* {{Jerkass}}: His defining trait in his first appearences: He not only displays FantasticRacism towards Konoha, but also looks down on his teammate Roto because he's not from a Shinobi-family.
* ShadowArchetype: To Neji and Sasuke as arrogant heir of a prestigious clan, with the Kurogane-Clan being inspired by overly-evil portrails of the Uchiha or Hyūga-Clan.
* ShadowArchetype: To Neji and Sasuke as arrogant heir of a prestigious clan, with the Kurogane-Clan being inspired by overly-evil portrails of the Uchiha or Hyūga-Clan.
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* {{Jerkass}}: His defining trait in his first appearences: appearances: He not only displays FantasticRacism towards Konoha, but also looks down on his teammate Roto because he's not from a Shinobi-family.
* ShadowArchetype: To Neji and Sasuke as arrogant heir of a prestigious clan, with the Kurogane-Clan being inspired by overly-evilportrails portrayals of the Uchiha or Hyūga-Clan.
* ShadowArchetype: To Neji and Sasuke as arrogant heir of a prestigious clan, with the Kurogane-Clan being inspired by overly-evil
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* TookALevelInKindness: [[spoiler:He has considerably mellowed out during the time-skip, dropping his classicsm and FantasticRacism and becoming more relexaed.]]
* {{Tsundere}}: His standart reaction towards people bring up that [[spoiler:mellowed out]] is him FlippingTheBird.
* {{Tsundere}}: His standart reaction towards people bring up that [[spoiler:mellowed out]] is him FlippingTheBird.
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* TookALevelInKindness: [[spoiler:He has considerably mellowed out during the time-skip, dropping his classicsm and FantasticRacism and becoming more relexaed.relaxaed.]]
* {{Tsundere}}: Hisstandart standard reaction towards people bring up that [[spoiler:mellowed out]] is him FlippingTheBird.
* {{Tsundere}}: His
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* PoisonousPerson: He uses differen kinds of poisons in his fighting style.
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* PoisonousPerson: He uses differen different kinds of poisons in his fighting style.
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The Yonbi's jinchūriki, a jonin of Iwa and a critically acclaimed, but not sucessful author. [[spoiler:He arrives in Konoha before the final Chunin-exam-fights to train Kurotsuchi with Lava-release, and then gets caught up in the Sand/Sound-Invasion, like the other Iwa-Nin.]] After the time-skip, [[spoiler:he fights alongside Onoki in his "Yama no Osu", where he is knocked out.]]
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The Yonbi's jinchūriki, a jonin of Iwa and a critically acclaimed, but not sucessful successful author. [[spoiler:He arrives in Konoha before the final Chunin-exam-fights to train Kurotsuchi with Lava-release, and then gets caught up in the Sand/Sound-Invasion, like the other Iwa-Nin.]] After the time-skip, [[spoiler:he fights alongside Onoki in his "Yama no Osu", where he is knocked out.]]
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* BlackSheep: He is actually part of Iwa's prestigious Kinryū-Clan, but [[spoiler:was disaowed by it after becoming Son Guku's jinchūriki.]]
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* BlackSheep: He is actually part of Iwa's prestigious Kinryū-Clan, but [[spoiler:was disaowed disawoed by it after becoming Son Guku's jinchūriki.]]
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* SitcomArchnemesis: Towards Jiraiya: While they actually fought eatch other in a NoodleIncident during the Third Shinobi War, their rivalry is about their literary work. Jiraiya mocks Roshi for his low sales figures, whereas Roshi accueses Jiraiya's work of [[SexSells only selling because it's smut]].
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* SitcomArchnemesis: Towards Jiraiya: While they actually fought eatch each other in a NoodleIncident during the Third Shinobi War, their rivalry is about their literary work. Jiraiya mocks Roshi for his low sales figures, whereas Roshi accueses accuses Jiraiya's work of [[SexSells only selling because it's smut]].
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* TheAce: He is statet to be Iwa's best swordsman and have full control over his clans bloodline-release.
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* TheAce: He is statet stated to be Iwa's best swordsman and to have full control over his clans bloodline-release.
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* TheProudElite: Takes his cousins elitst views up to eleven.
* ShadowArchetype: He is inspired by overly-negative depictions of Hiashi Hyūga as classisit and an extreme case of HonorBeforeReason.
* ShadowArchetype: He is inspired by overly-negative depictions of Hiashi Hyūga as classisit and an extreme case of HonorBeforeReason.
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* TheProudElite: Takes his cousins elitst elitist views up to eleven.
* ShadowArchetype: He is inspired by overly-negative depictions of Hiashi Hyūga asclassisit an elitist and an extreme case of HonorBeforeReason.
* ShadowArchetype: He is inspired by overly-negative depictions of Hiashi Hyūga as
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The Nidaime Tsuchikage, also knwon as the "Non-Person". He trained Onoki and taught his the Dust Release, before perishing during a fight with the Nidaime Mizukage. [[spoiler:He is later ressurected by Kabuto via the ''Edo Tensei'' to support Suzumebachi during her "Yama no Osu", defeating and killing Onoki on her orders. He then fights against Kurotsuchi, Han and Shikamaru in the second "Yama no Osu", where Kurotsuchi's determination allows him to move on.]]
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The Nidaime Tsuchikage, also knwon known as the "Non-Person". He trained Onoki and taught his the Dust Release, before perishing during a fight with the Nidaime Mizukage. [[spoiler:He is later ressurected ressurreccted by Kabuto via the ''Edo Tensei'' to support Suzumebachi during her "Yama no Osu", defeating and killing Onoki on her orders. He then fights against Kurotsuchi, Han and Shikamaru in the second "Yama no Osu", where Kurotsuchi's determination allows him to move on.]]
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* FishOutOfTemporalWater: [[spoiler:He is unbale to recognise the changed times he finds himself in, berating Onoki for joining Konoha's alliance.]]
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* FishOutOfTemporalWater: [[spoiler:He is unbale unable to recognise recognize the changed times he finds himself in, berating Onoki for joining Konoha's alliance.]]
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The Shodai Tsuchikage and ancestor of the Kamizuru Clan, who foundend Iwa. [[spoiler:He is resurrected by Orochimaru during the Sand-Sound-Invasion and fights Onoki.]]
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The Shodai Tsuchikage and ancestor of the Kamizuru Clan, who foundend founded Iwa. [[spoiler:He is resurrected by Orochimaru during the Sand-Sound-Invasion and fights Onoki.]]
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* UnrelatedInTheAdaptation: Onoki is not his grandson, to aviod a relation to the Kamizuru-siblings.
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* UnrelatedInTheAdaptation: Onoki is not his grandson, to aviod avoid a relation to the Kamizuru-siblings.
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* AdaptationalLateAppearance: Instead of being a filler-viallain in Part I, she instead shows up during Part II.
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* AdaptationalLateAppearance: Instead of being a filler-viallain filler-villain in Part I, she instead shows up during Part II.
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* DeathSeeker: When [[spoiler:Kurotsuchi visits her in prision, she tries to [[PleaseKillMeIfItSatisfiesYou goad her into killing her]], but she opts for the CruelMercy of a life-imprisonment instead.]]
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* DeathSeeker: When [[spoiler:Kurotsuchi visits her in prision, prison, she tries to [[PleaseKillMeIfItSatisfiesYou goad her into killing her]], but she opts for the CruelMercy of a life-imprisonment instead.]]
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** To Tsunade: She also is the granddaughter of a Kage who left her village for personal reasons during a time of need. Where Suzumebachi wants to be Kage, Tsuande doesn't. And whereas Suzumebachi's time of absence is a detriment to her political abitions, [[spoiler:Tsunade cites hers as a reason why she shouldn't be Hokage.]]
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** To Tsunade: She also is the granddaughter of a Kage who left her village for personal reasons during a time of need. Where Suzumebachi wants to be Kage, Tsuande doesn't. And whereas Suzumebachi's time of absence is a detriment to her political abitions, ambitions, [[spoiler:Tsunade cites hers as a reason why she shouldn't be Hokage.]]
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* NiceJobFixingItVillain: After riding a wave of public support for her traditionalist stances against Onoki, [[spoiler:she promply loses loses all of this support by breaking tradition and killing him after losing the duel, leading the shocked crowd to support Kurotsuchi enough to challenge and depose. Shikamaru's part in the "Yama no Osu" also turns around public opinion on Konoha, leaving Iwa's alliance with it in place.]]
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* NiceJobFixingItVillain: After riding a wave of public support for her traditionalist stances against Onoki, [[spoiler:she promply promptly loses loses all of this support by breaking tradition and killing him after losing the duel, leading the shocked crowd to support Kurotsuchi enough to challenge and depose. Shikamaru's part in the "Yama no Osu" also turns around public opinion on Konoha, leaving Iwa's alliance with it in place.]]
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* DiedInYourArmsTonight: While [[spoiler: Kurobachi is already dead by the the time Suzumebachi arrives at their compound, Jibachi klings to live long enough to tell her that the killing was a FalseFlagOperation and that Danzō was the real culprit.]]
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* DiedInYourArmsTonight: While [[spoiler: Kurobachi is already dead by the the time Suzumebachi arrives at their compound, Jibachi klings clings to live life long enough to tell her that the killing was a FalseFlagOperation and that Danzō was the real culprit.]]
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* ShipperOnDeck: During the final part of Konoha Chūnin Exams, Kurotsuchi is shown to be just as much in favor of Naruto and Hinata being a couple as Shikamaru does. The latter and her even try to guess when will Hinata confess her feelings to Naruto, either before or after the exams are over.
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* ShipperOnDeck: During the final part of the Konoha Chūnin Exams, Kurotsuchi is shown to be just as much in favor of Naruto and Hinata being a couple as Shikamaru does. The latter and her even try to guess when will Hinata confess her feelings to Naruto, either before or after the exams are over.
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The Sandaime Tsuchikage's granddaughter and a jonin of Han. She meets Team 3 during their first C-Rank mission, striking up somewhat of a friendship with them. She later participates in the Chunin-exams, [[spoiler:where she is beaten by Naruto]]. After the timeskip [[spoiler:she opposes the Kamizuru-clan's chauvinistic rethoric. After Suzumebachi defeats and then kills Onoki, she promptly challenges her for the tilte of Tsuchikage, becoming Gondaime Tsuchikage after her victoriy.]]
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The Sandaime Tsuchikage's granddaughter and a jonin of genin under Han. She meets Team 3 during their first C-Rank mission, striking up somewhat of a friendship with them. She later participates in the Chunin-exams, [[spoiler:where she is beaten by Naruto]]. After the timeskip [[spoiler:she [[spoiler:, during which she is made a jonin, she opposes the Kamizuru-clan's chauvinistic rethoric. After Suzumebachi defeats and then kills Onoki, she promptly challenges her for the tilte of Tsuchikage, becoming Gondaime Tsuchikage after her victoriy.]]
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** She is Han's student in this fic, whereas their canon relastionship remains unkown.
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** She is Han's student in this fic, whereas their canon relastionship relationship remains unkown.unknown.
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* ChallengingTheChief: Upon [[spoiler: Suzumebachi becoming Tsuchikage and killing Onoki, she immdiatley challenges her for the position.]]
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* ChallengingTheChief: Upon [[spoiler: [[spoiler:Upon Suzumebachi becoming Tsuchikage and killing Onoki, she immdiatley challenges her for the position.]]
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* PunctuatedForEmphasis: As seen in her quotes above, she speaks. In. One. Word. Sentences. When. Agitated.
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A scion of the Kamizuru-clan and granddaughter of the Shodai Tsuchikage, she returns to Iwa shortly after the timeskip, starting to rile up the population against Onoki's alliance with Konoha. [[spoiler:After ROOT agents kill her brothers and try to kill her, she challenges Onoki to a "Yama no Osu", a [[ChallengingTheChief duel for the position of Tsuchikage]]. Thanks to Kabuto resurrecting the Nidaime Tsuchikage as her partner, she defeats him and Roshi, killing Onoki afterwards. Thus becoming Yondaime Tsuchikage, Kurotsuchi promptly challenges her in return, defeating her, Mu and Kusari alongside Shikamaru and Han.]]
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A scion of the Kamizuru-clan and granddaughter of the Shodai Tsuchikage, she returns to Iwa shortly after the timeskip, starting to rile up the population against Onoki's alliance with Konoha. [[spoiler:After ROOT agents kill her brothers and try to kill her, she challenges Onoki to a "Yama no Osu", a [[ChallengingTheChief duel for the position of Tsuchikage]]. Thanks to Kabuto resurrecting the Nidaime Tsuchikage as her partner, she defeats him and Roshi, killing Onoki afterwards. Thus becoming having become Yondaime Tsuchikage, Kurotsuchi promptly challenges her in return, defeating her, Mu and Kusari alongside Shikamaru and Han.]]