Reviews: A drop of Poison

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Excellent World-Building
This fic takes the route of several other decent fics and focuses much more on world-building than on relationships. It's somewhat like reading a novelization of a game of Civilization or a similar game, but that doesn't make it any less interesting if you're into things like that.

Only at chapter 12, but quite good so far. However, god-mode is almost inevitable with stories like this. If you dislike that sort of thing, avoid the fic. If you appreciate it, however, this fic is likely to be one of the few fics to do so well.

A good story.
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Good Premise, Good Payoff
This story basically takes the Kage Bunshin and has Naruto realize its potential immediately, so he begins to use it for training purposes. He becomes ridiculously strong in this really quickly, occasionally going into near god-mode territory. It makes sense after all, since he can now gain a week's worth of experience in a day just by using his Kage Bunshin technique. It may sound off putting having it explained like that, but the story offers a LOT more than that fortunately. The point of the story isn't about Naruto becoming powerful, but it's how he develops as a person.

Naruto decides that since he wasn't promoted this time (Iruka was knocked out by poison, so he didn't see Naruto perform the Kage Bunshin technique, hence the title), he will use his clones to essentially infiltrate the academy under disguise. Not only that however, he decides to use them to infiltrate the civilian school, and he decides to make some merchants, and he makes some of them different genders and gives them different personalities, and it just gets bigger and bigger as it goes on. I can't really express how entertaining it is to read about how he's slowly building a network of clones across the country.

Iruka plays a much larger role in this story as well, and he guides Naruto along and helps him out with his so-call 'prank'. I highly appreciate the much larger presence of Iruka, and I love how he takes his mentor role for Naruto very seriously, deciding that he won't let him down again this time. While there are other characters, Naruto and Iruka are center stage here, and while the story starts off simple enough, Naruto - with the use of his clone network - begins to discover conspiracies and other situations that he and Iruka must figure out how to deal with.

And while the story hasn't ended yet there, are some great payoff moments, where things that have been talked about for the longest time finally come into play.

The only real issue I have with the story is the large amount of spelling errors. For someone who updates on a monthly schedule, the amount of errors is pretty high. It's not enough to distract me from the story, but I can imagine some people would be put off by it, so be warned.

Otherwise I highly recommend you check this out.
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Boring god mode naruto.
Spoilers ahoy! Don't worry, nothing in the fic is really worth feeling spoiled over anyways. I'll say this before I get into the spoilers: This fic fails my most important test: It has way too many words/interesting event. So far there have been 75,000 words. Still waiting on an interesting event.

In this fanfic, the entire village conspires to ruin Naruto's life, but he perseveres, and discovers all the cool things Kage Bushin can do, including creating a complete and accurate copy of the Forbidden Scroll, allowing him to learn numerous techniques that are just perfect for the fighting style you know the author wants him to have. Unfortunately for whoever would like to see these fights (I don't, but maybe some will), they'll likely never happen, because in 14 chapters and 75,000 words, Naruto still hasn't graduated from the academy yet. No, those words are spent with Iruka learning just how special and oppressed a genius Naruto is, while naru.

It's a real shame though, because at least some of the concepts are cool, and could be interesting if not bogged down by all the blatant god moding: Naruto infiltrating the academy with some advanced clones, or just becoming an infiltration specialist with a kage bushin spy network. All of these are interesting concepts. But these interesting concepts are never used to create an interesting event. Just more +1s in whatever stat column the author wants to max for Naruto.
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Really Good
I'm shocked by the fact that there aren't any good reviews of this fanfic. I, for one, thought the plot took an unoriginal idea and made it unique in its own way. Naruto doesn't seem to be God-Moding; rather, he is improving at the required pace for both the original material as well as the plot as a whole. True, there are times where Naruto does seem a bit overpowered, but the author makes sure to show how Naruto managed to gain so much power in a short amount of time. Not many Powerful!Naruto fics do this; they jut give him bucket loads of power and ability without showing the process of him gaining this power. The author not only manages to do this, but he/she also manages to keep the whole process original and fun to read.

One of the things I love the most about this fic was the fact that everyone was in character. The characters mentioned in this fic managed to stay true to their original source material, all the while justifying the personality changes that were made due to Character Development.

Speaking of the characters, I loved all of the O Cs and the clones. I know I'm not supposed to, but I honestly can't help it. The writer is so very good at creating his/her own original characters in this fic. The clones in particular are my favorite. I love how he/she gives them their own distinct personalities. It's a far cry from how most other stories treat the clones. Here, they're actually treated as people and their own distinct characters.

I could go on and on about how unbelievably awesome this story is, but I'm afraid I'm gonna have to cut it short. (I have to go to bed in a few minutes; school ya know.) My final thoughts on the subject? Read it. Trust me, you will not regret it.
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  • Comments: Its a young fic at the moment (23/05/10) so we donít know if it will fall to God Mode Sue yet but itís a very good exploration of what can be achieved with near limitless man(clone)-power and has a lot of potential.
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