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Reviews Comments: captchacritter Fate:Zero Sense fanfic review by captchacritter

I wanted to like this. I really did. But...there's something decidedly *off* about the characterization and the feel of the writing, to be honest. The prose is clunky, everyone seems to just be bare bones characterizationally speaking (if not toeing the line or straight-up jumping the border into out-of-character), and how is it possible for Kotomine and Deadpool, two of the more interesting of the crossed over cast here, to wind up as just a pair of highly annoying dillheads who trash the Fourth Wall more often than Deadpool even does in canon? It *is* Deadpool's thing to do so, but that's, well, much. TIM just seems like he's trying too hard and coming on too strongly with everything, and it goes to show in his writing. Aside from being an actually complete lengthy story (which is noteworthy for this fandom) this one is decidedly mediocre-to-average even when taking into account the leave-your-brain-at-the-door approach.


  • Kishou
  • 4th Dec 12
Agreed. But what really drew me off was how he made Saber into a punching bag by the other Servants. Not just statistic-wise but character-wise as well; she's become the regal and amazing female lead of the series to the butt of Deadpool's jokes (who represents the author's sadistic glee in writing this up) and also put down by three people (Rider, Lancer, Archer) that would have otherwise been nice and considerate to others, all because they find her wish stupid.

What makes this worse, IMO, is how other stories are following the same premise of replacing all servants but Saber with different media characters.
  • kay4today
  • 22nd Jan 13
Yeah, the blatant dislike of Saber's character is really obvious. Not to mention that Lancer speaking up in that moment was more than ridiculous.

And the Rider wanking... good god.

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