Quite good so far, but a bit short to be saying "never breaks verisimilitude". I'd like a break next chapter or so so that we can see if Gaara and Temari did in fact get sent back (Dear lord, Gaara's characterization is going to be interesting as hell. He's suddenly shoved back into his old, sleep-deprived body, and everyone still thinks he's a monster, plus he's got Shukaku clawing at his brain. How's he gonna take that?) And props for not making Hyuuga Hiashi into a jackass- I admit to generally liking most of the folks in Konoha, and having him as the bastard he was was the one part of "Team 8" I don't hail as pure genius.
By Rogue 7
Quite good so far, but a bit short to be saying "never breaks verisimilitude". I'd like a break next chapter or so so that we can see if Gaara and Temari did in fact get sent back (Dear lord, Gaara's characterization is going to be interesting as hell. He's suddenly shoved back into his old, sleep-deprived body, and everyone still thinks he's a monster, plus he's got Shukaku clawing at his brain. How's he gonna take that?) And props for not making Hyuuga Hiashi into a jackass- I admit to generally liking most of the folks in Konoha, and having him as the bastard he was was the one part of "Team 8" I don't hail as pure genius.