This story is awesome. While it's true that the first chapter works perfectly well on its own, I feel like the continuation was a welcome addition. The sad, raw, crushing windup to the conclusion captured what I like most about Shinji's and Asuka's relationship: maddening pain and difficulty and the struggle to overcome it for a thin ray of hope. The vaguely stream-of-consciousness narration gives great perspective into the characters. It's perfectly Evangelion. There are some flaws, I'd say, or perhaps just areas that could have been fleshed out more (I would have liked more definition between Asuka and Misato, for instance), but it's still impressive overall.
BornIn1142's review.
This story is awesome. While it's true that the first chapter works perfectly well on its own, I feel like the continuation was a welcome addition. The sad, raw, crushing windup to the conclusion captured what I like most about Shinji's and Asuka's relationship: maddening pain and difficulty and the struggle to overcome it for a thin ray of hope. The vaguely stream-of-consciousness narration gives great perspective into the characters. It's perfectly Evangelion. There are some flaws, I'd say, or perhaps just areas that could have been fleshed out more (I would have liked more definition between Asuka and Misato, for instance), but it's still impressive overall.