I admire this Adam Kadmon fic for the writing. Despite sometimes using overly flowery prose, and having a couple of misspelled words (hey, bet you can't write an 83,598 word fic without misspelling at least two), the execution on a whole is stellar. The ony problem is the conceptualization. Of course, YMMV, but I disagreed strongly with what he did to two characters: Kensuke and Asuka are depicted in ways that just don't feel right to me. The depiction of Shinji as a broken... thing... who's endlessly guilty over the people he got killed was very well done, and I can believe Mana as a former spy turned sympathetic ear, and most of the other characters get so little screen time that they're hardly worth mentioning, but something about Askua and Kensuke's depictions (perhaps not coincidentally, the two most grotesque ones in the fic) chafed. Certainly, I applaud Kadmon's writing skills, but I can't fully recommend the work itself. Warning: Contains serious nightmare fuel, far more so than the original series.
Well done, certainly, but...
I admire this Adam Kadmon fic for the writing. Despite sometimes using overly flowery prose, and having a couple of misspelled words (hey, bet you can't write an 83,598 word fic without misspelling at least two), the execution on a whole is stellar. The ony problem is the conceptualization. Of course, YMMV, but I disagreed strongly with what he did to two characters: Kensuke and Asuka are depicted in ways that just don't feel right to me. The depiction of Shinji as a broken... thing... who's endlessly guilty over the people he got killed was very well done, and I can believe Mana as a former spy turned sympathetic ear, and most of the other characters get so little screen time that they're hardly worth mentioning, but something about Askua and Kensuke's depictions (perhaps not coincidentally, the two most grotesque ones in the fic) chafed. Certainly, I applaud Kadmon's writing skills, but I can't fully recommend the work itself. Warning: Contains serious nightmare fuel, far more so than the original series.