The fic has some serious flaws (such as the author not actually understanding basic screenwriting techniques) but it's overall pretty well-written, with an interesting story, naturalistic character evolution (yes, Shinji and Asuka are eventually shipped, but it comes off in an unforced manner to me and Rei isn't abandoned or marginalized — quite the opposite), and some excellent production values. Also, while Lyn might seem like a boring, unnecessarily close to Shinji addition to the cast, Aoi is a unique character who's just as interesting as the original cast (in my opinion). Tenkei's got his moments too. Worst parts? The bad formatting, slow beginning, and dull characterization of Lyn for much of the series. Best parts? That the canon characters seem like themselves (with a few exceptions), the ending is fairly satisfying, and the other O Cs besides Lyn are pretty interesting.
Nivenus' review
The fic has some serious flaws (such as the author not actually understanding basic screenwriting techniques) but it's overall pretty well-written, with an interesting story, naturalistic character evolution (yes, Shinji and Asuka are eventually shipped, but it comes off in an unforced manner to me and Rei isn't abandoned or marginalized — quite the opposite), and some excellent production values. Also, while Lyn might seem like a boring, unnecessarily close to Shinji addition to the cast, Aoi is a unique character who's just as interesting as the original cast (in my opinion). Tenkei's got his moments too. Worst parts? The bad formatting, slow beginning, and dull characterization of Lyn for much of the series. Best parts? That the canon characters seem like themselves (with a few exceptions), the ending is fairly satisfying, and the other O Cs besides Lyn are pretty interesting.