While the premise, prose and writing style are excellent, there are several glaring problems with this story that ruin it for me.
First and foremost, the author's OC Goa'uld, Djehuty[[note: aka Thoth, Urdu, The Wise One]], borders on a Mary Sue. Large portions of the Goa'uld's history have to be rewritten to accomodate his presence. He is an extremely old System Lord who is behind all of the Goa'uld's tech, even things the Goa'uld canonically didn't invent. He is also is not evil or senile, and holds the moral high ground over all other Goa'uld (and even the Tok'ra). His Jaffa are little better, being versed in Earth slang and snark due to studying "security footage" of captured SG teams stolen from the other System Lords.
The Tok'ra are given heavy Ron the Death Eater treatment here. Rather than the true symbiosis and respect for the choice of their potential host that they canonically have, in this story they are portrayed as using coercion to get people to agree to being hosts, and generally act only slightly more pleasant than a typical Goa'uld.
The Tau'ri's skills and abilities have been heavily downplayed for the sake of "realism". Daniel is completely unable to bypass the language barrier with Toph and Zuko (more on that later), and the SGC personnel are downright incompetent in combat at times (several trained soldiers dying from their own ricochets). Most notably, the Tau'ri are unable to solve a single problem on their own without the help of Toph, Zuko, or one of the OCs.
Meanwhile, the Avatar cast are largely exempt from realism, being stronger and more durable than normal humans on top of their bending. The author goes to great lengths to justify it, ultimately culminating in the reveal that they're actually Ancients, without ever stopping to fill in the massive holes in that explanation.
Characterization aside, the author also introduces a needless language barrier which serves only to slow the story down. It then gets handwaved away in the finale without having made any lasting impact at all.
Overall, this story is tolerable if you're willing to tolerate some favoritism and mangling of canon, but I would not personally recommend it.
A promising start that gradually devolves into Mary Sue trash
While the premise, prose and writing style are excellent, there are several glaring problems with this story that ruin it for me.
First and foremost, the author's OC Goa'uld, Djehuty[[note: aka Thoth, Urdu, The Wise One]], borders on a Mary Sue. Large portions of the Goa'uld's history have to be rewritten to accomodate his presence. He is an extremely old System Lord who is behind all of the Goa'uld's tech, even things the Goa'uld canonically didn't invent. He is also is not evil or senile, and holds the moral high ground over all other Goa'uld (and even the Tok'ra). His Jaffa are little better, being versed in Earth slang and snark due to studying "security footage" of captured SG teams stolen from the other System Lords.
The Tok'ra are given heavy Ron the Death Eater treatment here. Rather than the true symbiosis and respect for the choice of their potential host that they canonically have, in this story they are portrayed as using coercion to get people to agree to being hosts, and generally act only slightly more pleasant than a typical Goa'uld.
The Tau'ri's skills and abilities have been heavily downplayed for the sake of "realism". Daniel is completely unable to bypass the language barrier with Toph and Zuko (more on that later), and the SGC personnel are downright incompetent in combat at times (several trained soldiers dying from their own ricochets). Most notably, the Tau'ri are unable to solve a single problem on their own without the help of Toph, Zuko, or one of the OCs.
Meanwhile, the Avatar cast are largely exempt from realism, being stronger and more durable than normal humans on top of their bending. The author goes to great lengths to justify it, ultimately culminating in the reveal that they're actually Ancients, without ever stopping to fill in the massive holes in that explanation.
Characterization aside, the author also introduces a needless language barrier which serves only to slow the story down. It then gets handwaved away in the finale without having made any lasting impact at all.
Overall, this story is tolerable if you're willing to tolerate some favoritism and mangling of canon, but I would not personally recommend it.