It's not greatly written, certainly, but it does explore some instances of human nature. Regret born from new observance and the inevitability of two people becoming close emotionally when they are literally all the other has. Poorly executed, but interesting enough. A bit depressing in the end.
Also, weather goes crazy in a small climate. I mean, I live in a micro climate and despite the fact that it's been relatively cool spring weather in most places—clear and just slightly chilly—for the past two weeks between the mountains and the sea (no more than ten miles, really, as the other side of the bay is fine) we've had dense white-out as a regular fixture and almost constant rain. It's also hot and disgustingly humid. The heat from the city causes it where it meets the cool winds. It's nasty.
Oh, and I don't think evaporating is mentioned more than speculatively. You know, he wondered when they might and if the lake would boil before the end. I don't think it's mentioned that it actually did, though perhaps I missed that bit. I thought it said that the dungeons were flooded, in fact.
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Artistic License! SPOILERS!
The first chapter is intriguing enough. After that it drags on for much longer than it should have. The author keeps leaking classified information to characters who should have no way of knowing. Not to mention the unclassified information that she doesn't give the reader, like what was up with the Time Turner the last time we see it. Snape keeps classifying Hermione as raving mad, although she doesn't do anything particularly irrational, and if it's just so he can keep denying that he's in love with her, it's poorly executed. The author has a somewhat tenuous grasp on English. Maybe she's from a non-English speaking culture, but it's distracting having to figure out sentences like that. It makes you reread them to see if you understand them better, and that breaks your rhythm, and before you know it you've spent far too much time beating your head against a certain paragraph. The ending felt like the ending of The Sixth Sense. The epilogue, set a thousand years into the future, felt like another story altogether.
As for the plot holes: Inasmuch as entropy would probably indeed change the weather inside the time loop, I see no reason for it to get all G'morky just because of that. I've heard of no law of physics that states that when it gets too hot within a closed system (and well before it's too hot for humans to live at that), things will start to evaporate.