Huthman
Queen of Neith
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Since: May, 2016
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Queen of Neith
#2: Apr 11th 2018 at 2:24:02 AM
Bump.
Continuing on that, I also require somebody to point out the characterization of the characters and the their related tropes.
edited 11th Apr '18 2:25:34 AM by Huthman
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A few days ago, I had a short stint on the General Writer's Block Thread and the Character Development Thread. The former asked to my request on the Constructive Criticism and Uncle Drunkie's while the latter explained it was for 'roleplaying character development only.'
So it was time to spin the original requests into a spinoff thread for my Theriomorph Chronicles stories in order to correct goofs and errors inside my story.
The purpose of this thread is I want to improve the characterization of my characters in Theriomorph Chronicles: Subhuman which is Warren Hiedler, the Bald Eagle Theriomorph and Meredith Young, the Cougar Theriomorph. Right now, I feel there is a character error or inconsistencies inside the prose, but I cannot manage to put my finger on it due to my weak proofreading abilities.
The second reason is to streamline the story. The writing of the plot feels rushed or clunky in the prose. For example, I have to find away to explain the premise, create plot points that do not go nowhere and write the basics of being a Theriomorph in the story. I also need to improve the dialogues and exposition of the story.
Finally, I need some critiques on my prose and writing quality because, I'm trying to improve my writing quality after I found out the original version of the story, Theriomorph Chronicles: Untermenschen was a irreparable mess of a story filled with plot holes, poor or strange characterizations (Mood-swinging Warren, psychopathic characters and Megiddo's vague plans anyone), clunky dialogue and other bad writing.
This is the link to the story
On an extra note, since Chapter 1 draft on FictionPress is published and I'm writing the draft for Chapter 2, it's not too late to fix up the writing.
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