Need help with Pokemon creepypasta

Okay I got into this wiki after I read a mention of it in a Pokemon creepypasta. Now i though I'd make one of my based on the cloning glitch in X and Y. One (immediate) problem is that I don't know how to start a pokemon-based creepypasta. Do I mention that the protagonist was a pokemon fan? how do I set up the premise? What do I do?!

For reference this is of the first person "hacked game" variety.

Start it the same way that everybody else does: "I was going about my day when I found an unmarked/obviously bootleg cartridge..." or "I downloaded this ROM off the internet...".

That being said, Pokemon creepypasta is a kind of over-saturated genre. Unless whatever story you plan on telling absolutely REQUIRES the game to be Pokemon, I would go with something else. Furthermore, the older a game is, the more believable the existence of some sort of cursed copy seems. My advice would be to look at the lists of best selling Game Boy and best selling Game Boy Advance, find something you're familiar with, and work from there. I don't think I've ever seen a creepypasta based on Kirbys Dream Land or Sonic Advance. Heck, even Zelda is less overdone, and it has creepypasta potential out the wazoo.

Yes but the Cloning glitch and a certain patched Game-Breaking Bug have potential, plus I haven't seen X or Y based creepypasta yet. And yes because the former is the subject and inspiration it Has to be Pokemon.

okay I'm done writing the thing, can anyone help with the pacing and such? FYI its a Slender Man/Fear Myhtos crossover

I have to be honest, I just don't think you can do a whole lot creatively with the "haunted cartridge" genre. I admit I haven't looked very deeply into this genre, but most of what I've seen seems awfully samey, I don't think using an uncommonly used game will make much of difference.

I only skimmed a little bit of it, but Slenderman challenging you to a Pokemon battle is more than a bit too ridiculous to be scary. I mean, I think you can make just about anything scary in the right context, but that's really a stretch. It doesn't help that Slendy and Pokemon are already two of the most oversaturated subjects in creepypasta.

edited 17th Jan '14 3:51:03 PM by DrStarky

I'll be honest too: as someone who's never played a Pokemon game, I couldn't make heads or tails of your story. AFAIK, the gold standard of these sorts of stories is Pokemon Black. That story requires a basic knowledge of Pokemon to understand, but it's fundamental premise—you have a super-powerful Pokemon on your party that allows you to kill your enemies for real, but face the consequences at the end of the game—would work for just about any "kiddy" video game. In any case, I've never played Pokemon and I could understand it. Your story requires a lot of knowledge about X and Y just to understand, and it seems like most of "scary" comes from Pokemon having moves they shouldn't have/NP Cs saying vaguely creepy things. And Dr Starky is right, Slenderman challenging you to a pokemon battle is ridiculous, and making it a throwaway event on the first page is twice as ridiculous.

Considering that you said your story revolved around a cloning glitch, I expected it to involve some technical detail of how it's accomplished being a major plot point; something like it splitting the souls of Pokemon in two. Which as best as I can tell, it did, but you drop that plot point in such an offhand fashion I had to reread the story to catch it. For all that it impacted the story, you might as well have had your cartridge been previously owned by The Rake.