Freelance Worrywart
Interesting set up. I like hoe the whole dystopian mind control thing is being juxtaposed by the "but it's a good cause, right?" stuff.
Could make for some fun discussion.
Writer: Tokusatsu 5YrWar
Soylent Greenis People? would the Food triger "murder"?
7 friends, a robot, and a spirit, will find a way to protect us...if it kills them.
You need to have those 'triggers' in order of important—>petty, to show off the madmen who conceived of this insane idea going even further off the deep end & trying to 'fix' every little thing according to their half-baked morality.
Violence is the last refuge of the incompetent.
Sounds a neato idea. It's like every other story that's got the same set-up, but the psychic punishment idea seems like an interesting addition and twist to the whole 'future utopian paradise' thing.
Technically yes it is people. But everyone knows and is fine with it. That's what going green is all about. ;p
But not the focus! Food is unimportant.
@dino And right...that's why I had increasingly petty triggers. Once the facility gets big enough the boys are made to police the place so the workers keep everything shipshape.
@guy And truly the whole thing is secret. Above ground the world is way better.
edited 4th Sep '12 5:08:18 PM by Keybreak
In the future where cars hover inches above the ground, interstellar marines train on Mars and everything is recycled and reused (even food, but that's for another story), there is a secret underground research center that kidnaps young boys, brainwashes them, and gives them psychic powers.
...simple enough right? Well there's a reason for all this. These boys are Tattletales of a sort. They punish wrongdoers through psychic trauma, and pick out these wrongdoers based on "triggers" implanted in their minds. Each boy has a different trigger that they call whenever they see a wrongdoer, such as Bullies, Liars, Cheaters, and the like. The boys are renamed and allowed to wander about the facility, helping to sniff out bad workers.
The first few boys are the most dangerous, and the very first is named Adam, who looks for Bullies. The founder of the whole project apparently had bad experience with them in school, but not enough moral sense to really define what a "bully" is. Thus, Adam is kept under constant lockdown so they can fine-tune his mind better.
I think I have all of the boys' names and most of the triggers, though I still have to arrange the latter from worst to not-so-bad so that the project looks like it's been going on a while.
And the mostly out-of-order triggers...
So...what am I missing.