Wimpy Mc Squishy
#2: Oct 17th 2011 at 4:59:13 AM
Yeah, it's fairly clear up to this point. I did do a bit of a double-take on those last few panels, though. It seems to me that these pages are lacking cohesion; there's a clear central theme, but I don't know who any of the characters are yet. Granted, this is only 8 panels; I probably shouldn't nitpick.
'Cross my heart, strike me dead, stick a lobster on my head.'
KyleJacobs
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Since: Mar, 2011
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#3: Oct 18th 2011 at 10:19:41 AM
OK, thanks. The entire 8th page is supposed to be from the same guy's point of view as he's passing out, hence the eyelids and blur.
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Hi, everyone. You may remember that a while back, I asked if the first page of my webcomic had crossed the line. Now, I'm back, asking if what's going on up to this point makes any sense at all.
Start here.
I'm up to page 8. The most recent page is supposed to be a jarring shift, so I've got 2 questions. 1: Is what's going on in pages 1-7 clear? 2: Is what's going on in page 8 clear-ish (how it relates to what came before will be explained starting next week).
Thanks!