Pony Fanfiction Thread

Luna was trycky to write in my script, she is clever but also very jelous, which lead her to be tempted by the Nightmare Moon force, and now even cured she still fights that temptation

I think Luna's hard for most people, since they have to invent her personality for the most part. I'm having trouble too. In mine she's a really hard worker who's very tired during most of her appearances, since she works during night and sleeps during day. Celestia insists that she go out and interact with her subjects, to keep up a good relationship with them (since a lot of them including the CMC still fear her). Nightmare Moon is something she's very ashamed and trying to forget.

if your curious how i did luna....

Anyone else read "Jack and the Ponies"?

I found it to be an excellent crossover with Samurai Jack.

I just realised, if I want to fit all the story i've planned into around the show's proper run time. It'll need to be a 4 parter

At that point, just go for full blown feature at 110 minutes or so. If that doesn't work, serialize it?

but the thing is. The first part is when their against Trixie, the next is when their against Nightmare Moon. One continues on from the next but there's a clear divide in antagonist around halfway through, so it wouldn't feel right as a feature

Why not make it so Trixie was working with Nightmare Moon?

tch well Trixie IS Nightmare Moon. As I said there's a connection, but the focus shifts from Twilight against Trixie to Luna against Nightmare Moon

I have something similar in La D, basicly the player wil lshift perspectives to control 4 different parties, Past!Dash, The Elements, The Princesses, and La D Humans, and i'm not quite sure how engaging that will be or if i am switching too quickly

well, here's the last part of the first episode of my script

I made it onto Equestria Daily: http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/07/story-quit-dragon-your-heels.html

Working on a crossover with Kirby. I'm really surprised there aren't any (or at least I couldn't find any).

Does anyone think a Wild West movie-esque fic featuring Braeburn would be a good idea? I've got an OC that I also plan to put in it.

No guns, though there'll probably be a few hoof fights.

I'm always game for some Spike X Rarity.

I enjoyed it quite a bit. Short, but sweet.

EDIT: I do think you should take some of the advice from ED's comments, however.

edited 4th Jul '11 8:17:08 PM by BlackVion

Well, it's kind of a moot point now; I'd have to change what's there quite a bit, and I don't wanna wreck it.

I don't plan not to take their advice, if I write another, I just don't want to mess with what I have.

I like the idea. I mean, I'm sort of biased towards westerns...I had an idea for one of my own...starring Bill, Joe and Ralph from the spaghetti western remix.

But yeah, depending on what you do with it, it could be pretty interesting.

I haven't really gotten a plot worked out yet... I was thinking a similar plot to the John Wayne film The Comancheros, but couldn't find a good enough parallel to guns. Apple pies can be made by anyone. Appleloosa's a small town, so a crime thing wouldn't work...

Any ideas, anyone?

Cool. I just hope we don't have to wait too long for your next fic.

edited 4th Jul '11 9:02:10 PM by BlackVion

I'm unsure if this is the best place to put this, but I did have an idea for a fanfic that I really like, but I'm not sure I want to use as it could get in the way of some original works. So I figured I'd post it, see if anyone liked it.

The idea is that the CMC (or maybe some other characters, I just think the CMC would work best for timeline reasons) would get involved with a magical accident, sending them not only back in time, but to the moon. Once there, they find Nightmare Moon, still in the middle of her 1000 year imprisonment. However, she made the best of things by creating an illusionary paradise for herself, with a grand lunar kingdom to reign over. The CMC pretend to have also been banished by Celestia, and Nightmare Moon takes them in. However, the spell that powers the illusion is decaying, and Nightmare Moon (now able to talk with ponies who aren't illusionary constructs for the first time in centuries) is starting to become a bit Yandere for the girls. Also, they have less then a week to return home before Nightmare Moon's escape.

So that's the idea as it stands. I'm unsure whether to go forward with it, though if someone else wants to use it, go ahead.

i want to wrote more of mine but I also keep holding out hope i'll get some reviews and comments on what i already posted, i don't want to get to far ahead in the story if some early element is needs major reworking

Congrats, RR.

Also, nearly completed a new chapter, but despite the fact that this chapter actually moves a plot thread forward, I can't help but shake the feeling of general pointlessness of it all... granted, since when does fanfiction ever have a point?

Here it is. Something just seems... off. Short length doesn't help, either.

In any case, subject to change, and I won't be submitting it for a while. I'm thinking that I'll wait until I have a few more chapters done and then submit them in a group.

edited 4th Jul '11 9:36:08 PM by Pannic

Off how, Pannic? Aside from the length it looks fine to me...

Not sure. Probably just shaking confidence.

In any case, I'll try to expand it a little, and the next couple chapters should be a little better. I'll try submitting all three chapters at once.

I agree with the Librarian. There's nothing wrong with it. In my (admittedly limited) experience, when the writer's major critique of their own work boils down to "feels off," then you're usually worrying too much.