Balancing Author Appeal, Fan Service and Fetish Fuel in a series.

It sounds really good so far, Sand Josieph. For an idea for a gag, maybe she could magically become a Pettanko briefy and the twins could be less attracted to her briefly? I mean, they did fall in love with her...assets, not her specifically, right? As for when you should break their love to the audience, I would slowly build up to it and imply it often. Then outright have them state it in the climax of the story (pun not intended).

It seems to be pure Refuge in Audacity, but it sounds hilarious. Keep it up.

BTW, do you have any advice on what to do about showing my work to critics? I figure it's...different, since it's a select few deciding if many can see my work.

i think you just have to make it plausible. i think fanservice that feels natural, as opposed to "ahmygod monster in the house i gonna take a shower, is better both in story and towards the viewer. if there is no logical reason for the characters to be fanservicey, that is when you know you are donig it wrong.

Thanks for the advice. It's true, I fear that too much Fanservice can drive away potential fans after reading that. So, I will try to not only balance it but only put it where plausible.

I'm not too sure about how to go about showing your stuff to critics (I don't think my story would get very far past them) so just be wary of what your audience can tolerate. Or you can just go all out and say, "Here's a hot amazon as a character. If you do like her then tough."

Also, I'd rather not go too far into the absurd with my own story as I'd like it to still be grounded in real world physics (the physics of Joan's breasts will be very important for the story) so no magical transformations for Jo.

@ Sand Josieph

I guess you have a point there about they either like it or don't.

As for grounding your story in the real world and the gag I mentioned, maybe she wants to get a breast reduction and the twins panic at the thought?