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-->"With your money."
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-->"With your money.""
* Chapter 11: Homura asks Kyoko's advice on winning Sayaka's trust. Based on her previous experience, Kyoko recommends letting Sayaka see her naked. Homura ''actually tries this''.
* Chapter 11: Homura asks Kyoko's advice on winning Sayaka's trust. Based on her previous experience, Kyoko recommends letting Sayaka see her naked. Homura ''actually tries this''.
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* From Chapter 1: "[[RunningGag We got hit]] [[BlatantLies by garbage trucks]]"
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moved the chapter 2 bit from the main Funny/Fanfic page (someone else\'s nomination)
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* Every chapter is funny, but one that especially stands out is Chapter 3, when both girls end up naked [[DontExplainTheJoke for complicated reasons]], and then Madoka walks in, having forgotten her phone.
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* Every chapter is funny, but one that especially stands out is ''Where do we start?'' Perhaps with this scene from Chapter 3, when both 2:
-->A soft knock on the door interrupted the content atmosphere they had suddenly found themselves in.
-->"Um," Madoka's subdued voice hesitantly spoke. "If you two aren't doing anything naughty, the food is ready."
-->While Sayaka's jaw dropped at the insinuation, Kyoko heard the words 'food' and immediately stood up in the tub.
-->"FOOD!" she exclaimed, jumping from the tub. "Whoa, head rush!" She slipped and slid on the tile floor briefly as she tried to reach the door, dripping water everywhere.
-->"Hey, you're getting water all over the floor!" Sayaka shouted, grabbing a towel for herself and wrapping it around her waist.
-->Meanwhile, Kyoko reached the door! And opened it! And charged for the kitchen in all her naked glory! "FOOOOD!"
-->"AH! Kyoko-chan, you're naked!" Madoka observed, sounding a bit traumatized.
-->"So? I'm starving! What's this?"
-->"Kyoko-chan, be careful! The stove is still hot!"
-->"YOOOW!"
-->"Oh my God, Kyoko-chan is on fire! What should I do?"
-->Sayaka sighed very deeply through her nose, trying to calm her raging stress. "This is okay." she said to herself. "I'm okay with this. I brought it on myself, after all."
-->"Oh no! I tried to put Kyoko-chan out with the table cloth, but now the table cloth is on fire!"
-->"DON'T JUST SCREAM ABOUT IT, HELP ME DAMN IT!"
-->"D-don't yell at me, I-I can't handle pressure!"
-->"STOP BEING USELESS!"
-->"BAAAAAAWWW~"
-->"I'M STILL ON FIRE!"
-->Sayaka listened to all this with a reluctant look on her face. "The apartment is going to burn down, isn't it?"
*And then in the next chapter, ''both'' girlsend up naked [[DontExplainTheJoke for complicated reasons]], are naked, and then Madoka walks in, having forgotten her phone.phone.
--> Her hand closed around her phone and she exhaled in relief, whirled around and tried to sprint for the door. However she missed by a foot and ran into the wall instead. "I'm okay! I was never here!" she cried in a muffled voice.
-->A soft knock on the door interrupted the content atmosphere they had suddenly found themselves in.
-->"Um," Madoka's subdued voice hesitantly spoke. "If you two aren't doing anything naughty, the food is ready."
-->While Sayaka's jaw dropped at the insinuation, Kyoko heard the words 'food' and immediately stood up in the tub.
-->"FOOD!" she exclaimed, jumping from the tub. "Whoa, head rush!" She slipped and slid on the tile floor briefly as she tried to reach the door, dripping water everywhere.
-->"Hey, you're getting water all over the floor!" Sayaka shouted, grabbing a towel for herself and wrapping it around her waist.
-->Meanwhile, Kyoko reached the door! And opened it! And charged for the kitchen in all her naked glory! "FOOOOD!"
-->"AH! Kyoko-chan, you're naked!" Madoka observed, sounding a bit traumatized.
-->"So? I'm starving! What's this?"
-->"Kyoko-chan, be careful! The stove is still hot!"
-->"YOOOW!"
-->"Oh my God, Kyoko-chan is on fire! What should I do?"
-->Sayaka sighed very deeply through her nose, trying to calm her raging stress. "This is okay." she said to herself. "I'm okay with this. I brought it on myself, after all."
-->"Oh no! I tried to put Kyoko-chan out with the table cloth, but now the table cloth is on fire!"
-->"DON'T JUST SCREAM ABOUT IT, HELP ME DAMN IT!"
-->"D-don't yell at me, I-I can't handle pressure!"
-->"STOP BEING USELESS!"
-->"BAAAAAAWWW~"
-->"I'M STILL ON FIRE!"
-->Sayaka listened to all this with a reluctant look on her face. "The apartment is going to burn down, isn't it?"
*And then in the next chapter, ''both'' girls
--> Her hand closed around her phone and she exhaled in relief, whirled around and tried to sprint for the door. However she missed by a foot and ran into the wall instead. "I'm okay! I was never here!" she cried in a muffled voice.
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* Every chapter is funny, but one that especially stands out is Chapter 3, when both girls end up naked [[DontExplainTheJoke for complicated reasons]], and then Madoka walks in, having forgotten her phone.
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->Sayaka, too caught up in Kyoko's contagious energy, took the offered candy apple. After Kyoko started digging into her own was when it occurred to her that this was suspicious.
->"Kyoko, how did you get these candy apples?"
->"I bought them." Kyoko said through a mouthful of the sweet treat.
->"Oh," Sayaka smiled with relief. "That's all right then." She brought the candied apple to her lips.
->"With your money."
->"Kyoko, how did you get these candy apples?"
->"I bought them." Kyoko said through a mouthful of the sweet treat.
->"Oh," Sayaka smiled with relief. "That's all right then." She brought the candied apple to her lips.
->"With your money."
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*From Chapter 7:
->Sayaka, too caught up in Kyoko's contagious energy, took the offered candy apple. After Kyoko started digging into her own was when it occurred to her that this was suspicious.
->"Kyoko, how did you get these candy apples?"
->"I bought them." Kyoko said through a mouthful of the sweet treat.
->"Oh," Sayaka smiled with relief. "That's all right then." She brought the candied apple to her lips.
->"With your money."
->Sayaka, too caught up in Kyoko's contagious energy, took the offered candy apple. After Kyoko started digging into her own was when it occurred to her that this was suspicious.
->"Kyoko, how did you get these candy apples?"
->"I bought them." Kyoko said through a mouthful of the sweet treat.
->"Oh," Sayaka smiled with relief. "That's all right then." She brought the candied apple to her lips.
->"With your money."
