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Incorruptible Pure Pureness has been renamed to The Incorruptible and redefined to be about characters who are portrayed in-universe as untemptable/incorruptible. Removing ZCE.
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The sequel, ''[[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7762173/1/Sapphire_Eleanor_Rose_Suzette_de_Mont_vs_Canon Sapphire Eleanor Rose Suzette de Mont vs. Canon]]'' shakes up the formula a bit. A new Mary Sue arrives, but this one is of the IncorruptiblePurePureness variety. Once again, the Hogwarts students decide to get rid of her, but it turns out the MSEA (Mary Sue Extermination Association) had the same idea. The two groups join forces. Partway through this story, the series was titled ''The MSEA Files''.
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The sequel, ''[[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7762173/1/Sapphire_Eleanor_Rose_Suzette_de_Mont_vs_Canon Sapphire Eleanor Rose Suzette de Mont vs. Canon]]'' shakes up the formula a bit. A new Mary Sue arrives, but this one is of the IncorruptiblePurePureness [[invoked]]PuritySue variety. Once again, the Hogwarts students decide to get rid of her, but it turns out the MSEA (Mary Sue Extermination Association) had the same idea. The two groups join forces. Partway through this story, the series was titled ''The MSEA Files''.
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* IncorruptiblePurePureness: Sapphire, what with being a PuritySue and all.[[invoked]]
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* AlliterativeName: Aphrodite Adams
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* AlliterativeName: Aphrodite Adams '''A'''phrodite '''A'''dams.
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* [[ClusterFBomb Cluster SOB Bomb]]: October in chapter 6. In fact, for half the chapter, "son of a bitch" is all she says.
** She also says "shit!" a total of eight times in a row when she realizes she and her team aren't alone in the Room of Requirement.
** She also says "shit!" a total of eight times in a row when she realizes she and her team aren't alone in the Room of Requirement.
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* [[ClusterFBomb Cluster SOB Bomb]]: ClusterFBomb: October in chapter Chapter 6. In fact, for half the chapter, "son of a bitch" is all she says.
**says. She also says "shit!" a total of eight times in a row when she realizes she and her team aren't alone in the Room of Requirement.
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* {{Demoted to Extra}}: The canon Harry Potter characters become this in the sequel, despite being initially established as the protagonists in Chapter 1. Even though they tag along with the [[Main/SpotlightStealingSquad MSEA]], they still barely say anything and do nothing for the story.
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* {{Demoted to Extra}}: DemotedToExtra: The canon Harry Potter characters become this in the sequel, despite being initially established as the protagonists in Chapter 1. Even though they tag along with the [[Main/SpotlightStealingSquad [[SpotlightStealingSquad MSEA]], they still barely say anything and do nothing for the story.
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* EstablishingCharacterMoment: In universe example. The first thing Victoria ever sees Charlie do in ''Reloaded'' is crash her motorcylce into a car and not seeming to notice or care.
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* EstablishingCharacterMoment: In universe In-universe example. The first thing Victoria ever sees Charlie do in ''Reloaded'' is crash her motorcylce motorcycle into a car and not seeming to notice or care.
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--> '''Ginny:''' "Morning, Sapph—weren't your eyes blue yesterday?"\\
'''Sapphire:''' "They change color every day."
'''Sapphire:''' "They change color every day."
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'''Sapphire:'''
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* ForTheEvulz: Jenny admits to having helped write My Immortal [[{{Troll}} just for shits and giggles]]. Tara, on the other hand, is just that stupid.
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* ForTheEvulz: Jenny admits to having helped write My Immortal ''My Immortal'' [[{{Troll}} just for shits and giggles]]. Tara, on the other hand, is just that stupid.
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-->'''Ginny:''' I bet I can convince you.
-->'''October:''' The answer is no, and that's final.
-->'''Ginny:''' ''(clears throat)''
-->''(next section)''
-->'''Aphrodite:''' ''(sitting with the HP characters in the MSEA lounge)'' [[LampshadeHanging How does she do that?]]
-->'''October:''' The answer is no, and that's final.
-->'''Ginny:''' ''(clears throat)''
-->''(next section)''
-->'''Aphrodite:''' ''(sitting with the HP characters in the MSEA lounge)'' [[LampshadeHanging How does she do that?]]
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-->'''Ginny:''' I bet I can convince you.
-->'''October:'''you.\\
'''October:''' The answer is no, and that'sfinal.
-->'''Ginny:'''final.\\
'''Ginny:''' ''(clearsthroat)''
-->''(next section)''
-->'''Aphrodite:'''throat)''\\
''(next section)''\\
'''Aphrodite:''' ''(sitting with the HP characters in the MSEA lounge)'' [[LampshadeHanging How does she do that?]]
-->'''October:'''
'''October:''' The answer is no, and that's
-->'''Ginny:'''
'''Ginny:''' ''(clears
-->''(next section)''
-->'''Aphrodite:'''
''(next section)''\\
'''Aphrodite:''' ''(sitting with the HP characters in the MSEA lounge)'' [[LampshadeHanging How does she do that?]]
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** She also says "Shit!" eight times in a row in chapter five. Brandon, of course, calls her out on this.
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** She also says "Shit!" eight times in a row in chapter five.Chapter 5. Brandon, of course, calls her out on this.
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-->'''Gigi:''' ...''Tell me'' she didn't just say that.
* IHaveToGoIronMyDog: Hermione uses "We have to go floss our rabbits," to make a quick getaway from Sapphire.
* IncorruptiblePurePureness: Sapphire, what with being a PuritySue and all.
* InteractiveNarrator
* IHaveToGoIronMyDog: Hermione uses "We have to go floss our rabbits," to make a quick getaway from Sapphire.
* IncorruptiblePurePureness: Sapphire, what with being a PuritySue and all.
* InteractiveNarrator
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* IHaveToGoIronMyDog: Hermione uses "We have to go floss our
* IncorruptiblePurePureness: Sapphire, what with being a PuritySue and
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%%* InteractiveNarrator
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* JerkassHasAPoint: [[spoiler:Missy and Jenny both bring up a few good points.]]
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* LemonyNarrator
* ListOfTransgressions: See "LongList."
* LongList: All the charges Charlie has racked up, to the point where the Narrator encourages the reader to go ahead and take a shower while [[spoiler:Missy]] reads them out.
* ListOfTransgressions: See "LongList."
* LongList: All the charges Charlie has racked up, to the point where the Narrator encourages the reader to go ahead and take a shower while [[spoiler:Missy]] reads them out.
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*
* LongList:
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* MoodWhiplash: Sapphire vs. Canon starts off as another humorous parody, but this time with an entire team of Mary Sue exterminators! [[spoiler:Oh, and by the way, one of the interns for the MSEA is a traitor. Also, the HQ just caught on fire.]]
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* MoodWhiplash: Sapphire ''Sapphire vs. Canon Canon'' starts off as another humorous parody, but this time with an entire team of Mary Sue exterminators! [[spoiler:Oh, and by the way, one of the interns for the MSEA is a traitor. Also, the HQ just caught on fire.]]
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* MotiveRant: [[spoiler:Missy to October in chapter 13 of ''Sapphire''.]]
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* MotiveRant: [[spoiler:Missy to October in chapter Chapter 13 of ''Sapphire''.]]
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* NoFourthWall
* NonActionGuy: Brandon
* NonActionGuy: Brandon
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* OOCIsSeriousBusiness: If ''Charlie'' appears to be bothered by something, something really bad is going down.
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* OOCIsSeriousBusiness: OOCIsSeriousBusiness:
** If ''Charlie'' appears to be bothered by something, something really bad is going down.
** If ''Charlie'' appears to be bothered by something, something really bad is going down.
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* PersonaNonGrata: Charlie is forbidden to enter the ''{{Series/Sherlock}}'' universe ever again. [[NoodleIncident For some reason.]]
** And she's banned from Rio, too.
** And she's banned from Rio, too.
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* PersonaNonGrata: Charlie is forbidden to enter the ''{{Series/Sherlock}}'' ''Series/{{Sherlock}}'' universe ever again. again, [[NoodleIncident For for some reason.]]
**reason]]. And she's banned from Rio, too.
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* RealityWarper: Sapphire
* SeriousBusiness: Apparently, RP is this to Brandon.
* SeriousBusiness: Apparently, RP is this to Brandon.
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** Apparently, RP is this to Brandon.
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** The author mentioned that there will be a third one.
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* TeensAreMonsters: Jenny and Tara
** [[spoiler:And now Missy as well.]]
* ThisIsGonnaSuck: Hermione's reaction to meeting Sapphire.
** [[spoiler:And now Missy as well.]]
* ThisIsGonnaSuck: Hermione's reaction to meeting Sapphire.
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** Hermione's reaction to meeting Sapphire.
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* TriggerHappy: Charlie
* VerbalBusinessCard: Courtesy of Charlie.
* VerbalBusinessCard: Courtesy of Charlie.
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* WellIntentionedExtremist: [[spoiler:Missy.]]
** Arguably, the MSEA as whole.
** Arguably, the MSEA as whole.
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* YouCantHandleTheParody: Between Missy and October in ''Sapphire.'' Takes it even further by having [[spoiler:Missy launch into a MotiveRant that's a clear homage to Film/AFewGoodMen.]]
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* YouCantHandleTheParody: Between Missy and October in ''Sapphire.'' ''Sapphire''. Takes it even further by having [[spoiler:Missy launch into a MotiveRant that's a clear homage to Film/AFewGoodMen.''Film/AFewGoodMen''.]]
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Five Man Band is being cleaned up to be written in paragraph form and only have five roles. Removing ZCE.
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%%* Five Man Band:
%%** The MSEA:
%%*** TheHero: October
%%*** TheLancer: Brandon
%%*** TheBigGuy: Charlie
%%*** TheSmartGuy: Gigi
%%*** TheChick: Aphrodite
%%*** TheSixthRanger: Missy/Victoria
%%** The canon characters can also be viewed as this:
%%*** TheHero: Harry
%%*** TheLancer: Ron
%%*** TheBigGuy: Ginny
%%*** TheSmartGuy: Hermione
%%*** TheChick: Luna
%%*** TheSixthRanger: Draco
%%** Villains:
%%*** BigBad: The Anonymous
%%*** TheDragon: [[spoiler:Missy]]
%%*** TheEvilGenius: Jenny
%%*** TheBrute: [[{{Mooks}} The Jerks]]
%%*** TheDarkChick: Tara
%%** The MSEA:
%%*** TheHero: October
%%*** TheLancer: Brandon
%%*** TheBigGuy: Charlie
%%*** TheSmartGuy: Gigi
%%*** TheChick: Aphrodite
%%*** TheSixthRanger: Missy/Victoria
%%** The canon characters can also be viewed as this:
%%*** TheHero: Harry
%%*** TheLancer: Ron
%%*** TheBigGuy: Ginny
%%*** TheSmartGuy: Hermione
%%*** TheChick: Luna
%%*** TheSixthRanger: Draco
%%** Villains:
%%*** BigBad: The Anonymous
%%*** TheDragon: [[spoiler:Missy]]
%%*** TheEvilGenius: Jenny
%%*** TheBrute: [[{{Mooks}} The Jerks]]
%%*** TheDarkChick: Tara
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* NotSoHarmlessVillain: Tara appears to be just an idiot at first glance, but, apart from creating Ebony, she also shows she ''can'' fight in the first story alone.
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Dewicked trope
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* WeaponOfChoice: A BFG for Charlie, magic for Aphrodite.
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* TheLadette: Charlie, with everything from her WeaponOfChoice to her name.
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* TheLadette: Charlie, with everything from her WeaponOfChoice weapon to her name.