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Seraphem2013-08-11 07:16:01

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So, a new Liveblog/review/analysis/whatever you wanna call it. Anyway, after my Fallout Equestria one was such a hit, and also such fun to do, I really wanted to keep going, and of the options I put out for a next entry, CRISIS: Equestria was the one that seemed to get the most interest, so here we are.

As to what CEQ is, well, the Liveblog will explain most of it, but short version, the Mane 6 get sucked through a rip in the fabric of reality and transported to another dimension. The story s about them trying to find a way to get home, while getting mixed up in the ancient struggle between Order and Chaos taking place there.

This is going to be weirder, and a bit harder for me to really analyze and explain, since unlike FOE, this isn't completed yet. But, it's still worth going through and re-reading at this point, since as the title says this is CEQ version:2.0. The author has gone back, edited/rewrote/cleaned up/improved the story. Well at least the idea was improving the story. And so this also gives me an excuse to reread it and see just how those changes work.

I am rather excited, since the list of changes planned did address most of my issues with the first draft of the story. While the story as a whole is amazing, and has some of the best worldbuilding and original characters there are in Ponydom, it did have two rather huge flaws. First, was keeping the Mane 6 in character, especially RD. While overall they did feel IC, the story had a tendency to crank up just how combative and argumentative they are with each other, passing around Conflict Ball's like candy. The edits are supposed to tone that down, and better explain why they were acting like they were.

The second major MAJOR issue I had with the story that was pretty prominently listed as a massive fix incoming on the edit list...

BRIARTHORN!!

While this fic has some of the greatest, most amazing, and just plain awesome OC's there are, it also contains one who is, without a doubt the single worst, most annoying, irritating, grating, and just plain useless waste of digital print ever. He is by far the single worst OC I have ever seen. (Who is bad because of his character, not because of bad writing). I will get into detailing just why I hate him so much when he shows up, to give some context to contrast the edited and improved version, and it has to be improved over what we got. But for a good summery of how I feel, just watch any SF Debris rant about Neelix.

And again don't get me wrong those were flaws, but on the whole the story is still amazing, and looking forward to seeing how well the edits fix the few things that made the story drag. I should have the first chapter review up soon, hope you all enjoy and be sure to let me know what you think.

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Sereg Since: Dec, 1969
Oct 23rd 2013 at 12:09:29 PM
Well, knowing the Mane 6 are heading into a string of volcanoes, that's one hell of a title to open up on. This should be.... interesting.

A good point I hadn't noticed.

Wait, if she has to keep it up for three days, how is she going to get the eight hours of rest she needs to refresh her spell slots? The 'mass' version of a spell always takes up a slot several higher then the base spell. (Hey the story is the one writing it to sound like a D&D type spell system.)

Lol!

“Is this test multiple choice, or true-and-false?” Pinkie asked. “Or maybe it’s like an essay exam? Ooh, I hate those. I remember having to write some when I was in school, and sister let me tell you, it is hard writing without magic. Nah, this looks more like fill-in-the-blank. See ‘cause there’s a big gap in the middle that should be filled in with something else, and—"

I don't remember this. It's actually funny.

Oh, ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhh that is nice, that is very very nice. I know exactly what that was, and that is a very VERY nice little addition. And one that someone reading for the first time wouldn't quite get, and even if they noticed, would only leave them curious and give them something to ponder. That... that is one of the best additions to the story so far in the edits. (Additions, not counting the toning down RD, since that's more an alteration or reduction.)

Agreed!

AB not having any idea about what making the jam entails, and saying she'd been waiting for years to help make some.

I just assumed that she'd previously been considered too young.

“Ah, the good ol’ ‘cookie-to-milk ratio’, albeit with different variables,” Pinkie said, nodding sagely and earning cursory glances from the others. “Truly the second-greatest conundrum of our time, just ahead of ‘why are we here?’, but behind ‘where’d I leave my keys?’”

Again. I like this.

Okay, that is hilarious, and, really seems more in character for RD.

Yes.

The utter aversion of Convection Schmonvection was brilliant.

Absolutely. Loved that.

atom2004 Since: Dec, 1969
Oct 28th 2013 at 12:45:06 PM
Another great review.

The only issue I have with the revised version of this chapter is "why the hell the awesome rhyme-teasing scene with Tick Tock, Pinkie and Dash was removed"? :(
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