Live Blogs CRISIS: Equestria, the livebloggening

CDRW2012-06-08 14:53:29

"This is...disappointingly underwhelming. I can see where the author is coming from with the tranquil rage thing, and approve of that; but other than that sentence, there's little evidence in his actions or words that indicates he's angry. This is a classic case of telling instead of showing. He doesn't even need to change all that much either. Throw in a few details about him taking some bites from his breakfast and leaving deep scratches in the plate with his knife or something. Drag it out with little details like that, make us wonder if that tranquil fury is on the verge of becoming non-tranquil. As things stand right now, there's no tension in the scene at all. "

You do have a point here, but Silvertongue's future rages are a bit more satisfying.

"This is actually a bad policy for any villain in charge to take. Instant-death-on-failure results in an extremely high turnover rate and you'll never get anypony to stay on long enough to build up the required experience to do the jobs you want. And the ones who are experienced and competent are valuable even if they have screwed the pooch big time. Severe punishment to put the fear of God into them is acceptable. Even demotion and humiliation if they're not up to working in that environment, but don't waste your best men unless they're an active danger to your continued prosperity. I take this as more evidence of Stupid Evil. The Chaotic traits I noticed in his first introduction have been toned down a lot, but not enough for me to declare an alignment change yet. "

You do have a point here, but Silvertongue's not as bad as some villians about this and he doesn't always punish through death as you'll see.

"If you really wanted to throw a bit of chaos into the mix, you'd charge a not inconsiderable fee for those mandated immunizations. Better yet, say it's free, but then hit them upside the head with other charges. Like a "waiting room fee." "

Another reason that the place is less of a dystopia than I expected.

"-facepalm- Never mind. Seriously, this sort of shipping seems really out of place in this story. "

Yeah, I get you there. But at least it kind of becomes relevant later on.

"Okay. The gag with the doctor trying to take Pinkie's readings is actually quite funny. I want to know what the Japanese part says. "

Same here!

"So. Not much happened in this chapter, but it set the stage for some interesting stuff down the line. I guess it was all right. When the mane six weren't talking to each other. Seriously though, why are they even friends in this story at all? They're all cunts. I am officailly rooting for everybody except the mane six. Go Nihila! Go Tick Tock! Go die in a fire Rarity! "

And now you understand why we love the O Cs so much more than the canon characters. Seriously, there's a chapter where they don't even appear and it's a very well regarded chapter!

Still, you have some very fun stuff to look forward to.

If you don't like the gay jokes about RD and Pinkie, Just wait until Chapter 18 or so.

Also, get ready, because the next few chapters are the slow unveiling of the best characters in the fic.

Oh no, not Stupid Evil, at all, jus wait and see.

love how your treating Dash, 'Stop saying the sme thing as me but making it sound stupid." yeh that's her big issue for most of it, what she says makes sense, but she says it in the most irrational argumentative, and inanely aggravating way possible.

but yeah the early mane 6 were rather annoying, they do get better later...MUCH later in dash's case...but the OO Cness of them is the fics biggest flaw, the story and OC's are epic.

Seriously, I think everyone is on your side when you say that the O Cs in this fic are better than the canon characters. Seriously, this fic has THE BEST O Cs in the fandom as far as I'm concerned. Even the brief little one-shot characters are all extremely good. Seriously, if there isn't a single OC in this fic you legitimately like by this point in the story, there is something wrong with you, and you're not even at the best ones yet (Tick Tock excluded)!

Slight spoiler, but he does a much better job of handling some of the other canon characters.