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sanityisoverrated2011-05-03 05:53:44

I used to believe there was a God, once. Yes, one time I believed in all the things that Evangelists like to shove down everyone's throats, except not nearly as extremely. It all changed when I discovered fanfiction.net. Now, I know the truth.

Because no God would allow the abominations known as fan-fiction. For every good one, another 20 horrific ones exist. A good place to start with my undoubtedly won-ton amounts of fanfic MS Tings would be what I call the 'Conor the Gary-Stu' Saga, a series of Sonic the Hedgehog fanfics by one Conor T. Hedgehog, based on the writer's fan-character of the same name. He has crafted FOUR stories so far, with the fourth still being made.

So, what is so wrong with this author's fanfics? Well...

'Blaze moved quickly pointing the gun at Conors head he didn't move or flinch Amys arm trembled and she let go of the gun. Blaze held the gun but stopped and gave it to him .Conor smiled took the guns back and twirled one on his finger spinning and flicking it (Like Ocelot from MGS3) he pointed it at his head and shouted BANG! He pulled the trigger and the gun fired killing himself he fell over Blaze stared on in disbelief and Amy covered her eyes. All of a sudden he winced then his head moved he jumped up and the bullet fell out of the hole in which he was shot he cracked his neck and said "Now wasn't that fun"'

If you can read that AND understand it without re-reading once, I salute you. Also, one of the few times he uses quotation marks in the entire story, and possibly the sequels (oh yes, when I get to them, I will be commenting on them whilst reading them for the first time. Lord, help me).

Oh, and, you may read the story alongside me: Click at your own risk.

Comments

EndarkCuli Since: Dec, 1969

Jun 27th 2011 at 11:18:29 PM

Well, that was...interesting. Not nearly as bad as Conor's work, nor as awful as other first attempts at fiction, but I have no doubt that you've come a long way from this. Oddly enough, I think the thing that annoyed me the most was the improper use of brackets, usually when the information contained within would have been better off as a full-fledged sentence. But, as you've done a masterful job at self-critiquing, I should digress...

Really, when you get down to the bare bones of most things, they're just a method of expressing a message to an audience willing to listen. In that whole 'Conor' mess, it's a blatant display of pride in its sinful form, with more focus on how 'awesome' (a term I use sarcastically) the author's ideal persona is than any other flippin' thing. With your first story, there's still a few "Look at me!" vibes, but the main focus and development is from the world and the cast of characters that inspired the story in the first place. And sometimes, that little extra bit of attention is all it takes to make a story go from mediocre to enjoyable.

So, yeah. Best of luck on whatever happens next, though be sure to give your mind at least some sort of break before prying over that sequel. You've heard of that infamous scene from the film "Scanners", right?

sanityisoverrated Since: Dec, 1969

Jun 28th 2011 at 2:39:21 AM

The head explosion shot, right? I didn't like that film. I also agree on the whole 'focus' thing where something is more enjoyable when it focuses on a cast, rather than on the author's avatar.

I've always hated my past work, and I'm glad I could portray myself differently now rather than sounding like the immature child of yesteryear, if that makes sense.

Thank you for reading this MS Ting, I hope I'll hear from you in Blue Shadows at some point. As I said, I'll probably try and get cracking on something Anime related...though, actually, I've been thinking of doing a Let's Play of sorts, something I haven't touched in any form for a while, long before I came here.