Line #130 Fanfic/MagicaMadokaVeneficusPuella


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4	''[[http://web.archive.org/web/20120415051659/https://www.fanfiction.net/s/6893660/1/Magica_Madoka_Veneficus_Puella Magica Madoka Veneficus Puella]]'' is a [[DeadFic dead]] ''Anime/PuellaMagiMadokaMagica'' fanfic by The Moiderah of Writing on Fanfiction.net, known on this site as @/TheMoiderah. It follows an AlternateContinuity in which Homura dies fighting Walpurgis Nacht, and Madoka wishes for a world in which her friends can survive.
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6	[[{{BeCarefulWhatYouWishFor}} She gets it.]]
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8	Now, not only are the Puella Magi (now called Veneficus Puella) ''and'' the witches more powerful; the Muggles are now fully aware of the whole system, there is internal conflict between the Incubators, and the magic system has been turned on its head. Both Madoka and Homura are the only ones completely unaware of the new changes, and have to adapt. Fast.
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10	As often with ''Madoka Magica'' fanfiction, readers should have watched the whole series first to understand.
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12	Currently, a rewrite is being done under the name of ''"Magica Madoka Venefica R".'' Who ''knows'' when that'll turn up.
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15	!!This Fanfic provide examples of:
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17	* AllAccordingToPlan: [[spoiler:Just when things are going smoothly for the heroines, the Incubators hatch a plan to manipulate Madoka and [=EnBey=] into forcing Homura to become a Veneficus Puella. The result? Madoka is incapacitated in battle, and Homura, filled to the brim with guilt for being unable to protect Madoka past and present, unleashes destructive powers beyond [=EnBey's=] control. Plus the Incubators may very well have a better source of energy to exploit. WordOfGod [[http://forums.spacebattles.com/showpost.php?p=6234369&postcount=519 suggests this was Kyubey's intent all the way back in the old universe.]]]]
18	* [[AllThereintheManual All There in the Manual]]: See Spacebattles thread.
19	* AlternateUniverse: Madoka and Homura still remember the old world, and they have to learn how to roll with the punches. ''Quickly.''
20	** [[spoiler:[[FromBadToWorse It gets worse]]. It turns out that [[FridgeHorror there was a Madoka from this universe, and she's been trapped in the canon 'verse.]]]]
21	* AndIMustScream: Some of the Remnants, witches who manage to sort of regain human form, are perfectly aware of their situation, while being unable to think clearly enough to act.
22	* ApocalypseHow: [[spoiler:If Homura becomes a witch, it'll be an X-3+ at least (a good chunk of the universe is destroyed), provided that she isn't stopped. Same thing could easily happen if she contracts with [=EnBey=] and Madoka dies.]]
23	** [[spoiler:VP!Homura nearly caused a Class 0 at absolute minimum, but thanks to Madoka [[TookALevelInBadass Taking A Level In]] WarriorTherapist, she was pulled back from the DespairEventHorizon and banished her demons.]]
24	** [[spoiler:WordOfGod states "VP!Homura can destroy several universes if she wants to.", putting her squarely as potential X-5.]]
25	** [[spoiler: Recently, something along the lines of an X-4 seems to have happened in the original universe Madoka and Homura were from, with their alternates paying the price.]]
26	* ApocalypseMaiden: [[spoiler:Homura in the VP!-verse, Sayaka becomes one in the original PM-verse.]]
27	* AuthorAvatar: [=EnBey=], if [[http://forums.spacebattles.com/showpost.php?p=6234820&postcount=529 this Spacebattles post]] is any indication.
28	* BadassAdorable: Homura, who's got her glasses back.
29	** Madoka, who can now spam crossbows.
30	* BadassNormal: Guess who [[spoiler:was]]?
31	** [[spoiler:Junko now seems to have taken up the void]]
32	* BerserkButton: Do not harm Madoka in any way, or Homura ''will '''hurt''''' you. [=EnBey=] is not exempt from this.
33	** [[spoiler:Same with Yoshio and Sayaka.]]
34	* BroughtDownToNormal: Homura. It doesn't inconvenience her very much.
35	* BreakTheCutie: [[spoiler:Thought Sayaka got a raw deal in the original? In this fic, ''she was broken before the damn thing even began.'']] [[FromBadToWorse It gets worse]]. [[spoiler:'' She might be better off for it.'']]
36	** Yoshio Kiyomizu, the [[spoiler:saved/recovered]] human remnant of [[spoiler:witch Elly.]]
37	* BrokenBird: [[spoiler: [=VPuniverse!=]Madoka, being transported to a canon universe and undergoing the same process that Homura did in canon, for Sayaka's sake.]]
38	* ButtMonkey: The News Crew. The poor guys can't ever seem to get a break.
39	** But they always will [[IncrediblyLamePun break the news, and then proceed to get broken.]]
40	* CallingYourAttacks: Mami, as taught by Kazuko.
41	** And Sayaka who uses Irish for the naming of her moves. Madoka uses French.
42	* CanisLatinicus: "Magica Madoka Venificus Puella" means "Magical Madoka [evil, lit. poisonous] Magic Girl". With "magic" as a noun, this kills the grammar--making the title make exactly as little sense as the original, reflect the world as it is [[CosmicRetcon post-wish]], and just plain sound cool.
43	** FridgeBrilliance: There is no denying that the title is worded wrongly. However, take a moment to take a look at the order of the words, and compare it with the original title. The title of this fanfic is a [[SdrawkcabName Sdrawkcab Title]], which makes reference to how everything in this continuity has been figuratively turned upside down!
44	*** FridgeHorror: [[spoiler:Veneficus Puella can be translated to mean "wizard girl", or more simply "witch". In fact, the feminine form of veneficus [[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Venefica_sorceress does mean witch.]]]]
45	** The title also kills grammar with gender disagreement: unlike English, Latin words have a gender according to their postfixes. "Venificus" has the male gender because it ends with '-us', while all other words in the title are female because they end with '-a'.
46	* CastFullOfGay / EveryoneIsBi: Only two-three people are confirmed lesbians... but every other female with a decent appearance is either bi or lesbian (with the exception of Yoshio, but only because we don't know yet).
47	** WordOfGod puts it at 4 lesbians, 3 bisexuals, 1 straight, 1 SingleTargetSexuality (in reality a lesbian, putting that count at 5), 2 "undeveloped" (aka too young)
48	** LampShaded by Sayaka in chapter [[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6893660/12/Magica_Madoka_Veneficus_Puella 12.]]
49	* CloudCuckooLander: The author, if the Author's Notes at the end are any indication:
50	-->''"GREETINGS, FELLOWS. I AM NOT Creator/BrianBlessed, BUT I WILL TYPE LIKE JUST LIKE HOW HE SPEAKS, IN A LOVING HOMAGE TO A FINE SHAKESPEAREAN ACTOR."''
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52	-->''"[[[VideoGame/SuperMarioLand OBEY ME, MOIDERAH. I AM YOUR MASTER.]] [[SelfDeprecation GOOD WRITING IS YOUR ENEMY]]]"''
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54	-->''"[[LampshadeHanging Dear sweet merciful EVERYTHING, there is something wrong with me...]]"''
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56	** Taken up a notch in Website/SpaceBattlesDotCom
57	*** To say nothing of the other Spacebattlers...
58	** He has recently [[WildMassGuessing implied]] himself to be a [[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic brony]]. [[MemeticMutation Welcome to the herd!]]
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60	* ClusterFBomb: [=EnBey=], in very stark contrast to the rest of his kind.
61	** Everyone, except Madoka ([[spoiler:not counting when [=TorBey=] is influencing her]]) swears multiple times.
62	* CrackFic: One of the main characters is a swearing Incubator, the fights are ludicrous, and the number of references in every chapter is enormous. The most sane thing in the fic is the world, and even ''that's'' slightly unhinged.
63	* CrapsackWorld: The world's political systems are streamlined for use by the Veneficus Puellae, the death rate is significantly lower for the girls, and the [[StarfishAliens Incubator]] that is provided isn't actively trying to screw them over. These are good things. Meanwhile, [[EldritchAbomination the witches]] cause horrible collateral damage, the inhabitants are still [[HumansAreFlawed incredibly disagreeable,]] and some are willing to [[spoiler: [[MoralEventHorizon rape, torture, and kill recovered Remnants]] [[KnightTemplar out of a misguided sense of "Justice".]]]]''
64	* CreatorBacklash: This is now considered something of an OldShame by its writer, who claims that it had bad characterisation, that the OC Incubator was a self-insert, that the events of the story and the story itself were both stupid, and that there was no payoff for a lot of things touched upon during it. [[http://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/sayakaquest-trauma-is-a-thing.272123/page-94#post-12196338 (Post made by him on the subject)]]
65	* CrypticConversation: Played with in the sense that most of the {{Cryptic Conversation}}s are about what is considered common knowledge, but neither Madoka nor Homura have that knowledge. Essentially, it's an aversion of AsYouKnow.
66	** Notably there are a number of references to some sort of horrible incident involving [[Manga/PuellaMagiOrikoMagica Oriko]]. RealLifeWritesThePlot is probably in play here, as most of those references were from before ''Oriko Magica'' was released (and when it was still thought [[CoversAlwaysLie Oriko was the green-haired girl on the cover]], to boot!)
67	* DarkAndTroubledPast: As per the original, this exists in spades.
68	* DarkIsNotEvil: All Veneficus Puella outfits are black and made of demons.
69	* DeadpanSnarker: [=EnBey=], Sayaka, Homura, Mami, Kyouko, Kazuko...let's just say that there's a lot of snark flying around.
70	** In a meta-example, [[WordOfGod the author]] is one, too.
71	* DeadlineNews: A reporter and his cameraman are killed during a live broadcast of a Witch attack.
72	* {{Determinator}}: Homura, who gets clubbed and beaten by lord knows how many Torbeys and keeps a perfectly straight face afterwords. Lampshaded by [=EnBey=].
73	* DestructiveSaviour: ''[[{{Reconstruction}} Reconstructed.]]'' If it weren't for the Veneficus Puellae, the witches would be unstoppable. Despite the damage that is caused by each fight (which is mostly repaired by the witches' magic release), the Veneficus Puellae are thanked, and even celebrated, for their service.
74	* DespairEventHorizon: Homura ''nearly'' crossed it, [[spoiler:which could have lead to the destruction of Earth]]. Thankfully, Madoka was there to pull her back.
75	* DidYouJustPunchOutCthulhu: People's general reacton to Homura punching [=EnBey=] in the face.
76	** [[spoiler:[=VPuniverse!Madoka=] does this to Madokami.]]
77	* DoesNotLikeMen: Sayaka
78	* EldritchAbomination: The witches, obviously. [=TorBey=] and the other Incubators have elements of this too.
79	* EscapeFromTheCrazyPlace: The general plot for many of the characters in Episode 21-22.
80	* EvenEvilHasStandards: [=Enbey=] is a jerkass to the nth degree, but he draws the line at entering girl's rooms.
81	-->'''[=Enbey=]:''' ''"I may be a tiny thingamabob, but there is no way in hell that I'm going to invade a little girl's home just to ask her a few questions. [[MemeticMolester The thought's]] [[MythologyGag kind of creepy,]] [[LampshadeHanging really.]]"''
82	* [[{{EvilTwin}} Even More Evil Twin]]: [=TorBey=] compared to [=KyuBey=].
83	** On the other hand, Enbey is Kyubey's [[GoodIsNotNice Good But Dickish]] Twin.
84	* FailureIsTheOnlyOption: [[spoiler:[=EnBey=] knows he's racing against three things: the next Walpurgis Nacht, [=TorBey=] turning Homura into a witch, and Madoka's death. If any of these come to pass very bad things will happen. So what does he do? Contracts Homura. Which backfires spectacularly.]]
85	* FantasticRacism: Possibly. [[KnightTemplar Kyouko exterminates entire clans of familiars if just one of them steps out of line]].
86	* FixFic:Magical Girls now have an Incubator that isn't trying to screw them over, but there are still witches around, more powerful/deadly than before, and the other Incubator makes Kyubey look nice in comparison.
87	* FlechetteStorm: Madoka's more impressive attacks are this.
88	%%* FryingPanOfDoom:
89	* GatlingGood: Mami.
90	* HaveIMentionedIAmHeterosexualToday: Mild version since this is a MirrorUniverse, but according to WordOfGod, Hitomi had a coming out party... to say she's straight.
91	* HeroWithBadPublicity: Invoked by [=TorBey=], who turns the girls' quirks against them to the public.
92	* ImmortalityBeginsAtTwenty: A very mild version. Veneficus who turned 18 age three times slower than normal people.
93	* InHarmsWay: Being BroughtDownToNormal has ''not'' impeded Homura's willingness to protect Madoka from harm, be it {{Jerkass}} StarfishAliens or overzealous reporters, or her desire to kill [=TorBeys=] by the hundreds. [[ReallySevenHundredYearsOld Having an inhuman amount of experience helps.]]
94	* InSpiteOfANail: [[JustifiedTrope Justified.]] Madoka's wish has to make sure that her friends are ''born'' in order for them to survive. Also, the world has to be at least ''somewhat'' recognizable.
95	* JackassGenie: [=TorBey=]. [[spoiler:He doesn't even give any indication of his presence, acting as a [[{{Gaslighting}} voice in a person's head]] until they listen and make a wish...which he fulfills by instantly making them a witch.]]
96	* JerkWithAHeartOfGold / JerkWithAHeartOfJerk: [[spoiler:[=EnBey=] can only feel negative emotions. However, they give him a sense of morality. He however does cut the swearing and goes as straight forward as he can when meeting with Junko privately in chapter 12.]]
97	* KnightTemplar: Played with. Sayaka is more accepting of the injustice of the world than she is in canon [[KnightTemplarBigBrother but anyone who hurts the people she cares about are in serious trouble]]. Interestingly, Kyouko doesn't seem bothered by Sayaka whaling on people and leaving them to die...probably because in this world she has some KnightTemplar traits herself, [[FantasticRacism as those familiars found out]].
98	* [[LetsYouAndHimFight Let's You And Her Fight]]: Invoked by [=EnBey=] by uttering this ''very'' line. [[spoiler: It was suggested by him as a practice between Kyouko and Sayaka.]]
99	* LensmanArmsRace: And Incubator version of it.
100	* LighterAndSofter: Played with. Things are better for the girls, but the death toll and collateral damage is horrifying, [[spoiler: their pasts were made worse than what they already were]] and[=TorBey=] is '''very''' unpleasant.
101	* MacrossMissileMassacre: Sayaka's ''Rianúlann!'' [[BilingualBonus "Tracking Blade"]] is a magical version of this. In the same battle, Kyouko uses her own by shoving her polearms into the ground and having the blades fly off into the sky.
102	* MeaningfulName: Well, probably. [[spoiler:Like Puella Magi, Veneficus Puella can still be thought of as "young girl magician", or "young witch". Now consider the nature of the MirrorUniverse, the fact that magical girls are powered by despair, and that Madoka and Sayaka's magical girl outfits are somewhat evocative of their witch forms...]]
103	* MercyKill: Mami performs one on a [[{{AndIMustScream}} Remnant]]. Madoka completely misinterprets that, showing Mami that she doesn't know plenty of things that should be common knowledge.
104	* MikeNelsonDestroyerOfWorlds: [[spoiler:Being Homura ''sucks''.]]
105	* MirrorUniverse: It's not a perfect mirror, but there's plenty of examples.
106	** The whole system is public knowledge.
107	** Enbey is basically the anti-Kyubey, right down to being black instead of white.
108	** Charlotte goes ClippedWingAngel instead of OneWingedAngel.
109	** Witches don't comes from Grief Seeds; they come from ''Soul'' Seeds. Meanwhile, magical girls don't have Soul Gems; they have ''Grief'' Gems. In other words, ''magical girls are powered by despair''. [[spoiler:In fact, a person needs to have enough grief in order to contract in the first place.]]
110	*** Mami at one point says that despair brings hope.
111	** Because of the above [[spoiler:''Homura'' is now the most powerful potential magical girl...and [=TorBey=] is interested in her.]]
112	*** Also, when [[spoiler: [=EnBey=] visualizes her grief, it forms a massive form that towers over the city. Just like Krimehild Gretchen.]]
113	** Sayaka's first outing as a Veneficus is a double reflection: [[spoiler:She rescues a girl that became a witch, just as others tried and failed to do for her in the original universe.]]
114	** Mami [[spoiler:doesn't live alone, ''Sayaka'' does.]]
115	** Kyouko is hunting familiars and ends up being reprimanded for it.
116	** [[Manga/PuellaMagiOrikoMagica Sayaka finds an orphaned girl whose name starts with letter Y and becomes her caretaker and big sister figure.]]
117	** Sayaka still [[spoiler: attacks two men whose ultimate fates are left unknown]]... in an ''entirely'' different context.
118	** [[spoiler: Sayaka has a dead little sister.]]
119	** In this context, the discussion of the book ''No Longer Human'' at the beginning of Chapter 10 is basically a joke. [[spoiler: It's mostly unchanged.]]
120	** In Chapter 12 [[spoiler: Homura contracts...and it unleashes demons on the world. In other words, canon-Madoka became god, Veneficus-Homura became the devil.]]
121	** In Episode 14 (Chapter 16) [[spoiler: [[Manga/PuellaMagiKazumiMagica Yuuri and Airi are revealed to be members of the Pleiades Saints.]]]]
122	** Hell, the ''title itself'' is a mirror: Puella Magi Madoka Magica\|Magica Madoka Veneficus Puella
123	** Note about [[spoiler:[[Manga/PuellaMagiOrikoMagica Kirika Kure]]]]. In Canon, she was [[spoiler:GenkiGirl with AxeCrazy personalities]]. In here, she was [[spoiler:a ShrinkingViolet that find it [[NiceGirl distasteful to kill another human being.]]. Just like [[Anime/NeonGenesisEvangelion Shinji Ikari.]]]]
124	* [[TokyoIsTheCenterOfTheUniverse Mitakihara Is The Center Of The Universe]]
125	* MoreDakka: Lampshaded.
126	* {{Multiverse}}: [[spoiler:The timeline at the start, the current timeline, and well, the original Madoka and Homura from the timeline they're now in had to be sent [[FridgeHorror somewhere]].]]
127	* MySpeciesDothProtestTooMuch: Enbey is quite possibly the only Incubator that has any emotions (although they're mostly negative) and any sense of morality similar to ours. [[spoiler:[[GoneHorriblyRight There is a very good reason for this.]]]]
128	* MythologyGag:
129	** Homura [[BigDamnHeroes saves Madoka]] from a bunch of reporters by [[MemeticMutation bashing the camera with a baseball bat.]]
130	** [=EnBey=] refuses to go into Madoka's room, because he think it's creepy for him, a {{Starfish Alien\|s}}, to invade a little girl's privacy.
131	** In Episode 14/Chapter 16, [=EnBey=] says this about two magical girls: "They're calm, cool, collected, and work perfectly as a pair". He's talking about [[spoiler:[[Manga/PuellaMagiKazumiMagica Yuuri]] and [[IJustWantToBeYou Airi.]]]] It's even more amusing that [[spoiler: they're being called to Mitakihara to keep an eye on Sayaka - Canon!Yuuri and Canon!Sayaka have comparisons between the two, while Canon!Airi is someone who would agree with [[RoaringRampageOfRevenge killing the people who hurt those you care about]].]]
132	* NiceJobBreakingItHero: [[spoiler:Having Homura contract via [=EnBey=]? All part of the [=TorBey=] collective's plan.]]
133	* NoEndorHolocaust: '''''[[AvertedTrope Completely averted.]]''''' The collateral damage caused by each fight is '''''enormous''''' at worst, and large at best.
134	* NoodleIncident: Whatever happened with Oriko and the incident that banned Kyouko from Mitakihara ([[NoodleImplements involving a rock thrown through a window]]).
135	** Madoka's fight with Sayaka.
136	* OhCrap: [=EnBey=] and Kyouko's reaction to [[spoiler:how much power Homura really is packing]]
137	* OldShame: The original writer has completely disowned the story, and seems vaguely disgusted by its continued popularity. Mentioning even the acronym in ''Sayaka Quest'', which he runs, is a good way to cause [[RocksFallEveryoneDies sudden random encounters.]]
138	* TheOmniscientCouncilOfVagueness: [[spoiler:the last scene in each chapter makes allusions to it, but ch 12 hammers it home that there's more than just [=TorBey=] and [=KyuBey=] working together.]]
139	* ReallySevenHundredYearsOld: It's implied that Homura is this, when she discovers that she's been BroughtDownToNormal, she casually mentions that it's the first time she's had to wear glasses in centuries".
140	** Hold on, there. I'd also expect her to say "I haven't played Smash Bros. in centuries" afterwards.
141	%%* {{Reconstruction}}
142	* RelationshipUpgrade:[[spoiler: Madoka and Homura in Chapter 11. Naturally, tragedy strikes not long after.]]
143	* RetiredBadass: Kazuko, who was once a Veneficus Puella. [=EnBey=] is terrified of her.
144	* RuleOfCool: Runs on it.
145	* ScaryShinyGlasses: Homura
146	* SerialEscalation: How over-the-top can the fights get? [[DestructiveSaviour How much property damage can occur in every single fight?]] ''[[{{BFG}} How big can the weapons get?!]]'' '''''[[MoreDakka How]] [[BeamSpam many]] [[FieldOfBlades of them]] [[MacrossMissileMassacre will be]] [[WaveMotionGun spammed?!]]'''''
147	** Thought [=KyuBey=] was an unethical monstrosity that should-not-be? Meet [=TorBey=] and his[their] master, who makes the former contender for "biggest Jackass in Anime" look completely ethical in comparison, downright planning [[spoiler:on harvesting every soul on the planet as energy by turning them directly into Witches]].
148	* ShoutOut: Enbey has started lampshading tropes by name, after a Troper got this fic on Recomendations.
149	** Mami refers to training against another Veneficus Puella as [[Franchise/LyricalNanoha "befriending"]]. [[{{MoreDakka}} It]] [[{{WaveMotionGun}} involves]] [[{{BFG}} what you]] [[ThereIsNoKillLikeOverkill think it does.]]
150	** In Episode 8, Kyouko says she killed "about [[Webcomic/{{Homestuck}} four-hundred and thirteen]]" familiars.
151	** There are a ''ton'' of them in the author's notes.
152	* SpinOff: The author has written a fic [[{{Prequel}} about Kazuko in the nineties]], and is currently preparing to write about the [[Manga/PuellaMagiOrikoMagica Oriko incident]].
153	* StarfishAliens: The Incubators, naturally, but really driven home by [=TorBey=]:
154	-->'''Tsk. Such a waste of our[mine{their flesh} bodies] energy...We[I{They}] do not appreciate this wasteful nature, [=EnBey=].'''
155	** [=TorBey=]'s speech pattern (quoted above) is quite possibly a ShoutOut to how Arael speaks in [[FanFic/NobodyDies NGE: Nobody Dies]].
156	* StepfordSmiler: An argument can be made she was this in canon, but [[spoiler: ''Sayaka''.]]
157	* ThereIsNoKillLikeOverkill: This seems to be a common theme with Mami and Madoka. '''''Especially''''' Mami.
158	* TookALevelInBadass: EVERYONE. Even the Incubators.
159	** Special mention goes to Homura, who despite being BroughtDownToNormal, kicks just as much ass as before. She even knocks down a particularly disagreeable bus passenger while ''still asleep''.
160	* WaveMotionGun: Mami's ''Fine Sciopero'' [[BilingualBonus (End Strike)]]. It involves [[MoreDakka several cannons]] [[{{BFG}} the size of a bus]] [[ThereIsNoKillLikeOverkill firing simultaneously.]]
161	* WhamLine: In Chapter 7: "I happen to live alone". Followed by "Even ''I'' don't live alone!" The wham comes from who says them: [[spoiler: Sayaka says the first one, the second is Mami's response.]]
162	* YuriFan: Junko, in spades. Her own daughter is not exempt from this. To a much lesser extent Hitomi (or well, from what we've seen. She definitely tries to push Sayaka/Madoka at one point).

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