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* AudienceAlienatingPremise: The book is about a world where only about 10% of the population is male, and this leads to polygamy. Already a rather odd premise, not to mention the fact that polygamy is a rather controversial idea in the west. It gets even worse when you add in the concept of marrying ''children'' (married in name only due to the weird way the group marriages work, but if someone hears only the vague premise...).
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* CoversAlwaysLie: The most common cover art depicts a heroic male boldly carrying an unconscious female in his arms. This is ''entirely'' the wrong tone for the setting, which is largely about delicate, sheltered men and strong women. Anyone who picks it up expecting a bodice-ripper is going to be very unhappy.
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* AudienceAlienatingPremise: The book is about a world where only about 10% of the population is male, and this leads to polygamy. Already a rather odd premise, not to mention the fact that polygamy is a rather controversial idea in the west. Worse yet, the cover and advertising were apparently designed to appeal to a mainstream romance audience, who likely won't like the book at all as it's more of a thriller.
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* AudienceAlienatingPremise: The book is about a world where only about 10% of the population is male, and this leads to polygamy. Already a rather odd premise, not to mention the fact that polygamy is a rather controversial idea in the west. Worse yet, It gets even worse when you add in the cover and advertising were apparently designed concept of marrying ''children'' (married in name only due to appeal to a mainstream romance audience, who likely won't like the book at all as it's more of a thriller.weird way the group marriages work, but if someone hears only the vague premise...).
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* CoversAlwaysLie: The most common cover art depicts a heroic male boldly carrying an unconscious female in his arms. This is ''entirely'' the wrong tone for the setting, which is largely about delicate, sheltered men and strong women. Anyone who picks it up expecting a bodice-ripper is going to be very unhappy.
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* TheissTitillationTheory: Jerin somehow manages to convince himself that his nightshirt, which just about reaches his knees and is very thin, is almost as decent as a walking robe. Later on, after [[TheMakeover getting dressed up]] for the Mayfair ball, he is very aware that the tight trousers with a codpiece he is expected to wear are a lot more titillating than naked legs. Even if it doesn't leave much to the imagination.
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%%* AudienceAlienatingPremise: The book exists in an odd place, the country of Queensland, if not the world only has about 10% male population, which nessitates polygamy. Already a rather odd premise, not to mention the fact that polygamy is a rather controversial idea in the Western world. Worse yet, the cover and advertising were apparently designed to appeal to a mainstream romance audience, who likely won't like the book ''at all'' as it's more of a thriller.
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* AngstWhatAngst: While Jerin does angst after [[spoiler:he is kidnapped and a woman sat on his face without clothes in-between, i.e. sort of oral rape without actual penetration]], but only because he fears he is [[spoiler: DefiledForever due to consensual sex he suspects he might have had in a night he doesn't remember]]. After he is told that all is well, [[spoiler: the woman he thinks he slept with was his bride, anyway, and they didn't even have sex, and he is welcomed back by his wives to be ]] he quickly recovers. May or may not be justified, regarding how serious of an issue one regards the thing that happened.
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* AngstWhatAngst: AngstWhatAngst:
** While Jerin does angst after [[spoiler:he is kidnapped and a woman sat on his face without clothes in-between, i.e. sort of oral rape without actual penetration]], but only because he fears he is [[spoiler: DefiledForever due to consensual sex he suspects he might have had in a night he doesn't remember]]. After he is told that all is well, [[spoiler: the woman he thinks he slept with was his bride, anyway, and they didn't even have sex, and he is welcomed back by his wives to be ]] he quickly recovers. May or may not be justified, regarding how serious of an issue one regards the thing that happened.
** While Jerin does angst after [[spoiler:he is kidnapped and a woman sat on his face without clothes in-between, i.e. sort of oral rape without actual penetration]], but only because he fears he is [[spoiler: DefiledForever due to consensual sex he suspects he might have had in a night he doesn't remember]]. After he is told that all is well, [[spoiler: the woman he thinks he slept with was his bride, anyway, and they didn't even have sex, and he is welcomed back by his wives to be ]] he quickly recovers. May or may not be justified, regarding how serious of an issue one regards the thing that happened.
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* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: There's significant friction between Corelle and her younger brother Jerin. She wants him to be a proper male, with smooth soft hands and [[BeAWhoreToGetYourMan tight showy clothing]]; she also wants to trade him for the Brindle brother, while he wants to marry into a smaller and less violent family. When their mothers and elder sisters are away, she takes the middle sisters to visit the Brindles, leaving Jerin and the youngest children undefended by anyone above twelve. Eldest Whistler punishes her by confiscating her possessions and distributing them to her sisters. Corelle is defiant and irresponsible throughout. But when Eldest takes Jerin to court, Mother Eldest assigns Corelle to come with them with the idea that she needs to see more of the world, and one mistake shouldn't mean permanent blacklisting. Corelle is then well-behaved and careful for the rest of the book. Sure, she's under Eldest's eye, but it's odd that she doesn't so much as snipe at her brother.
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** There's significant friction between Corelle and her younger brother Jerin. She wants him to be a proper male, with smooth soft hands and [[BeAWhoreToGetYourMan tight showy clothing]]; she also wants to trade him for the Brindle brother, while he wants to marry into a smaller and less violent family. When their mothers and elder sisters are away, she takes the middle sisters to visit the Brindles, leaving Jerin and the youngest children undefended by anyone above twelve. Eldest Whistler punishes her by confiscating her possessions and distributing them to her sisters. Corelle is defiant and irresponsible throughout. But when Eldest takes Jerin to court, Mother Eldest assigns Corelle to come with them with the idea that she needs to see more of the world, and one mistake shouldn't mean permanent blacklisting. Corelle is then well-behaved and careful for the rest of the book. Sure, she's under Eldest's eye, but it's odd that she doesn't so much as snipe at her brother.
** There's significant friction between Corelle and her younger brother Jerin. She wants him to be a proper male, with smooth soft hands and [[BeAWhoreToGetYourMan tight showy clothing]]; she also wants to trade him for the Brindle brother, while he wants to marry into a smaller and less violent family. When their mothers and elder sisters are away, she takes the middle sisters to visit the Brindles, leaving Jerin and the youngest children undefended by anyone above twelve. Eldest Whistler punishes her by confiscating her possessions and distributing them to her sisters. Corelle is defiant and irresponsible throughout. But when Eldest takes Jerin to court, Mother Eldest assigns Corelle to come with them with the idea that she needs to see more of the world, and one mistake shouldn't mean permanent blacklisting. Corelle is then well-behaved and careful for the rest of the book. Sure, she's under Eldest's eye, but it's odd that she doesn't so much as snipe at her brother.
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** The Wakecliff inheritance had the potential to be a major subplot but is dropped after the chapter in which it’s introduced, doing little besides having a subtle ChekhovsClassroom comment that [[spoiler:relates to the Porters’ InheritanceMurder scheme]]. This feels very frustrating, since it's heavily implied that someone murdered the family, the princesses adjudicating and investigating the case could have given a better idea of their leadership capabilities, and the claimants brought up the interesting question of whether male-line cousins should inherit over sisters-in-law (and whether the claims of sisters-in-law should depend on fertility) in a matriarchal LadyLand society.
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** By the end of the Book Croelle has responsibility, favored with a trip to Mayfair, proved herself in the eyes of the queens and had a future husband of much better quality all but secured. Plus a few scenes of HypocriticalHeartWarming showcase how much she actually loves her brother.
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** By the end of the Book Croelle Corelle has responsibility, been favored with a trip to Mayfair, proved herself in the eyes of the queens and had a future husband of much better quality all but secured. Plus a few scenes of HypocriticalHeartWarming showcase how much she actually loves her brother.
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* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: There's significant friction between Corelle and her younger brother Jerin. She wants him to be a proper male, with smooth soft hands and [[BeAWhoreToGetYourMan tight showy clothing]]; she also wants to trade him for the Brindle brother, while he wants to marry into a smaller and less violent family. When their mothers and elder sisters are away, she takes the middle sisters to visit the Brindles, leaving Jerin and the youngest children undefended by anyone above twelve. Eldest Whistler punishes her by confiscating her possessions and distributing them to her sisters. Corelle is defiant and irresponsible throughout. But when Eldest takes Jerin to court, Mother Eldest assigns Corelle to come with them with the idea that she needs to see more of the world, and one mistake shouldn't mean permanent blacklisting. Corelle is then well-behaved and careful for the rest of the book. Sure, she's under Eldest's eye, but it's odd that she doesn't so much as snipe at her brother.
** By the end of the Book Croelle has responsibility, favored with a trip to Mayfair, proved herself in the eyes of the queens and had a future husband of much better quality all but secured. Plus a few scenes of HypocriticalHeartWarming showcase how much she actually loves her brother.
** By the end of the Book Croelle has responsibility, favored with a trip to Mayfair, proved herself in the eyes of the queens and had a future husband of much better quality all but secured. Plus a few scenes of HypocriticalHeartWarming showcase how much she actually loves her brother.
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* FanficFuel: there's the mysterious death of a whole family that is never really solved. One can believe it was coincidence, but with family sizes of about fifty people, that's not really likely - fuel for wild conspiracy fanfic. And then there are the events of the past, that are only told in flashbacks, and some only mentioned in passing, such as [[spoiler:Keifer poisoning the princesses' father]]. The story ends with [[spoiler:Jerin's wedding]], and Jerin is certain that he'll be happy - but will he?
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* FanficFuel: there's the mysterious death of a whole family that is never really solved. One can believe it was coincidence, but with family sizes of about fifty people, that's not really likely - fuel for wild conspiracy fanfic. And then there are the events of the past, that are only told in flashbacks, and some only mentioned in passing, such as [[spoiler:Keifer poisoning the princesses' father]]. The story ends with [[spoiler:Jerin's wedding]], and Jerin is certain that he'll be happy - but will he?
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* FanficFuel: there's LessDisturbingInContext: A lot of things in sound less disturbing in context. One of those is the mysterious death of a whole family word "child brides" which sounds horrible, considering the RealLife thing. However, as the novel is SpeculativeFiction, the ExoticExtendedMarriage is such that is never really solved. One can believe it was coincidence, but with family sizes of about fifty people, that's not really likely - fuel for wild conspiracy fanfic. And then there the "child brides" are the events younger sisters of the past, adult wives in a sororal polygyny marriage, and the husband has his own bedroom, where his wives visit him if they wish to. It is made very obvious that are only told wives don't start visiting the husband's quarters at night until they come of age (and "interested in flashbacks, men", as one character puts it), and some only mentioned in passing, such as [[spoiler:Keifer poisoning the princesses' father]]. The story ends with [[spoiler:Jerin's wedding]], and Jerin it is certain implied that he'll they can choose to sleep alone for the rest of their lives. (If they're lucky, they might even be happy - but will he? able to get a husband of more appropriate age later, though that would require to split the family.)
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*CrossesTheLineTwice: When her sister tells says that the neighbor's boy, Balin Brindle, is rumored to have [[ParentalIncest fathered his younger sisters.]] Corelle's reply? "And? At least we know he's fertile".
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* FanficFuel: there's the mysterious death of a whole family that is never really solved. One can believe it was coincidence, but with family sizes of about fifty people, that's not really likely - fuel for wild conspiracy fanfic. And then there are the events of the past, that are only told in flashbacks, and some only mentioned in passing, such as [[spoiler:Keifer poisoning the princesses' father]]. The story ends with [[spoiler:Jerin's wedding]], and Jerin is certain that he'll be happy - but will he?
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moving a few more tropes here, I'll see if crosswicking uncovers any more
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%%* AudienceAlienatingPremise: The book exists in an odd place, the country of Queensland, if not the world only has about 10% male population, which nessitates polygamy. Already a rather odd premise, not to mention the fact that polygamy is a rather controversial idea in the Western world. Worse yet, the cover and advertising were apparently designed to appeal to a mainstream romance audience, who likely won't like the book ''at all'' as it's more of a thriller.
* AngstWhatAngst: While Jerin does angst after [[spoiler:he is kidnapped and a woman sat on his face without clothes in-between, i.e. sort of oral rape without actual penetration]], but only because he fears he is [[spoiler: DefiledForever due to consensual sex he suspects he might have had in a night he doesn't remember]]. After he is told that all is well, [[spoiler: the woman he thinks he slept with was his bride, anyway, and they didn't even have sex, and he is welcomed back by his wives to be ]] he quickly recovers. May or may not be justified, regarding how serious of an issue one regards the thing that happened.
** Other protagonists show realistic angst over the death of their relatives. Ren, for example, is plagued by nightmares of the night her sisters died in an explosion. Jerin's toddler sisters don't want to let him go, for fear he will never return, "like daddy"; their father died a couple of months ago, and Jerin was [[PromotionToParent promoted to parent]]. The youngest doesn't quite understand that, unlike her father, Jerin will come back to visit.
* HoYay: Women have no problem with admiring each other's beauty with several same-sex relationships mentioned, with Ren noticing that Eldest Whistler looks almost as fetching as her brother Jerin. When Jerin sees Cullen Moorland, all dressed up for a ball, he is impressed by Cullen's good looks.
* AngstWhatAngst: While Jerin does angst after [[spoiler:he is kidnapped and a woman sat on his face without clothes in-between, i.e. sort of oral rape without actual penetration]], but only because he fears he is [[spoiler: DefiledForever due to consensual sex he suspects he might have had in a night he doesn't remember]]. After he is told that all is well, [[spoiler: the woman he thinks he slept with was his bride, anyway, and they didn't even have sex, and he is welcomed back by his wives to be ]] he quickly recovers. May or may not be justified, regarding how serious of an issue one regards the thing that happened.
** Other protagonists show realistic angst over the death of their relatives. Ren, for example, is plagued by nightmares of the night her sisters died in an explosion. Jerin's toddler sisters don't want to let him go, for fear he will never return, "like daddy"; their father died a couple of months ago, and Jerin was [[PromotionToParent promoted to parent]]. The youngest doesn't quite understand that, unlike her father, Jerin will come back to visit.
* HoYay: Women have no problem with admiring each other's beauty with several same-sex relationships mentioned, with Ren noticing that Eldest Whistler looks almost as fetching as her brother Jerin. When Jerin sees Cullen Moorland, all dressed up for a ball, he is impressed by Cullen's good looks.
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* AudienceAlienatingPremise: The book is about a world where only about 10% of the population is male, and this leads to polygamy. Already a rather odd premise, not to mention the fact that polygamy is a rather controversial idea in the west. Worse yet, the cover and advertising were apparently designed to appeal to a mainstream romance audience, who likely won't like the book at all as it's more of a thriller.
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* AudienceAlienatingPremise: The book is about a world where only about 10% of the population is male, and this leads to polygamy. Already a rather odd premise, not to mention the fact that polygamy is a rather controversial idea in the west. Worse yet, the cover and advertising were apparently designed to appeal to a mainstream romance audience, who likely won't like the book at all as it's more of a thriller.thriller.
* UnpopularPopularCharacter: Princess Trini gets hate from all her sisters for not wanting to marry again...after her late husband tortured and raped her. As [[ExoticExtendedMarriage all sisters in a family marry the same husband]], she gets in her sisters' way, but the reader, who likely has a different view on male-on-female rape,[[labelnote: *]] There are roughly twelve women for every man -- it's considered wildly unlikely that a family with thirty-two children would count ''four'' boys amongst them. Jerin notes in the narration that he could do pretty much anything he wanted to his sister Corelle because she's a middle child and a girl, while he's a boy.[[/labelnote]] [[TheWoobie will likely sympathize with her]]. She is ''also'' implied to be the most kind-hearted of the princesses, as she [[spoiler: immediately changes her opinion on marrying Jerin when she is told that a family she thinks will mistreat him has also offered for him.]]
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* UnpopularPopularCharacter: Princess Trini gets hate from all her sisters for not wanting to marry again...after her late husband tortured and raped her. As [[ExoticExtendedMarriage all sisters in a family marry the same husband]], she gets in her sisters' way, but the reader, who likely has a different view on male-on-female rape,[[labelnote: *]] There are roughly twelve women for every man -- it's considered wildly unlikely that a family with thirty-two children would count ''four'' boys amongst them. Jerin notes in the narration that he could do pretty much anything he wanted to his sister Corelle because she's a middle child and a girl, while he's a boy.[[/labelnote]] [[TheWoobie will likely sympathize with her]]. She is ''also'' implied to be the most kind-hearted of the princesses, as she [[spoiler: immediately changes her opinion on marrying Jerin when she is told that a family she thinks will mistreat him has also offered for him.]]
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