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-->"John:" It just feels like people I care for always...depart before their time. My friends in India, for instance. In order for me to gain a family, my poor parents even had to lose a daughter.
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*SurvivorGuilt: John and Lillian, understandably given their histories, both have shades of this, poor things. In John's diamond scene in Chapter 10:
-->"John:" It just feels like people I care for always...depart before their time. My friends in India, for instance. In order for me to gain a family, my poor parents even had to lose a daughter.
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-->"Lillian:" I know how you feel. First my mother, now my sister...It's hard not to feel like I'm somehow the common factor between them.
-->"John:" It just feels like people I care for always...depart before their time. My friends in India, for instance. In order for me to gain a family, my poor parents even had to lose a daughter.
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-->"Lillian:" I know how you feel. First my mother, now my sister...It's hard not to feel like I'm somehow the common factor between them.
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* TheReveal: In Chapter 16, it is revealed that [[spoiler:Rebecca Seymour is the person who murdered Amelia]]. She [[spoiler:bought a perfume and sent it to Amelia anonymously containing poison]]. The reason was that Amelia [[spoiler: found out that Vincent had a secret family out of the country and Rebecca didn't confront him about the adultery committed by him]].
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* TheReveal: In Chapter 16, it is revealed that [[spoiler:Rebecca Seymour is the person who murdered Amelia]]. She [[spoiler:bought a perfume and sent it to Amelia anonymously containing poison]]. The reason was that Amelia [[spoiler: found out that Vincent had a secret family out of the country and Rebecca didn't confront him about the adultery committed by him]].him in fear that they’d become his heirs over her own children considering she is not a British citizen being Hong Kong born]].
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* GayOption: Gemma Montjoy.Montjoy, the spirited widow of an arranged marriage, is the only same-sex love interest out of three, which is par for a Choices book.
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* AmbiguouslyAbsentParent: [[spoiler:[[NouveauRiche Cole Hayes]]]], Lillian and Amelia's father and Delia's husband is mentioned throughout the story, but never appeared at any time despite his being still alive.
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* AmbiguouslyAbsentParent: AmbiguouslyAbsentParent[=/=]TheGhost: [[spoiler:[[NouveauRiche Cole Hayes]]]], Lillian and Amelia's father and Delia's husband is mentioned throughout the story, but never appeared at any time despite his being still alive.
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* BittersweetEnding: Aside from the obvious (her murder may have been solved, but Amelia is still dead and her loved ones have no choice but to live with that grief) there is also the historical context that casts a shadow on Lillian's happy ending with her LoveInterest. The scene of them blissfully starting on their honeymoon, filled with hopes for the future, is a bit hard to read when you know that the [[UsefulNotes/WorldWarI First World War]] is not even a year off.
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* WritersCannotDoMath: Not a math issue per se, but it is slightly hilarious that the 'historic seat of the Viscount Ashbourne' was built in the 1810s, a mere hundred years before the story takes place. The ancestor that built the secret passage shrouded in family legend introduced later on by that logic must have been a (great-)great-grandfather of the current Somerset generation.
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**At the beginning of the story, as Francis takes Lillian through the house and gloomily discusses their inevitable wedding, Lillian presumptuously seats herself on an ottoman, which infuriates Francis (though he quickly apologizes and explains himself). Near the end of the story [[spoiler: as they send out letters to cancel the wedding]], Lillian will be sitting on the ottoman, next to Francis.
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* BullyingADragon: Both Amelia and Lillian are quite fond of kicking the hornet’s nest regardless of whom they might be antagonizing at the time. Most of the company they keep simply dismiss their unwanted opinions, although multiple characters are shown to be powerful … and quite dangerous.
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* BullyingADragon: Both Amelia and Lillian are quite fond of kicking the hornet’s nest regardless of whom they might be antagonizing at the time. Most of the company they keep simply dismiss their unwanted opinions, although multiple characters are shown to be powerful … powerful… and quite dangerous.
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* BullyingADragon: Both Amelia and Lillian are quite fond of kicking the hornet’s nest regardless of whom they might be antagonizing at the time. Most of the company they keep simply dismiss their unwanted opinions, although multiple characters are shown to be powerful … and quite dangerous.
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* ProperLady: The Dowager Countess, Lady Ashbourne, and Marchioness Huntsbury all fit this role. Lillian may be come to be considered this over the course of the story, depending on how the player chooses to behave during the period of her engagement to Francis.
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* ProperLady: The Dowager Countess, Countess[[note]][[GrannyClassic Vivian Somerset[[/note]]]], Lady Ashbourne, Ashbourne[[note]][[GoodParents Blythe Somerset[[/note]]]], and Marchioness Huntsbury Huntsbury[[note]][[BigBad Rebecca Seymour[[/note]]]] all fit this role. Lillian may be come to be considered this over the course of the story, depending on how the player chooses to behave during the period of her engagement to Francis.
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* Bookends: The story (discounting the prologue and the bonus scene) both starts and ends with Lillian boarding a steamship - first to travel to England to wed Francis, then to either travel back to New York for a visit, or (if the player had her marry one of the Love Interests) to go on a holiday with her new spouse. Who isn't Francis.
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* Bookends: BookEnds: The story (discounting the prologue and the bonus scene) both starts and ends with Lillian boarding a steamship - first to travel to England to wed Francis, then to either travel back to New York for a visit, or (if the player had her marry one of the Love Interests) to go on a holiday with her new spouse. Who isn't Francis.
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* Bookends: The story (discounting the prologue and the bonus scene) both starts and ends with Lillian boarding a steamship - first to travel to England to wed Francis, then to either travel back to New York for a visit, or (if the player had her marry one of the Love Interests) to go on a holiday with her new spouse. Who isn't Francis.
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* VitriolicBestBuds: John and Gemma seem to have this going on.
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* JerkWithAHeartOfGold: What John seems to be set up as in the first chapter; on welcoming Lillian, he makes no effort to correct her when she mistakes him for his brother (in front of the entire assembled household staff, no less) and more or less, with no evidence, accuses her of being happy about her sister's death because of the opportunities it provides her. However, he becomes significantly nicer from chapter 2 onwards.
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* SilkHidingSteel: Marchioness Huntsbury seems the very model of a modest and gentle (if somewhat browbeaten) wife. [[spoiler: She is actually the story’s true BigBad.]]
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* SilkHidingSteel: Rebecca Seymour, the Marchioness Huntsbury Huntsbury, seems the very model of a modest and gentle (if somewhat browbeaten) wife. [[spoiler: She is actually the story’s true BigBad.]]
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* YouGoGirl: Amelia, Gemma and Lillian are happy to participate in activities deemed unsuitable for women, such as shooting, cricket, and poker. The male characters are, for the most part, very impressed when you best them.
* YourCheatingHeart: Thomas Montjoy, Gemma's husband.[[spoiler: Lord Huntsbury also qualifies.]]
* YourCheatingHeart: Thomas Montjoy, Gemma's husband.[[spoiler: Lord Huntsbury also qualifies.]]
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* YouGoGirl: Amelia, Gemma and Lillian are happy to participate in activities deemed unsuitable for women, such as shooting, cricket, and poker. The male characters are, for the most part, very impressed when you best them.
* YourCheatingHeart: Thomas Montjoy, Gemma's husband.[[spoiler: Lord Huntsbury also qualifies.]]them.
* YourCheatingHeart: Thomas Montjoy, Gemma's husband.[[spoiler: Lord Huntsbury also qualifies.]]
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* AltarTheSpeed: The underlying motivation of the early chapters is to resolve the murder of Amelia Hayes before the end of summer, which is when Lillian Hayes and Francis Somerset are expected to marry. About the midway point of the book, Lillian and Francis are given happy news by his elders--a suitable wedding venue is available immediately, so they will be married much sooner than expected. This is a problem for more than one reason. [[spoiler: They haven't solved the murder by that point and won't be able to once they take on the duties of a viscount and viscountess, and more importantly, they don't love each other at all.]]
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* MissingMom: Both John's and Lillian's biologcal mothers died when they were young - John's mother died in childbirth, Lillian's when she was still a child. While Lillian mentions in a flashback in Chapter 8 that she wishes her mother was with them instead of Delia, John seems regretful over his mother`s death, but is happily adopted.
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* MissingMom: Both John's and Lillian's biologcal biological mothers died when they were young - John's mother died in childbirth, Lillian's when she was still a child. While Lillian mentions in a flashback in Chapter 8 that she wishes her mother was with them instead of Delia, John seems regretful over his mother`s death, but is happily adopted.
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** Aunt Maude will drop subtle hints that she is quite aware that the purported engagement with Francis isn't truly where Lillian's heart lies, and she will be much more supportive of Lillian's wishes than her sister Delia.
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* SpeakNowOrForeverHoldYourPeace: Played with, along with AnguishedDeclarationOfLove. Lillian's love interest will come bursting into the bridal preparation chamber to make one last desperate plea for her affections, just in time as it transpires.
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* DyingClue: “Blood runs …” Although Lillian knows what this phrase meant to herself and her sister, it will take her the entirety of the story to understand why Amelia chose that specific phrase as her FinalWords. [[spoiler: The phrase was a saying in their family to remind the children that they were still loved and cared for, even if they were not blood relatives. It is also an oblique hint as to the identity and motives of Amelia’s killer.]]
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* MamaBear: Delia Hayes comes off as overly harsh and uncompromising for almost the entire story, but the two times Lillian needs her the most, she comes through in the best possible way.
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* InnocentlyInsensitive: Multiple characters will mention someone named 'Victoria', which never fails to enrage John and leads to awkward silence afterwards. It will be sometime before John explains himself. Victoria was his former fiancée who once took a transatlantic cruise … [[spoiler: … aboard the RMS Titanic.]]
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* InnocentlyInsensitive: Multiple characters will mention someone named 'Victoria', which never fails to enrage John and leads to awkward silence afterwards. It will be sometime before John explains himself. Victoria was his former fiancée who once took a transatlantic cruise … [[spoiler: … aboard cruise… [[spoiler:aboard the RMS Titanic.]]
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* OutlivingOnesOffspring: The Somerset clan has extraordinarily poor luck with their daughters and daughters-to-be. By the time you enter their lives, they have already lost three—one to DeathByChildbirth, one to a tragic accident and one to murder. [[spoiler: And if you make bad decisions, they will lose you as well.]]
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* OutlivingOnesOffspring: The Somerset clan has extraordinarily poor luck with their daughters and daughters-to-be. By the time you enter their lives, they have already lost three—one three— one to DeathByChildbirth, infant mortality, one to a tragic accident and one to murder. [[spoiler: And if you make bad decisions, they will lose you as well.]]
** Not to mention, [[spoiler: if John is Lillian's LoveInterest, they come very close to losing one of their sons as well.]]
** Not to mention, [[spoiler: if John is Lillian's LoveInterest, they come very close to losing one of their sons as well.]]
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* ImpoverishedPatrician: The chief reason that the Ashbourne elders want to see your engagement with Francis succeed. Although they grow genuinely fond of you with time, it is never a secret that they very much need your family’s money.
* InnocentlyInsensitive: Multiple characters will mention someone named ‘Victoria,’ which never fails to enrage John and leads to awkward silence afterwards. It will be sometime before John explains himself. Victoria was his former fiancée who once took a transatlantic cruise … [[spoiler: … aboard the RMS Titanic.]]
* LiteralMetaphor: The three locations where Lillian’s suitors will confess that they love her all correspond to their social status. John’s confession happens on a balcony (high), Hugh’s confession happens next to a pond (low), and Gemma‘s confession takes place in a servant’s hallway (hidden/closeted).
* InnocentlyInsensitive: Multiple characters will mention someone named ‘Victoria,’ which never fails to enrage John and leads to awkward silence afterwards. It will be sometime before John explains himself. Victoria was his former fiancée who once took a transatlantic cruise … [[spoiler: … aboard the RMS Titanic.]]
* LiteralMetaphor: The three locations where Lillian’s suitors will confess that they love her all correspond to their social status. John’s confession happens on a balcony (high), Hugh’s confession happens next to a pond (low), and Gemma‘s confession takes place in a servant’s hallway (hidden/closeted).
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* ImpoverishedPatrician: The chief reason that the Ashbourne elders want to see your engagement with Francis succeed. Although they grow genuinely fond of you with time, it is never a secret that they very much need your family’s family's money.
* InnocentlyInsensitive: Multiple characters will mention someone named‘Victoria,’ 'Victoria', which never fails to enrage John and leads to awkward silence afterwards. It will be sometime before John explains himself. Victoria was his former fiancée who once took a transatlantic cruise … [[spoiler: … aboard the RMS Titanic.]]
* LiteralMetaphor: The three locations where Lillian’s suitors will confess that they love her all correspond to their social status. John’s confession happens on a balcony (high), Hugh’s confession happens next to a pond (low), and Gemma‘s confession takes place in aservant’s servant's hallway (hidden/closeted).
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* MissingMom: Both John's and Lillian`s biologcal mothers died when they were young - John's mother died in childbirth, Lillian`s when she was still a child. While Lillian mentions in a flashback in Chapter 8 that she wishes her mother was with them instead of Delia, John seems regretful over his mother`s death, but is happily adopted.
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* OutlivingOnesOffspring: The Somerset clan has extraordinarily poor luck with their daughters and daughters-to-be. By the time you enter their lives, they have already lost three—one to DeathByChildbirth, one to a tragic accident and one to murder. [[spoiler: And if you make bad decisions, they will lose you as well.]]
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* RichKidTurnedSocialActivist: John. And eventually, [[spoiler: Francis.]]
*RichSuitorPoorSuitor: John Somerset is both—he is rich compared to Hugh Crawford, but much poorer than Gemma Montjoy.
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* SilkHidingSteel: Marchioness Huntsbury seems the very model of a modest and gentle (if somewhat browbeaten) wife. [[spoiler: She is actually the story’s true BigBad.]]
* SpiritedYoungLady: How many characters describe Amelia and Lillian, sometimes as a slight, but just as often in admiration.
* SpiritedYoungLady: How many characters describe Amelia and Lillian, sometimes as a slight, but just as often in admiration.
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* TheyCallMeMISTERTibbs: If your character is actively returning Hugh Crawford’s affection, she will be much more angered and hurt by the social slights he receives. At one point the Dowager Countess will dismissively refer to him as “that solicitor” and Lillian will promptly snap back, “His name is Mister Crawford.”
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* YouGoGirl: Amelia, Gemma and Lillian are happy to participate in activities deemed unsuitable for women, such as shooting, cricket, and poker. The male characters are, for the most part, very impressed when you best them.
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* PennyAmongDiamonds: Hugh Crawford, who has been experiencing this sort of exclusion since his college years.