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* In the 28th chapter, the MyLifeFlashedBeforeMyEyes moment of [[spoiler:Brutus]] [[AlasPoorVillain gives him a sympathetic depth that wasn't there before]]. [[spoiler:He [[UsedToBeASweetKid was a shy colt]] when he first met Vibrant Glow by becoming her seatmate at school, and they [[AccidentalHandHold accidentally touched hooves]] in the first meeting. [[ChildhoodFriendRomance When they grew up, they were happily married]], but they were unable to have a foal. Vibrant Glow (whose abdomen is scarred) is shown [[TragicStillbirth crying over her deceased infant in an empty foal's room]], and this is implied to have happened several times.
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* In the 28th chapter, the MyLifeFlashedBeforeMyEyes moment of [[spoiler:Brutus]] and [[MyGodWhatHaveIDone the serious regrets]] it causes in him [[AlasPoorVillain gives give him a sympathetic depth that wasn't there before]]. [[spoiler:He [[UsedToBeASweetKid was a shy colt]] when he first met Vibrant Glow by becoming her seatmate at school, and they school (they even [[AccidentalHandHold accidentally touched hooves]] in the first meeting.hooves]]). [[ChildhoodFriendRomance When they grew up, they were happily married]], but they were unable to have a foal. Vibrant Glow (whose abdomen is scarred) is shown [[TragicStillbirth crying over her deceased infant in an empty foal's room]], and this is implied to have happened several times. \n When Scootaloo's adoption is shown, Brutus is begging the past versions of himself and his wife not to adopt Scootaloo, knowing what he'll put her through. The scene then switches to Brutus abusing Scootaloo and then [[TilMurderDoUsPart killing Vibrant]], with him being unable to stop neither of them. He then finds himself in the Everfree Forest, with Scootaloo hidden by the shadows. He tries apologizing to her, only for the filly to be reveal herself to be decayed. As she and the equally grotesque Vibrant Glow bear down on the horrified Brutus, the filly declares that they can now be a happy family forever.]]
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*** [[spoiler:The flashback Brutus has of the day of adoption reveals that Scootaloo was [[DoorstepBaby left at the orphanage's doorstep]] as an infant. She didn't have any real friendship with the other orphans, and she [[TheNameless refused to be called by any name]] that wasn't chosen by her parents. It looked like she was going to spend her entire fillyhood in the orphanage since nopony seemed interested in adopting the pegasus whose wings were small for her age. Brutus and Vibrant Glow, however, chose her without taking the time to speak with the other candidates.]]
* In the 28th chapter, the MyLifeFlashedBeforeMyEyes moment of [[spoiler:Brutus]] [[AlasPoorVillain gives him a sympathetic depth that wasn't there before]]. [[spoiler:He [[UsedToBeASweetKid was a shy colt]] when he first met Vibrant Glow by becoming her seatmate at school, and they [[AccidentalHandHold accidentally touched hooves]] in the first meeting. [[ChildhoodFriendRomance When they grew up, they were happily married]], but they were unable to have a foal. Vibrant Glow (whose abdomen is scarred) is shown [[TragicStillbirth crying over her deceased infant in an empty foal's room]], and this is implied to have happened several times.
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* In the 28th chapter, the MyLifeFlashedBeforeMyEyes moment of [[spoiler:Brutus]] [[AlasPoorVillain gives him a sympathetic depth that wasn't there before]]. [[spoiler:He [[UsedToBeASweetKid was a shy colt]] when he first met Vibrant Glow by becoming her seatmate at school, and they [[AccidentalHandHold accidentally touched hooves]] in the first meeting. [[ChildhoodFriendRomance When they grew up, they were happily married]], but they were unable to have a foal. Vibrant Glow (whose abdomen is scarred) is shown [[TragicStillbirth crying over her deceased infant in an empty foal's room]], and this is implied to have happened several times.
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** On Hasty Vote's prodding, Business Savvy tells that Dream Gavel always wanted to join the Royal Guard. His father wanted him to follow in his hoofsteps instead, but Dream Gavel went behind his father's back and got accepted in the Guard. Business Savvy was furious with him, but he still [[SoProudOfYou felt proud for him]], as did Gavel's mother who took on that day the picture which the mourning father is now clinging to.
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** On Hasty Vote's prodding, Business Savvy tells that Dream Gavel always wanted to join the Royal Guard. His father wanted him to follow in his hoofsteps instead, but Dream Gavel went behind his father's back and got accepted in the Guard. Business Savvy was furious with him, but he still [[SoProudOfYou felt proud for him]], as did Gavel's mother who took on that day the picture which the mourning father is now clinging to.to.
* Scootaloo is revealed to live in a rathole with her adoptive parents. Her mother Vibrant Glow [[TheGamblingAddict constantly wastes money in gambling]], and her father Brutus Meadows is [[AlcoholicParent a drunk]] who often [[AbusiveParents physically lashes out at Scootaloo]]. She's covered in bruises and scars so much that she [[ClothingConcealedInjury covers them every day by using the makeup kit]] she gained from Sweetie Belle as a Hearth's Warming Eve present.
** Scootaloo remembers that [[HappilyAdopted her adoptive parents were loving]] before Vibrant Glow started gambling just a few years after adopting her. After she fell into debt with people whom she couldn't pay, Brutus had to sell even Scootaloo's things to cover the debts. Scootaloo wishes to have those happier times back.
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* Scootaloo is revealed to live in a rathole with her adoptive parents. Her mother Vibrant Glow [[TheGamblingAddict constantly wastes money in gambling]], and her father Brutus Meadows is [[AlcoholicParent a drunk]] who often [[AbusiveParents physically lashes out at Scootaloo]]. She's covered in bruises and scars so much that she [[ClothingConcealedInjury covers them every day by using the makeup kit]] she gained from Sweetie Belle as a Hearth's Warming Eve present.
** Scootaloo remembers that [[HappilyAdopted her adoptive parents were loving]] before Vibrant Glow started gambling just a few years after adopting her. After she fell into debt with people whom she couldn't pay, Brutus had to sell even Scootaloo's things to cover the debts. Scootaloo wishes to have those happier times back.
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* Though she doesn't want to admit it, Dimmed Star feels lonely with the distance that has grown between herself and her loved ones. Unfortunately, she refuses to {{turn the other cheek}} like Twilight Sparkle would have done.
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* Though she doesn't want to admit it, Dimmed Star feels lonely with the distance that has grown between herself and her loved ones. Unfortunately, she refuses to {{turn the other cheek}} like Twilight Sparkle would have done.done.
* At the end of the 15th chapter, Business Savvy, angry that Dimmed Star wasn't condemned for killing [[OutlivingOnesOffspring his son]], [[DrowningMySorrows is drinking]] in a tavern. He has placed on the chair next to him a pint, with the picture of his son leaning against it.
** On Hasty Vote's prodding, Business Savvy tells that Dream Gavel always wanted to join the Royal Guard. His father wanted him to follow in his hoofsteps instead, but Dream Gavel went behind his father's back and got accepted in the Guard. Business Savvy was furious with him, but he still [[SoProudOfYou felt proud for him]], as did Gavel's mother who took on that day the picture which the mourning father is now clinging to.
* At the end of the 15th chapter, Business Savvy, angry that Dimmed Star wasn't condemned for killing [[OutlivingOnesOffspring his son]], [[DrowningMySorrows is drinking]] in a tavern. He has placed on the chair next to him a pint, with the picture of his son leaning against it.
** On Hasty Vote's prodding, Business Savvy tells that Dream Gavel always wanted to join the Royal Guard. His father wanted him to follow in his hoofsteps instead, but Dream Gavel went behind his father's back and got accepted in the Guard. Business Savvy was furious with him, but he still [[SoProudOfYou felt proud for him]], as did Gavel's mother who took on that day the picture which the mourning father is now clinging to.
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* To Celestia, what happened to her student is like a repeat of her own little sister's stunt as Nightmare Moon. When Dimmed Star tells Celestia her new name, Celestia runs out of the dungeon all the while she's haunted by a memory of the corrupted Luna renaming herself as Nightmare Moon.
** When Celestia goes to the Mane Five and Cutie Mark Crusaders quarters, she fully expects them to bombard her with accusations and insults for imprisoning Dimmed Star, and she believes she deserves it all.
** When Celestia goes to the Mane Five and Cutie Mark Crusaders quarters, she fully expects them to bombard her with accusations and insults for imprisoning Dimmed Star, and she believes she deserves it all.
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* To Celestia, what has happened to her student is like a repeat of her own little sister's stunt as Nightmare Moon. When Dimmed Star tells Celestia her new name, Celestia runs out of the dungeon all the while she's haunted by a memory of the corrupted Luna renaming herself as Nightmare Moon.
** When Celestia goes to the Mane Five and Cutie MarkCrusaders Crusaders' quarters, she fully expects them to bombard her with accusations and insults for imprisoning Dimmed Star, Star (though nothing that extreme happens), and she believes she deserves it all.
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* When the Mane Five and Celestia express their guilt to Dimmed Star at the wedding hall, she's reduced to wailing mess whom Shining Armor immediately embraces and tries to comfort. [[HopeSpot It looks like there could be reconciliations following]]… until [[DemonicPossession the Entity fills Dimmed Star's mind with her bad memories from the rehearsal]], causing her to use an Ink-serpent to throw her brother against a wall, leaving him heavily bleeding and comatose before he can even realize what's going on.
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* When the Mane Five and Celestia express their guilt to Dimmed Star at the wedding hall, she's reduced to a wailing mess whom Shining Armor immediately embraces and tries to comfort. [[HopeSpot It looks like there could be reconciliations following]]… until [[DemonicPossession the Entity fills Dimmed Star's mind with her bad memories from the rehearsal]], causing her to use an Ink-serpent to throw her brother against a wall, leaving him heavily bleeding and comatose before he can even realize what's going on.on.
** When the remorseful Dimmed Star visits Shining Armor at the hospital, she has a flashback from her fillyhood; Shining bravely stood up to two stallions who were robbing a mare and received a beating for it, but he still managed to prevent one of them from leaving with the book he just bought as a gift for his sister. As Twilight cried against him, he simply kept reassuring her that he's fine. As the flashback ends, some of Dimmed Star's black tears fall onto the bed sheet.
** When the remorseful Dimmed Star visits Shining Armor at the hospital, she has a flashback from her fillyhood; Shining bravely stood up to two stallions who were robbing a mare and received a beating for it, but he still managed to prevent one of them from leaving with the book he just bought as a gift for his sister. As Twilight cried against him, he simply kept reassuring her that he's fine. As the flashback ends, some of Dimmed Star's black tears fall onto the bed sheet.
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* Twilight's transformation into Dimmed Star is a big heartbreaker for everypony who loves her: her friends, Spike, Princess Cadance, Princess Celestia, her parents, and Shining Armor. Celestia, the Mane Five and Spike in particular blame themselves for it due to the fact that their act of leaving Twilight alone at the wedding rehearsal led to Chrysalis imprisoning her in the crystal caves, which in turn led to her transformation.
** In this fic, poor Shining Armor remembers very little about what he did under Chrysalis' mind-control spell, so learning that he banned his little sister from his wedding is all the worse for him.
** In this fic, poor Shining Armor remembers very little about what he did under Chrysalis' mind-control spell, so learning that he banned his little sister from his wedding is all the worse for him.
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* Twilight's transformation into Dimmed Star is a big heartbreaker for everypony who loves her: her friends, Spike, Princess Cadance, Princess Celestia, the Cutie Mark Crusaders, her parents, and Shining Armor. Celestia, the Mane Five and Spike in particular blame themselves for it due to the fact that their act of leaving Twilight alone at the wedding rehearsal led to Chrysalis imprisoning her in the crystal caves, which in turn led to her transformation.
** In this fic, poor Shining Armor remembersvery little barely anything about what he did under Chrysalis' mind-control spell, so learning that he banned his little sister from his wedding is all the worse for him.him.
** After Spike learns of what happened to Twilight and that she's locked up, he hyperventilates and passes out. He afterwards enters a HeroicBSOD, with a MadnessMantra included.
--->'''Spike''': It's all my fault, I never should have left her. I'm a bad friend, I'm a bad friend, I'm a bad friend…
** In this fic, poor Shining Armor remembers
** After Spike learns of what happened to Twilight and that she's locked up, he hyperventilates and passes out. He afterwards enters a HeroicBSOD, with a MadnessMantra included.
--->'''Spike''': It's all my fault, I never should have left her. I'm a bad friend, I'm a bad friend, I'm a bad friend…
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* When the Mane Five and Celestia express their guilt to Dimmed Star at the wedding hall, she's reduced into to wailing mess whom Shining Armor immediately embraces and tries to comfort. [[HopeSpot It looks like there could be reconciliations following]]… until [[DemonicPossession the Entity fills Dimmed Star's mind with her bad memories from the rehearsal]], causing her to use an Ink-serpent to throw her brother against a wall, leaving him heavily bleeding and comatose before he can even realize what's going on.on.
* Though she doesn't want to admit it, Dimmed Star feels lonely with the distance that has grown between herself and her loved ones. Unfortunately, she refuses to {{turn the other cheek}} like Twilight Sparkle would have done.
* Though she doesn't want to admit it, Dimmed Star feels lonely with the distance that has grown between herself and her loved ones. Unfortunately, she refuses to {{turn the other cheek}} like Twilight Sparkle would have done.
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** To Celestia, what happened to her student is like a repeat of her own little sister's stunt as Nightmare Moon. When Dimmed Star tells Celestia her new name, Celestia runs out of the dungeon all the while she's haunted by a memory of the corrupted Luna renaming herself as Nightmare Moon.
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** When Celestia goes to the Mane Five and Cutie Mark Crusaders quarters, she fully expects them to bombard her with accusations and insults for imprisoning Dimmed Star, and she believes she deserves it all.
--->'''Princess Celestia''': ''They have every right to hate me. I hate myself for much the same reason. I can't believe I let this happen. I can't believe I let this happen '''again'''… To a sister… and now to a dear friend… Oh Starswirl, what would you have done…''
* When the Mane Five and Celestia express their guilt to Dimmed Star at the wedding hall, she's reduced into wailing mess whom Shining Armor immediately embraces and tries to comfort. [[HopeSpot It looks like there could be reconciliations following]]… until [[DemonicPossession the Entity fills Dimmed Star's mind with her bad memories from the rehearsal]], causing her to use an Ink-serpent to throw her brother against a wall, leaving him heavily bleeding and comatose before he can even realize what's going on.
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* Twilight's transformation into Dimmed Star is a big heartbreaker for everypony who loves her: her friends, Spike, Princess Cadance, Princess Celestia, her parents, and Shining Armor. Celestia, the Mane Five and Spike in particular blame themselves for it due to the fact that their act of leaving Twilight alone at the wedding rehearsal led to Chrysalis imprisoning her in the crystal caves, which in turn led to her transformation.
** In this fic, poor Shining Armor remembers very little about what he did under Chrysalis' mind-control spell, so learning that he banned his little sister from his wedding is all the worse for him.
** To Celestia, what happened to her student is like a repeat of her own little sister's stunt as Nightmare Moon. When Dimmed Star tells Celestia her new name, Celestia runs out of the dungeon all the while she's haunted by a memory of the corrupted Luna renaming herself as Nightmare Moon.
** In this fic, poor Shining Armor remembers very little about what he did under Chrysalis' mind-control spell, so learning that he banned his little sister from his wedding is all the worse for him.
** To Celestia, what happened to her student is like a repeat of her own little sister's stunt as Nightmare Moon. When Dimmed Star tells Celestia her new name, Celestia runs out of the dungeon all the while she's haunted by a memory of the corrupted Luna renaming herself as Nightmare Moon.
