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** [[spoiler: Pages 2-4: Undine tries Team Forte, a musically-themed team, asking to join, but they refuse. Her timid "I'll just go" is heartbreaking.]]

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** [[spoiler: Pages 2-4: Undine tries Team Forte, a musically-themed team, asking to join, but they refuse. Her timid "I'll just go" is heartbreaking.]]]]
** [[spoiler: Page 8: Right when it seems everyone is on board with her joining, Team Blitz has to reject Undine too, because their leader, Pop Blitz/Steffi, has still trouble controlling her electricity powers and would shock Undine or others by accident.]]
** [[spoiler: Page 13: The mysterious girl reappears and teases Undine about her lack of team. "What a surprise. Nobody wants sloppy seconds."]]
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** [[spoiler: Page 1: aka the cover card for the chapter, Drifting. It has Undine with arms just hanging by her side while a black hand is reaching out for her from the back and several colourful arms try ti grab her from the front.]]

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** [[spoiler: Page 1: aka the cover card for the chapter, Drifting. It has Undine with arms just hanging by her side while a black hand is reaching out for her from the back and several colourful arms try ti to grab her from the front.]]
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** [[spoiler: Page 24: Tess blaming herself because, "if I was a good friend none of this would have happened."]]

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** [[spoiler: Page 24: Tess blaming herself because, "if I was a good friend none of this would have happened."]]"]]
* Chapter 5
** [[spoiler: Page 1: aka the cover card for the chapter, Drifting. It has Undine with arms just hanging by her side while a black hand is reaching out for her from the back and several colourful arms try ti grab her from the front.]]
** [[spoiler: Pages 2-4: Undine tries Team Forte, a musically-themed team, asking to join, but they refuse. Her timid "I'll just go" is heartbreaking.]]
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*** [[spoiler: The bit about their powers not being for forever bears repeating. Imagine you're used to having them and find them kinda cool despite all the dangers, and somehow manage to survive night after night with your friends. Then one day, they are gone. You've lost a skillset you relied on, you lost the way you were used to thinking as the one to be useful with to the city, and now you've no choice but to wait at night knowing others are out there risking their lives just like you were before and there is nothing you can do to help them.]]

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*** [[spoiler: The bit about their powers not being for forever bears repeating. Imagine you're used to having them and find them kinda cool despite all the dangers, and somehow manage to survive night after night with your friends. Then one day, they are gone. You've lost a skillset you relied on, you lost the way you were used to thinking as the one to be useful with to the city, and now you've no choice but to wait at night knowing others are out there risking their lives just like you were before and there is nothing you can do to help them.]]]]
** [[spoiler: Page 24: Tess blaming herself because, "if I was a good friend none of this would have happened."]]

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** [[spoiler: Pages 22-24: Tess comes by to clean her locker, and says things wouldn't be the same with her around and she herself has changed... then asks that if Undine really IS hell-bent on still fighting, she should search for a new team, saying "I wouldn't be able to sleep if I knew you were out there alone." Undine apologizes, and Tess tells her not to blame herself: as it turns out, their powers all leave one day anyways. Tess even cries when Undine promises her to ask around at the teams.]]

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** [[spoiler: Pages 22-24: Tess comes by to clean her locker, and says things wouldn't be the same with her around and she herself has changed... then asks that if Undine really IS hell-bent on still fighting, she should search for a new team, saying "I wouldn't be able to sleep if I knew you were out there alone." Undine apologizes, and Tess tells her not to blame herself: as it turns out, their powers all leave one day anyways. Tess even cries when Undine promises her to ask around at the teams.]]
*** [[spoiler: The bit about their powers not being for forever bears repeating. Imagine you're used to having them and find them kinda cool despite all the dangers, and somehow manage to survive night after night with your friends. Then one day, they are gone. You've lost a skillset you relied on, you lost the way you were used to thinking as the one to be useful with to the city, and now you've no choice but to wait at night knowing others are out there risking their lives just like you were before and there is nothing you can do to help them.
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** [[spoiler: Page 22: Tess comes by to clean her locker, and says things wouldn't be the same with her around and she herself has changed.]]

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** [[spoiler: Page 22: Pages 22-24: Tess comes by to clean her locker, and says things wouldn't be the same with her around and she herself has changed.changed... then asks that if Undine really IS hell-bent on still fighting, she should search for a new team, saying "I wouldn't be able to sleep if I knew you were out there alone." Undine apologizes, and Tess tells her not to blame herself: as it turns out, their powers all leave one day anyways. Tess even cries when Undine promises her to ask around at the teams.]]
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** [[spoiler: Page 22: Tess comes by to clean his locker, and says things wouldn't be the same with her around and she herself has changed.]]

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** [[spoiler: Page 22: Tess comes by to clean his her locker, and says things wouldn't be the same with her around and she herself has changed.]]
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** [[spoiler: Page 18: HP admits fighting alone is scary but says there's things that she would find much more scary.]]

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** [[spoiler: Page 18: HP admits fighting alone is scary but says there's things that she would find much more scary.]]
** [[spoiler: Page 22: Tess comes by to clean his locker, and says things wouldn't be the same with her around and she herself has changed.
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** [[spoiler: Page 16: Undine is feeling guilty about trying to move on and not moping all the time.]]

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** [[spoiler: Page 16: Undine is feeling guilty about trying to move on and not moping all the time.]]
** [[spoiler: Page 18: HP admits fighting alone is scary but says there's things that she would find much more scary.
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** [[spoiler: Page 7 and Page 8: HP finally finds out what happened to Team Alchemical and fears Undine hates her for being InnocentlyInsensitive.]]

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** [[spoiler: Page 7 and Page 8: HP finally finds out what happened to Team Alchemical and fears Undine hates her for being InnocentlyInsensitive.]]
** [[spoiler: Pages 9-12: Zoe being harassed for not going to the nightly patrols but going to Future's Hope and feeling it justified. Undine tries to be supportive and says she, Undine, fights because she would regret ''not'' fighting more.]]
** [[spoiler: Page 15: Undine is eating outside because the others have been avoiding sitting near her.]]
** [[spoiler: Page 16: Undine is feeling guilty about trying to move on and not moping all the time.
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** [[spoiler: Page 6: Undine to herself in the mirror: "You are okay." The AltText describes it as a daily ritual.

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** [[spoiler: Page 6: Undine to herself in the mirror: "You are okay." The AltText describes it as a daily ritual.]]
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** [[spoiler: Page 26: Heartful Punch has no idea what happened to Team Alchemical and Undine would "rather not talk about it". The AltText implies Undine also considers it better not to tell ("You can't punch the news, so...")]]

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** [[spoiler: Page 26: Heartful Punch has no idea what happened to Team Alchemical and Undine would "rather not talk about it". The AltText implies Undine also considers it better not to tell ("You can't punch the news, so...")]]")]]
* The third interstitial has a tiny bit in the left bottom corner scribbled on a paper: "I miss you, Ellie."
** Whoever wrote that journal, they have to keep moving as each day describes a different room.
* Chapter 4
** [[spoiler: Page 4: Heartful Punch lives in a boarding house. This would be innocent usually but with the fact that the city is barriered off and nobody from the outside ever comes or could come in, this practically makes the Future's Hope Boarding House an orphanage for magical girls.]]
** [[spoiler: Page 6: Undine to herself in the mirror: "You are okay." The AltText describes it as a daily ritual.
*** [[spoiler: The mirror has the team picture we saw before as the cover for chapter 2.]]
** [[spoiler: Page 7 and Page 8: HP finally finds out what happened to Team Alchemical and fears Undine hates her for being InnocentlyInsensitive.]]
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** [[spoiler: Page 26: Heartful Punch has no idea what happened to Team Alchemical and Undine would "rather not talk about it".]]

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** [[spoiler: Page 26: Heartful Punch has no idea what happened to Team Alchemical and Undine would "rather not talk about it".]] The AltText implies Undine also considers it better not to tell ("You can't punch the news, so...")]]
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** [[spoiler: Page 20: Undine blaming herself for everything, as evidenced by her sentence "We always relied on Tessa to finish off ones like this. But now she can't... because of me.".]]

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** [[spoiler: Page 20: Undine blaming herself for everything, as evidenced by her sentence "We always relied on Tessa to finish off ones like this. But now she can't... because of me.".]]
** [[spoiler: Page 26: Heartful Punch has no idea what happened to Team Alchemical and Undine would "rather not talk about it".
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** [[spoiler: Page 16: The fashback goes on to show the three dead girls. It is also implied Undine forgot something very important about the whole incident.]]

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** [[spoiler: Page 16: The fashback goes on to show the three dead girls. It is also implied Undine forgot something very important about the whole incident.]]
** [[spoiler: Page 20: Undine blaming herself for everything, as evidenced by her sentence "We always relied on Tessa to finish off ones like this. But now she can't... because of me.".
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** [[spoiler: Page 16: Undine getting flashbacks when revisiting the site of the tragedy for answers. It is implied she forgot something very important about the whole incident.]]

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** [[spoiler: Page 16: 15: Undine getting flashbacks to the last moments of Gwen, Sylvia and Sally when revisiting the site of the tragedy for answers. answers.]]
** [[spoiler: Page 16: The fashback goes on to show the three dead girls.
It is also implied she Undine forgot something very important about the whole incident.]]
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** [[spoiler:The last words are not at all encouraging: "On that night, before any of us knew what was happening, our team went from five members to one."]]

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** [[spoiler:The **[[spoiler:The last words are not at all encouraging: "On that night, before any of us knew what was happening, our team went from five members to one."]]



*** [[spoiler:Tessa, BroughtDownToNormal with her old brown hair, is sitting numbly in a hospital bed. The look on her face is heartrending.]]

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%%* In the second chapter, we have a series of these, all worse than before.
%%** [[spoiler: First, Sally is (for the upteenth time) fed up with Tessa being The Leader: she says that if only Tessa gave them a chance, they could do the job too, and that Tessa is showing off and looking down on them. To answer that, Tessa says she will sit out this patrol, and when Sally calls this "running away", Tessa clarifies: if they want a chance to prove themselves, then here it is.]]
%%** [[spoiler: All the while, Undine tries to keep the group together, but fails, this being stressed by a picture of the girls from before their MagicalGirl times (and the title of the chapter being "The team"), with all of them smiling.]]
%%** [[spoiler: Come evening, Undine calls Tessa to make sure she didn't change her mind and to say not to pay attention to Sally and Sylvia, but Tessa, being mature, says it's a win-win: if they do well, they will gain confidence, if they don't, they will see they need Tessa.]]
%%** [[spoiler: The girls are in for more than they bargained for: they dispatch some weaker enemies, but note there is a lot of them, and that means [[EliteMook there is a leader]]: sure enough, they meet an extra-strong one.]]
%%** [[spoiler: By the time Tessa, who decided to check on them, finds the girls, three of them are laying very limp and bloody in their normal clothes, and after Tessa defeats the EliteMook, Undine confirms the worst: they are already dead and Undine is dying too- she only hung in there this far because of her water powers.]]
%%** [[spoiler: She tries to encourage a tearful Tessa with her last words, saying that the city needs Tess, but Tessa is having none of it, and says any one of the other four girls deserves to live more than she does.]]
%%** [[spoiler: Tessa does her best to heal Undine or even revive the others as well.]]
%%** [[spoiler: The chapter ends without us seeing the results, apart from seeing Tessa's hair turn from pink to the original colour it had: brown. The last words are not at all encouraging: "On that night, before any of us knew what was happening, our team went from five members to one."]]
%%** [[spoiler: Tessa's shocked expression when she discovers most of her team bleeding and dead in their normal clothes, with Undine hanging on for dear life. It gets worse with the realization that if Tessa had listened to Undine about paying Sally and Sylvia no mind, and had accompanied her team on their nightly patrol, Tessa could've prevented this from happening.]]
%%** [[spoiler: Sylvia left two younger siblings behind.]]
%%* Chapter 3
%%** [[spoiler: Page one: A news broadcast confirms the fact that Gwen, Sylvia and Sally are indeed dead, and Tessa, BroughtDownToNormal with her old brown hair, is sitting numbly in a hospital bed. The look on her face is heartrending.]]
%%** [[spoiler: Page two: Downplayed compared to everything else but the colour of Tessa's speech bubble text went from reddish-pink to plain black to further signal she is no longer a magical girl.]]
%%** [[spoiler: Page three: Undine describing the funeral thus: "Everyone said a lot of nice things... though there was also a lot of placating nonsense. (...) Though, to be fair... I didn't actually hear most of it.", with the last panel of the page showing Undine at the funeral being surrounded by the dead and bloody Sally, Gwen and Sylvia, with Sylvia and Gwen roughly standing where Undine's probable parents were.]]
%%** [[spoiler: Page four: The title page of the chapter, named "Sinking", shows Undine standing with her head underwater.]]
%%** [[spoiler: Page five: Turns out not only did Sylvia have two yonger siblings (a brother and a sister), as shown when the girls were passing the time before their last patrol; [[HiddenDepths she was also the sole breadwinner of the family]], and now that she died, her mother will have to go back to work eventually, even though Sylvia saved up most of her earnings.]]
%%** [[spoiler: Page six: Tessa is going back to a normal school, but Undine is not, because she says she still wants to fight even though she's alone.]]
%%** [[spoiler: Page seven: Tessa, after the three deaths, calls Undine wanting to keep on fighting suicidal, and though Undine claims to have her reasons, Tessa says she cannot accept that. Undine's answer? "Well, then... Thankfully, it's my decision to make. It's probably about time I made one for myself.", implying that even though she was supportive towards Tessa and defended her at the start of chapter 2, she wants to be free of her orders. She even says this as she is standing up and turning to leave.]]

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%%* * In the second chapter, we have a series of these, all worse than before.
%%** ** [[spoiler: First, Sally First is (for the upteenth time) fed up with fight about Tessa being The Leader: she says that if only Tessa gave them as a chance, they could do the job too, and that Tessa is showing off and looking down on them. To answer that, Tessa says she will sit out this patrol, and when Sally calls this "running away", Tessa clarifies: if they want a chance to prove themselves, then here it is.leader, which has happened before.]]
%%** ** [[spoiler: All the while, Undine tries to keep the group together, but fails, this being stressed by a picture of the girls from before their MagicalGirl times (and the title of the chapter being "The team"), with all of them smiling.Tessa staying at home.]]
%%** ** [[spoiler: Come evening, Undine calls Tessa tries to make sure she didn't change her mind and to say not to pay attention to Sally and Sylvia, keep the group together, but Tessa, fails, this being mature, says it's stressed by a win-win: if they do well, they will gain confidence, if they don't, they will see they need Tessa.picture of the girls from before their MagicalGirl times (and the title of the chapter being "The team"), with all of them smiling.]]
%%** ** [[spoiler: The girls are in for more than Come evening, Undine calls Tessa to make sure she didn't change her mind and to say not to pay attention to Sally and Sylvia, but Tessa, being mature, says it's a win-win: if they bargained for: do well, they dispatch some weaker enemies, but note there is a lot of them, and that means [[EliteMook there is a leader]]: sure enough, will gain confidence, if they meet an extra-strong one.don't, they will see they need Tessa.]]
%%** ** [[spoiler: By the time Tessa, who decided to check on them, finds the girls, three of them are laying very limp and bloody in their normal clothes, and after Tessa defeats the EliteMook, Undine confirms the worst: they are already dead and Undine is dying too- she only hung in there this far because of her water powers.]]
%%** ** [[spoiler: She tries to encourage a tearful Tessa with her last words, saying that the city needs Tess, but Tessa is having none of it, and says any one of the other four girls deserves to live more than she does.]]
%%** [[spoiler: Tessa does her best to heal Undine or even revive the others as well.]]
%%**
** [[spoiler: The chapter ends without us seeing the results, results of Tessa trying to heal Undine, apart from seeing Tessa's hair turn from pink to the original colour it had: brown. The brown.]]
**[[spoiler:The
last words are not at all encouraging: "On that night, before any of us knew what was happening, our team went from five members to one."]]
%%** ** [[spoiler: Tessa's shocked expression when she discovers most of her team bleeding and dead in their normal clothes, with Undine hanging on for dear life. It gets worse with the realization that if Tessa had listened to Undine about paying Sally and Sylvia no mind, and had accompanied her team on their nightly patrol, Tessa could've prevented this from happening.]]
%%** ** [[spoiler: Sylvia left two younger siblings behind.]]
%%* * Chapter 3
%%** ** [[spoiler: Page one: A news broadcast confirms the fact that Gwen, Sylvia and Sally are indeed dead, and Tessa, dead.]]
***[[spoiler:Tessa,
BroughtDownToNormal with her old brown hair, is sitting numbly in a hospital bed. The look on her face is heartrending.]]
%%** ** [[spoiler: Page two: Downplayed compared to everything else but the colour of Tessa's speech bubble text went from reddish-pink to plain black to further signal she is no longer a magical girl.]]
%%** ** [[spoiler: Page three: Undine describing the funeral thus: funeral: "Everyone said a lot of nice things... though there was also a lot of placating nonsense. (...) Though, to be fair... I didn't actually hear most of it.", with the "]]
*** [[spoiler: The
last panel of the page showing shows Undine at the funeral being surrounded by the dead and bloody Sally, Gwen and Sylvia, with Sylvia and Gwen roughly standing where Undine's probable parents were.]]
%%** ** [[spoiler: Page four: The title page of the chapter, named "Sinking", shows Undine standing with her head underwater.]]
%%** ** [[spoiler: Page five: Turns out not only did Sylvia have two yonger siblings (a brother and a sister), as shown when the girls were passing the time before their last patrol; [[HiddenDepths she was also the sole breadwinner of the family]], and now that she died, her mother will have to go back to work eventually, even though Sylvia saved up most of her earnings.]]
%%** ** [[spoiler: Page six: Tessa is going back to a normal school, but Undine is not, because she says she still wants to fight even though she's alone.]]
%%** ** [[spoiler: Page seven: Tessa, after the three deaths, calls Undine wanting to keep on fighting suicidal, and though Undine claims to have her reasons, Tessa says she cannot accept that. that.]]
*** [[spoiler:
Undine's answer? "Well, then... Thankfully, it's my decision to make. It's probably about time I made one for myself.", implying that even though she was supportive towards Tessa and defended her at the start of chapter 2, she wants to be free of her orders. She even says this as she is standing up and turning to leave.]]
** [[spoiler: Page 16: Undine getting flashbacks when revisiting the site of the tragedy for answers. It is implied she forgot something very important about the whole incident.
]]
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This should NOT read like a plot recap. Commenting it all out until someone can fix it.


* In the second chapter, we have a series of these, all worse than before.
** [[spoiler: First, Sally is (for the upteenth time) fed up with Tessa being The Leader: she says that if only Tessa gave them a chance, they could do the job too, and that Tessa is showing off and looking down on them. To answer that, Tessa says she will sit out this patrol, and when Sally calls this "running away", Tessa clarifies: if they want a chance to prove themselves, then here it is.]]
** [[spoiler: All the while, Undine tries to keep the group together, but fails, this being stressed by a picture of the girls from before their MagicalGirl times (and the title of the chapter being "The team"), with all of them smiling.]]
** [[spoiler: Come evening, Undine calls Tessa to make sure she didn't change her mind and to say not to pay attention to Sally and Sylvia, but Tessa, being mature, says it's a win-win: if they do well, they will gain confidence, if they don't, they will see they need Tessa.]]
** [[spoiler: The girls are in for more than they bargained for: they dispatch some weaker enemies, but note there is a lot of them, and that means [[EliteMook there is a leader]]: sure enough, they meet an extra-strong one.]]
** [[spoiler: By the time Tessa, who decided to check on them, finds the girls, three of them are laying very limp and bloody in their normal clothes, and after Tessa defeats the EliteMook, Undine confirms the worst: they are already dead and Undine is dying too- she only hung in there this far because of her water powers.]]
** [[spoiler: She tries to encourage a tearful Tessa with her last words, saying that the city needs Tess, but Tessa is having none of it, and says any one of the other four girls deserves to live more than she does.]]
** [[spoiler: Tessa does her best to heal Undine or even revive the others as well.]]
** [[spoiler: The chapter ends without us seeing the results, apart from seeing Tessa's hair turn from pink to the original colour it had: brown. The last words are not at all encouraging: "On that night, before any of us knew what was happening, our team went from five members to one."]]
** [[spoiler: Tessa's shocked expression when she discovers most of her team bleeding and dead in their normal clothes, with Undine hanging on for dear life. It gets worse with the realization that if Tessa had listened to Undine about paying Sally and Sylvia no mind, and had accompanied her team on their nightly patrol, Tessa could've prevented this from happening.]]
** [[spoiler: Sylvia left two younger siblings behind.]]
* Chapter 3
** [[spoiler: Page one: A news broadcast confirms the fact that Gwen, Sylvia and Sally are indeed dead, and Tessa, BroughtDownToNormal with her old brown hair, is sitting numbly in a hospital bed. The look on her face is heartrending.]]
** [[spoiler: Page two: Downplayed compared to everything else but the colour of Tessa's speech bubble text went from reddish-pink to plain black to further signal she is no longer a magical girl.]]
** [[spoiler: Page three: Undine describing the funeral thus: "Everyone said a lot of nice things... though there was also a lot of placating nonsense. (...) Though, to be fair... I didn't actually hear most of it.", with the last panel of the page showing Undine at the funeral being surrounded by the dead and bloody Sally, Gwen and Sylvia, with Sylvia and Gwen roughly standing where Undine's probable parents were.]]
** [[spoiler: Page four: The title page of the chapter, named "Sinking", shows Undine standing with her head underwater.]]
** [[spoiler: Page five: Turns out not only did Sylvia have two yonger siblings (a brother and a sister), as shown when the girls were passing the time before their last patrol; [[HiddenDepths she was also the sole breadwinner of the family]], and now that she died, her mother will have to go back to work eventually, even though Sylvia saved up most of her earnings.]]
** [[spoiler: Page six: Tessa is going back to a normal school, but Undine is not, because she says she still wants to fight even though she's alone.]]
** [[spoiler: Page seven: Tessa, after the three deaths, calls Undine wanting to keep on fighting suicidal, and though Undine claims to have her reasons, Tessa says she cannot accept that. Undine's answer? "Well, then... Thankfully, it's my decision to make. It's probably about time I made one for myself.", implying that even though she was supportive towards Tessa and defended her at the start of chapter 2, she wants to be free of her orders. She even says this as she is standing up and turning to leave.]]

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* %%* In the second chapter, we have a series of these, all worse than before.
** %%** [[spoiler: First, Sally is (for the upteenth time) fed up with Tessa being The Leader: she says that if only Tessa gave them a chance, they could do the job too, and that Tessa is showing off and looking down on them. To answer that, Tessa says she will sit out this patrol, and when Sally calls this "running away", Tessa clarifies: if they want a chance to prove themselves, then here it is.]]
** %%** [[spoiler: All the while, Undine tries to keep the group together, but fails, this being stressed by a picture of the girls from before their MagicalGirl times (and the title of the chapter being "The team"), with all of them smiling.]]
** %%** [[spoiler: Come evening, Undine calls Tessa to make sure she didn't change her mind and to say not to pay attention to Sally and Sylvia, but Tessa, being mature, says it's a win-win: if they do well, they will gain confidence, if they don't, they will see they need Tessa.]]
** %%** [[spoiler: The girls are in for more than they bargained for: they dispatch some weaker enemies, but note there is a lot of them, and that means [[EliteMook there is a leader]]: sure enough, they meet an extra-strong one.]]
** %%** [[spoiler: By the time Tessa, who decided to check on them, finds the girls, three of them are laying very limp and bloody in their normal clothes, and after Tessa defeats the EliteMook, Undine confirms the worst: they are already dead and Undine is dying too- she only hung in there this far because of her water powers.]]
** %%** [[spoiler: She tries to encourage a tearful Tessa with her last words, saying that the city needs Tess, but Tessa is having none of it, and says any one of the other four girls deserves to live more than she does.]]
** %%** [[spoiler: Tessa does her best to heal Undine or even revive the others as well.]]
** %%** [[spoiler: The chapter ends without us seeing the results, apart from seeing Tessa's hair turn from pink to the original colour it had: brown. The last words are not at all encouraging: "On that night, before any of us knew what was happening, our team went from five members to one."]]
** %%** [[spoiler: Tessa's shocked expression when she discovers most of her team bleeding and dead in their normal clothes, with Undine hanging on for dear life. It gets worse with the realization that if Tessa had listened to Undine about paying Sally and Sylvia no mind, and had accompanied her team on their nightly patrol, Tessa could've prevented this from happening.]]
** %%** [[spoiler: Sylvia left two younger siblings behind.]]
* %%* Chapter 3
** %%** [[spoiler: Page one: A news broadcast confirms the fact that Gwen, Sylvia and Sally are indeed dead, and Tessa, BroughtDownToNormal with her old brown hair, is sitting numbly in a hospital bed. The look on her face is heartrending.]]
** %%** [[spoiler: Page two: Downplayed compared to everything else but the colour of Tessa's speech bubble text went from reddish-pink to plain black to further signal she is no longer a magical girl.]]
** %%** [[spoiler: Page three: Undine describing the funeral thus: "Everyone said a lot of nice things... though there was also a lot of placating nonsense. (...) Though, to be fair... I didn't actually hear most of it.", with the last panel of the page showing Undine at the funeral being surrounded by the dead and bloody Sally, Gwen and Sylvia, with Sylvia and Gwen roughly standing where Undine's probable parents were.]]
** %%** [[spoiler: Page four: The title page of the chapter, named "Sinking", shows Undine standing with her head underwater.]]
** %%** [[spoiler: Page five: Turns out not only did Sylvia have two yonger siblings (a brother and a sister), as shown when the girls were passing the time before their last patrol; [[HiddenDepths she was also the sole breadwinner of the family]], and now that she died, her mother will have to go back to work eventually, even though Sylvia saved up most of her earnings.]]
** %%** [[spoiler: Page six: Tessa is going back to a normal school, but Undine is not, because she says she still wants to fight even though she's alone.]]
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** [[spoiler: Page seven: Tessa, after the three deaths, calls Undine wanting to keep on fighting suicidal, and though Undine claims to have her reasons, Tessa says she cannot accept that. Undine's answer? "Well, then... Thankfully, it's my decision to make. It's probably about time I made one for myself.", implying that even though she was supportive towards Tessa and defended her at the start of chapter 2, she wants to be free of her orders.]]

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** [[spoiler: Page seven: Tessa, after the three deaths, calls Undine wanting to keep on fighting suicidal, and though Undine claims to have her reasons, Tessa says she cannot accept that. Undine's answer? "Well, then... Thankfully, it's my decision to make. It's probably about time I made one for myself.", implying that even though she was supportive towards Tessa and defended her at the start of chapter 2, she wants to be free of her orders. She even says this as she is standing up and turning to leave.]]
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** [[spoiler: Page six: Tessa is going back to a normal school, but Undine is not, because she says she still wants to fight even though she's alone.]]
** [[spoiler: Page seven: Tessa, after the three deaths, calls Undine wanting to keep on fighting suicidal, and though Undine claims to have her reasons, Tessa says she cannot accept that. Undine's answer? "Well, then... Thankfully, it's my decision to make. It's probably about time I made one for myself.", implying that even though she was supportive towards Tessa and defended her at the start of chapter 2, she wants to be free of her orders.
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** [[spoiler: Page five: Turns out not only did Sylvia have two yonger siblings (a brother and a sister), as shown when the girls were passing the time before their last patrol; [[HiddenDepths she was also the sole breadwinner of the family]], and now that she died, her mother will have to go back to work eventually, even though Sylvia saved up most of her earnings.]]
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** [[spoiler: Sylvia left two younger siblings behind.]]
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** [[spoiler: Page three: Undine describing the funeral thus: "Everyone said a lot of nice things... though there was also a lot of placating nonsense. (...) Though, to be fair... I didn't actually hear most of it.", with the last panel of the page showing Undine at the funeral being surrounded by the dead and bloody Sally, Gwen and Sylvia, with Sylvia and Gwen roughly standing where Undine's probable parents were.]]
** [[spoiler: Page four: The title page of the chapter, named "Sinking", shows Undine standing with her head underwater.]]
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* The first page of the interstitial details how nobody is even sure if there is anything outside of their town anymore, and that the protective field that only lets the monsters in at night is as good for keeping people in as danger out, basically giving an underlying Tear Jerker vibe to the lives of the whole city.

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* The first page of the interstitial details how nobody is even sure if there is anything outside of their town anymore, and that the protective field that only lets the monsters in at night is as good for keeping people in as danger out, basically giving an underlying Tear Jerker TearJerker vibe to the lives of the whole city.



** [[spoiler: All the while, Undine tries to keep the group together, but fails, this being stressed by a picture of the girls from before their Magical Girl times, with all of them smiling.]]

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** [[spoiler: All the while, Undine tries to keep the group together, but fails, this being stressed by a picture of the girls from before their Magical Girl times, MagicalGirl times (and the title of the chapter being "The team"), with all of them smiling.]]



** [[spoiler: She tries to encourage a tearful Tessa with her last words, but Tessa is having none of it, and says any one of the other four girls deserves to live more than she does.]]

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** [[spoiler: Page three: Undine describing the funeral thus: "Everyone said a lot of nice things... though there was also a lot of placating nonsense. (...) Though, to be fair... I didn't actually hear most of it.", with the last panel of the page showing Undine at the funeral being surrounded by the dead and bloody Sally, Gwen and Sylvia.]]

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** [[spoiler: Page three: Undine describing the funeral thus: "Everyone said a lot of nice things... though there was also a lot of placating nonsense. (...) Though, to be fair... I didn't actually hear most of it.", with the last panel of the page showing Undine at the funeral being surrounded by the dead and bloody Sally, Gwen and Sylvia.Sylvia, with Sylvia and Gwen roughly standing where Undine's probable parents were.]]
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** [[spoiler: Page one: A news broadcast confirms the fact that Gwen, Sylvia and Sally are indeed dead, and Tessa, BroughtDownToNormal with her old brown hair, is sitting numbly in a hospital bed. The look on her face is heartrending.]]

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** [[spoiler: Page one: A news broadcast confirms the fact that Gwen, Sylvia and Sally are indeed dead, and Tessa, BroughtDownToNormal with her old brown hair, is sitting numbly in a hospital bed. The look on her face is heartrending.]]
** [[spoiler: Page three: Undine describing the funeral thus: "Everyone said a lot of nice things... though there was also a lot of placating nonsense. (...) Though, to be fair... I didn't actually hear most of it.", with the last panel of the page showing Undine at the funeral being surrounded by the dead and bloody Sally, Gwen and Sylvia.
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** [[spoiler: The chapter ends without us seeing the results, apart from seeing Tessa's hair turn from pink to the original colour it had: brown. The last words are not at all encouraging: "On that night, before any of us knew what was happening, our team went from five members to one."

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** [[spoiler: The chapter ends without us seeing the results, apart from seeing Tessa's hair turn from pink to the original colour it had: brown. The last words are not at all encouraging: "On that night, before any of us knew what was happening, our team went from five members to one.""]]
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* The first page of the interstitial details how nobody is even sure if there is anything outside of their town anymore, and that the protective field that only lets the monsters in at night is as good for keeping people in as danger out, basically giving an underlying Tear Jerker vibe to the lives of the whole city.
* In the second chapter, we have a series of these, all worse than before.
** [[spoiler: First, Sally is (for the upteenth time) fed up with Tessa being The Leader: she says that if only Tessa gave them a chance, they could do the job too, and that Tessa is showing off and looking down on them. To answer that, Tessa says she will sit out this patrol, and when Sally calls this "running away", Tessa clarifies: if they want a chance to prove themselves, then here it is.]]
** [[spoiler: All the while, Undine tries to keep the group together, but fails, this being stressed by a picture of the girls from before their Magical Girl times, with all of them smiling.]]
** [[spoiler: Come evening, Undine calls Tessa to make sure she didn't change her mind and to say not to pay attention to Sally and Sylvia, but Tessa, being mature, says it's a win-win: if they do well, they will gain confidence, if they don't, they will see they need Tessa.]]
** [[spoiler: The girls are in for more than they bargained for: they dispatch some weaker enemies, but note there is a lot of them, and that means [[EliteMook there is a leader]]: sure enough, they meet an extra-strong one.]]
** [[spoiler: By the time Tessa, who decided to check on them, finds the girls, three of them are laying very limp and bloody in their normal clothes, and after Tessa defeats the EliteMook, Undine confirms the worst: they are already dead and Undine is dying too- she only hung in there this far because of her water powers.]]
** [[spoiler: She tries to encourage a tearful Tessa with her last words, but Tessa is having none of it, and says any one of the other four girls deserves to live more than she does.]]
** [[spoiler: Tessa does her best to heal Undine or even revive the others as well.]]
** [[spoiler: The chapter ends without us seeing the results, apart from seeing Tessa's hair turn from pink to the original colour it had: brown. The last words are not at all encouraging: "On that night, before any of us knew what was happening, our team went from five members to one."
** [[spoiler: Tessa's shocked expression when she discovers most of her team bleeding and dead in their normal clothes, with Undine hanging on for dear life. It gets worse with the realization that if Tessa had listened to Undine about paying Sally and Sylvia no mind, and had accompanied her team on their nightly patrol, Tessa could've prevented this from happening.]]
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** [[spoiler: Page one: A news broadcast confirms the fact that Gwen, Sylvia and Sally are indeed dead, and Tessa, BroughtDownToNormal with her old brown hair, is sitting numbly in a hospital bed. The look on her face is heartrending.]]

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