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* LongingLooks: Ellie gives Riley stolen looks while they are riding the carousel.
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* LongingLooks: LongingLook: Ellie gives Riley stolen looks while they are riding the carousel.
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* LifeWillKillYou: Captain Kwong list three ways a FEDRA enlisted soldier could die. Dying in a Firefly attack is a possibility but so are death through AlcoholInducedIdiocy (falling off a roof drunk) and accident (getting caught in the tracks of a tank).
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* LifeWillKillYou: Captain Kwong list lists three ways a FEDRA enlisted soldier could die. Dying in a Firefly attack is a possibility but so are death through AlcoholInducedIdiocy (falling off a roof drunk) and accident (getting caught in the tracks of a tank).tank).
* LongingLooks: Ellie gives Riley stolen looks while they are riding the carousel.
* LongingLooks: Ellie gives Riley stolen looks while they are riding the carousel.
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* ReasonableAuthorityFigure: Kwong is largely understanding and encouraging to Ellie, hinting that he thinks people like Bethany are awful and that he wants her to succeed.
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* ReasonableAuthorityFigure: Kwong is largely understanding and encouraging to Ellie, hinting that he thinks people like Bethany are awful and that he wants her to succeed. He also admits to Ellie that he knows punishing her hasn't worked in the past, so he instead tries the tactic of being more open with her about her future options.
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moving this characterization trope to Ellie's character sheet
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* BornAfterTheEnd: Ellie was born in 2009, six years after the outbreak began. As a result, her attitude is largely one of TheWorldIsJustAwesome when Riley takes her to the mall, being incredibly amused by mundane things like escalators, Merry-Go-Rounds, and photo booths. And when the punchline of a pun involves computers and screenshots, neither Ellie nor Riley understand what that means.
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* MundaneObjectAmazement: Having never seen a working escalator before, Ellie expresses her joy and amusement as she runs up and down the escalator and slides along the moving railing.
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* MundaneObjectAmazement: Having [[BornAfterTheEnd never seen a working escalator before, before]], Ellie expresses her joy and amusement as she runs up and down the escalator and slides along the moving railing.
