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* The simple premise can bring you chills once you think about it: A VR sim date game based on the Loud family is bad enough, but to have the Loud sisters-and Lincoln-play it and then [[spoiler: show differences in behavior]]? It's not a nice thought.
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* The simple premise can bring you chills once you think about it: A VR sim date game based on the Loud family is bad enough, but to have the Loud sisters-and Lincoln-play kids play it and then [[spoiler: show differences in behavior]]? It's not a nice thought.
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* Speaking of her, [[spoiler: Cristina]] is officially the dreaded to ALL of the sisters. Not SOME of them, [[OhCrap ALL of them]].
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* Speaking of her, [[spoiler: Cristina]] is officially the dreaded TheDreaded to ALL of the sisters. Not SOME of them, [[OhCrap ALL of them]].
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** It becomes MAGNITUDES worse when you realize what this could be a reference to. [[spoiler: Did Cristina, an eleven year old girl, play BIOSHOCK?!]]
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* Lynn gets a scare when she's called by a mysterious voice, who asks her if she'd be angry if her brother's [[spoiler: virginity]] and innocence were taken away from him. When she answers she would, the voice promptly asks "[[spoiler: Then why would you rape your own brother?]]" with '''[[spoiler: Cristina]]''''s voice.
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* Lynn gets a scare when she's called by a mysterious voice, who asks her if she'd be angry if her brother's [[spoiler: virginity]] and innocence were taken away from him. When she answers she would, the voice promptly asks "[[spoiler: Then "[[spoiler:Then why would you rape your own brother?]]" with '''[[spoiler: Cristina]]''''s voice.
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* Lori, stuck in an abandoned warehouse, hears as a voice (maybe [[spoiler: Cristina]]) tells her a story:
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* Lori, stuck in an abandoned warehouse, hears listens as a voice (maybe [[spoiler: Cristina]]) tells her a story:
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* Lori finds herself bounded and gagged in the middle of an underground warehouse. Soon enough, she meets [[spoiler: Bobby, Carol, and Cristina]], who promptly torture her by showing her "[[spoiler: the truth]]".
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* Lori finds herself bounded and gagged in the middle of an underground warehouse. Soon enough, she meets [[spoiler: Bobby, Carol, and Cristina]], who promptly torture her by showing her "[[spoiler: the "[[spoiler:the truth]]".
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* '''Lincoln made [[spoiler: CRISTINA]] angry'''. And going by Ronnie's words, she'll stop at ''nothing'' until she gets her revenge.
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* '''Lincoln Lincoln made [[spoiler: CRISTINA]] angry'''.'''CRISTINA''']] angry. And going by Ronnie's words, she'll stop at ''nothing'' until she gets her revenge.
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* Lynn tries to go upstairs, but sees a ''battered Lana'' at the top. Who then gives her a smile ''filled with [[TheToothHurts broken teeth]]''. The revelation that [[spoiler: she's just Carol shapeshifting as her]] doesn't help.
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* Lynn tries to go upstairs, but sees a ''battered Lana'' at the top. Who top... who then gives her a smile ''filled with [[TheToothHurts broken teeth]]''. The revelation that [[spoiler: she's just Carol shapeshifting as her]] doesn't help.
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** First, Lana figures that Lynn has only been using her as a replacement Lucy. Even after Lana clarifies who she is, Lynn continues to call her Lucy, while making some unnerving advancements towards her.
** Then, she makes the mistake of hurting Lynn in this state. This makes the athlete be surrounded by pink electricity as she says she's about to play rough with Lana...
** Then, she makes the mistake of hurting Lynn in this state. This makes the athlete be surrounded by pink electricity as she says she's about to play rough with Lana...
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** First, Lana figures out that Lynn has only been using her as a replacement Lucy. Even after Lana clarifies who she is, Lynn continues to call her Lucy, while making some unnerving advancements towards her.
** Then, she makes the mistake of hurting Lynn in this state. Thismakes causes the athlete be to become surrounded by pink electricity as she says she's about to play rough with Lana...
** Then, she makes the mistake of hurting Lynn in this state. This
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** And if that wasn't enough, by the end of the fic, she's basically a [[ImAHumanitarian cannibalistic]] [[[[spoiler: OurGhoulsAreDifferent Ghoul]] who is bent on doing everything she can in order to [[spoiler: protect Lincoln]].
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** And if that wasn't enough, by the end of the fic, she's basically a [[ImAHumanitarian [[spoiler:[[ImAHumanitarian cannibalistic]] [[[[spoiler: OurGhoulsAreDifferent Ghoul]] [[OurGhoulsAreDifferent Ghoul]]]] who is bent on doing everything she can in order to [[spoiler: protect Lincoln]].
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