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* Any time the writing ends a list with "and stuff" (or any variation), continuing the trend of the author's utter lack of creativity and originality.
* Any time Mykan has to come up with original lyrics due to how, once again, they are severely lacking in creativity and ridiculous sounding.
* Any time Mykan has to come up with original lyrics due to how, once again, they are severely lacking in creativity and ridiculous sounding.
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** It also wouldn't be so laughable if he didn't have so many videos playing out how [[spoiler:the death scene in question]] should go down. We have references to ''Film/ThePhantomMenace'', ''Series/PowerRangersTimeForce'', and ''[[Film/SpiderManTrilogy the first Spider-Man movie]]'' all spelled out for us in case the viewers couldn't possibly make the connections. It also gets in the way of the scene, breaking up the flow just to tell us how the scene is going on instead of letting the viewers put the pieces together. In addition to that, [[spoiler:Twilight's death [[https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U9qHVOSF958 plays out like this]]]].
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** [[TheChewToy His treatment of her, though...]] [[DisproportionateRetribution not so much.]]
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** [[TheChewToy His treatment of her, though...]] [[DisproportionateRetribution not so much.]]]]
* In relation to the above, Mykan's most hated character of the lot is Princess Cadance. Why is this, you may ask? Because she's HappilyMarried, [[WesternAnimation/TeenTitans Beast Boy]] and [[Anime/DigimonAdventure02 Davis Motomiya]] didn't get with Terra and Kari respectively, and [[{{Wangst}} he made a personal vow never to fall in love even in his adult years because he's afraid of rejection]]. Somehow, Cadance having a husband goes against his entire worldview. And yet somehow, it's okay for Lightning Dawn and Starla Shine to have a relationship and eventually wed, and it's also perfectly fine for him to [[StrangledByTheRedString ship Rhymey with Fluttershy, Celesto with Celestia, Human!Artie Bristles with Sunset Shimmer, Spike with Rarity, and Buddy Rose with Tree Hugger]]. Just the sheer fact that he's willing to get on somepony's case for getting married when [[IResembleThatRemark he's just as guilty of the same thing]] is simply amusing.
** Once again, however, [[TheChewToy his treatment of her]] [[DisproportionateRetribution is nowhere near as funny]].
* In relation to the above, Mykan's most hated character of the lot is Princess Cadance. Why is this, you may ask? Because she's HappilyMarried, [[WesternAnimation/TeenTitans Beast Boy]] and [[Anime/DigimonAdventure02 Davis Motomiya]] didn't get with Terra and Kari respectively, and [[{{Wangst}} he made a personal vow never to fall in love even in his adult years because he's afraid of rejection]]. Somehow, Cadance having a husband goes against his entire worldview. And yet somehow, it's okay for Lightning Dawn and Starla Shine to have a relationship and eventually wed, and it's also perfectly fine for him to [[StrangledByTheRedString ship Rhymey with Fluttershy, Celesto with Celestia, Human!Artie Bristles with Sunset Shimmer, Spike with Rarity, and Buddy Rose with Tree Hugger]]. Just the sheer fact that he's willing to get on somepony's case for getting married when [[IResembleThatRemark he's just as guilty of the same thing]] is simply amusing.
** Once again, however, [[TheChewToy his treatment of her]] [[DisproportionateRetribution is nowhere near as funny]].
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* Given Mykan's tendencies to steal material, referring to Starfleet as "original space ponies" in the first episode of Season 2.
* The thought of these [[InformedAbility strong and superior Space Ponies]] getting outmatched by untrained Diamond Dogs is nothing short of beautiful {{irony}}. The InUniverse explanation is that "[[VoodooShark they had strong armor]]".
* The thought of these [[InformedAbility strong and superior Space Ponies]] getting outmatched by untrained Diamond Dogs is nothing short of beautiful {{irony}}. The InUniverse explanation is that "[[VoodooShark they had strong armor]]".
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* Given Mykan's tendencies to steal material, referring to Starfleet as "original space ponies" in the first episode of Season 2.
* The thought of these [[InformedAbility strong and superior Space Ponies]] getting outmatched by untrained Diamond Dogs is nothing short of beautiful {{irony}}. The InUniverse explanation is that "[[VoodooShark they had strong armor]]".
* The thought of these [[InformedAbility strong and superior Space Ponies]] getting outmatched by untrained Diamond Dogs is nothing short of beautiful {{irony}}. The InUniverse explanation is that "[[VoodooShark they had strong armor]]".
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* Space Ponies can [[https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/761678/it-isnt-the-mane-thing-about-you-review apparently grow their manes and tails back to normal size within a day]] because Mykan is ''that'' adamant on making his characters [[MarySuetopia superior to everyone else in every way possible]].
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* Space Ponies can [[https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/761678/it-isnt-the-mane-thing-about-you-review apparently grow their manes and tails back to normal size within half a day]] because Mykan is ''that'' adamant on making his characters [[MarySuetopia superior to everyone else in every way possible]].
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* Mykan states that he despises Twilight Sparkle for ''[[YouKeepUsingThatWord forcing]]'' [[FelonyMisdemeanor everyone to be friends with each other.]] However, Starfleet is [[BlatantLies perfectly sane and rational]] by forcing everyone to change their species, their way of speech, worship their new god-dictator without question, and submit to their new government with every single naysayer being either locked in an asylum, or [[BrainwashedAndCrazy brainwashed into agreeing]] . MoralMyopia doesn't even begin to cover this, and it makes [[https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/690404/im-true-to-myself-3-rant-why-i-hate-twilight-sparkle his paragraphs long rant]] about how she's such a demonic soulless witch for ''wanting people to be nice to each other'' look [[InsaneTrollLogic utterly melodramatic.]]
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* Mykan states that he despises Twilight Sparkle for ''[[YouKeepUsingThatWord forcing]]'' [[FelonyMisdemeanor everyone to be friends with each other.]] However, Starfleet is [[BlatantLies perfectly sane and rational]] by forcing everyone to change their species, their way of speech, worship their new god-dictator without question, and submit to their new government with every single naysayer being either locked in an asylum, or [[BrainwashedAndCrazy brainwashed into agreeing]] . agreeing.]] MoralMyopia doesn't even begin to cover this, and it makes [[https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/690404/im-true-to-myself-3-rant-why-i-hate-twilight-sparkle his paragraphs long rant]] about how she's such a demonic soulless witch for ''wanting people to be nice to each other'' look [[InsaneTrollLogic utterly melodramatic.]]
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* Mykan states that he despises Twilight Sparkle for ''[[YouKeepUsingThatWord forcing]]'' [[FelonyMisdemeanor everyone to be friends with each other.]] However, Starfleet is [[BlatantLies perfectly sane and rational]] by forcing everyone to change their species, their way of speech, worship their new god-dictator without question, and submit to their new government with every single naysayer being either locked in an asylum, or [[BrainwashedAndCrazy brainwashed into agreeing]] . MoralMyopia doesn't even begin to cover this, and it makes his paragraphs long rant about how she's such a demonic soulless witch for ''wanting people to be nice to each other'' look [[InsaneTrollLogic utterly melodramatic.]]
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* Mykan states that he despises Twilight Sparkle for ''[[YouKeepUsingThatWord forcing]]'' [[FelonyMisdemeanor everyone to be friends with each other.]] However, Starfleet is [[BlatantLies perfectly sane and rational]] by forcing everyone to change their species, their way of speech, worship their new god-dictator without question, and submit to their new government with every single naysayer being either locked in an asylum, or [[BrainwashedAndCrazy brainwashed into agreeing]] . MoralMyopia doesn't even begin to cover this, and it makes [[https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/690404/im-true-to-myself-3-rant-why-i-hate-twilight-sparkle his paragraphs long rant rant]] about how she's such a demonic soulless witch for ''wanting people to be nice to each other'' look [[InsaneTrollLogic utterly melodramatic.]]
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* Mykan states that he despises Twilight Sparkle for ''[[YouKeepUsingThatWord forcing]]'' [[FelonyMisdemeanor everyone to be friends with each other.]] However, Starfleet is [[BlatantLies perfectly sane and rational]] by forcing everyone to change their species, their way of speech, worship their new god-dictator without question, and submit to their new government with every single naysayer [[BrainwashedAndCrazy being brainwashed into agreeing.]] MoralMyopia doesn't even begin to cover this, and it makes his paragraphs long rant about how she's such a demonic soulless witch for ''wanting people to be nice to each other'' look [[InsaneTrollLogic utterly melodramatic.]]
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* Mykan states that he despises Twilight Sparkle for ''[[YouKeepUsingThatWord forcing]]'' [[FelonyMisdemeanor everyone to be friends with each other.]] However, Starfleet is [[BlatantLies perfectly sane and rational]] by forcing everyone to change their species, their way of speech, worship their new god-dictator without question, and submit to their new government with every single naysayer being either locked in an asylum, or [[BrainwashedAndCrazy being brainwashed into agreeing.]] agreeing]] . MoralMyopia doesn't even begin to cover this, and it makes his paragraphs long rant about how she's such a demonic soulless witch for ''wanting people to be nice to each other'' look [[InsaneTrollLogic utterly melodramatic.]]
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* The names of some of Mykan's {{Author Avatar}}s: Grand Ruler Celesto Arron Goldenite and in the Equestria Girls universe, Celesto Grandruler.
** For that matter, "Mykan Stevens". It's bad enough that it's the most blatant of the bunch, but his pony self is named the same thing.
** For that matter, "Mykan Stevens". It's bad enough that it's the most blatant of the bunch, but his pony self is named the same thing.
* The "intro" to the first ''Starfleet Humans'' "movie" has the ''Friendship is Magic'' theme start to play before Lightning Dawn interrupts and changes it to the ''Starfleet Humans'' "theme". The AuthorTract in the scene (and Lightning's {{jerkass}}ery) is so blatant it's almost amusing.
* The fact that Celesto Grandruler is a retired millionaire ''astronaut'' who built and owns a high school and part of the island where the ''Starfleet Humans'' stories take place in, and also adopted the human counterparts of Starfleet. And his limousine transforms into a rocket ship. Fiction500 has never been quite so over-the-top, and if this were any other work, Celesto would come off as a ParodySue.
* Human Starla Shine being bullied in the first ''Starfleet Humans'' "movie". It's the typical cliché of [[HollywoodHomely "girl getting bullied despite being incredibly attractive"]] but usually the girl in question has some sort of quirk that would make her a target. Starla doesn't have any of those. There's also the "nickname" the bullies give her, "Little Star". [[SarcasmMode How insulting]].
* The fact that Celesto Grandruler is a retired millionaire ''astronaut'' who built and owns a high school and part of the island where the ''Starfleet Humans'' stories take place in, and also adopted the human counterparts of Starfleet. And his limousine transforms into a rocket ship. Fiction500 has never been quite so over-the-top, and if this were any other work, Celesto would come off as a ParodySue.
* Human Starla Shine being bullied in the first ''Starfleet Humans'' "movie". It's the typical cliché of [[HollywoodHomely "girl getting bullied despite being incredibly attractive"]] but usually the girl in question has some sort of quirk that would make her a target. Starla doesn't have any of those. There's also the "nickname" the bullies give her, "Little Star". [[SarcasmMode How insulting]].
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* The names of some of Mykan's {{Author Avatar}}s: Grand Ruler Celesto Arron Goldenite and in the Equestria Girls universe, Celesto Grandruler.
** For that matter, "Mykan Stevens". It's bad enough that it's the most blatant of the bunch, but his pony self is named the same thing.
* The "intro" to the first ''Starfleet Humans'' "movie" has the ''Friendship is Magic'' theme start to play before Lightning Dawn interrupts and changes it to the ''Starfleet Humans'' "theme". The AuthorTract in the scene (and Lightning's {{jerkass}}ery) is so blatant it's almost amusing.
* The fact that Celesto Grandruler is a retired millionaire ''astronaut'' who built and owns a high school and part of the island where the ''Starfleet Humans'' stories take place in, and also adopted the human counterparts of Starfleet. And his limousine transforms into a rocket ship. Fiction500 has never been quite so over-the-top, and if this were any other work, Celesto would come off as a ParodySue.
* Human Starla Shine being bullied in the first ''Starfleet Humans'' "movie". It's the typical cliché of [[HollywoodHomely "girl getting bullied despite being incredibly attractive"]] but usually the girl in question has some sort of quirk that would make her a target. Starla doesn't have any of those. There's also the "nickname" the bullies give her, "Little Star". [[SarcasmMode How insulting]].
** For that matter, "Mykan Stevens". It's bad enough that it's the most blatant of the bunch, but his pony self is named the same thing.
* The "intro" to the first ''Starfleet Humans'' "movie" has the ''Friendship is Magic'' theme start to play before Lightning Dawn interrupts and changes it to the ''Starfleet Humans'' "theme". The AuthorTract in the scene (and Lightning's {{jerkass}}ery) is so blatant it's almost amusing.
* The fact that Celesto Grandruler is a retired millionaire ''astronaut'' who built and owns a high school and part of the island where the ''Starfleet Humans'' stories take place in, and also adopted the human counterparts of Starfleet. And his limousine transforms into a rocket ship. Fiction500 has never been quite so over-the-top, and if this were any other work, Celesto would come off as a ParodySue.
* Human Starla Shine being bullied in the first ''Starfleet Humans'' "movie". It's the typical cliché of [[HollywoodHomely "girl getting bullied despite being incredibly attractive"]] but usually the girl in question has some sort of quirk that would make her a target. Starla doesn't have any of those. There's also the "nickname" the bullies give her, "Little Star". [[SarcasmMode How insulting]].
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* Mykan states that he despises Twilight Sparkle for ''[[YouKeepUsingThatWord forcing]]'' [[FelonyMisdemeanor everyone to be friends with each other.]] However, Starfleet is [[BlatantLies perfectly sane and rational]] by forcing everyone to change their species, their way of speech, worship their new god-dictator without question, and submit to their new government with every single naysayer [[BrainwashedAndCrazy being brainwashed into agreeing.]] MoralMyopia doesn't even begin to cover this, and it makes his paragraphs long rant about how she's such a demonic soulless witch for ''wanting people to be nice to each other'' look [[InsaneTrollLogic utterly melodramatic.]]
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* Mykan states that he despises Twilight Sparkle for ''[[YouKeepUsingThatWord forcing]]'' [[FelonyMisdemeanor everyone to be friends with each other.]] However, Starfleet is [[BlatantLies perfectly sane and rational]] by forcing everyone to change their species, their way of speech, worship their new god-dictator without question, and submit to their new government with every single naysayer [[BrainwashedAndCrazy being brainwashed into agreeing.]] MoralMyopia doesn't even begin to cover this, and it makes his paragraphs long rant about how she's such a demonic soulless witch for ''wanting people to be nice to each other'' look [[InsaneTrollLogic utterly melodramatic.]]
** [[TheChewToy His treatment of her, though...]] [[DisproportionateRetribution not so much.]]
** [[TheChewToy His treatment of her, though...]] [[DisproportionateRetribution not so much.]]
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* Mykan states that he despises Twilight Sparkle for ''[[YouKeepUsingThatWord forcing]]'' [[FelonyMisdemeanor everyone to be friends with each other.]] However, Starfleet is [[BlatantLies perfectly sane and rational]] by forcing everyone to change their species, their way of speech, worship their new god-dictator without question, and submit to their new government with every single naysayer [[BrainwashedAndCrazy being brainwashed into agreeing.]] MoralMyopia doesn't even begin to cover this, and it makes his paragraphs long rant about how she's such a demonic soulless witch for ''wanting people to be nice to each other'' look [[InsaneTrollLogic utterly insane.]]
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* Mykan states that he despises Twilight Sparkle for ''[[YouKeepUsingThatWord forcing]]'' [[FelonyMisdemeanor everyone to be friends with each other.]] However, Starfleet is [[BlatantLies perfectly sane and rational]] by forcing everyone to change their species, their way of speech, worship their new god-dictator without question, and submit to their new government with every single naysayer [[BrainwashedAndCrazy being brainwashed into agreeing.]] MoralMyopia doesn't even begin to cover this, and it makes his paragraphs long rant about how she's such a demonic soulless witch for ''wanting people to be nice to each other'' look [[InsaneTrollLogic utterly insane.melodramatic.]]
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* Mykan states that he despises Twilight Sparkle for ''[[YouKeepUsingThatWord forcing]]'' [[FelonyMisdemanor everyone to be friends with each other.]] However, Starfleet is [[BlatantLies perfectly sane and rational]] by forcing everyone to change their species, their way of speech, worship their new god-dictator without question, and submit to their new government with every single naysayer [[BrainwashedAndCrazy being brainwashed into agreeing.]] MoralMyopia doesn't even begin to cover this, and it makes his paragraphs long rant about how she's such a demonic soulless witch for ''wanting people to be nice to each other'' look [[InsaneTrollLogic utterly insane.]]
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* Mykan states that he despises Twilight Sparkle for ''[[YouKeepUsingThatWord forcing]]'' [[FelonyMisdemanor [[FelonyMisdemeanor everyone to be friends with each other.]] However, Starfleet is [[BlatantLies perfectly sane and rational]] by forcing everyone to change their species, their way of speech, worship their new god-dictator without question, and submit to their new government with every single naysayer [[BrainwashedAndCrazy being brainwashed into agreeing.]] MoralMyopia doesn't even begin to cover this, and it makes his paragraphs long rant about how she's such a demonic soulless witch for ''wanting people to be nice to each other'' look [[InsaneTrollLogic utterly insane.]]
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* Space Ponies can [[https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/761678/it-isnt-the-mane-thing-about-you-review apparently grow their manes and tails back to normal size within a day]] because Mykan is ''that'' adamant on making his characters [[MarySuetopia superior to everyone else in every way possible]].
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* Space Ponies can [[https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/761678/it-isnt-the-mane-thing-about-you-review apparently grow their manes and tails back to normal size within a day]] because Mykan is ''that'' adamant on making his characters [[MarySuetopia superior to everyone else in every way possible]].possible]].
* Mykan states that he despises Twilight Sparkle for ''[[YouKeepUsingThatWord forcing]]'' [[FelonyMisdemanor everyone to be friends with each other.]] However, Starfleet is [[BlatantLies perfectly sane and rational]] by forcing everyone to change their species, their way of speech, worship their new god-dictator without question, and submit to their new government with every single naysayer [[BrainwashedAndCrazy being brainwashed into agreeing.]] MoralMyopia doesn't even begin to cover this, and it makes his paragraphs long rant about how she's such a demonic soulless witch for ''wanting people to be nice to each other'' look [[InsaneTrollLogic utterly insane.]]
* Mykan states that he despises Twilight Sparkle for ''[[YouKeepUsingThatWord forcing]]'' [[FelonyMisdemanor everyone to be friends with each other.]] However, Starfleet is [[BlatantLies perfectly sane and rational]] by forcing everyone to change their species, their way of speech, worship their new god-dictator without question, and submit to their new government with every single naysayer [[BrainwashedAndCrazy being brainwashed into agreeing.]] MoralMyopia doesn't even begin to cover this, and it makes his paragraphs long rant about how she's such a demonic soulless witch for ''wanting people to be nice to each other'' look [[InsaneTrollLogic utterly insane.]]
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* Some RougeAnglesOfSatin moments are pretty hilarious, but one in particular stands out. Early on in the original fic, resident GenericDoomsdayVillain Lord Titan has the "heroes" right where he wants them, and gets thwarted by the timely arrival of [[EthnicScrappy Dyno and Mite]]. When Lightning gets free, he shoots Titan a look of [[UsefulNotes/FurryFandom furry]].[[note]]It's supposed to be a look of ''fury'', but then again the MST wouldn't have anything to make fun of if it were correctly spelled. Or written. Or overall competent, for that matter.[[/note]]
* The fact that the protagonists are seriously frightened (though partially due to a curse) by ''bad dreams'' in one chapter, to the point that they're afraid to have anything do with their hobbies for several hours. Contrast that with the Mane 6's reactions in the [=FiM=] episode ''[[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS5E13DoPrincessesDreamOfMagicSheep Do Princesses Dream of Magic Sheep?]]'', where they were scared for only a few seconds when they woke up. Curse or no curse, it makes them look ''incredibly'' incompetent.
* The fact that the protagonists are seriously frightened (though partially due to a curse) by ''bad dreams'' in one chapter, to the point that they're afraid to have anything do with their hobbies for several hours. Contrast that with the Mane 6's reactions in the [=FiM=] episode ''[[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS5E13DoPrincessesDreamOfMagicSheep Do Princesses Dream of Magic Sheep?]]'', where they were scared for only a few seconds when they woke up. Curse or no curse, it makes them look ''incredibly'' incompetent.
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* Some RougeAnglesOfSatin moments are pretty hilarious, but one in particular stands out. Early on in the original fic, resident GenericDoomsdayVillain Lord Titan has the "heroes" right where he wants them, and gets thwarted by the timely arrival of [[EthnicScrappy Dyno and Mite]]. When Lightning gets free, he shoots Titan a look of [[UsefulNotes/FurryFandom furry]].[[note]]It's supposed to be a look of ''fury'', but then again the MST wouldn't have anything to make fun of if it were correctly spelled. Or written. Or overall competent, for that matter.[[/note]]
* The fact that the protagonists are seriously frightened (though partially due to a curse) by ''bad dreams'' in one chapter, to the point that they're afraid to have anything do with their hobbies for several hours. Contrast that with the Mane 6's reactions in the [=FiM=] episode ''[[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS5E13DoPrincessesDreamOfMagicSheep Do Princesses Dream of Magic Sheep?]]'', where they were scared for only a few seconds when they woke up. Curse or no curse, it makes them look ''incredibly'' incompetent.
* The fact that the protagonists are seriously frightened (though partially due to a curse) by ''bad dreams'' in one chapter, to the point that they're afraid to have anything do with their hobbies for several hours. Contrast that with the Mane 6's reactions in the [=FiM=] episode ''[[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS5E13DoPrincessesDreamOfMagicSheep Do Princesses Dream of Magic Sheep?]]'', where they were scared for only a few seconds when they woke up. Curse or no curse, it makes them look ''incredibly'' incompetent.
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* Some RougeAnglesOfSatin moments are pretty hilarious, but one in particular stands out. Early on in the original fic, resident GenericDoomsdayVillain Lord Titan has the "heroes" right where he wants them, and gets thwarted by the timely arrival of [[EthnicScrappy Dyno and Mite]]. When Lightning gets free, he shoots Titan a look of [[UsefulNotes/FurryFandom furry]].[[note]]It's supposed to be a look of ''fury'', but then again the MST wouldn't have anything to make fun of if it were correctly spelled. Or written. Or overall competent, for that matter.[[/note]]
* The fact that the protagonists are seriously frightened (though partially due to a curse) by ''bad dreams'' in one chapter, to the point that they're afraid to have anything do with their hobbies for several hours. Contrast that with the Mane 6's reactions in the [=FiM=] episode ''[[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS5E13DoPrincessesDreamOfMagicSheep Do Princesses Dream of Magic Sheep?]]'', where they were scared for only a few seconds when they woke up. Curse or no curse, it makes them look ''incredibly'' incompetent.
* The fact that the protagonists are seriously frightened (though partially due to a curse) by ''bad dreams'' in one chapter, to the point that they're afraid to have anything do with their hobbies for several hours. Contrast that with the Mane 6's reactions in the [=FiM=] episode ''[[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS5E13DoPrincessesDreamOfMagicSheep Do Princesses Dream of Magic Sheep?]]'', where they were scared for only a few seconds when they woke up. Curse or no curse, it makes them look ''incredibly'' incompetent.
* Given Mykan's tendencies to steal material, referring to Starfleet as "original space ponies" in the first episode of Season 2.
* The thought of these [[InformedAbility strong and superior Space Ponies]] getting outmatched by untrained Diamond Dogs is nothing short of beautiful {{irony}}. The InUniverse explanation is that "[[VoodooShark they had strong armor]]".
* The thought of these [[InformedAbility strong and superior Space Ponies]] getting outmatched by untrained Diamond Dogs is nothing short of beautiful {{irony}}. The InUniverse explanation is that "[[VoodooShark they had strong armor]]".
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* Space Ponies can [[https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/761678/it-isnt-the-mane-thing-about-you-review apparently grow their manes and tails back to normal size within a day]] because Mykan is ''that'' adamant on making his characters [[MarySuetopia superior to everyone else in every way possible]].
* Some RougeAnglesOfSatin moments are pretty hilarious, but one in particular stands out. Early on in the original fic, resident GenericDoomsdayVillain Lord Titan has the "heroes" right where he wants them, and gets thwarted by the timely arrival of [[EthnicScrappy Dyno and Mite]]. When Lightning gets free, he shoots Titan a look of [[UsefulNotes/FurryFandom furry]].[[note]]It's supposed to be a look of ''fury'', but then again the MST wouldn't have anything to make fun of if it were correctly spelled. Or written. Or overall competent, for that matter.[[/note]]
* Given Mykan's tendencies to steal material, referring to Starfleet as "original space ponies" in the first episode of Season 2.
* The fact that the protagonists are seriously frightened (though partially due to a curse) by ''bad dreams'' in one chapter, to the point that they're afraid to have anything do with their hobbies for several hours. Contrast that with the Mane 6's reactions in the [=FiM=] episode ''[[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS5E13DoPrincessesDreamOfMagicSheep Do Princesses Dream of Magic Sheep?]]'', where they were scared for only a few seconds when they woke up. Curse or no curse, it makes them look ''incredibly'' incompetent.
* The thought of these [[InformedAbility strong and superior Space Ponies]] getting outmatched by untrained Diamond Dogs is nothing short of beautiful {{irony}}. The InUniverse explanation is that "[[VoodooShark they had strong armor]]".
* Some RougeAnglesOfSatin moments are pretty hilarious, but one in particular stands out. Early on in the original fic, resident GenericDoomsdayVillain Lord Titan has the "heroes" right where he wants them, and gets thwarted by the timely arrival of [[EthnicScrappy Dyno and Mite]]. When Lightning gets free, he shoots Titan a look of [[UsefulNotes/FurryFandom furry]].[[note]]It's supposed to be a look of ''fury'', but then again the MST wouldn't have anything to make fun of if it were correctly spelled. Or written. Or overall competent, for that matter.[[/note]]
* Given Mykan's tendencies to steal material, referring to Starfleet as "original space ponies" in the first episode of Season 2.
* The fact that the protagonists are seriously frightened (though partially due to a curse) by ''bad dreams'' in one chapter, to the point that they're afraid to have anything do with their hobbies for several hours. Contrast that with the Mane 6's reactions in the [=FiM=] episode ''[[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS5E13DoPrincessesDreamOfMagicSheep Do Princesses Dream of Magic Sheep?]]'', where they were scared for only a few seconds when they woke up. Curse or no curse, it makes them look ''incredibly'' incompetent.
* The thought of these [[InformedAbility strong and superior Space Ponies]] getting outmatched by untrained Diamond Dogs is nothing short of beautiful {{irony}}. The InUniverse explanation is that "[[VoodooShark they had strong armor]]".
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* Space Ponies can [[https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/761678/it-isnt-the-mane-thing-about-you-review apparently grow their manes and tails back to normal size within a day]] because Mykan is ''that'' adamant on making his characters [[MarySuetopia superior to everyone else in every way possible]].
* Some RougeAnglesOfSatin moments are pretty hilarious, but one in particular stands out. Early on in the original fic, resident GenericDoomsdayVillain Lord Titan has the "heroes" right where he wants them, and gets thwarted by the timely arrival of [[EthnicScrappy Dyno and Mite]]. When Lightning gets free, he shoots Titan a look of [[UsefulNotes/FurryFandom furry]].[[note]]It's supposed to be a look of ''fury'', but then again the MST wouldn't have anything to make fun of if it were correctly spelled. Or written. Or overall competent, for that matter.[[/note]]
* Given Mykan's tendencies to steal material, referring to Starfleet as "original space ponies" in the first episode of Season 2.
* The fact that the protagonists are seriously frightened (though partially due to a curse) by ''bad dreams'' in one chapter, to the point that they're afraid to have anything do with their hobbies for several hours. Contrast that with the Mane 6's reactions in the [=FiM=] episode ''[[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS5E13DoPrincessesDreamOfMagicSheep Do Princesses Dream of Magic Sheep?]]'', where they were scared for only a few seconds when they woke up. Curse or no curse, it makes them look ''incredibly'' incompetent.
* The thought of these [[InformedAbility strong and superior Space Ponies]] getting outmatched by untrained Diamond Dogs is nothing short of beautiful {{irony}}. The InUniverse explanation is that "[[VoodooShark they had strong armor]]".possible]].
* Some RougeAnglesOfSatin moments are pretty hilarious, but one in particular stands out. Early on in the original fic, resident GenericDoomsdayVillain Lord Titan has the "heroes" right where he wants them, and gets thwarted by the timely arrival of [[EthnicScrappy Dyno and Mite]]. When Lightning gets free, he shoots Titan a look of [[UsefulNotes/FurryFandom furry]].[[note]]It's supposed to be a look of ''fury'', but then again the MST wouldn't have anything to make fun of if it were correctly spelled. Or written. Or overall competent, for that matter.[[/note]]
* Given Mykan's tendencies to steal material, referring to Starfleet as "original space ponies" in the first episode of Season 2.
* The fact that the protagonists are seriously frightened (though partially due to a curse) by ''bad dreams'' in one chapter, to the point that they're afraid to have anything do with their hobbies for several hours. Contrast that with the Mane 6's reactions in the [=FiM=] episode ''[[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS5E13DoPrincessesDreamOfMagicSheep Do Princesses Dream of Magic Sheep?]]'', where they were scared for only a few seconds when they woke up. Curse or no curse, it makes them look ''incredibly'' incompetent.
* The thought of these [[InformedAbility strong and superior Space Ponies]] getting outmatched by untrained Diamond Dogs is nothing short of beautiful {{irony}}. The InUniverse explanation is that "[[VoodooShark they had strong armor]]".
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* Some RougeAnglesOfSatin moments are pretty hilarious, but one in particular stands out. Early on in the original fic, resident GenericDoomsdayVillain Lord Titan has the "heroes" right where he wants them, and gets thwarted by the timely arrival of [[EthnicScrappy Dyno and Mite]]. When Lightning gets free, he shoots Titan a look of [[UsefulNotes/FurryFandom furry]].[[note]]It's supposed to be a look of ''fury'', but then again the MST wouldn't have anything to make fun of if it were correctly spelled. Or written. Or overall competent, for that matter.[[/note]]
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* Some RougeAnglesOfSatin moments are pretty hilarious, but one in particular stands out. Early on in the original fic, resident GenericDoomsdayVillain Lord Titan has the "heroes" right where he wants them, and gets thwarted by the timely arrival of [[EthnicScrappy Dyno and Mite]]. When Lightning gets free, he shoots Titan a look of [[UsefulNotes/FurryFandom furry]].[[note]]It's supposed to be a look of ''fury'', but then again the MST wouldn't have anything to make fun of if it were correctly spelled. Or written. Or overall competent, for that matter.[[/note]][[/note]]
* Given Mykan's tendencies to steal material, referring to Starfleet as "original space ponies" in the first episode of Season 2.
* The fact that the protagonists are seriously frightened (though partially due to a curse) by ''bad dreams'' in one chapter, to the point that they're afraid to have anything do with their hobbies for several hours. Contrast that with the Mane 6's reactions in the [=FiM=] episode ''[[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS5E13DoPrincessesDreamOfMagicSheep Do Princesses Dream of Magic Sheep?]]'', where they were scared for only a few seconds when they woke up. Curse or no curse, it makes them look ''incredibly'' incompetent.
* The thought of these [[InformedAbility strong and superior Space Ponies]] getting outmatched by untrained Diamond Dogs is nothing short of beautiful {{irony}}. The InUniverse explanation is that "[[VoodooShark they had strong armor]]".
* Given Mykan's tendencies to steal material, referring to Starfleet as "original space ponies" in the first episode of Season 2.
* The fact that the protagonists are seriously frightened (though partially due to a curse) by ''bad dreams'' in one chapter, to the point that they're afraid to have anything do with their hobbies for several hours. Contrast that with the Mane 6's reactions in the [=FiM=] episode ''[[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS5E13DoPrincessesDreamOfMagicSheep Do Princesses Dream of Magic Sheep?]]'', where they were scared for only a few seconds when they woke up. Curse or no curse, it makes them look ''incredibly'' incompetent.
* The thought of these [[InformedAbility strong and superior Space Ponies]] getting outmatched by untrained Diamond Dogs is nothing short of beautiful {{irony}}. The InUniverse explanation is that "[[VoodooShark they had strong armor]]".
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* Space Ponies can [[https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/761678/it-isnt-the-mane-thing-about-you-review apparently grow their manes and tails back to normal size within a day]] because Mykan is ''that'' adamant on making his characters [[MarySuetopia superior to everyone else in every way possible]].
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* Space Ponies can [[https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/761678/it-isnt-the-mane-thing-about-you-review apparently grow their manes and tails back to normal size within a day]] because Mykan is ''that'' adamant on making his characters [[MarySuetopia superior to everyone else in every way possible]].possible]].
* Some RougeAnglesOfSatin moments are pretty hilarious, but one in particular stands out. Early on in the original fic, resident GenericDoomsdayVillain Lord Titan has the "heroes" right where he wants them, and gets thwarted by the timely arrival of [[EthnicScrappy Dyno and Mite]]. When Lightning gets free, he shoots Titan a look of [[UsefulNotes/FurryFandom furry]].[[note]]It's supposed to be a look of ''fury'', but then again the MST wouldn't have anything to make fun of if it were correctly spelled. Or written. Or overall competent, for that matter.[[/note]]
* Some RougeAnglesOfSatin moments are pretty hilarious, but one in particular stands out. Early on in the original fic, resident GenericDoomsdayVillain Lord Titan has the "heroes" right where he wants them, and gets thwarted by the timely arrival of [[EthnicScrappy Dyno and Mite]]. When Lightning gets free, he shoots Titan a look of [[UsefulNotes/FurryFandom furry]].[[note]]It's supposed to be a look of ''fury'', but then again the MST wouldn't have anything to make fun of if it were correctly spelled. Or written. Or overall competent, for that matter.[[/note]]
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* Space Ponies can [[https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/761678/it-isnt-the-mane-thing-about-you-review apparently grow their manes and tails back to normal size within a day]] because Mykan is ''that'' adamant on making his characters superior to everyone else in every way possible.
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* Space Ponies can [[https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/761678/it-isnt-the-mane-thing-about-you-review apparently grow their manes and tails back to normal size within a day]] because Mykan is ''that'' adamant on making his characters [[MarySuetopia superior to everyone else in every way possible.possible]].
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* The militaristic Space Ponies evidently teach their soldiers how to ''dance and sing'' [[SarcasmMode because those are clearly skills a warrior race absolutely need to know]].
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-->'''Cherry-Lei:''' Awful memories of ''Literature/{{Twilight}}'' {{fangirl}}s returning. [[TakeThat You know you've reached an all time low, when you unconsciously don't realize you're referencing one of the worst books ever written.]]
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-->'''Cherry-Lei:''' Awful memories of ''Literature/{{Twilight}}'' {{fangirl}}s returning. [[TakeThat You know you've reached an all time low, when you unconsciously don't realize you're referencing one of the worst books ever written.]]]]
* Space Ponies can [[https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/761678/it-isnt-the-mane-thing-about-you-review apparently grow their manes and tails back to normal size within a day]] because Mykan is ''that'' adamant on making his characters superior to everyone else in every way possible.
* Space Ponies can [[https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/761678/it-isnt-the-mane-thing-about-you-review apparently grow their manes and tails back to normal size within a day]] because Mykan is ''that'' adamant on making his characters superior to everyone else in every way possible.
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* [[FightSceneFailure How poorly choreographed the fight scenes are.]] They basically boil down to: Lightning [[LeeroyJenkins running at the bad guy and getting owned]], both sides [[HamToHamCombat shouting silly attack names at each other]] with [[StrongAsTheyNeedToBe said attacks not really doing anything until the plot wants them to]], the bad guys falling victim to a DeusExMachina, and Lightning coming in to KillSteal.
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* [[FightSceneFailure How poorly choreographed the fight scenes are.]] They basically boil down to: Lightning [[LeeroyJenkins running at the bad guy and getting owned]], both sides [[HamToHamCombat shouting silly attack names at each other]] with [[StrongAsTheyNeedToBe said attacks not really doing anything until the plot wants them to]], the bad guys falling victim to a DeusExMachina, DeusExMachina when they have the heroes on the ropes, and Lightning coming in to KillSteal.KillSteal after kind of just standing there for most of the fight.
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* [[FightSceneFailure How poorly choreographed the fight scenes are.]]
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* [[FightSceneFailure How poorly choreographed the fight scenes are.]]]] They basically boil down to: Lightning [[LeeroyJenkins running at the bad guy and getting owned]], both sides [[HamToHamCombat shouting silly attack names at each other]] with [[StrongAsTheyNeedToBe said attacks not really doing anything until the plot wants them to]], the bad guys falling victim to a DeusExMachina, and Lightning coming in to KillSteal.
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* Starfleet are supposed to be a badass interplanetary peacekeeping crew... and then chapter 2 of the original fic has them running scared through Violet Swamp and literally being frightened by their own shadows at one point. [[SarcasmMode Some proud warrior race.]]
* Chapter 9 of ''Starfleet Magic 1'' has Rep-Stallion's balloon monster trying to suck in Lightning, Krysta, and Brain, with all three of them hanging on for dear life. Then the latter two slip and are swallowed by the monster and Lightning calls out their names in anguish. It's then immediately revealed that Krysta and Brain are completely fine since the monster is simply an animate balloon, making the entire scene rather melodramatic.
* Chapter 9 of ''Starfleet Magic 1'' has Rep-Stallion's balloon monster trying to suck in Lightning, Krysta, and Brain, with all three of them hanging on for dear life. Then the latter two slip and are swallowed by the monster and Lightning calls out their names in anguish. It's then immediately revealed that Krysta and Brain are completely fine since the monster is simply an animate balloon, making the entire scene rather melodramatic.
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* Mykan's obsession with the word "heavenly"; "Celesto", "Leilani", and "[[CriticalResearchFailure Castor]]" all mean "heavenly", and that's apparently why he chose them. Not helping matters is the fact that the first of those three [[UnfortunateNames greatly resembles "Celestia"]].
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-->'''Cherry-Lei:''' Awful memories of ''Literature/{{Twilight}}'' {{fangirl}}s returning. [[TakeThat You know you've reached an all time low, when you unconsciously don't realize you're referencing one of the worst books ever written.]]
* Mykan's obsession with the word "heavenly"; "Celesto", "Leilani", and "[[CriticalResearchFailure Castor]]" all mean "heavenly", and that's apparently why he chose them. Not helping matters is the fact that the first of those three [[UnfortunateNames greatly resembles "Celestia"]].
* Mykan's obsession with the word "heavenly"; "Celesto", "Leilani", and "[[CriticalResearchFailure Castor]]" all mean "heavenly", and that's apparently why he chose them. Not helping matters is the fact that the first of those three [[UnfortunateNames greatly resembles "Celestia"]].
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-->'''Cherry-Lei:''' Awful memories of ''Literature/{{Twilight}}'' {{fangirl}}s returning. [[TakeThat You know you've reached an all time low, when you unconsciously don't realize you're referencing one of the worst books ever written.]]
* Mykan's obsession with the word "heavenly"; "Celesto", "Leilani", and "[[CriticalResearchFailure Castor]]" all mean "heavenly", and that's apparently why he chose them. Not helping matters is the fact that the first of those three [[UnfortunateNames greatly resembles "Celestia"]].]]
* Mykan's obsession with the word "heavenly"; "Celesto", "Leilani", and "[[CriticalResearchFailure Castor]]" all mean "heavenly", and that's apparently why he chose them. Not helping matters is the fact that the first of those three [[UnfortunateNames greatly resembles "Celestia"]].
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-->'''Cherry-Lei:''' Awful memories of ''Literature/{{Twilight}}'' {{fangirl}}s returning. [[TakeThat You know you've reached an all time low, when you unconsciously don't realize you're referencing one of the worst books ever written.]]
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-->'''Cherry-Lei:''' Awful memories of ''Literature/{{Twilight}}'' {{fangirl}}s returning. [[TakeThat You know you've reached an all time low, when you unconsciously don't realize you're referencing one of the worst books ever written.]]]]
* Mykan's obsession with the word "heavenly"; "Celesto", "Leilani", and "[[CriticalResearchFailure Castor]]" all mean "heavenly", and that's apparently why he chose them. Not helping matters is the fact that the first of those three [[UnfortunateNames greatly resembles "Celestia"]].
* Mykan's obsession with the word "heavenly"; "Celesto", "Leilani", and "[[CriticalResearchFailure Castor]]" all mean "heavenly", and that's apparently why he chose them. Not helping matters is the fact that the first of those three [[UnfortunateNames greatly resembles "Celestia"]].
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* Grand Ruler's '''''SPARKLY''''' [[AlienBlood blood]].
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* Grand Ruler's '''''SPARKLY''''' [[AlienBlood blood]].blood]].
-->'''Cherry-Lei:''' Awful memories of ''Literature/{{Twilight}}'' {{fangirl}}s returning. [[TakeThat You know you've reached an all time low, when you unconsciously don't realize you're referencing one of the worst books ever written.]]
-->'''Cherry-Lei:''' Awful memories of ''Literature/{{Twilight}}'' {{fangirl}}s returning. [[TakeThat You know you've reached an all time low, when you unconsciously don't realize you're referencing one of the worst books ever written.]]
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* The Demonites' second VillainSong is a cover of a parody of Lady Gaga's ''Poker Face'' (with said parody [[CriticalResearchFailure being incorrectly attributed to Lady Gaga]]). No, the fic is ''not'' a StealthParody, but it certainly could pass for one at this point.
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* The Demonites' second VillainSong is a cover of a parody of Lady Gaga's ''Poker Face'' (with said parody [[CriticalResearchFailure being incorrectly attributed to Lady Gaga]]). No, the fic is ''not'' a StealthParody, but it certainly could pass for one at this point.point.
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* When Cookie Dough is introduced in chapter 1 of the original, the patrons of the Rainbow Dish Inn (which is an unintentionally ridiculous name in and of itself) all stand up in unison and start chanting "Hail Cookie Dough! Hail Cookie Dough!" The resemblance to ThoseWackyNazis, given that it occurs in a restaurant, makes it unintentionally humorous.
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* When Cookie Dough is introduced in chapter 1 of the original, the patrons of the Rainbow Dish Inn (which is an unintentionally ridiculous name in and of itself) all stand up in unison and start chanting "Hail Cookie Dough! Hail Cookie Dough!" The resemblance to ThoseWackyNazis, given that it occurs in a restaurant, makes it unintentionally humorous. It's even kept in the remake.
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Do you [[ClapYourHandsIfYouBelieve believe]] in a truly compelling and touching narrative? You do? Well, if the world of United Equestria believed as much as you do, we wouldn't have these [[{{Narm}} unintentionally hilarious moments]].
* A lot of the character designs due to how poorly edited they are.
* A lot of the titles for "episodes", "movies", etc. for how lacking in creativity they are.
* Likewise, a lot of the attack names are just as lacking. "Paint Bomb?" "Leaf Swarm?" "[[PainfulRhyme Drill Quill?]]" "Boom Boom Flare?" Heck, one attack is named "[[Anime/DigimonAdventure02 Star Shower]]"! This fic isn't even trying to hide its lack of originality!
* [[OverlyLongGag Also,]] the [[ByThePowerOfGrayskull transformation phrases]] and {{Transformation Name Announcement}}s because of how unoriginal and ridiculous sounding they are. The worst of these are Buddy Rose's "Power of Fauna" which should be "Flora", and Rhymey's "[[PainfulRhyme I summon from within, the Power of Wind]]" for being so blatantly different from the others that it barely even fits with the rest.
* Any time the writing ends a list with "and stuff" (or any variation), continuing the trend of the author's utter lack of creativity and originality.
* Any time Mykan has to come up with original lyrics due to how, once again, they are severely lacking in creativity and ridiculous sounding.
* The very idea of "the magic of believing". Believing in what specifically, we are not told until near the end of the second chapter of the first fic where Celesto says that Lightning has learned to believe in his own inner magic.
* The fic constantly takes cues from ''Series/TodaysSpecial'', [[SarcasmMode because a space epic about ponies who fight like]] ''Franchise/PowerRangers'' [[SarcasmMode totally needed to borrow ideas from a show with a similar structure to]] ''Series/SesameStreet''.
* The villains creating [[MonsterOfTheWeek one-shot monsters]] out of whatever happens to be nearby occasionally has just plain silly results. Such as a hot-air balloon, a bunch of make-up wands and personal mirrors, and a ''hot pot''.
* When Cookie Dough is introduced in chapter 1 of the original, the patrons of the Rainbow Dish Inn (which is an unintentionally ridiculous name in and of itself) all stand up in unison and start chanting "Hail Cookie Dough! Hail Cookie Dough!" The resemblance to ThoseWackyNazis, given that it occurs in a restaurant, makes it unintentionally humorous.
* The Grand Ruler loses all possible credibility (at least, in the original version) when he's shown playing hopscotch to a disco remix of "Pop Goes the Weasel". [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer Seriously.]] [[https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YxHM_DaHSG4 Here it is in video form (it's not the Grand Ruler, but it's pretty much the same deal).]]
* In ''Starfleet Magic: TheMovie'', Lightning Dawn has to get a MacGuffin that will hurt a being if there is evil in them. Lightning starts to get the item and then... [[AntiClimax nothing happens, he gets it with no ill consequences.]] This scene was clearly a reference to when [[HeelFaceTurn Tommy]] [[TheSixthRanger Oliver]] did something similar in the third season of ''Series/MightyMorphinPowerRangers'', the thing is that when Tommy did it, he was actually hurt by the item because it detected his evil past as the Green Ranger, but then it allowed him to hold it because it sensed him redeeming himself and the entire point of the scene was to show just how far Tommy has come.
* Raven's death threats toward Celestia are a bit too ridiculous to take seriously with the gratuitous capslock and double exclamation marks, especially since she feels the need to send more than one, as if she's worried that Celestia might forget.
* [[spoiler:Twilight's death]] is presumably supposed to be a TearJerker moment, and is built up to be tragic. Too bad it loses all meaning when you realize that Mykan went through with this because he hates [[spoiler:Twilight]] (the fact that the characters proceed to blame [[spoiler:[[VictimBlaming Twilight for her own death]]]] should give that away). Also not helping matters is how Lightning responds to the horrendous act that had just occurred:
--> "And he threw his head high up into the air and let out [[SkywardScream a very loud and mournful NEIGH]]… [[FurryReminder just like the pony he was]]."
* The names of some of Mykan's {{Author Avatar}}s: Grand Ruler Celesto Arron Goldenite and in the Equestria Girls universe, Celesto Grandruler.
** For that matter, "Mykan Stevens". It's bad enough that it's the most blatant of the bunch, but his pony self is named the same thing.
* The "intro" to the first ''Starfleet Humans'' "movie" has the ''Friendship is Magic'' theme start to play before Lightning Dawn interrupts and changes it to the ''Starfleet Humans'' "theme". The AuthorTract in the scene (and Lightning's {{jerkass}}ery) is so blatant it's almost amusing.
* The fact that Celesto Grandruler is a retired millionaire ''astronaut'' who built and owns a high school and part of the island where the ''Starfleet Humans'' stories take place in, and also adopted the human counterparts of Starfleet. And his limousine transforms into a rocket ship. Fiction500 has never been quite so over-the-top, and if this were any other work, Celesto would come off as a ParodySue.
* Human Starla Shine being bullied in the first ''Starfleet Humans'' "movie". It's the typical cliché of [[HollywoodHomely "girl getting bullied despite being incredibly attractive"]] but usually the girl in question has some sort of quirk that would make her a target. Starla doesn't have any of those. There's also the "nickname" the bullies give her, "Little Star". [[SarcasmMode How insulting]].
* In ''Starfleet Humans: Starpops'', the Starfleet Humans and the [=HuMane=] Six forming a twelve person band. They also named their band "[[TitleDrop Starpops]]" ([[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer yes, really]]). They get the name from [[TheScrappy Rhymey's]] [[PainfulRhyme "rhyme"]] about how he comes up with his [[InformedAbility "poetry"]] on [[StrangledByTheRedString Fluttershy]]: [[PainfulRhyme "Oh, it's nothing really, it's not hard, and its really no real dread. When I think of Fluttershy and I look at a Star, it just Pops into my head."]] ([[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer Yes, Mykan actually capitalized "Star" and "Pops".]] Just in case it wasn't obvious enough for you.)
* The villains of ''Starfleet Humans: Starpops'' are the Demonites. They have a cover band with the name ''[[MostDefinitelyNotAVillain D-Man]] [[IncrediblyLamePun Knights]]'' ([[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer SERIOUSLY]]). Their VillainSong is a cover of Michael Jackson's ''Thriller'' ([[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer SERIOUSLY]]) with '''THIS''' as the chorus ([[RuleOfThree SERIOUSLY]]):
--> We are the D-Man... D... Man... Knights\\
So learn our names just right and be a...[[note]]The individual members never say their names in this song.[[/note]]\\
[[WesternAnimation/HeManAndTheMastersOfTheUniverse He-Man]], [[{{Bifauxnen}} She]][[DudeLooksLikeALady -Man]], [[PainfulRhyme Be-Man]], [[AccidentalInnuendo C-Man]]...\\
D-Man-Knight!!
* The Demonites' second VillainSong is a cover of a parody of Lady Gaga's ''Poker Face'' (with said parody [[CriticalResearchFailure being incorrectly attributed to Lady Gaga]]). No, the fic is ''not'' a StealthParody, but it certainly could pass for one at this point.
* A lot of the character designs due to how poorly edited they are.
* A lot of the titles for "episodes", "movies", etc. for how lacking in creativity they are.
* Likewise, a lot of the attack names are just as lacking. "Paint Bomb?" "Leaf Swarm?" "[[PainfulRhyme Drill Quill?]]" "Boom Boom Flare?" Heck, one attack is named "[[Anime/DigimonAdventure02 Star Shower]]"! This fic isn't even trying to hide its lack of originality!
* [[OverlyLongGag Also,]] the [[ByThePowerOfGrayskull transformation phrases]] and {{Transformation Name Announcement}}s because of how unoriginal and ridiculous sounding they are. The worst of these are Buddy Rose's "Power of Fauna" which should be "Flora", and Rhymey's "[[PainfulRhyme I summon from within, the Power of Wind]]" for being so blatantly different from the others that it barely even fits with the rest.
* Any time the writing ends a list with "and stuff" (or any variation), continuing the trend of the author's utter lack of creativity and originality.
* Any time Mykan has to come up with original lyrics due to how, once again, they are severely lacking in creativity and ridiculous sounding.
* The very idea of "the magic of believing". Believing in what specifically, we are not told until near the end of the second chapter of the first fic where Celesto says that Lightning has learned to believe in his own inner magic.
* The fic constantly takes cues from ''Series/TodaysSpecial'', [[SarcasmMode because a space epic about ponies who fight like]] ''Franchise/PowerRangers'' [[SarcasmMode totally needed to borrow ideas from a show with a similar structure to]] ''Series/SesameStreet''.
* The villains creating [[MonsterOfTheWeek one-shot monsters]] out of whatever happens to be nearby occasionally has just plain silly results. Such as a hot-air balloon, a bunch of make-up wands and personal mirrors, and a ''hot pot''.
* When Cookie Dough is introduced in chapter 1 of the original, the patrons of the Rainbow Dish Inn (which is an unintentionally ridiculous name in and of itself) all stand up in unison and start chanting "Hail Cookie Dough! Hail Cookie Dough!" The resemblance to ThoseWackyNazis, given that it occurs in a restaurant, makes it unintentionally humorous.
* The Grand Ruler loses all possible credibility (at least, in the original version) when he's shown playing hopscotch to a disco remix of "Pop Goes the Weasel". [[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer Seriously.]] [[https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YxHM_DaHSG4 Here it is in video form (it's not the Grand Ruler, but it's pretty much the same deal).]]
* In ''Starfleet Magic: TheMovie'', Lightning Dawn has to get a MacGuffin that will hurt a being if there is evil in them. Lightning starts to get the item and then... [[AntiClimax nothing happens, he gets it with no ill consequences.]] This scene was clearly a reference to when [[HeelFaceTurn Tommy]] [[TheSixthRanger Oliver]] did something similar in the third season of ''Series/MightyMorphinPowerRangers'', the thing is that when Tommy did it, he was actually hurt by the item because it detected his evil past as the Green Ranger, but then it allowed him to hold it because it sensed him redeeming himself and the entire point of the scene was to show just how far Tommy has come.
* Raven's death threats toward Celestia are a bit too ridiculous to take seriously with the gratuitous capslock and double exclamation marks, especially since she feels the need to send more than one, as if she's worried that Celestia might forget.
* [[spoiler:Twilight's death]] is presumably supposed to be a TearJerker moment, and is built up to be tragic. Too bad it loses all meaning when you realize that Mykan went through with this because he hates [[spoiler:Twilight]] (the fact that the characters proceed to blame [[spoiler:[[VictimBlaming Twilight for her own death]]]] should give that away). Also not helping matters is how Lightning responds to the horrendous act that had just occurred:
--> "And he threw his head high up into the air and let out [[SkywardScream a very loud and mournful NEIGH]]… [[FurryReminder just like the pony he was]]."
* The names of some of Mykan's {{Author Avatar}}s: Grand Ruler Celesto Arron Goldenite and in the Equestria Girls universe, Celesto Grandruler.
** For that matter, "Mykan Stevens". It's bad enough that it's the most blatant of the bunch, but his pony self is named the same thing.
* The "intro" to the first ''Starfleet Humans'' "movie" has the ''Friendship is Magic'' theme start to play before Lightning Dawn interrupts and changes it to the ''Starfleet Humans'' "theme". The AuthorTract in the scene (and Lightning's {{jerkass}}ery) is so blatant it's almost amusing.
* The fact that Celesto Grandruler is a retired millionaire ''astronaut'' who built and owns a high school and part of the island where the ''Starfleet Humans'' stories take place in, and also adopted the human counterparts of Starfleet. And his limousine transforms into a rocket ship. Fiction500 has never been quite so over-the-top, and if this were any other work, Celesto would come off as a ParodySue.
* Human Starla Shine being bullied in the first ''Starfleet Humans'' "movie". It's the typical cliché of [[HollywoodHomely "girl getting bullied despite being incredibly attractive"]] but usually the girl in question has some sort of quirk that would make her a target. Starla doesn't have any of those. There's also the "nickname" the bullies give her, "Little Star". [[SarcasmMode How insulting]].
* In ''Starfleet Humans: Starpops'', the Starfleet Humans and the [=HuMane=] Six forming a twelve person band. They also named their band "[[TitleDrop Starpops]]" ([[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer yes, really]]). They get the name from [[TheScrappy Rhymey's]] [[PainfulRhyme "rhyme"]] about how he comes up with his [[InformedAbility "poetry"]] on [[StrangledByTheRedString Fluttershy]]: [[PainfulRhyme "Oh, it's nothing really, it's not hard, and its really no real dread. When I think of Fluttershy and I look at a Star, it just Pops into my head."]] ([[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer Yes, Mykan actually capitalized "Star" and "Pops".]] Just in case it wasn't obvious enough for you.)
* The villains of ''Starfleet Humans: Starpops'' are the Demonites. They have a cover band with the name ''[[MostDefinitelyNotAVillain D-Man]] [[IncrediblyLamePun Knights]]'' ([[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer SERIOUSLY]]). Their VillainSong is a cover of Michael Jackson's ''Thriller'' ([[NotMakingThisUpDisclaimer SERIOUSLY]]) with '''THIS''' as the chorus ([[RuleOfThree SERIOUSLY]]):
--> We are the D-Man... D... Man... Knights\\
So learn our names just right and be a...[[note]]The individual members never say their names in this song.[[/note]]\\
[[WesternAnimation/HeManAndTheMastersOfTheUniverse He-Man]], [[{{Bifauxnen}} She]][[DudeLooksLikeALady -Man]], [[PainfulRhyme Be-Man]], [[AccidentalInnuendo C-Man]]...\\
D-Man-Knight!!
* The Demonites' second VillainSong is a cover of a parody of Lady Gaga's ''Poker Face'' (with said parody [[CriticalResearchFailure being incorrectly attributed to Lady Gaga]]). No, the fic is ''not'' a StealthParody, but it certainly could pass for one at this point.
