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Wrong Genre Savvy is about characters being wrong in-story - it's not about the reader being misled
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* WrongGenreSavvy: Readers who are used to Sherlock Holmes pastiche will immediately spot 'the gaunt pipe-smoker' in The Greek Invertebrate, who Moran even identifies as wearing a disguise. It's... [[spoiler:Dr. Mabuse, Moriarty's actual archnemesis.]]
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clearer wording - it wasn't clear whether "he" referred to Moran or to Moriarity, the subject of the previous sentence
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** Moran notes that he's very obvious to read--when he's happy he smiles like an idiot and when he's angry he frowns like thunder. People can tell he's mad by how red he gets.
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** Moran notes that he's Moran, by his own admission, is very obvious to read--when he's happy he smiles like an idiot and when he's angry he frowns like thunder. People can tell he's mad by how red he gets.
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* ParentalSubstitute: Moran considers Moriarty to be a father-figure, which tells you how bad his actual dad is--Moran doens't ''like'' Moriarty but he respects his genius, at least.
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* ParentalSubstitute: Moran considers Moriarty to be a father-figure, which tells you how bad his actual dad is--Moran doens't doesn't ''like'' Moriarty but he respects his genius, at least.
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It's "then" not "than"
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* DarkActionGirl: Sophy Kratides, who first is this for the oldest Moriarty brother and than for Moriarty himself.
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* DarkActionGirl: Sophy Kratides, who first is this for the oldest Moriarty brother and than then for Moriarty himself.
