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-->'''Rolas:''' "I'm the captive of a vixen with a fetish for exhibitionism?"
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-->'''Rolas:''' "I'm "[[DeadpanSnarker I'm the captive of a vixen with a fetish for exhibitionism?"exhibitionism?]]"
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* Later, when Rolas is pounding the sniper's [[spoiler: who just shot Melanie]] head against a tree root, he reflects that he's getting a really [[PercussiveTherapy therapeutic rhythm]] going.
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* Later, when Rolas is pounding the sniper's head of a sniper [[spoiler: who just shot Melanie]] head against a tree root, he reflects that he's getting a really [[PercussiveTherapy therapeutic rhythm]] going.
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* Later, when Rolas is pounding the sniper's [[spoiler: who just shot Melanie]] head against a tree root, he reflects that he's getting a really therapeutic rhythm going.
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* Later, when Rolas is pounding the sniper's [[spoiler: who just shot Melanie]] head against a tree root, he reflects that he's getting a really [[PercussiveTherapy therapeutic rhythm rhythm]] going.
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* In ''Shadow of the Red Vixen'', after first making the mistake of visiting South Dakota on the Earth, in the dead of winter, Ali rather acidly notes "This is so no worth it."
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* In ''Shadow of the Red Vixen'', after first making the mistake of visiting South Dakota on the Earth, in the dead of winter, Ali rather acidly notes "This is so no not worth it."
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* In ''Shadow of Her Sins'', after first making the mistake of visiting South Dakota on the Earth, in the dead of winter, Ali rather acidly notes "This is so no worth it."
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* In ''Shadow of Her Sins'', the Red Vixen'', after first making the mistake of visiting South Dakota on the Earth, in the dead of winter, Ali rather acidly notes "This is so no worth it."
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* The Red Vixen is taking Rolas downside as eye candy while she conducts a business deal, dressed up in his [[GoGoEnslavement Cabin Boy]] outfit.
-->'''Red Vixen:''' "Marvelous! Do you know what wearing that says to the world about you?"
-->'''Rolas:''' "I'm the captive of a vixen with a fetish for exhibitionism?"
* Later, when Rolas is pounding the sniper's [[spoiler: who just shot Melanie]] head against a tree root, he reflects that he's getting a really therapeutic rhythm going.
* In ''Shadow of Her Sins'', after first making the mistake of visiting South Dakota on the Earth, in the dead of winter, Ali rather acidly notes "This is so no worth it."
-->'''Red Vixen:''' "Marvelous! Do you know what wearing that says to the world about you?"
-->'''Rolas:''' "I'm the captive of a vixen with a fetish for exhibitionism?"
* Later, when Rolas is pounding the sniper's [[spoiler: who just shot Melanie]] head against a tree root, he reflects that he's getting a really therapeutic rhythm going.
* In ''Shadow of Her Sins'', after first making the mistake of visiting South Dakota on the Earth, in the dead of winter, Ali rather acidly notes "This is so no worth it."
