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-->'''Alan:''' ''[quietly and with forced calm]'' [[PunctuatedForEmphasis Piers... Fletcher... Dervish.]] ''[jovially]'' You're dead ''[destroys the [[ItMakesSenseInContext banana]] he's holding]''
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-->'''Alan:''' ''[quietly and with forced calm]'' [[PunctuatedForEmphasis Piers... Fletcher... Dervish.]] ''[jovially]'' You're dead dead. ''[destroys the [[ItMakesSenseInContext banana]] he's holding]''
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* Alan, after learning that Piers's blabbing has caused his latest scheme to collapse in smoking rubble: "[[PunctuatedForEmphasis Piers.. Fletcher.. Dervish]] (said quietly and with forced calm). You're dead (said rather jovially)." (Destroys the [[ItMakesSenseInContext banana]] he's holding.)
* Alan has been given a cigar which, unbeknownst to him, contains a drug, right before he has to make a speech about healthcare reform. He immediately starts saying that their current system is too kind to people who can't afford good healthcare, and goes on to say (with the exasperated air of explaining something blindingly obvious to a child,) "You see, in the good old days...You were poor...You got ill...And you ''died''." The really funny thing is that while his delivery may have been affected by the drug, the actual content of the speech isn't all that different from what he'd normally say.
* Alan has been given a cigar which, unbeknownst to him, contains a drug, right before he has to make a speech about healthcare reform. He immediately starts saying that their current system is too kind to people who can't afford good healthcare, and goes on to say (with the exasperated air of explaining something blindingly obvious to a child,) "You see, in the good old days...You were poor...You got ill...And you ''died''." The really funny thing is that while his delivery may have been affected by the drug, the actual content of the speech isn't all that different from what he'd normally say.
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* Alan, after learning that Piers's blabbing has caused his latest scheme to collapse in smoking rubble: "[[PunctuatedForEmphasis Piers.. Fletcher.. Dervish]] (said quietly rubble:
-->'''Alan:''' ''[quietly and with forcedcalm). calm]'' [[PunctuatedForEmphasis Piers... Fletcher... Dervish.]] ''[jovially]'' You're dead (said rather jovially)." (Destroys ''[destroys the [[ItMakesSenseInContext banana]] he's holding.)
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* Alan has been given a cigar which, unbeknownst to him, contains a drug, right before he has to make a speech about healthcare reform. He immediately starts saying that their current system is too kind to people who can't afford good healthcare, and goes on to say (with the exasperated air of explaining something blindingly obvious to achild,) child), "You see, in the good old days...You were poor...You got ill...And you ''died''." The really funny thing is that while his delivery may have been affected by the drug, the actual content of the speech isn't all that different from what he'd normally say.
-->'''Alan:''' ''[quietly and with forced
* Alan has been given a cigar which, unbeknownst to him, contains a drug, right before he has to make a speech about healthcare reform. He immediately starts saying that their current system is too kind to people who can't afford good healthcare, and goes on to say (with the exasperated air of explaining something blindingly obvious to a
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* Piers, after he and Alan are sentenced to a Siberian gulag for ninety-nine years: "Good thing we had a sharp lawyer, or they really would have thrown the book at us!"
* Alan, after learning that Piers's blabbing has caused his latest scheme to collapse in smoking rubble: "[[PunctuatedForEmphasis Piers.. Fletcher.. Dervish]] (said quietly and with forced calm). You're dead (said rather jovially)." (Slowly crushes and mangles the banana he's holding.)
* Alan, after learning that Piers's blabbing has caused his latest scheme to collapse in smoking rubble: "[[PunctuatedForEmphasis Piers.. Fletcher.. Dervish]] (said quietly and with forced calm). You're dead (said rather jovially)." (Slowly crushes and mangles the banana he's holding.)
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* Piers, after he and Alan are sentenced to a Siberian gulag for ninety-nine years: "Good thing we had a sharp lawyer, "Lucky our lawyer bargained our plea down to second-degree murder, or they really would have thrown the book at us!"
* Alan, after learning that Piers's blabbing has caused his latest scheme to collapse in smoking rubble: "[[PunctuatedForEmphasis Piers.. Fletcher.. Dervish]] (said quietly and with forced calm). You're dead (said rather jovially)."(Slowly crushes and mangles (Destroys the banana [[ItMakesSenseInContext banana]] he's holding.)
* Alan, after learning that Piers's blabbing has caused his latest scheme to collapse in smoking rubble: "[[PunctuatedForEmphasis Piers.. Fletcher.. Dervish]] (said quietly and with forced calm). You're dead (said rather jovially)."
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* Alan, after learning that Piers's blabbing has caused his latest scheme to collapse in smoking rubble: "[[PunctuatedForEmphasis Piers.. Fletcher.. Dervish]]. Who ''died''." (Slowly crushes and mangles the banana he's holding.)
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* Alan, after learning that Piers's blabbing has caused his latest scheme to collapse in smoking rubble: "[[PunctuatedForEmphasis Piers.. Fletcher.. Dervish]]. Who ''died''.Dervish]] (said quietly and with forced calm). You're dead (said rather jovially)." (Slowly crushes and mangles the banana he's holding.))
* Alan has been given a cigar which, unbeknownst to him, contains a drug, right before he has to make a speech about healthcare reform. He immediately starts saying that their current system is too kind to people who can't afford good healthcare, and goes on to say (with the exasperated air of explaining something blindingly obvious to a child,) "You see, in the good old days...You were poor...You got ill...And you ''died''." The really funny thing is that while his delivery may have been affected by the drug, the actual content of the speech isn't all that different from what he'd normally say.
* Alan has been given a cigar which, unbeknownst to him, contains a drug, right before he has to make a speech about healthcare reform. He immediately starts saying that their current system is too kind to people who can't afford good healthcare, and goes on to say (with the exasperated air of explaining something blindingly obvious to a child,) "You see, in the good old days...You were poor...You got ill...And you ''died''." The really funny thing is that while his delivery may have been affected by the drug, the actual content of the speech isn't all that different from what he'd normally say.
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* Alan, after learning that Piers's blabbing has caused his latest scheme to collapse in smoking rubble: "[[PunctuatedForEmphasis Piers.. Fletcher.. Dervish]]. Who ''died''." {Slowly crushes and mangles the banana he's holding.)
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* Alan, after learning that Piers's blabbing has caused his latest scheme to collapse in smoking rubble: "[[PunctuatedForEmphasis Piers.. Fletcher.. Dervish]]. Who ''died''." {Slowly (Slowly crushes and mangles the banana he's holding.)
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* Piers, after he and Alan are sentenced to a Siberian gulag for ninety-nine years: "Good thing we had a sharp lawyer, or they really would have thrown the book at us!"
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* Piers, after he and Alan are sentenced to a Siberian gulag for ninety-nine years: "Good thing we had a sharp lawyer, or they really would have thrown the book at us!"us!"
* Alan, after learning that Piers's blabbing has caused his latest scheme to collapse in smoking rubble: "[[PunctuatedForEmphasis Piers.. Fletcher.. Dervish]]. Who ''died''." {Slowly crushes and mangles the banana he's holding.)
* Alan, after learning that Piers's blabbing has caused his latest scheme to collapse in smoking rubble: "[[PunctuatedForEmphasis Piers.. Fletcher.. Dervish]]. Who ''died''." {Slowly crushes and mangles the banana he's holding.)
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* Piers, after he and Alan are sentenced to a Siberian gulag for ninety-nine years: "Good thing we had a sharp lawyer, or they really would have thrown the book at us!"
