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* Wax sees a portrait of Breeze, his own ancestor, and notes that he's the type of person Wax would punch in the face immediately upon meeting him. "The type who was certainly guilty of ''something''."
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* Wax sees a portrait of Breeze, his own ancestor, and notes that he's the type of person Wax would punch in the face immediately upon meeting him. "The type who was certainly guilty of ''something''."" Which, all fairness, isn't untrue.
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* Renette dropped off something for Wax with his butler, and gave him orders to slap Wayne. Wayne tries to get the butler to slap his rear, which definitely isn't what she meant.
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* Renette Ranette dropped off something for Wax with his butler, and gave him orders to slap Wayne. Wayne tries to get the butler to slap his rear, which definitely isn't what she meant.
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* [=MeLaan=] meeting Aradel (as a kandra). She uses all sorts of thees and thys, finishing up by telling him he snores loudly. Aradel thinks this is a metaphor about his men being too aggressive, but once he's gone [=MeLaan=] admits that no, he just snores ''really'' loud.
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* [=MeLaan=] meeting Aradel (as a kandra).Kandra). She uses all sorts of thees and thys, finishing up by telling him he snores loudly. Aradel thinks this is a metaphor about his men being too aggressive, but once he's gone [=MeLaan=] admits that no, he just snores ''really'' loud.
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-->''8: 17. Way into the building likely blocked by traffic. Lord Waxillium carries us up to the top floor by Allomancy, which is completely inappropriate and at the same time breathtaking.''
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%%* Wayne. Any scene that focuses on him is almost certain to have the reader laughing.
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%%* [=MeLaan=] is apparently a walking funny moment, especially when she gets to play off Wayne.
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* [=MeLaan=] hasn't read the Words of Founding, the Bible of the god she directly serves.
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* [=MeLaan=] hasn't read the Words of Founding, the Bible holy text of the god she directly serves.
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* Steris being exceedingly GenreSavvy:
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* Steris being exceedingly GenreSavvy:once again demonstrating that she knows ''exactly'' what kind of marriage she's getting into:
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** The next book opens on the morning of Wax and Steris's wedding... and sure enough, someone drops a water tower on the church.
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%%* Wayne. Seriously, [[XJustX just Wayne.]] Any scene that focuses on him is almost certain to have the reader laughing.
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* One of Wayne's POV sections ends with him having an OhCrap moment when an angry mob is turned against him. [[GilliganCut His next POV section opens]] with him somehow ''in charge of the mob that's chasing him''.
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[[OhCrap Wait]].
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'''Steris:''' I have known you for an entire year now, Lord Waxillium. I can accept you for who you are, but I am under no illusions. ''Something'' will happen at out wedding. A villain will burst in, guns firing. Or we'll discover explosives in the altar. Or Father Bin will inexplicably turn out to be an old enemy and attempt to murder you instead of performing the ceremony. It ''will'' happen. I'm merely trying to prepare for it.\\
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'''Steris:''' I have known you for an entire year now, Lord Waxillium. I can accept you for who you are, but I am under no illusions. ''Something'' will happen at out our wedding. A villain will burst in, guns firing. Or we'll discover explosives in the altar. Or Father Bin will inexplicably turn out to be an old enemy and attempt to murder you instead of performing the ceremony. It ''will'' happen. I'm merely trying to prepare for it.\\
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'''Wax:''' (''smiles'') You're serious, aren't you. You're actually thinking of inviting one of my enemies so you can ''plan'' for a disruption.
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'''Wax:''' (''smiles'') You're serious, aren't you. you? You're actually thinking of inviting one of my enemies so you can ''plan'' for a disruption.
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'''Steris:''' I have known you for an entire year now, Lord Waxillium. I can accept you for who you are, but I am under no illusions. ''Something'' will happen at out wedding. A villain will burst in, guns firing. Or we'll discover explosives in the altar. Or Father Bin will inexplicably turn out to be an old enemy and attempt to murder you instead of performing the ceremony. It ''will'' happen. I'm merely trying to prepare for it.
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'''Steris:''' I have known you for an entire year now, Lord Waxillium. I can accept you for who you are, but I am under no illusions. ''Something'' will happen at out wedding. A villain will burst in, guns firing. Or we'll discover explosives in the altar. Or Father Bin will inexplicably turn out to be an old enemy and attempt to murder you instead of performing the ceremony. It ''will'' happen. I'm merely trying to prepare for it.\\
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-->'''Wax:''' [Ranette] won't ruin the wedding, I promise.\\
'''Steris:''' Then who will?\\
'''Wax:''' Excuse me?\\
'''Steris:''' I have known you for an entire year now, Lord Waxillium. I can accept you for who you are, but I am under no illusions. ''Something'' will happen at out wedding. A villain will burst in, guns firing. Or we'll discover explosives in the altar. Or Father Bin will inexplicably turn out to be an old enemy and attempt to murder you instead of performing the ceremony. It ''will'' happen. I'm merely trying to prepare for it.
'''Wax:''' (''smiles'') You're serious, aren't you. You're actually thinking of inviting one of my enemies so you can ''plan'' for a disruption.
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* Wayne. Seriously, [[XJustX just Wayne.]] Any scene that focuses on him is almost certain to have the reader laughing.
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-->One of the large warehouse doors fell outward with a crash, revealing a dozen men. Wax felt a sweeping wave of relief. He hadn't lost his quarry– he'd simply been led into a trap!\\
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* [=MeLaan=] is apparently a walking funny moment, especially when she gets to play off Wayne.
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* [=MeLaan=] is apparently a walking funny moment, especially when she gets to play off Wayne.Wayne.
* Renette dropped off something for Wax with his butler, and gave him orders to slap Wayne. Wayne tries to get the butler to slap his rear, which definitely isn't what she meant.
* Much of Wax's conversation with Harmony. Starting with how upfront Harmony is about everything, while Wax is trying not to freak out over talking to his god.
* Steris scheduled being delayed getting into the party... and Wax taking them up the direct way.
-->''8: 17. Way into the building likely blocked by traffic. Lord Waxillium carries us up to the top floor by Allomancy, which is completely inappropriate and at the same time breathtaking.''
* [=MeLaan=]'s VictoriasSecretCompartment is a little more literal than most, as she can use her shapeshifting to store things in her actual breasts.
* At one point, Aradel opens his cigar case, only to find it empty except for a note from his wife saying she left him a banana at home.
* [=MeLaan=] hasn't read the Words of Founding, the Bible of the god she directly serves.
-->'''[=MeLaan=]:''' Haven't found the time.\\
'''Marasi:''' You're over six centuries old.\\
'''[=MeLaan=]:''' That's the thing about having an eternity, kid. It gets ''really'' easy to procrastinate.
* [=MeLaan=] meeting Aradel (as a kandra). She uses all sorts of thees and thys, finishing up by telling him he snores loudly. Aradel thinks this is a metaphor about his men being too aggressive, but once he's gone [=MeLaan=] admits that no, he just snores ''really'' loud.
* Wax and Wayne have so many {{Noodle Incident}}s.
-->'''Wax:''' You're right, of course.\\
'''Wayne:''' Usually am.\\
'''Wax:''' Except that time on Lessie's birthday.\\
'''Wayne:''' You always have to bring that up, don't you? Honest mistake.\\
'''Wax:''' You put dynamite in the ''oven'', Wayne.
* Wax sees a portrait of Breeze, his own ancestor, and notes that he's the type of person Wax would punch in the face immediately upon meeting him. "The type who was certainly guilty of ''something''."
* Most of the characters from the original trilogy wrote books about their experiences, which became canon to certain religious sects. Except for Dockson. Oh, he wrote a book, but it's considered apocryphal. Not because it's heretical, but because it's so damn boring no one can slog through it.
* [=TenSoon=]'s first meeting with Wax.
-->'''[=TenSoon=]:''' I'm so happy Sazed included me in his little book so that drunk people can curse by my name.\\
'''Wax:''' They... do that?\\
'''[=TenSoon=]:''' Yes. There are... stuffed toys too.\\
'''Wax:''' Oh yeah, Soonie cubs. I've seen those around.\\
''[[=TenSoon=] growls]''
* [=MeLaan=]'s last scene has her strolling out of her cell, [[spoiler:still wearing the governor's face]], grumbling about how hard it is to fake suicide by hanging.
* Renette dropped off something for Wax with his butler, and gave him orders to slap Wayne. Wayne tries to get the butler to slap his rear, which definitely isn't what she meant.
* Much of Wax's conversation with Harmony. Starting with how upfront Harmony is about everything, while Wax is trying not to freak out over talking to his god.
* Steris scheduled being delayed getting into the party... and Wax taking them up the direct way.
-->''8: 17. Way into the building likely blocked by traffic. Lord Waxillium carries us up to the top floor by Allomancy, which is completely inappropriate and at the same time breathtaking.''
* [=MeLaan=]'s VictoriasSecretCompartment is a little more literal than most, as she can use her shapeshifting to store things in her actual breasts.
* At one point, Aradel opens his cigar case, only to find it empty except for a note from his wife saying she left him a banana at home.
* [=MeLaan=] hasn't read the Words of Founding, the Bible of the god she directly serves.
-->'''[=MeLaan=]:''' Haven't found the time.\\
'''Marasi:''' You're over six centuries old.\\
'''[=MeLaan=]:''' That's the thing about having an eternity, kid. It gets ''really'' easy to procrastinate.
* [=MeLaan=] meeting Aradel (as a kandra). She uses all sorts of thees and thys, finishing up by telling him he snores loudly. Aradel thinks this is a metaphor about his men being too aggressive, but once he's gone [=MeLaan=] admits that no, he just snores ''really'' loud.
* Wax and Wayne have so many {{Noodle Incident}}s.
-->'''Wax:''' You're right, of course.\\
'''Wayne:''' Usually am.\\
'''Wax:''' Except that time on Lessie's birthday.\\
'''Wayne:''' You always have to bring that up, don't you? Honest mistake.\\
'''Wax:''' You put dynamite in the ''oven'', Wayne.
* Wax sees a portrait of Breeze, his own ancestor, and notes that he's the type of person Wax would punch in the face immediately upon meeting him. "The type who was certainly guilty of ''something''."
* Most of the characters from the original trilogy wrote books about their experiences, which became canon to certain religious sects. Except for Dockson. Oh, he wrote a book, but it's considered apocryphal. Not because it's heretical, but because it's so damn boring no one can slog through it.
* [=TenSoon=]'s first meeting with Wax.
-->'''[=TenSoon=]:''' I'm so happy Sazed included me in his little book so that drunk people can curse by my name.\\
'''Wax:''' They... do that?\\
'''[=TenSoon=]:''' Yes. There are... stuffed toys too.\\
'''Wax:''' Oh yeah, Soonie cubs. I've seen those around.\\
''[[=TenSoon=] growls]''
* [=MeLaan=]'s last scene has her strolling out of her cell, [[spoiler:still wearing the governor's face]], grumbling about how hard it is to fake suicide by hanging.
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* Speaking of the interviews, Marasi gets propositioned by a foul-mouthed pre-teen boy.
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* Speaking of the interviews, Marasi gets propositioned by a foul-mouthed pre-teen boy.boy.
* [=MeLaan=] is apparently a walking funny moment, especially when she gets to play off Wayne.
* [=MeLaan=] is apparently a walking funny moment, especially when she gets to play off Wayne.
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* While Wax and Marasi are interviewing witnesses and getting nowhere, Wayne manages to slip among the population, accepted as one of their own, and find the thief. Wax just shrugs and says something to the effect of "Yeah, that happens sometimes."
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* While Wax and Marasi are interviewing witnesses and getting nowhere, Wayne manages to slip among the population, get accepted as one of their own, and find the thief. Wax just shrugs and says something to the effect of "Yeah, that happens sometimes."
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* While Wax and Marasi are interviewing witnesses and getting nowhere, Wayne manages to slip among the population, accepted as one of their own, and find the thief. Wax just shrugs and says something to the effect of "Yeah, that happens sometimes."
* Speaking of the interviews, Marasi gets propositioned by a foul-mouthed pre-teen boy.
* Speaking of the interviews, Marasi gets propositioned by a foul-mouthed pre-teen boy.
