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--> '''Bright Eyes:''' Spike, we need him in one piece!\\

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--> ---> '''Bright Eyes:''' Spike, we need him in one piece!\\



--> '''Twilight Sparkle:''' "Rarity, stop gnawing on your hoof like that, it's unsettling!"
--> '''Rarity:''' "[[InLoveWithYourCarnage But just LOOK at him, Twilight.]]"

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--> ---> '''Twilight Sparkle:''' "Rarity, stop gnawing on your hoof like that, it's unsettling!"
--> ---> '''Rarity:''' "[[InLoveWithYourCarnage But just LOOK at him, Twilight.]]"
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* Near the end of the fic, Garble and his gang, having earlier gotten their plots kicked by Spike's {{Kaiju}} SuperMode, are visited by a pony doctor who lists the symptoms of overdosing on fire opal [[DidntThinkThisThrough that the teenage dragons are now going through because they did exactly that]]. The doctor saves Garble for last, describing the BodyHorror of the three-headed dragon's impending... division... into three separate dragons in lurid detail. He ends it off by speculating that Garble's father would probably think that this year-long, agonizing process is punishment enough for his actions (unless he decides to get rid of two of the three dragons Garble is going to split into), upon which all three of Garble's heads "[[OhCrap mingle misery and terror in a single expression]]".

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* Near the end of the fic, Garble and his gang, having earlier gotten their plots kicked by Spike's {{Kaiju}} SuperMode, are visited by a pony doctor who lists the symptoms of overdosing on fire opal [[DidntThinkThisThrough that the teenage dragons are now going through because they did exactly that]]. The doctor saves Garble for last, describing the BodyHorror of the three-headed dragon's impending... division... into three separate dragons in lurid detail.detail; especially with the implications of ''[[GroinAttack what]]'' part of their bodies will be the final area they'll be torn apart at. He ends it off by speculating that Garble's father would probably think that this year-long, agonizing process is punishment enough for his actions (unless he decides to get rid of two of the three dragons Garble is going to split into), upon which all three of Garble's heads "[[OhCrap mingle misery and terror in a single expression]]".
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* Chapter 12: Nyx skulks around the castle pretending to be "Evil-Linda, Mistress of Eviliality" and hamming it up all over the place. She "dies" after eating one of Cadence's freshly baked chocolate chip cookies (because they're good and she's not), and Spike shows up just in time to see her keeled over on the floor and Cadence laughing herself stupid.

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* Chapter 12: Nyx skulks around the castle pretending to be "Evil-Linda, Mistress of Eviliality" and hamming it up all over the place. She "dies" after eating one of Cadence's freshly baked chocolate chip cookies (because they're good and she's not), and Spike shows up just in time to see her keeled over on the floor and Cadence trying to recover from laughing herself stupid. silly.

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* Chapter 12: Evil Linda! Evil Mistress of Eviliality!
* Chapter 13 has Twilight Sparkles' parents arriving in the Crystal Empire to provide emotional support and to make up for lost time with their new Granddaughter; with one of the first things being Night Light promising to tell Nyx stories about her Mother and Uncle when they were foals.

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* Chapter 12: Evil Linda! Evil Nyx skulks around the castle pretending to be "Evil-Linda, Mistress of Eviliality!
Eviliality" and hamming it up all over the place. She "dies" after eating one of Cadence's freshly baked chocolate chip cookies (because they're good and she's not), and Spike shows up just in time to see her keeled over on the floor and Cadence laughing herself stupid.
-->'''Spike''': "Should I just go back out and come back in when this makes sense?"
* Chapter 13 has Twilight Sparkles' Sparkle's parents arriving in the Crystal Empire to provide emotional support and to make up for lost time with their new Granddaughter; with one of the first things being Night Light promising to tell Nyx stories about her Mother mother and Uncle uncle when they were foals.
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* In Chapter 4, Nyx makes a mess on Shining Armor's uniform and tries to use the washing machine herself. A few minutes later, Shining Armor is talking with his Lieutenant when they hear Nyx screaming "FIRE! FIIIIIRE!" As they soon discover, the washing machine was overloaded with detergent and created a big foamy mess. After it's been cleared up:

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* In Chapter 4, Nyx makes a mess on in the royal couple's bedroom and tries to clean everything up herself. Shining Armor's uniform dress uniform, Cadence's ball gown, a bedspread, and tries to use two full boxes of detergent pods go into the washing machine herself. machines. A few minutes later, Shining Armor is talking doing a promotion interview with his Lieutenant a lieutenant when they hear Nyx screaming "FIRE! FIIIIIRE!" As they soon discover, and find the washing machine was overloaded with detergent and created a big foamy mess. After it's been cleared up:laundry room full of soap suds. Once the situation is under control, we get this exchange:
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* Celestia reminisces with Luna in the garden over cake about the good old days: [[RoyalsWhoActuallyDoSomething when they protected the people, slew monsters and, well, actually had something to do.]] Now that Twilight's on her own, she's bereft or anything entertaining, and wishes for some monster to drop out of the sky for old times sake. And then some hapless dragons get teleported in... [[OhCrap and find a very creepy shadow looming over them]] ''hoisting a massive [[CarryABigStick Spiked Mace]]''...

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* Celestia reminisces with Luna in the garden over cake about the good old days: [[RoyalsWhoActuallyDoSomething when they protected the people, slew monsters and, well, actually had something to do.]] Now that Twilight's on her own, she's bereft or of anything entertaining, and wishes for some monster to drop out of the sky for old times sake. And then some hapless dragons get teleported in... [[OhCrap and find a very creepy shadow looming over them]] ''hoisting a massive [[CarryABigStick Spiked Mace]]''...
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''[[Characters/FriendshipIsMagicApplejack An orange earth filly with a golden mane and an apple cutie mark]], [[NiceHat she was wearing a stetson]], [[YouthfulFreckles freckles on her cheeks]], [[AmazonianBeauty shapely yet muscular]], had to be a farm girl, she had that look about her-- a [[Characters/FriendshipIsMagicPinkiePie cute pink earth filly with a curly mane and a huge smile]], [[GenkiGirl all perky and bubbly]]-- [[Characters/FriendshipIsMagicRarity whoa, a dazzling white unicorn mare with a purple mane]] [[TheBeautifulElite and serious high-class looks, definitely high maintenance, check out that diamond cutie mark]]-- [[Characters/FriendshipIsMagicRainbowDash a sleek blue pegasus with a lightning bolt cutie mark and a rainbow mane]], had to be an athlete of some kind, you could tell she worked out-- [[Characters/FriendshipIsMagicFluttershy oh gosh, a yellow pegasus filly with a waterfall of pink mane and the biggest blue eyes he'd ever seen--]]''\\

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''[[Characters/FriendshipIsMagicApplejack An orange earth filly with a golden mane and an apple cutie mark]], [[NiceHat she was wearing a stetson]], stetson, [[YouthfulFreckles freckles on her cheeks]], [[AmazonianBeauty shapely yet muscular]], had to be a farm girl, she had that look about her-- a [[Characters/FriendshipIsMagicPinkiePie cute pink earth filly with a curly mane and a huge smile]], [[GenkiGirl all perky and bubbly]]-- [[Characters/FriendshipIsMagicRarity whoa, a dazzling white unicorn mare with a purple mane]] [[TheBeautifulElite and serious high-class looks, definitely high maintenance, check out that diamond cutie mark]]-- [[Characters/FriendshipIsMagicRainbowDash a sleek blue pegasus with a lightning bolt cutie mark and a rainbow mane]], had to be an athlete of some kind, you could tell she worked out-- [[Characters/FriendshipIsMagicFluttershy oh gosh, a yellow pegasus filly with a waterfall of pink mane and the biggest blue eyes he'd ever seen--]]''\\

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* Near the end of the fic, Garble and his gang, having earlier gotten their plots kicked by Spike's {{Kaiju}} SuperMode, are visited by a pony doctor who lists the symptoms of overdosing on fire opal [[DidntThinkThisThrough that the teenage dragons are now going through because they did exactly that]]. The doctor saves Garble for last, describing the BodyHorror of the three-headed dragon's impending... division... into three separate dragons in lurid detail. He ends it off by speculating that Garble's father would probably think that this year-long, agonizing process is punishment enough for his actions (unless he decides to get rid of two of the three dragons Garble is going to split into), upon which all three of Garble's heads "[[OhCrap mingle misery and terror in a single expression]]".
--> "Congratulations, Mr. Garble," [the doctor] said over his shoulder. "It's going to be triplets."



-->'''Pinkie Pie:''' "Yeah, I used to have a special superrific party for each new pony who came to Ponyville. But now with the Princesses living here there's heaps and heaps of new ponies every single day! [[PunctuatedForEmphasis Every-- single-- day!]] It's awful! Twilight was right. There's just too many ponies for me to throw a party for every single one. There's just too many ponies! ''Too, many, PONIEEEES! WAAAAH!'' [[MoodWhiplash ...So now I just throw one big party once a month for all the new ponies in Ponyville!]]"
* Willow arrives at the Ponyville schoolhouse fully expecting to encounter students who will tease/bully him because he's a thestral. What he finds is a class of not just earth ponies, pegasi, and unicorns, but also a sea pony (Doubloon), a crystal pony (Bright Eyes), a changeling (Flitter), a zebra (Ziggy), a dragon (Spike), and an alicorn (Nyx).

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-->'''Pinkie Pie:''' "Yeah, I used to have a special superrific party for each new pony who came to Ponyville. But now with the Princesses living here there's heaps and heaps of new ponies every single day! [[PunctuatedForEmphasis Every-- single-- day!]] It's awful! Twilight was right. There's just too many ponies for me to throw a party for every single one. There's just too many ponies! ''Too, many, PONIEEEES! WAAAAH!'' [[MoodWhiplash ...So now I just just]] [[StatingTheSimpleSolution throw one big party once a month month]] [[CuttingTheKnot for all the new ponies in Ponyville!]]"
* Willow arrives at the Ponyville schoolhouse fully expecting to encounter students who will tease/bully him because he's a thestral. What he finds is a class of not just earth ponies, pegasi, and unicorns, [[FantasyKitchenSink but also a sea pony (Doubloon), a crystal pony (Bright Eyes), a changeling (Flitter), a zebra (Ziggy), a dragon (Spike), and an alicorn (Nyx).(Nyx)]].
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-->''(Willow nods yes)

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-->''(Willow nods yes)yes)''
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* Willow was fully expecting that Cheerilees' School will be filled with students that will tease/bully him because he's a Thestral... only to look up and see that the classroom he's in is filled with Earth Ponies, Unicorns, Pegasi, Sea Ponies, Crystal Ponies, Changelings, Zebras, Dragons, and Alicorns.

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* Willow was arrives at the Ponyville schoolhouse fully expecting that Cheerilees' School will be filled with to encounter students that who will tease/bully him because he's a Thestral... only to look up thestral. What he finds is a class of not just earth ponies, pegasi, and see that the classroom he's in is filled with Earth Ponies, Unicorns, Pegasi, Sea Ponies, Crystal Ponies, Changelings, Zebras, Dragons, unicorns, but also a sea pony (Doubloon), a crystal pony (Bright Eyes), a changeling (Flitter), a zebra (Ziggy), a dragon (Spike), and Alicorns.an alicorn (Nyx).



-->'''Willow:''' (Nods yes)
-->'''Flitter:''' "Missed it by ''thaaaat'' much."

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-->'''Willow:''' (Nods -->''(Willow nods yes)
-->'''Flitter:''' ''(holds hooves a tiny bit apart)'' "Missed it by ''thaaaat'' much."

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'''Nyx''': Nothing. (''Shining Armor approaches the group. Diamond and Silver start fangirling... but then their faces fall when Shining gives Nyx an affectionate noogie'')\\
'''Shining Armor''': Hey, Nyxy Sticks. (''points at Diamond and Silver'') Friends of yours? \\

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'''Nyx''': Nothing. \\
(''Shining Armor approaches the group. Diamond and Silver start fangirling... but then their faces fall when Shining gives Nyx an affectionate noogie'')\\
'''Shining Armor''': Hey, Nyxy Sticks. (''points at Diamond and Silver'') Friends of yours? \\

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* Chapter 33, the last chapter, uses the very last few paragraphs of the story to bring in a BrickJoke to a tremendous and hilarious landing. Essentially, Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon despise Nyx. They also have a huge crush on Shining Armor, Nyx's uncle. They don't know he is her uncle. This leads to the following scene as they await Shining Armor's appearance at Ponyvile train station:

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* Chapter 33, the last chapter, uses the very last few paragraphs of the story to bring in a BrickJoke to a tremendous and hilarious landing. Essentially, Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon despise Nyx. They also have a huge crush on Shining Armor, Nyx's uncle. They don't know he is her uncle. uncle or that he's married, and she's made a Pinkie Promise not to tell anypony about their crush or tease them over it. This leads to the following scene as they await Shining Armor's appearance at Ponyvile Ponyville train station:



'''Diamond Tiara''': Go away, weirdo, we don't want Prince Shining to see us standing around a loser like you!\\

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'''Silver Spoon''': Oh shut up, Ninny Nyx. You don't know anything. He's the dreamiest, hottest, hunkiest stud of a Prince in Canterlot --\\
'''Diamond Tiara''': In the Crystal Empire -- In Equestria!\\
'''Silver Spoon''': In the Empire OR in Equestria.\\
'''Diamond Tiara''': Go away, weirdo, we weirdo. We don't want Prince Shining to see us standing around a loser like you!\\



'''Diamond Tiara''': (''noticing Nyx is on the verge of bursting into laughter'') What is wrong with you?\\
'''Nyx''': Nothing. (''Shining Armor approaches the group. Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon start fangirling... but then their faces fall when Shining gives Nyx an affectionate noogy'')\\
'''Shining Armor''': Hey Nixie stix. (''points at Diamond and Silver'') Friends of yours? \\

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'''Pinkie Pie:''' ''(distantly, reminding Nyx of her promise)'' Foreverrrrrrrrr -- !\\
'''Nyx''': D-Didn't you read the magazine Sweetiebelle sent you?\\
'''Diamond Tiara''': Not a chance. I saw your ugly face on the front page and threw it right in the fireplace -- (''noticing Nyx is on the verge of bursting into laughter'') What -- what is wrong ''wrong'' with you?\\
'''Nyx''': Nothing. (''Shining Armor approaches the group. Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon start fangirling... but then their faces fall when Shining gives Nyx an affectionate noogy'')\\
noogie'')\\
'''Shining Armor''': Hey Nixie stix.Hey, Nyxy Sticks. (''points at Diamond and Silver'') Friends of yours? \\



'''Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon''': NIECE???!!! ''[[SkywardScream AAAAAAUUUUUGHHGHHGHG!!!]]''


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'''Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon''': NIECE???!!! ''[[SkywardScream AAAAAAUUUUUGHHGHHGHG!!!]]''

'''''NIECE?''''' ''(cue a double SkywardScream of rage)''

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* The kids accidentally taking a ride through the castle's rainwater drainage system.
* [[ItMakesSenseInContext This little number]]:
--> "Spike! Stop punching that koi fish in the face!"
--> "He started it!"

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* The kids accidentally taking a ride through the castle's rainwater drainage system.
* [[ItMakesSenseInContext This little number]]:
system. They land in one of Celetia's koi ponds, and since this species is a mortal enemy of dragons in the Nyxverse, we get this:
--> "Spike! '''Celestia:''' Spike! Stop punching that koi fish in the face!"
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--> "He '''Spike:''' He started it!"it!
** Followed by Spike's parting words to the fish as Celestia breaks up the fight: "Next time, pal -- I'm bringin' my sautee pan."
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* The kids' tour of the castle kitchens, conducted at ''very'' high speed by Nyx while being chased by a pack of angry chefs.

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* The kids' tour of the castle kitchens, conducted at ''very'' high speed by Nyx while being chased by a pack of angry chefs. They steal a batch of tarts along the way, taking particular note of the fact that somepony had deliberately left the tray unguarded and put it at just the right height for them.

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** Twilight's conversation with the lignomorph (a being of living stone), with it being completely oblivious to the fact she can't understand it. (Bonus: the Lignomorph's dialogue is all lyrics from Spike Jones' "Hawaiian War Chant.")
* The kids accidentally taking a ride through Canterlot's drains.

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** Twilight's conversation with the lignomorph (a being of living stone), with it being completely oblivious to the fact she can't understand it. (Bonus: the Lignomorph's dialogue is all consists entirely of lyrics from Spike Jones' "Hawaiian War Chant.")
* The kids' tour of the castle kitchens, conducted at ''very'' high speed by Nyx while being chased by a pack of angry chefs.
* The kids accidentally taking a ride through Canterlot's drains.the castle's rainwater drainage system.
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* During the wedding, Sundiver starts crying as hard as any of Twilight's hoofmaidens, to the disgust of Lightning Blitz.

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* Upon finding Level Head's tomb, Twilight starts reading the journals that describe the true Hearthwarming Day story. At one point in the story, Level Head starts discussing how [[spoiler:his grandson Smart Cookie basically had a threesome with Private Pansy and Clover the Clever in the story.]] Twilight then mentions that somebody had scribbled out the juicier details and written '''LIES, ALL LIES''' over it.
* Celestia reminisces with Luna in the garden over cake about the good old days: [[RoyalsWhoActuallyDoSomething when they protected the people, slew monsters and, well, actually had something to do.]] Now that Twilight's on her own, she's bereft or anything entertaining, and wishes for some monster to drop out of the sky for old times sake. [[spoiler: And then some hapless dragons get teleported in... [[OhCrap and find a very creepy shadow looming over them]] ''hoisting a massive [[CarryABigStick Spiked]] [[DropTheHammer Mace]]''...]]

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* Upon finding Level Head's tomb, Twilight starts reading the journals that describe the true Hearthwarming Day story. At one point in the story, Level Head starts discussing how [[spoiler:his his grandson Smart Cookie basically had a threesome with Private Pansy and Clover the Clever in the story.]] story. Twilight then mentions that somebody had scribbled out the juicier details and written '''LIES, ALL LIES''' over it.
* Celestia reminisces with Luna in the garden over cake about the good old days: [[RoyalsWhoActuallyDoSomething when they protected the people, slew monsters and, well, actually had something to do.]] Now that Twilight's on her own, she's bereft or anything entertaining, and wishes for some monster to drop out of the sky for old times sake. [[spoiler: And then some hapless dragons get teleported in... [[OhCrap and find a very creepy shadow looming over them]] ''hoisting a massive [[CarryABigStick Spiked]] [[DropTheHammer Spiked Mace]]''...]]



** [[spoiler: This [[HilariousInHindsight gets even funnier]] when Luna and Celestia later reveal that they've been [[MasterOfDisguise disguised as each other]] all night.]]

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** [[spoiler: This [[HilariousInHindsight gets even funnier]] when Luna and Celestia later reveal that they've been [[MasterOfDisguise disguised as each other]] all night.]]



* The villain lists these NoodleImplements to fix his spell. ([[spoiler: At least one Changeling filly disguised as Nyx stole one of the necessary crystals.]])
-->'''[[spoiler:[[UnfortunateName Sundae Sprinkles]]]]''': Get me three of the lesser amethyst crystals, a tourmaline, some duct tape and a banana!

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* The villain lists these NoodleImplements to fix his spell. ([[spoiler: At (At least one Changeling filly disguised as Nyx stole one of the necessary crystals.]])
-->'''[[spoiler:[[UnfortunateName Sundae Sprinkles]]]]''':
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-->'''Sundae Sprinkles''':
Get me three of the lesser amethyst crystals, a tourmaline, some duct tape and a banana!



* Princess Luna's tongue lashing of Triton [[spoiler: for making poor Nyx believe she killed hundreds when she caused Eternal Night in the original story. Very much needed after Nyx's emotional breakdown.]]
** Followed by Triton giving his word that [[spoiler:no one was harmed]] and making a Pinkie Promise to back it up. Seeing the others' stunned reactions at his knowledge of this, he just shrugs and says, "Word gets around."
* Luna handling the UnresolvedSexualTension between Celestia and Triton by [[spoiler: yanking a plant out of its pot, throwing it at his head, and spelling out, at the top of her lungs, how Celestia feels about him]].
* The Mane Six's reactions to finding out that [[spoiler:the planet is a starship]].
-->'''Rainbow Dash (After finding out about [[spoiler: the planet being a starship]]):''' How fast are we going?\\

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* Princess Luna's tongue lashing of Triton [[spoiler: for making poor Nyx believe she killed hundreds when she caused Eternal Night in the original story. Very much needed after Nyx's emotional breakdown.]]
**
Followed by Triton giving his word that [[spoiler:no no one was harmed]] harmed and making a Pinkie Promise to back it up. Seeing the others' stunned reactions at his knowledge of this, he just shrugs and says, "Word gets around."
* Luna handling the UnresolvedSexualTension between Celestia and Triton by [[spoiler: yanking a plant out of its pot, throwing it at his head, and spelling out, at the top of her lungs, how Celestia feels about him]].
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* The Mane Six's reactions to finding out that [[spoiler:the the planet is a starship]].
starship.
-->'''Rainbow Dash (After finding out about [[spoiler: the planet being a starship]]):''' starship):''' How fast are we going?\\



* Pinkie and her reaction to finding out that [[spoiler: she essentially missed five of Twilight's birthdays]].

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* Pinkie and her reaction to finding out that [[spoiler: she essentially missed five of Twilight's birthdays]].birthdays.



* [[spoiler:Nyx finding out that Songhili is the Selkie king, and his proposal for a water-slide transportation system for his people - which Celestia and Luna approve on the spot]].
* [[spoiler: How Celestia reacts when she figures out that Twilight Sparkle's "Marriage vows" are actually a garbled ascendancy spell, and she's about to trigger a massive spellsurge in a room full of epic magic artifacts and nigh-cosmic entities. It ends up turning Ink Spot into an alicorn!]]

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* [[spoiler:Nyx Nyx finding out that Songhili is the Selkie king, and his proposal for a water-slide transportation system for his people - which Celestia and Luna approve on the spot]].
spot.
* [[spoiler: How Celestia reacts when she figures out that Twilight Sparkle's "Marriage vows" are actually a garbled ascendancy spell, and she's about to trigger a massive spellsurge in a room full of epic magic artifacts and nigh-cosmic entities. It ends up turning Ink Spot into an alicorn!]]alicorn!
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** Followed by Triton giving his word that [[spoiler:no one was harmed]] and making a Pinkie Promise to back it up. Seeing the others' stunned reactions at his knowledge of this, he just shrugs and says, "Word gets around."
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* Twilight unveils the prototype Cosmic Synchronizer, which stands halfway to the ceiling of the meeting chamber. Describing it as a quarter-scale proof-of-concept model, she gets this response:
-->'''Zheng He:''' That thing is a model?\\
'''Pinkie Pie:''' You should see her ship in a bottle collection! ''[cue roaring laughter from the audience]''
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** The tea party for Discord, Nyx, and Pinkie Pie develops its own kind of silliness, including an industrial-strength rubber chicken that squaws loudly enough to blow a guard's helmet off - followed by said guard asking if he can have one.

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** The tea party for Discord, Nyx, and Pinkie Pie develops its own kind of silliness, including an industrial-strength rubber chicken that squaws squawks loudly enough to blow a guard's helmet off - followed by said guard asking if he can have one.

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