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* TheReveal that the souls of the four scientists contained within the Evas are completely lucid and aware of their surroundings... and that they also have [=WiFi=]. Kasumi decided to dress up her mental landscape like an English countryside manor, and Naoko has taken to hanging out there with her so they can gripe together about the old men who set the whole thing up (they would include Yui and Kyoko but Yui is too busy sulking and Kyoko is still fighting her delusions). Also the fact that Kasumi likes to binge watch TV series on stream.
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* Mari attempting DynamicEntry against [[SinisterGeometry Ramiel]], and failing miserably. Even Ramiel [[DoubleTake has to stop for a moment to figure out what happened]]. The whole moment comes off almost exactly like a WesternAnimation/LooneyTunes bit.
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* Mari attempting DynamicEntry against [[SinisterGeometry Ramiel]], and [[GlassSmackAndSlide failing miserably.miserably]]. Even Ramiel [[DoubleTake has to stop for a moment to figure out what happened]]. The whole moment comes off almost exactly like a WesternAnimation/LooneyTunes bit.
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'''Kasumi: Mari, if we could ''never do that again'', that'd be just fab.'''
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-->'''Ritsuko:''' Did she just try to headbutt the angel?\\Angel?\\
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* Mari attempting DynamicEntry against [[SinisterGeometry Ramiel]], and failing miserably. Even Ramiel [[DoubleTake has to stop for a moment to figure out what happened]]. The whole moment comes off almost exactly like a WesternAnimation/LooneyTunes bit.
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* Mari attempting DynamicEntry against [[SinisterGeometry Ramiel]], and failing miserably. The moment comes off almost exactly like a WesternAnimation/LooneyTunes bit.
-->'''Ritsuko:''' Did she just try to headbutt the angel?\\
'''Asuka:''' She's Scouse, they do that.\\
'''Kasumi: Mari, if we could ''never do that again'', that'd be just fab.'''
-->'''Ritsuko:''' Did she just try to headbutt the angel?\\
'''Asuka:''' She's Scouse, they do that.\\
'''Kasumi: Mari, if we could ''never do that again'', that'd be just fab.'''
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* Gendo, under stress, beginning to revert to his pre-Yui personality -- namely, a troublemaking hard drinker. Upon reading a newspaper article alleging that Gendo instigated a massive brawl at a karaoke bar, Shinji finds himself actually ''admiring'' him.
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* Gendo, under stress, beginning to revert to his pre-Yui personality -- namely, a troublemaking hard drinker. Upon reading a newspaper article alleging that Gendo instigated a massive brawl at a karaoke bar, bar[[note]]which he really did, albeit not entirely on purpose[[/note]], Shinji finds himself actually ''admiring'' him.
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-->"Fuck! What gives him the right to make me hate him for so long only to suddenly do something ''totally awesome?'' Be consistent, damn you!"
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'''Shinji:''' Ffffffff...\\
'''Rei:''' Either that was a yes, or Shinji has sprung a leak.\\
'''Shinji:''' Fuck! What gives him the right to make me hate him for so long only to suddenly do something ''totally awesome?'' Be consistent, damn you!"
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* Gendo, under stress, beginning to revert to his pre-Yui personality -- namely, a troublemaking hard drinker. Upon reading a newspaper article alleging that Gendo instigated a massive brawl at a karaoke bar, Shinji finds himself actually ''admiring'' him.
-->"Fuck! What gives him the right to make me hate him for so long only to suddenly do something ''totally awesome?'' Be consistent, damn you!"
-->"Fuck! What gives him the right to make me hate him for so long only to suddenly do something ''totally awesome?'' Be consistent, damn you!"
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* Shinji getting the feeling he is being plotted about, and then deciding not to worry about it.
--> ''Shinji briefly wondered where the sudden feeling of inescapable doom was coming from, before putting it down to his inescapable doom and turning over to go to sleep.''
--> ''Shinji briefly wondered where the sudden feeling of inescapable doom was coming from, before putting it down to his inescapable doom and turning over to go to sleep.''
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* When Asuka wakes up from the time reboot, she goes into a giddy high and revels in it. Some of the wording makes it seem like she's going to delve into a [[MusicalNumber song cue]].musical number.
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* When Asuka wakes up from the time reboot, she goes into a giddy high and revels in it. Some of the wording makes it seem like she's going to delve into a [[MusicalNumber song cue]].
-->A desperate, slightly hysterical giggle bubbled out before she could stop it. "It's a do-over," she breathed. "It's a motherfucking do-over!" She fairly bounced out of bed and snatched up her dressing gown. "I'm gonna do it right this time," she muttered, throwing open the curtains. "I'm gonna have the best damn synch score ever now. Well... I can live with tied for first place with Shinji, I guess." She filled her electric kettle from the small wash-basin in one corner of her room. "Heh. I think I'll work on synchronising a little better with him too, after I beat the crap out of his asshole dad... Maybe I can defuse Commander Creepybeard's precious blue-haired tykebomb too? Well, she is kinda the baka's sister, wouldn't hurt to try being nice to her either way. In fact, screw it. If my life's going to turn into the biggest fanfiction cliche ever I'm just gonna roll with it and be the ultimate Mary-Sue, because I have earned some verdammt wish fulfilment in my life... And I really need to raise my blood sugar and blood caffeine levels because that sounded crazy even to myself."
-->A desperate, slightly hysterical giggle bubbled out before she could stop it. "It's a do-over," she breathed. "It's a motherfucking do-over!" She fairly bounced out of bed and snatched up her dressing gown. "I'm gonna do it right this time," she muttered, throwing open the curtains. "I'm gonna have the best damn synch score ever now. Well... I can live with tied for first place with Shinji, I guess." She filled her electric kettle from the small wash-basin in one corner of her room. "Heh. I think I'll work on synchronising a little better with him too, after I beat the crap out of his asshole dad... Maybe I can defuse Commander Creepybeard's precious blue-haired tykebomb too? Well, she is kinda the baka's sister, wouldn't hurt to try being nice to her either way. In fact, screw it. If my life's going to turn into the biggest fanfiction cliche ever I'm just gonna roll with it and be the ultimate Mary-Sue, because I have earned some verdammt wish fulfilment in my life... And I really need to raise my blood sugar and blood caffeine levels because that sounded crazy even to myself."
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* Shinji always hated the [[LatexSpaceSuit plugsuits]], now that he knows what's coming, he thinks he ought to take a stand. His reason? Nobody should have to confront Armageddon in a gimp suit.
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* How does Maya decide how to phrase her new relationship with Ritsuko? "''Senpai'' noticed me, nyaa!" While wearing a collar.
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-->''I really have elevated self-sabotage to the level of a fine art, haven't I? she reflected wryly.''
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* When Asuka catches Shinji staring at Rei she gets jealous... and then she wonders who she is jealous of:
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* Most conversations between the pilots drip with sarcasm.
* Rei slapping Gendo and then telling him all his plans would be for nothing.
* ''"Maya, do you want to be my torrid lesbian affair?"''
* Shortly after Maya asks: "What the hell did just happen?"
* Shinji defines Instrumentality how "Whatever the hell happened."
* Touji was one of the returnees. Sakura did not return but she knows about the time-travel because her brother is terrible at thinking before talking when he wakes up.
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* Most conversations between the pilots drip with sarcasm.
* Rei slapping Gendo and then telling him all his plans would be for nothing.
* ''"Maya, do you want to be my torrid lesbian affair?"''
* Shortly after Maya asks: "What the hell did just happen?"
* Shinji defines Instrumentality how "Whatever the hell happened."
* Touji was one of the returnees. Sakura did not return but she knows about the time-travel because her brother is terrible at thinking before talking when he wakes up.
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