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* BrickJoke: At the start, your mother says she will be making orange peels and shmare for dinner, leading you to wonder what shmare is. In one ending, [[spoiler:you are excited to head home and eat dinner, because you've been dying to know what shmare is]].
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* StableTimeLoop: If you actually manage to make it back in time and [[spoiler:lie to your past self about your identity, you end up turning into your younger self and taking the forest path. And losing all your adult memories.]] Making it like the entire thing never happened.
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* StableTimeLoop: If you actually manage to make it back in time and [[spoiler:lie to your past self about your identity, you end up turning into your younger self and taking the forest path. And losing all your adult memories.]] Making it like the entire thing never happened. [[spoiler:Except your body is still that of an adult's, which makes winning a basketball game against children quite easy]].
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* [[AmicableExes Amicably Divorced]]: Pancakes Rocky used to be your stepdad, and is apparently on good enough terms with the family that you consider calling him to ask for pancake batter. Y'know, to fill the batter crate.
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* [[AmicableExes Amicably Divorced]]: Pancakes Rocky used to be your stepdad, stepdad (though, as noted above, it isn't clear if there was a divorce or if he just died), and is apparently on good enough terms with the family that you consider calling him to ask for pancake batter. Y'know, to fill the batter crate.
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* NoSympathy: Whenever Zoe brings up her MissingMom the protagonist callously ignores her, and so does pretty much everyone else she brings it up to. Since the protagonist is "[[SecondPersonNarration you]]" this becomes a case of ProtagonistCenteredMorality.
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* NoSympathy: Whenever Zoe brings up her MissingMom the protagonist callously ignores her, and so does pretty much everyone else she brings it up to.else. Since the protagonist is "[[SecondPersonNarration you]]" this becomes a case of ProtagonistCenteredMorality.
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* TheFutureWillBeBetter: A view Dr. Backpack seems to hold. It really doesn't take a lot for him to convince the protagonist to his viewpoint, either.
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* TheFutureWillBeBetter: A view Dr. Backpack seems to hold. It really doesn't take a lot for him to convince the protagonist you to his viewpoint, either.
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* SpaceX: What's the primary method of interstellar transport in the future? Trains. Space Trains, [[SunlessSkies Sunless Skies-style]]. Complete with [[{{Pun}} Space Stations]] and conductors. You can hijack one of your own if you time travel forwards instead of backwards.
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* SpaceX: What's the primary method of interstellar transport in the future? Trains. Space Trains, [[SunlessSkies [[VideoGame/SunlessSkies Sunless Skies-style]]. Complete with [[{{Pun}} Space Stations]] and conductors. You can hijack one of your own if you time travel forwards instead of backwards.
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* BatterUp: Your weapon of choice in the Bad Future route.
-->''Oh, yeah, you think. You grip the baseball bat tightly, and hold it high above your head. Those vampires are in for a beating.''
-->''Oh, yeah, you think. You grip the baseball bat tightly, and hold it high above your head. Those vampires are in for a beating.''
* CoolTrain: You and Zoe can hijack one in one possible route if you end up time travelling to the future. It goes to Mars, meaning it also pulls double duty as a CoolStarship.
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* NoSympathy: Whenever Zoe brings up her MissingMom the protagonist callously ignores her. Since the protagonist is "[[SecondPersonNarration you]]" this becomes a case of ProtagonistCenteredMorality.
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* NoSympathy: Whenever Zoe brings up her MissingMom the protagonist callously ignores her.her, and so does pretty much everyone else she brings it up to. Since the protagonist is "[[SecondPersonNarration you]]" this becomes a case of ProtagonistCenteredMorality.
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* SpaceX: What's the primary method of interstellar transport in the future? Trains. Space Trains, [[SunlessSkies Sunless Skies-style]]. Complete with [[{{Pun}} Space Stations]] and conductors. You can hijack one of your own if you time travel forwards instead of backwards.
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* TheFutureWillBeBetter: A view Dr. Backpack seems to hold. It really doesn't take a lot for him to convince the protagonist to his viewpoint, either.
-->''"The past tastes lousy," Dr. Backpack says. "It's all farms and leather chairs. What if you went to the future instead?"''
-->''"The past tastes lousy," Dr. Backpack says. "It's all farms and leather chairs. What if you went to the future instead?"''
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* UnusualEuphemism: Going to the bathroom is described as "spraying yellow".
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* UnusualEuphemism: Going to the bathroom is described as "spraying yellow". On a similar level of unusualness, milk is described as a "cow potion".
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** Zoe's husband's name is not George. This doesn't stop you from calling him that.
--->''"Thanks, George," you say happily. You can tell from the look on his face that that's not his name.''
--->''"Thanks, George," you say happily. You can tell from the look on his face that that's not his name.''
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* HighSchoolSweethearts: Directly name-dropped by the narrator as the person you'll eventually marry in the route where you successfully go back in time and replace your past self. [[KissingCousins It's heavily implied to be Zoe.]]
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* HighSchoolSweethearts: [[HighSchoolSweethearts High School Sweetheart]]: Directly name-dropped by the narrator as the person you'll eventually marry in the route where you successfully go back in time and replace your past self. [[KissingCousins It's heavily implied to be Zoe.]]
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---->''You pick up your lucky ball, and pass the shot to Brad. He calmly throws it into a zombie's head and scores a point in your heart. Organs and fluid splash on your feet. You glance at him lovingly. "I wish lips were so easily smacked," he grins. You can jerk off to his winning smile later.''
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* FatherIWantToMarryMyBrother: You're a bit ''too'' fond of your cousin Zoe, and at one point outright contemplate having a baby with her.
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* FatherIWantToMarryMyBrother: You're a bit ''too'' fond of your cousin Zoe, and at one point outright contemplate having a baby with her. She doesn't seem entirely opposed, merely asking you to hold on until you're no longer in a zombie-filled forest.
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* HenpeckedHusband: You, in the BadFuture. Your wife spends all day away from home playing golf, while you're stuck at home taking care of your horrible vampire stepchildren.
* HighSchoolSweethearts: Directly name-dropped by the narrator as the person you'll eventually marry in the route where you successfully go back in time and replace your pastself.self. [[KissingCousins It's heavily implied to be Zoe.]]
* HighSchoolSweethearts: Directly name-dropped by the narrator as the person you'll eventually marry in the route where you successfully go back in time and replace your past
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** You think that Zoe smells really, really nice. Sometimes you even bump into her on purpose.
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TomboyishBaseballCap: Zoe does skateboard tricks, karate-kicks zombies, is prone to getting into fights, and, of course, wears a baseball cap. Backwards. She fits this trope to a T.
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* TomboyishBaseballCap: Zoe does skateboard tricks, karate-kicks zombies, is prone to getting into fights, and, of course, wears a baseball cap. Backwards. She fits this trope to a T.
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TomboyishBaseballCap: Zoe does skateboard tricks, karate-kicks zombies, is prone to getting into fights, and, of course, wears a baseball cap. Backwards. She fits this trope to a T.
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* BlatantLies: If your future self takes your old self's place you pass off the changes to your appearance as a growth spurt, and everyone believes you. This is despite the fact that you presumably now look like a thirty-year-old rather than a kid.
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* BlatantLies: If your future self takes your old self's place you pass off the changes to your appearance as a growth spurt, and everyone believes you. [[FailedASpotCheck This is despite the fact that you presumably now look like a thirty-year-old rather than a kid.]]
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-->''"How may I help?" you ask you." You hang up immediately because you know you won't be able to help because if you could you wouldn't have needed to call the operator in the first place. "I wasn't any help," you tell Zoe in a panic.''
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-->''"How may I help?" you ask you." You hang up immediately because you know you won't be able to help because if you could you wouldn't have needed to call the operator in the first place. "I wasn't any help," you tell Zoe in a panic.''
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-->''"How may I help?" you ask you." You hang up immediately because you know you won't be able to help because if you could you wouldn't have needed to call the operator in the first place. "I wasn't any help," you tell Zoe in a panic."
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-->''"How may I help?" you ask you." You hang up immediately because you know you won't be able to help because if you could you wouldn't have needed to call the operator in the first place. "I wasn't any help," you tell Zoe in a panic."''
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--->''You glance at him lovingly... You can jerk off to his winning smile later.\\
She has the most amazing scent you've ever seen. Sometimes you bump into her on purpose.''
She has the most amazing scent you've ever seen. Sometimes you bump into her on purpose.''
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