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* AdultFear: Morningstar remembers the last human in Equestria inspired the first intoxication-related cutie mark, so she fears Voltaire, as the next human in Equestria, might similarly influence her son down a harmful life path.
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* SlidingScaleOfGenderInequality: Equestria is Level 6. Though Voltaire, a man, is the protagonist of the story, Equestria is female-dominated. Traditionally, a husband takes his wife’s surname and a child takes their mother’s surname. Princess Celestia rules the land and is worshipped like a goddess, and adult men seem to be lower on the social totem pole than teenage girls. However, men can still hold positions of power, and nobody outright says men are lesser than women. Becomes level 7 or 8 when Genevieve takes over, and men are made to StayInTheKitchen and it’s outwardly expressed that they’re not supposed to “ge[t] above his station” and discuss politics or talk to strangers.
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* UnfortunateName: Mayor Butterbold Wheatstraw's maiden name was Fluffykins.
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* ItsPersonal: Subverted. Algarotti thinks Voltaire opposes the Catholic Church because he's a victim of a PedophilePriest. Voltaire is infuriated by this, emphasizing [[NothingPersonal he opposes the Church for different reasons]].
-->'''Voltaire:''' I am not to be ''explained'', to be brushed away, merely as someone fighting an injustice for no other reason than because I was a victim of said injustice.
-->'''Voltaire:''' I am not to be ''explained'', to be brushed away, merely as someone fighting an injustice for no other reason than because I was a victim of said injustice.
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* ItsPersonal: Subverted.A subversion overlapping with a subversion of OpposeWhatYouSuffered. Algarotti thinks Voltaire opposes the Catholic Church because he's a victim of a PedophilePriest. Voltaire is infuriated by this, emphasizing [[NothingPersonal he opposes the Church for different reasons]].
-->'''Voltaire:''' I am not to be ''explained'', to be brushed away, merely as someone fighting an injustice for no other reason than [[OpposeWhatYouSuffered because I was a victim of saidinjustice.injustice]].
-->'''Voltaire:''' I am not to be ''explained'', to be brushed away, merely as someone fighting an injustice for no other reason than [[OpposeWhatYouSuffered because I was a victim of said
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* OpposeWhatYouSuffered: A subversion overlapping with a subversion of ItsPersonal. Algarotti thinks Voltaire opposes the Catholic Church because he suffered under it as a victim of a PedophilePriest. Voltaire is infuriated by this, emphasizing he opposes the Church for different reasons]].
-->'''Voltaire:''' I am not to be ''explained'', to be brushed away, merely as someone fighting an injustice for no other reason than because I was a victim of said injustice.
-->'''Voltaire:''' I am not to be ''explained'', to be brushed away, merely as someone fighting an injustice for no other reason than because I was a victim of said injustice.
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A WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic {{fanfic}} by [=McPoodle=]. Usually, crossovers either set Equestria in an alternate universe or send in a fictional character to deal with a problem in Equestria. Not this story. This time, it's a real person to have visited Equestria, the famous philosopher {{Creator/Voltaire}}.
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A WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic {{fanfic}} by [=McPoodle=]. Usually, crossovers either set Equestria in an alternate universe or send in a fictional character to deal with a problem in Equestria. Not this story. This time, it's a real person to have visited Equestria, the famous philosopher {{Creator/Voltaire}}.
Creator/{{Voltaire}}.
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* MeaningfulRename: Even with the help of Voltaire wearing a [[TranslationMicrobes a translating cap]], the ponies can't pronounce his name, so he chooses to be called "voltige": what circus acrobats do (essentially gymnastics and dance) on top of a running horse.
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* MeaningfulRename: Even with the help of Voltaire wearing a [[TranslationMicrobes [[TranslatorMicrobes a translating cap]], the ponies can't pronounce his name, so he chooses to be called "voltige": what circus acrobats do (essentially gymnastics and dance) on top of a running horse.
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* {{Satire}}: InUniverse, "The Frog Princess of Fomalhaut" satirizes the ponies who believe Celestia is a goddess. Princess Fisby works her hardest to provide for and protect her froggy subjects. They hail her as a goddess [[StopWorshippingMe despite]] [[AGodIAmNot her protests]], since she's much more powerful and longer-lived than them. One day, she's grievously injured, causing her subjects to realize she's a mortal, not a goddess, albeit one with much more power than the average frog. Now replace "Fisby" with "Celestia" and "frog" with "pony."
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* {{Satire}}: InUniverse, "The Frog Princess of Fomalhaut" satirizes the ponies who believe Celestia is a goddess. Princess Fisby works her hardest to provide for and protect her froggy subjects. They hail her as a goddess [[StopWorshippingMe despite]] [[AGodIAmNot her protests]], since she's much more powerful and longer-lived than them. One day, she's grievously injured, causing her subjects to realize she's a mortal, not a goddess, albeit one with much more power than the average frog. Now replace "Fisby" with "Celestia" and "frog" with "pony."
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* {{Theocracy}}: [[spoiler:Earth and]] Equestria become this when [[spoiler:Genevieve takes over as]] the [[GodEmperor goddess and ruler]], and the only other governing power is her advisor archbishop.
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* {{Theocracy}}: TheTheocracy: [[spoiler:Earth and]] Equestria become this when [[spoiler:Genevieve takes over as]] the [[GodEmperor goddess and ruler]], and the only other governing power is her advisor archbishop.
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** Blue Belle is a younger version of Prince Blueblood, but [[CharacterDevelopment she's starting to get better]]. Her father, Prince Blueblood (an earlier one), is a more direct example. [[spoiler:As it turns out, this is somewhat intentional – Blueblood the First pretends to be a buffoon in order to act as a scapegoat for any bad decisions done by Celestia's administration.]]
** The story sets up clear expies of all the mane six, but the only one with any real plot relevance ends up being Eveningstar Sparkle, counterpart to Twilight.
** The story sets up clear expies of all the mane six, but the only one with any real plot relevance ends up being Eveningstar Sparkle, counterpart to Twilight.
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** Blue Belle is a younger version of Prince Blueblood, but [[CharacterDevelopment she's starting to get better]]. Her father, Prince Blueblood (an earlier one), one: Prince Blueblood the Fifteenth), is a more direct example. [[spoiler:As it turns out, this is somewhat intentional – Blueblood intentional–Blueblood the First Fifteenth pretends to be a cruel buffoon in order to act as a scapegoat for any bad decisions done by Celestia's administration.]]
** The story sets up clear expies of all the mane six. These expy ponies are casted as the ancestors of the mane six,but though the only one with any real plot relevance ends up being Eveningstar Sparkle, counterpart to Twilight.
** The story sets up clear expies of all the mane six. These expy ponies are casted as the ancestors of the mane six,
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* ArtInitiatesLife: [[spoiler:Whatever Genevieve draws with the magic pencil becomes true. She draws a glass of water into reality. Drawing herself wearing a crown next to the current king with a crossed-out crown makes her queen in his place.]]
* ColdBloodedTorture: [[spoiler:Genevieve magically causes Blue Belle to continuously receive various injuries on top of each other past the point where she doesn't look like a living creature anymore, while keeping her alive and making her cry out for more suffering.]]
* CrystalDragonJesus: When [[spoiler:Genevieve]] takes over, [[spoiler:her]] religion is completely copied from Christianity, except male pronouns referring to God are gender-swapped. The extreme similarity is justified in that the creator of the religion has seen Christianity as we know it in the human world. Voltaire [[LampshadeHanging points out the ripoff]].
* CrystalDragonJesus: When [[spoiler:Genevieve]] takes over, [[spoiler:her]] religion is completely copied from Christianity, except male pronouns referring to God are gender-swapped. The extreme similarity is justified in that the creator of the religion has seen Christianity as we know it in the human world. Voltaire [[LampshadeHanging points out the ripoff]].
* DoubleStandard: When [[spoiler:Genevieve]] takes over, all the males are in all-concealing burlap robes and the females just wear jewelry. It's also implied men are supposed to StayInTheKitchen and keep out of politics.
* DrunkWithPower: [[spoiler:Genevieve]] really shouldn't move the sun to illuminate stained glass after the sun is supposed to be down.
* DrunkWithPower: [[spoiler:Genevieve]] really shouldn't move the sun to illuminate stained glass after the sun is supposed to be down.
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* FantasticRacism: The [[MemeticMutation love and tolerance]] of the series hasn't been established yet, so the Unicorns are considered to be on the top, with Pegasi in the middle, while Earth ponies being stuck at the bottom. Celestia is aware of this, but she's never had the means to change it.
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* FantasticRacism: The [[MemeticMutation love and tolerance]] of the series hasn't been established yet, so the Unicorns are considered to be on the top, with Pegasi in the middle, while Earth ponies being and Equestrian non-ponies (like donkeys) are stuck at the bottom. Celestia is aware of this, but she's never had the means to change it.
* FreudianExcuseIsNoExcuse: [[spoiler:Genevieve was bullied by Blue Belle in a society where unicorns are favored. Near the end of the story, she]] thinks of herself as a monster, and certainly doesn't think her mistreatment was an excuse for anything she did.
* GilliganCut: Used frequently for humor in this fic. Section breaks or the end of a chapter serve as the dividing point between the scene where a character says something and the scene where they're contradicted.
** Voltaire states he'll beat Celestia in cribbage. A section break follows immediately, along with her win.
* AGodAmI: [[spoiler: Genevieve, when she takes over Earth and Equestria.]]
* GodEmperor: [[spoiler:Genevieve takes over Earth and Equestria, and the population worships her as a goddess.]]
** Voltaire states he'll beat Celestia in cribbage. A section break follows immediately, along with her win.
* AGodAmI: [[spoiler: Genevieve, when she takes over Earth and Equestria.]]
* GodEmperor: [[spoiler:Genevieve takes over Earth and Equestria, and the population worships her as a goddess.]]
* HelpingWouldBeKillstealing: Celestia's approach to ruling.
-->'''Celestia:''' I watch over my little ponies, but my touch is always light. Always, I worry about how I am stunting their emotional growth by interfering too much in their lives. Oysters live in their gardens, and an oyster must have a grain of sand to make its pearl.
-->'''Celestia:''' I watch over my little ponies, but my touch is always light. Always, I worry about how I am stunting their emotional growth by interfering too much in their lives. Oysters live in their gardens, and an oyster must have a grain of sand to make its pearl.
* ItsPersonal: Subverted. Algarotti thinks Voltaire opposes the Catholic Church because he's a victim of a PedophilePriest. Voltaire is infuriated by this, emphasizing [[NothingPersonal he opposes the Church for different reasons]].
-->'''Voltaire:''' I am not to be ''explained'', to be brushed away, merely as someone fighting an injustice for no other reason than because I was a victim of said injustice.
-->'''Voltaire:''' I am not to be ''explained'', to be brushed away, merely as someone fighting an injustice for no other reason than because I was a victim of said injustice.
* LieDetector: At least one exists in Equestria. It's an unmarked golden coin that flashes when someone lies, and it works magically.
* MeaningfulRename: Even with the help of Voltaire wearing a [[TranslationMicrobes a translating cap]], the ponies can't pronounce his name, so he chooses to be called "voltige": what circus acrobats do (essentially gymnastics and dance) on top of a running horse.
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* MyGodWhatHaveIDone: Celestia is horrified when a nightmare of Luna nearly drowning causes her to badly beat a young filly who'd been caught in the riverbed.
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** Celestia is horrified when a nightmare of Luna nearly drowning causes her to badly beat a young filly who'd been caught in theriverbed.riverbed.
** [[spoiler:Genevieve is horrified at the torture she subjects Blue Belle to.]]
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** [[spoiler:Genevieve is horrified at the torture she subjects Blue Belle to.]]
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* PhysicalGod: What most of Equestria believes Celestia to be, [[spoiler:and what Genevieve sets herself up as when she takes over Earth and Equestria. She is seen as]] omniscient and omnipotent [[spoiler:the same way Celestia once was seen]].
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* RewritingReality: [[spoiler:When Genevieve reverts Equestria and Earth to before she took over, she crosses out sentences about the history of the Founders of Equestria and adds new ones. History changes and falls in line with her cross-outs and additions.]]
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* StayInTheKitchen: Inverted. When [[spoiler:Genevieve]] takes over, it's heavily implied this is the prevailing attitude towards males.
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* {{Theocracy}}: [[spoiler:Earth and]] Equestria become this when [[spoiler:Genevieve takes over as]] the [[GodEmperor goddess and ruler]], and the only other governing power is her advisor archbishop.
* TheyWouldCutYouUp: Voltaire worries about what the king or priests in the human world would do if they found the young, relatively defenseless, talking donkey Genevieve. It's implied he thinks this trope is what would happen to her.
* TitleDrop: In the first sentence of the first chapter.
-->'''Blue Belle:''' ''[thinking]'' Equestria is surely the best of all possible worlds.
* TheyWouldCutYouUp: Voltaire worries about what the king or priests in the human world would do if they found the young, relatively defenseless, talking donkey Genevieve. It's implied he thinks this trope is what would happen to her.
* TitleDrop: In the first sentence of the first chapter.
-->'''Blue Belle:''' ''[thinking]'' Equestria is surely the best of all possible worlds.
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* WhosLaughingNow: [[spoiler:Genevieve starts off downtrodden and bullied by the unicorn Blue Belle. She ends up a goddess who turned Equestria into a {{Dystopia}} where unicorns are TheScapegoat. They're deponified, have no rights, and have many regulations limiting what they can do compared to the rest of the population. Genevieve's religion singles out Blue Belle as completely evil, and she subjects Blue Belle to horrific torture.]]
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* FandomSpecificPlot: Human in Equestria. However, the Human in Equestria plot usually involves [[{{Crossover}} humans from another fictional series]] or an [[TheEveryman everyman]], not a HistoricalDomainCharacter. It also usually has the human be the [[FirstContact first to come in contact with Equestria]], whereas Voltaire was preceded by {{Creator/Ovid}} 1,740 years ago.
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* FormulaWithATwist: Of the FandomSpecificPlot of a human in Equestria. However, the Human in Equestria plot usually involves [[{{Crossover}} humans from another fictional series]] or an [[TheEveryman everyman]], not a HistoricalDomainCharacter. It also usually has the human be the [[FirstContact first to come in contact with Equestria]], whereas Voltaire was preceded by {{Creator/Ovid}} 1,740 years ago.
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* Satire: InUniverse, "The Frog Princess of Fomalhaut" satirizes the ponies who believe Celestia is a goddess. Princess Fisby works her hardest to provide for and protect her froggy subjects. They hail her as a goddess [[StopWorshippingMe despite]] [[AGodIAmNot her protests]], since she's much more powerful and longer-lived than them. One day, she's grievously injured, causing her subjects to realize she's a mortal, not a goddess, albeit one with much more power than the average frog. Now replace "Fisby" with "Celestia" and "frog" with "pony."
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* Satire: {{Satire}}: InUniverse, "The Frog Princess of Fomalhaut" satirizes the ponies who believe Celestia is a goddess. Princess Fisby works her hardest to provide for and protect her froggy subjects. They hail her as a goddess [[StopWorshippingMe despite]] [[AGodIAmNot her protests]], since she's much more powerful and longer-lived than them. One day, she's grievously injured, causing her subjects to realize she's a mortal, not a goddess, albeit one with much more power than the average frog. Now replace "Fisby" with "Celestia" and "frog" with "pony."
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* AGodIAmNot: Celestia. Her subjects think she's an omniscient and omnipotent goddess. She knows better, and wishes they would [[StopWorshippingMe stop worshipping her very mortal, though very powerful self]].
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* Satire: InUniverse, "The Frog Princess of Fomalhaut" satirizes the ponies who believe Celestia is a goddess. Princess Fisby works her hardest to provide for and protect her froggy subjects. They hail her as a goddess [[StopWorshippingMe despite]] [[AGodIAmNot her protests]], since she's much more powerful and longer-lived than them. One day, she's grievously injured, causing her subjects to realize she's a mortal, not a goddess, albeit one with much more power than the average frog. Now replace "Fisby" with "Celestia" and "frog" with "pony."
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* StoryWithinAStory: Voltaire tells the court his made-up story "The Frog Princess of Fomalhaut." Soon, he's selling copies of "Frog Princess" on scrolls, since the ponies hadn't invented books yet.
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** Hoofdini the earth pony for UsefulNotes/HarryHoudini.
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** Hoofdini the earth pony for UsefulNotes/HarryHoudini.Creator/HarryHoudini.
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* FandomSpecificPlot: Human in Equestria. However, the Human in Equestria plot usually involves [[{{Crossover}} humans from another fictional series]] or an [[TheEveryman everyman]], not a HistoricalDomainCharacter. It also usually has the human be the [[FirstContact first to come in contact with Equestria]], whereas Voltaire was preceded by Creator/Ovid 1,740 years ago.
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* FandomSpecificPlot: Human in Equestria. However, the Human in Equestria plot usually involves [[{{Crossover}} humans from another fictional series]] or an [[TheEveryman everyman]], not a HistoricalDomainCharacter. It also usually has the human be the [[FirstContact first to come in contact with Equestria]], whereas Voltaire was preceded by Creator/Ovid {{Creator/Ovid}} 1,740 years ago.
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* HistoricalDomainCharacter: Creator/Voltaire, Algarotti, Maupertuis, [[UsefulNotes/FrederickTheGreat King Friedrich]], Creator/Ovid...
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* HistoricalDomainCharacter: Creator/Voltaire, {{Creator/Voltaire}}, Algarotti, Maupertuis, [[UsefulNotes/FrederickTheGreat King Friedrich]], Creator/Ovid...{{Creator/Ovid}}...
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* AdultFear: Morningstar remembers the last human in Equestria inspired the first intoxication-related cutie mark, so she fears Voltaire, as the next human in Equestria, might similarly influence her son down a harmful life path.
* AlphaBitch: Blue Belle before her CharacterDevelopment. If her harassment of Genevieve didn't already cement her status as this trope, she's also used to ruling her school, having a group of followers, leading other ponies into humiliating themselves, and mocking others.
* AlphaBitch: Blue Belle before her CharacterDevelopment. If her harassment of Genevieve didn't already cement her status as this trope, she's also used to ruling her school, having a group of followers, leading other ponies into humiliating themselves, and mocking others.
* BeneathSuspicion: [[spoiler:The Bluebloods' spies aren't unicorns in a society that favors unicorns. They count on this in addition to a PerceptionFilter to keep the spies undetected.]]
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* CharacterDevelopment: Blue Belle is starting to show this, as she feels genuine regret over causing Genevieve to exile herself to the human world and realizing that she's only antagonizing everyone she meets. [[spoiler: Eventually, she publicly [[CallingTheOldManOut chastises her father]] for his mishandling of the Griffonia crisis.]]
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* CharacterDevelopment: Blue Belle is starting starts to show this, as she feels feel genuine regret over causing Genevieve to exile herself to the human world and realizing that she's only antagonizing everyone she meets. [[spoiler: Eventually, She starts to disapprove of her father's cruel policies and attitude of superiority that she formerly agreed with and publicly [[CallingTheOldManOut chastises her father]] him]] for his mishandling of the Griffonia crisis.crisis. The epilogue implies she graduated from petty bullying schemes to TheChessmaster.]]
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* DirectLineToTheAuthor: As the story progresses, 'Translator's Notes' are added at various intervals (albeit with IC and OOC tags). [[spoiler: When the time shift begins to hit the translator, he starts going absolutely insane.]]
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* DirectLineToTheAuthor: As the story progresses, 'Translator's Notes' are added at various intervals (albeit This fanfiction is a real written book complete with IC translations and OOC tags).author's notes InUniverse. [[spoiler: When the time shift begins to hit the translator, he starts going absolutely insane.]]
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** Maximilian Peter the griffin for UsefulNotes/MaximilienRobespierre. Fitting, since the Griffonian Crisis is based off the French Revolution.
* FandomSpecificPlot: Human in Equestria. However, the Human in Equestria plot usually involves [[{{Crossover}} humans from another fictional series]] or an [[TheEveryman everyman]], not a HistoricalDomainCharacter. It also usually has the human be the [[FirstContact first to come in contact with Equestria]], whereas Voltaire was preceded by Creator/Ovid 1,740 years ago.
* FantasyConflictCounterpart: The griffons bankrupt themselves helping the Diamond Dogs fight the dragons for independence, which parallels France doing the same by helping the United States of America against Britain. The griffons also go through a parallel of the French Revolution.
* HistoricalDomainCharacter: Creator/Voltaire, Algarotti, Maupertuis, [[UsefulNotes/FrederickTheGreat King Friedrich]], Creator/Ovid...
* TheMatchmaker: Implied with Celestia, who is said to maintain "breeding charts" of ponies and happily add new entries at the end of Chapter 12. At the beginning of Chapter 13, she's responsible for introducing two ponies who seem to hit it off romantically.
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* NoSell: The Gryphon peasants basically ignore conventional weaponry. Justified given that conventional weaponry amounts to throwing cakes and pies at your enemies.
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* NoHistoricalFiguresWereHarmed:
** Maximilian Peter the griffin for UsefulNotes/MaximilienRobespierre. Fitting, since the Griffonian Crisis is based off the French Revolution.
** Hoofdini the earth pony for UsefulNotes/HarryHoudini.
** Hoofdini's predecessor, Woofston the Diamond Dog illusionist. Woofston was inspired by the magician Alexander Herrmann.
** The griffon Citizen Perrygore, also known as Random Tally, corresponds to [[UsefulNotes/TheFrenchRevolutionMajorFigures Charles Maurice de Talleyrand-Périgord]].
** The earth pony Malice, later named Mallus, is a female UsefulNotes/JohnnyAppleseed with the addition of a background in thievery.
* NoSell: TheGryphon griffon peasants basically ignore conventional weaponry. Justified given that conventional weaponry amounts to throwing cakes and pies at your enemies.
** Maximilian Peter the griffin for UsefulNotes/MaximilienRobespierre. Fitting, since the Griffonian Crisis is based off the French Revolution.
** Hoofdini the earth pony for UsefulNotes/HarryHoudini.
** Hoofdini's predecessor, Woofston the Diamond Dog illusionist. Woofston was inspired by the magician Alexander Herrmann.
** The griffon Citizen Perrygore, also known as Random Tally, corresponds to [[UsefulNotes/TheFrenchRevolutionMajorFigures Charles Maurice de Talleyrand-Périgord]].
** The earth pony Malice, later named Mallus, is a female UsefulNotes/JohnnyAppleseed with the addition of a background in thievery.
* NoSell: The
* PoliticallyCorrectHistory: One of the InUniverse translator's notes reveals that Prince Blueblood got a HistoricalVillainUpgrade in the original version of the book. Ponies hated the idea of giving traits from one breed of pony to a different pony breed. Blueblood and his ancestors had a hoof in doing just that.
-->'''Translator Note:''' ...the tone of this chapter was completely different in the original Equine. Prince Blueblood was a black-hearted villain, K was a quivering victim, and Blue Belle was the outraged voice of the pony reader. It took a great deal of research to prove my gut feeling that not only the Bluebloods, but K himself, had a completely different attitude towards the subject, which I hope I have faithfully portrayed.
-->'''Translator Note:''' ...the tone of this chapter was completely different in the original Equine. Prince Blueblood was a black-hearted villain, K was a quivering victim, and Blue Belle was the outraged voice of the pony reader. It took a great deal of research to prove my gut feeling that not only the Bluebloods, but K himself, had a completely different attitude towards the subject, which I hope I have faithfully portrayed.
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** An entire family was given this treatment after it was revealed the Blueblood's bred them to be the perfect spies. No one, including Celestia (who performed psychic surgery on herself) knows who they are anymore or where they went.
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** An entire family was given this treatment after it was revealed the Blueblood's Bluebloods bred them to be the perfect spies. No one, including Celestia (who is rumored to have performed psychic surgery on herself) knows who they are anymore or where they went.
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* HistoricalVillainUpgrade: In the afterword, the author [[WordOfGod says]] the real Algarotti "went through life offending no one," but he is a villain in the fic because they needed an antagonist from Voltaire's Prussian circle. Algarotti's Wikipedia page says he was friends with Voltaire, and Voltaire's page says nothing to contradict this.
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* DirectLineToTheAuthor: As the story progresses, 'Translator's Notes' are added at various intervals (albeit with IC and OOC tags). [[spoiler: When the time shift begins to hit the translator, he starts going absolutely insane.]]
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* {{Expy}}: Blue Belle is a younger version of Prince Blueblood, but [[CharacterDevelopment she's starting to get better]]. Her father, Prince Blueblood (an earlier one), is a more direct example. [[spoiler:As it turns out, this is somewhat intentional – Blueblood the First pretends to be a buffoon in order to act as a scapegoat for any bad decisions done by Celestia's administration.]]
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* {{Expy}}: {{Expy}}:
** Blue Belle is a younger version of Prince Blueblood, but [[CharacterDevelopment she's starting to get better]]. Her father, Prince Blueblood (an earlier one), is a more direct example. [[spoiler:As it turns out, this is somewhat intentional – Blueblood the First pretends to be a buffoon in order to act as a scapegoat for any bad decisions done by Celestia's administration.]]]]
** The story sets up clear expies of all the mane six, but the only one with any real plot relevance ends up being Eveningstar Sparkle, counterpart to Twilight.
** Blue Belle is a younger version of Prince Blueblood, but [[CharacterDevelopment she's starting to get better]]. Her father, Prince Blueblood (an earlier one), is a more direct example. [[spoiler:As it turns out, this is somewhat intentional – Blueblood the First pretends to be a buffoon in order to act as a scapegoat for any bad decisions done by Celestia's administration.
** The story sets up clear expies of all the mane six, but the only one with any real plot relevance ends up being Eveningstar Sparkle, counterpart to Twilight.
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* LiteraryAgentHypothesis: As the story progresses, 'Translator's Notes' are added at various intervals (albeit with IC and OOC tags). [[spoiler: When the time shift begins to hit the translator, he starts going absolutely insane.]]
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* YouCalledMeXItMustBeSerious: Voltaire only refers to someone by their title when things are serious, most commonly to subtly call them out for something they just did. Such as Cog yelling at Lifter for daring to think a peasant like him could improve his work.
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* YouCalledMeXItMustBeSerious: Voltaire only refers to someone by their title when things are serious, most commonly to subtly call them out for something they just did. Such as Cog yelling at Lifter for daring to think a peasant like him could improve his work.work.
* YourApprovalFillsMeWithShame: Invoking this trope is actually the entire purpose of the Blueblood family. By presenting ideas they know are bad through their abrasive UpperClassTwit facade, they can turn public opinion away from those ideas, making it easier to implement the actually good ones.
* YourApprovalFillsMeWithShame: Invoking this trope is actually the entire purpose of the Blueblood family. By presenting ideas they know are bad through their abrasive UpperClassTwit facade, they can turn public opinion away from those ideas, making it easier to implement the actually good ones.
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* ExactWords: All Celestia is willing to say about her father is that he "made her what she is today". Turns out, he made her and Luna into alicorns to fight Discord.
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* ExactWords: ExactWords:
** All Celestia is willing to say about her father is that he "made her what she is today". Turns out, he made her and Luna into alicorns to fightDiscord.Discord.
** Blueblood implies that he's the one responsible for Voltaire's black eye by pointing out that it's the same size as his hoof. In fact, it was Blue Belle who hit him, but as Voltaire notes, if the ponies present don't recall that bruises are invariably ''larger'' than the object that caused them, that's their own fault.
** All Celestia is willing to say about her father is that he "made her what she is today". Turns out, he made her and Luna into alicorns to fight
** Blueblood implies that he's the one responsible for Voltaire's black eye by pointing out that it's the same size as his hoof. In fact, it was Blue Belle who hit him, but as Voltaire notes, if the ponies present don't recall that bruises are invariably ''larger'' than the object that caused them, that's their own fault.
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* [[spoiler:HumanResources]]: [[spoiler:Royal bone meal is made from the bones of gryffons]].
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* [[spoiler:HumanResources]]: HumanResources: [[spoiler:Royal bone meal is made from the bones of gryffons]].
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* [[spoiler:SilentScapegoat]]: [[spoiler:Prince Blueblood's job is to be the scapegoat for any serious problems with Celestia's rule. It's why he comes across as such an extremist.]]
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* [[spoiler:SilentScapegoat]]: SilentScapegoat: [[spoiler:Prince Blueblood's job is to be the scapegoat for any serious problems with Celestia's rule. It's why he comes across as such an extremist.]]
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* CurseEscapeClause: Long ago, Celestia cast a spell to prevent ponies from even thinking about certain actions she had deemed repugnant, by making them violently ill if they ever do. The curse breaks for a given concept if anyone manages to think about it ''without'' getting sick, which by the time the story starts, had already happened for all but killing and masturbation. Once this is explained, Eveningstar Sparkle easily gets Voltaire to break it for killing by getting him to infodump about the etymology of various languages' words for killing.
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Set a few hundred years back in Equestrian history ([[CaptainObvious and ours as well]]), Celestia is trying not to scream in aggravation. Another Summer Sun Celebration, another year where her beloved little ponies won't get off their knees in genuflection to enjoy the sunrise with her. However, most other Summer Sun Celebrations don't have portals open up to alternate dimensions that send saddened donkey jennies out and pull dazed philosophers in. Once Voltaire gets himself composed and evaluated to be a non-threat, he decides to do what he does best: get nobles to pay him to talk.
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Set a few hundred years back in Equestrian history ([[CaptainObvious and (and ours as well]]), well), Celestia is trying not to scream in aggravation. Another Summer Sun Celebration, another year where her beloved little ponies won't get off their knees in genuflection to enjoy the sunrise with her. However, most other Summer Sun Celebrations don't have portals open up to alternate dimensions that send saddened donkey jennies out and pull dazed philosophers in. Once Voltaire gets himself composed and evaluated to be a non-threat, he decides to do what he does best: get nobles to pay him to talk.
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* DevilsAdvocate: Voltaire becomes leader of the "Loyal Opposition" in Equestria (later named the Wig Party) whose job is to oppose Celestia's decisions to make sure she considers them properly. When she starts agreeing with the Wig Party too much, this job is passed to the opposing party.
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Set a few hundred years back in Equestrian history ([[CaptainObvious and ours as well]]), Celestia is trying not to scream in aggravation. Another Summer Sun Celebration, another year where her beloved little ponies won't get off their knees in genuflect to enjoy the sunrise with her. However, most other Summer Sun Celebrations don't have portals open up to alternate dimensions that send saddened donkey jennies out and pull dazed philosophers in. Once Voltaire gets himself composed and evaluated to be a non-threat, he decides to do what he does best: get nobles to pay him to talk.
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Set a few hundred years back in Equestrian history ([[CaptainObvious and ours as well]]), Celestia is trying not to scream in aggravation. Another Summer Sun Celebration, another year where her beloved little ponies won't get off their knees in genuflect genuflection to enjoy the sunrise with her. However, most other Summer Sun Celebrations don't have portals open up to alternate dimensions that send saddened donkey jennies out and pull dazed philosophers in. Once Voltaire gets himself composed and evaluated to be a non-threat, he decides to do what he does best: get nobles to pay him to talk.
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Set a few hundred years back in Equestrian history ([[CaptainObvious and ours as well]]), Celestia is trying not to scream in aggravation. Another Summer Sun Celebration, another year where her beloved little ponies won't get off their knees in genuflect to enjoy the sunrise with her. However, most other Summer Sun Celebrations don't have portals open up to alternate dimensions that send a saddened donkey jennies out and dazed philosophers in. Once Voltaire gets himself composed and evaluated to be a non-threat, he decides to do what he does best: get nobles to pay him to talk.
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Set a few hundred years back in Equestrian history ([[CaptainObvious and ours as well]]), Celestia is trying not to scream in aggravation. Another Summer Sun Celebration, another year where her beloved little ponies won't get off their knees in genuflect to enjoy the sunrise with her. However, most other Summer Sun Celebrations don't have portals open up to alternate dimensions that send a saddened donkey jennies out and pull dazed philosophers in. Once Voltaire gets himself composed and evaluated to be a non-threat, he decides to do what he does best: get nobles to pay him to talk.
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* ADateWithRosiePalms: Voltaire mentions this as helping him get through puberty. Humorously, Celestia literally perished the thought from Equestria with a powerful magic spell.
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* ADateWithRosiePalms: Voltaire mentions this as helping him get through puberty. Humorously, Celestia literally perished the thought from Equestria with a powerful magic spell.
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* PaintingTheFrostOnWindows: Deconstructed. Unlike canon, ponies manually changing the weather and seasons with the Princesses moving the sun and moon isn't due to Equestria being a magical wonderland. Instead, Discord caused such havoc that none of those things ''can'' happen without pony intervention. If not for Celestia moving the sun around the planet, it would hurl off into deep space and they'd all freeze.
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* PuppetKing: [[spoiler:When Genevieve makes herself GodEmperor of Earth and Equestria, Algarotti continues to influence her and has caused her to have weaknesses he can eventually exploit if he needs to kill her.]]
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* MeaningfulEcho: Occurs twice with the same line. Voltaire concludes his story about Princess Fisby saying that her subjects, having learned she's not truly divine, changed their greetings to her to "ribbit" which means thank you. After Celestia's HeroicBSOD, she's greeted by dozens of ceramic frogs singing "ribbit".
** When he leaves Equestira, Voltaire, having removed his cap and lost most of his Equine vocabulary, simply tells Celestia "ribbit".
** When he leaves Equestira, Voltaire, having removed his cap and lost most of his Equine vocabulary, simply tells Celestia "ribbit".
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* BeCarefulWhatYouWishFor: Genevieve wants Blue Belle to pay for what she did to her. [[spoiler:After the former becomes a god, Blue Belle removes her magical protection from Genevieve rewriting history. Genevieve is horrified by what becomes of her]].
* InnocentBigot: The nicest Unicorns are still racist against Pegasi and Earth Ponies.
* MyGodWhatHaveIDone: Celestia is horrified when a nightmare of Luna nearly drowning causes her to badly beat a young filly who'd been caught in the riverbed.
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* YouNoTakeCandle: The Diamond Dog ambassador Noir is a mild version. Voltaire suffers from this as well when not using the magic cap.
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* YouNoTakeCandle: The Diamond Dog ambassador Noir is a mild version. Voltaire suffers from this as well when not using the magic cap.cap.
* YouCalledMeXItMustBeSerious: Voltaire only refers to someone by their title when things are serious, most commonly to subtly call them out for something they just did. Such as Cog yelling at Lifter for daring to think a peasant like him could improve his work.
* YouCalledMeXItMustBeSerious: Voltaire only refers to someone by their title when things are serious, most commonly to subtly call them out for something they just did. Such as Cog yelling at Lifter for daring to think a peasant like him could improve his work.
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* BerserkButton: Don't bring up Celestia's immediate family. Besides her sister turning into Nightmare Moon, [[spoiler:her father sacrificed her mother to Discord and turned her and Luna into alicorns to fight Discord]].
