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Currently the fic is 199 chapters long[[note]]excluding the 3 [[MissingEpisode permanently-deleted musical chapters]][[/note]], with chapters typically releasing between once a week to once a fortnight on average.
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Currently the fic is 199 204 chapters long[[note]]excluding the 3 [[MissingEpisode permanently-deleted musical chapters]][[/note]], with chapters typically releasing between once a week to once a fortnight on average.
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'''Mary:''' ''Not yet!(Mike flinches out of shock at her words, which Mary notices)I'm sorry. But the other must not know about her yet. They have not detected her yet, for their senses are less keen than mine.''\\
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'''Mary:''' ''Not yet!(Mike yet! (Mike flinches out of shock at her words, which Mary notices)I'm notices) I'm sorry. But the other others must not know about her yet. They have not detected her yet, for their senses are less keen than mine.''\\
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'''Mike:''' I remember...it was that bastard William Afton's daughter...''(The realization hits, and Mike's eyes appropriately widen in shock)'' Wait, you can't be saying...!
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'''Mike:''' I remember...it was that bastard William Afton's daughter... ''(The realization hits, and Mike's his eyes appropriately widen in shock)'' Wait, you can't be saying...!
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''(The ghost children, Elizabeth, Mike and Mary fall silent with surprise, until Jeremy curiously speaks up.)'' '''Jeremy''': ''Why?''\\
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''(The ghost children, Elizabeth, Mike and Mary fall silent with surprise, until Jeremy curiously speaks up.)'' '''Jeremy''': )''\\
'''Jeremy:''' ''Why?''\\
'''Jeremy:''' ''Why?''\\
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'''Mike:''' That what I was thinking too, Liz,[[spoiler: and while I'm very glad that Cassidy's curse was minor and temporary, there's still some worrying implications. Mainly the fact that someone ''planned'' this, and that they weren't going all out.]]
* WhamShot: Right after the above-discussed [[WhamLine]] in Chapter 4, Mike, after Mary implicitly confirms that William Afton's daughter is right outside their home, is immediately greeted to what Mary saw when she she opens the front door for him. And sure enough, the ghost of Elizabeth Afton herself is right there for Mike to see. However, what makes this scene hit so hard, isn't the fact that she's here...it's the ''expression on her face'' when they open the door that instantly tells Mike and Mary that this poor girl went through some '''''serious''''' shit before she got here.(That, and the narrative implies that Mike is far more familiar with said shit than he's initially willing to let on.)
* WhamShot: Right after the above-discussed [[WhamLine]] in Chapter 4, Mike, after Mary implicitly confirms that William Afton's daughter is right outside their home, is immediately greeted to what Mary saw when she she opens the front door for him. And sure enough, the ghost of Elizabeth Afton herself is right there for Mike to see. However, what makes this scene hit so hard, isn't the fact that she's here...it's the ''expression on her face'' when they open the door that instantly tells Mike and Mary that this poor girl went through some '''''serious''''' shit before she got here.(That, and the narrative implies that Mike is far more familiar with said shit than he's initially willing to let on.)
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'''Mike:''' That That's what I was thinking too, Liz,[[spoiler: and while I'm very glad that Cassidy's curse was minor and temporary, there's still some worrying implications. Mainly the fact that someone ''planned'' this, and that they weren't going all out.]]
* WhamShot: Right after the above-discussed[[WhamLine]] WhamLine in Chapter 4, Mike, after Mary implicitly confirms that William Afton's daughter is right outside their home, is immediately greeted to what Mary saw when she she opens the front door for him. And sure enough, the ghost of Elizabeth Afton herself is right there for Mike to see. However, what makes this scene hit so hard, isn't the fact that she's here...it's the ''expression on her face'' when they open the door that instantly tells Mike and Mary that this poor girl went through some '''''serious''''' shit before she got here.(That, and the narrative implies that Mike is far more familiar with said shit than he's initially willing to let on.)
* WhamShot: Right after the above-discussed
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* AdaptationalDeviation: The arc for fanfic's take on ''VideoGame/FiveNightsAtFreddysARSpecialDelivery'' events is drastically altered from the original game's premise. In the original game, Fazbear Entertainment were selling and delivering animatronics to perform for people, only for them to become the same old HostileAnimatronics and attack everyone. [[spoiler:In the fanfic, however, the Schmidt family works hard to avert such fate and ensure that Fazbear Entertainment's "Fazbear Funtime Service" program won't hurt anyone.]]
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* AdaptationalDeviation: The arc for fanfic's the fic's take on ''VideoGame/FiveNightsAtFreddysARSpecialDelivery'' events is drastically altered from the original game's premise.canon. In the original game, Fazbear Entertainment were selling and delivering animatronics to perform for people, only for them to become the same old HostileAnimatronics and attack everyone. [[spoiler:In the fanfic, however, the Schmidt family works hard to avert such a fate and ensure that Fazbear Entertainment's "Fazbear Funtime Service" program won't hurt anyone.]]
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* AdaptationalVillainy: [[spoiler:[[SerialKiller William]]]] somehow manages to be even worse here than he does in canon. [[spoiler: Going as far as ''cutting his child off life support [[TheSociopath because he didn't want to deal with a broken shell of a son''.]] It's also made abundantly clear that he never genuinely loved Liz, and merely saw her as a tool to carry out his murderous legacy.]]
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* AdaptationalVillainy: [[spoiler:[[SerialKiller William]]]] [[spoiler: [[SerialKiller William Afton]]]] somehow manages to be even worse here than he does in canon. [[spoiler: Going as far as ''cutting his child off life support [[TheSociopath because he didn't want to deal with a broken shell of a son''.]] son]]''. It's also made abundantly clear that he never genuinely loved Liz, and merely saw her as a tool to carry out his murderous legacy.]]
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* DirtyCoward: When Nightmare [[spoiler:rips into William as part of his TheReasonYouSuckSpeech]] this is one of the many things he calls him out on, deriding the fact that he [[spoiler:only went after [[WouldHurtAChild children too young or weak to defend themselves]], and continued to engage in such behaviour even after he {{Came Back Strong}}er than a human as Springtrap]].
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* EvenEvilHasStandards: [[spoiler:Nightmare utterly ''despises'' William Afton for how he abused and manipulated his own family for his own selfish and murderous desires. Tellingly, the demon lord ''isn't'' being a Hypocrite in this regard, as he treats his fellow Nightmares [[BenevolentBoss remarkably well for a demon lord.]]]]
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* EvenEvilHasStandards: EvenEvilHasStandards:
** [[spoiler:Nightmare utterly ''despises'' William Afton for how he abused and manipulated his own family for his own selfish and murderous desires. Tellingly, the demon lord ''isn't'' being a Hypocrite in this regard, as he treats his fellow Nightmares [[BenevolentBoss remarkably well for a demonlord.]]]]lord]] and his TheReasonYouSuckSpeech even implies he holds some level of familial feeling toward them]].
** [[spoiler:Nightmare utterly ''despises'' William Afton for how he abused and manipulated his own family for his own selfish and murderous desires. Tellingly, the demon lord ''isn't'' being a Hypocrite in this regard, as he treats his fellow Nightmares [[BenevolentBoss remarkably well for a demon
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* KickedOutOfHeaven: Due to the fact that they killed many night guards during their stunts as haunted animatronics, the ghost children were casted out of Heaven, and sent back down to Earth as ghosts and are stuck in the mortal plan, until they atone for their murders by improving the life quality of one of the night guards that survived their attacks (i.e. Mike Schmidt).
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* KickedOutOfHeaven: Due to the fact that they killed many night guards during their stunts as haunted animatronics, the ghost children were casted cast out of Heaven, and sent back down to Earth as ghosts and are stuck in the mortal plan, until they atone for their murders by improving the life quality of one of the night guards that survived their attacks (i.e. Mike Schmidt).
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Currently the fic is 198 199 chapters long[[note]]excluding the 3 [[MissingEpisode permanently-deleted musical chapters]][[/note]], with chapters typically releasing between once a week to once a fortnight on average.
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* GoKartingWithBowser: One gaming-centric chapter has Mike and the kids play a round of ''VideoGame/TeamFortress2'', ultimately losing to a character who was utilizing a deliberately bad setup for the memes. [[spoiler:Unknown to them, Nightmare was having a bit of fun at their expense.]]
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* GoKartingWithBowser: One There's all the times that Nightmarionne joins the Schmidt family for gaming sessions in Mike's mind. And besides that, one gaming-centric chapter has Mike and the kids play a round of ''VideoGame/TeamFortress2'', ultimately losing to playing alongside a character mysterious player who was utilizing using a deliberately bad setup for the memes. memes and yet somehow achieving the highest kill count in the entire game. [[spoiler:Unknown to them, Nightmare was having a bit of fun at their expense.demolishing the server with that very setup.]]
