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** Chapter 20 has her parents refuse to let her go with the rest of the family to Hawaii for the events of the previous chapter. [[spoiler: Actually subverted because the other Loud siblings take her there with them behind their parents' backs.]]
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** Chapter 20 has her parents Rita refuse to let her go with the rest of the family to Hawaii for the events of the previous chapter. [[spoiler: Actually subverted because the other Loud siblings take her there with them behind their parents' backs.her back.]]
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* AssholeVictim: Lynn broke Scoots's nose in Chapter 19 for repeatedly heckling her. In Chapter 20, it's revealed that neither the Loud siblings nor the people who watched the video felt bad for Scoots.
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* ButtMonkey: Lynn Jr. is this in this story.
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* ButtMonkey: [[ReformedButRejected Lynn Jr. Jr.]] is this in this story.
** Chapter 20 has her parents refuse to let her go with the rest of the family to Hawaii for the events of the previous chapter. [[spoiler: Actually subverted because the other Loud siblings take her there with them behind their parents' backs.]]
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** In chapter 15, a future vision reveals Lana will actually get very sick by getting a bad bacterial infection that later leads to gastric cancer if she continues to eat gross things unlike in the show where she almost [[PerfectHealth never gets sick]] even with everything gross she eats.
** In chapter 15, a future vision reveals Lola will actually get fat and diabetes if she does not cut down on her sugar appetite unlike in the show where she [[NeverGetsFat never gains any weight]] even with how much sugary food she eats.
** In chapter 15, a future vision reveals Lola will actually get fat and diabetes if she does not cut down on her sugar appetite unlike in the show where she [[NeverGetsFat never gains any weight]] even with how much sugary food she eats.
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** In chapter 15, a future vision reveals Lana will actually get very sick by getting from a bad bacterial infection that later leads to gastric cancer if she continues to eat gross things things, unlike in the show where she almost [[PerfectHealth never gets sick]] sick]], even with everything all of the gross things she eats.
** In chapter 15, a future vision reveals Lola will actually get fat and eventually diabetes if she does not cut down on her sugarappetite addiction, unlike in the show where she [[NeverGetsFat never gains any weight]] weight]], even with how much sugary food she eats.
** In chapter 15, a future vision reveals Lola will actually get fat and eventually diabetes if she does not cut down on her sugar
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* PowerNullifier: [[spoiler:Edge has a device that can disrupt Lincoln's future vision. When the device was destroyed, Lincoln's powers returned.]][[spoiler:The device returns in Chapter 19 when Future Lincoln fights an army of robots who're wearing them.]]
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* PowerNullifier: [[spoiler:Edge has a device that can disrupt Lincoln's future vision. When the device was destroyed, Lincoln's powers returned.]][[spoiler:The ]] [[spoiler:The device returns in Chapter 19 when Future Lincoln fights an army of robots who're wearing them.]]
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* ReformedButRejected: Despite Lynn Jr. changing her behavior in the previous story, her other sisters think that she'll return to her old ways; to the point of [[spoiler:sabotaging her baseball game]] in Chapter 11 because they think that she'll believe in luck again. [[spoiler: By the beginning of Chapter 20, however, they have begun to take Lynn's side because they've decided that their parents had punished Lynn enough.]]
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* {{Deconstruction}}:
** In chapter 15, a future vision reveals Lana will actually get very sick by getting a bad bacterial infection that later leads to gastric cancer if she continues to eat gross things unlike in the show where she almost [[PerfectHealth never gets sick]] even with everything gross she eats.
** In chapter 15, a future vision reveals Lola will actually get fat and diabetes if she does not cut down on her sugar appetite unlike in the show where she [[NeverGetsFat never gains any weight]] even with how much sugary food she eats.
** In chapter 15, a future vision reveals Lana will actually get very sick by getting a bad bacterial infection that later leads to gastric cancer if she continues to eat gross things unlike in the show where she almost [[PerfectHealth never gets sick]] even with everything gross she eats.
** In chapter 15, a future vision reveals Lola will actually get fat and diabetes if she does not cut down on her sugar appetite unlike in the show where she [[NeverGetsFat never gains any weight]] even with how much sugary food she eats.
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* SurprisinglyRealisticOutcome:
** In chapter 15, a future vision reveals Lana will actually get very sick by getting a bad bacterial infection that later leads to gastric cancer if she continues to eat gross things unlike in the show where she almost [[PerfectHealth never gets sick]] even with everything gross she eats.
** In chapter 15, a future vision reveals Lola will actually get fat and diabetes if she does not cut down on her sugar appetite unlike in the show where she [[NeverGetsFat never gains any weight]] even with how much sugary food she eats.
** In chapter 15, a future vision reveals Lana will actually get very sick by getting a bad bacterial infection that later leads to gastric cancer if she continues to eat gross things unlike in the show where she almost [[PerfectHealth never gets sick]] even with everything gross she eats.
** In chapter 15, a future vision reveals Lola will actually get fat and diabetes if she does not cut down on her sugar appetite unlike in the show where she [[NeverGetsFat never gains any weight]] even with how much sugary food she eats.
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** [=Rack44=] foreshadows future events of this story with pictures and comments on [[https://www.deviantart.com/rack44 DeviantArt]].
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** [=Rack44=] foreshadows future events of this story these stories with pictures and comments on [[https://www.deviantart.com/rack44 DeviantArt]].
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* {{Cliffhanger}}: This story ends on a major cliffhanger.
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** Chandler: [[spoiler: Larry Ebola Gonorrhea Lame]]
** Mrs. [=McCann=]: [[spoiler: Labia Lipton Lame]]
** Mr. [=McCann=]: [[spoiler: Dick Humper Lame]]
** Mrs. [=McCann=]: [[spoiler: Labia Lipton Lame]]
** Mr. [=McCann=]: [[spoiler: Dick Humper Lame]]
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** Chandler: [[spoiler: Larry Ebola Gonorrhea Lame]]
Lame]].
** Mrs. [=McCann=]: [[spoiler: Labia LiptonLame]]
Lame]].
** Mr. [=McCann=]: [[spoiler: Dick HumperLame]]Lame]].
** Mrs. [=McCann=]: [[spoiler: Labia Lipton
** Mr. [=McCann=]: [[spoiler: Dick Humper
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* ThreeLinesSomeWaiting: This story has both the first story's plots and a C plot about Lynn Jr. being scared about her future.
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* ThreeLinesSomeWaiting: This story has both the first story's plots and a C plot about Lynn Jr. being scared about her future.future (Sister in Shade).
