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** Among Team RWBY: Blake is Bisexual, Weiss is a trans lesbian, and Yang is a closeted sapphic. Ruby herself implies she's pansexual.

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** Among Team RWBY: Blake is Bisexual, Weiss is a trans lesbian, and Yang is a closeted sapphic.[[UsefulNotes/{{Sapphism}} sapphic]]. Ruby herself implies she's pansexual.
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** The self-insert protagonist of the side-stories set in Atlas is explicitly bisexual ([[AnythingThatMoves to a rather absurd degree]]) and a trans woman.

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** The self-insert protagonist of the side-stories set in Atlas is explicitly bisexual ([[AnythingThatMoves ([[ExtremeOmnisexual to a rather absurd degree]]) and a trans woman.
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Unfortunately, citing burnout and loss of interest, the author abandoned the AU completely in late 2022. She claims that she's not going to remove any existing published content, but has no plans to continue any of them.

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Unfortunately, citing burnout and loss of interest, the author abandoned the AU completely in late 2022. She claims that she's not going to remove any existing published content, but has no plans to continue any of them.

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* DebutQueue: In the prologue, Sarah's DysfunctionJunction cast of alters and split personalities all make cameos, with [[EstablishingCharacterMoment Establishing Character Moments]] and [[IncomingHam Incoming Hams]] aplenty.
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** The protagonist of the side-stories set in Atlas is explicitly bisexual and a trans woman.

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** The self-insert protagonist of the side-stories set in Atlas is explicitly bisexual ([[AnythingThatMoves to a rather absurd degree]]) and a trans woman.
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* DrivingQuestion: As set up in the synopsis of the story, the question of whether Sarah can just stand idly by and watch while the Fall of Beacon happens, even if she's [[BadassNormal not empowered,]] much less ready to stare down threats like Adam and Cinder, [[HeroismWontPayTheBills nor does she even have the ''money'' to get to Vale.]]

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* DrivingQuestion: As set up in the synopsis of the story, the question of whether Sarah can just stand idly by and watch while the Fall of Beacon happens, even if she's [[BadassNormal not empowered,]] much less ready to stare down threats like Adam and Cinder, [[HeroismWontPayTheBills nor does she even have the ''money'' money to get to Vale.]]
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* DoingResearch: Sarah frequently hits the library to learn all she can about Remnant, and because, at least until she starts working for Pietro, she doesn't ''exactly'' have anything else to do.

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* DoingResearch: During Part 1, Sarah frequently hits the library to learn all she can about Remnant, and because, at least until she starts working for Pietro, she doesn't ''exactly'' have anything else to do.



* EasingIntoTheAdventure: The first part is devoted to Sarah establishing herself in her new universe and learning how the rules work. In the rewrite, this also includes the protagonist learning about [[AmnesiacHero who she is]] to a greater degree. Justified, as it's a SelfInsertFic set in an AlternateUniverse. [[JustifiedTutorial As Sarah learns the rules,]] [[AudienceSurrogate so does the reader.]] Part 2 opens with the events of [[IncitingIncident The Breach]] and the story finally kicks firmly into gear.

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* EasingIntoTheAdventure: The first part is devoted to Sarah establishing herself in her new universe and learning how the rules work. In the rewrite, this also includes the protagonist learning about [[AmnesiacHero who she is]] to a greater degree.degree and recovering from the injuries she suffered on day one. Justified, as it's a SelfInsertFic set in an AlternateUniverse. [[JustifiedTutorial As Sarah learns the rules,]] [[AudienceSurrogate so does the reader.]] Part 2 opens with the events of [[IncitingIncident The Breach]] and the story finally kicks firmly into gear.



* GunPorn: All over the place, and you'd think the [[RevolversAreJustBetter revolver]]-carrying self-insert was the worst offender.

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* GunPorn: All over the place, and you'd think the [[RevolversAreJustBetter revolver]]-carrying revolver]]-packing self-insert was the worst offender.



* TrainingFromHell: The protagonist is subjected to this, courtesy of May Marigold.
* UnreliableNarrator: Due to the protagonist's questionable sanity, a great many of the things she says in narration or to other characters have to be taken with a grain of salt, and [[ContinuitySnarl there's a lot of inconsistencies.]]

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* TrainingFromHell: The protagonist is subjected to this, courtesy of May Marigold.
* UnreliableNarrator: Due to
Marigold. Combine this with being thrust into a DieOrFly scenario from the protagonist's questionable sanity, a great many first ''second'' she woke up in Remnant and it's kind of no real stretch of the things imagination that she says [[TookALevelInBadass takes several levels in narration or to other characters have to be taken with a grain of salt, and [[ContinuitySnarl there's a lot of inconsistencies.badass.]]
* UnreliableNarrator: Due to the protagonist's questionable sanity, a great many of the things she says in narration or to other characters have to be taken with a grain of salt.

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* DrivingQuestion: As set up in the synopsis of the story, the question of whether Sarah can just stand idly by and watch while the Fall of Beacon happens, even if she's [[BadassNormal not empowered,]] [[WhatMeasureIsANonBadass much less ready to stare down threats like Adam and Cinder,]] [[HeroismWontPayTheBills nor does she even have the ''money'' to get to Vale.]]
** [[spoiler:Ultimately, the question is finally resolved during ''Liar's Gambit.'' [[WhatYouAreInTheDark No, she ''won't'' just watch.]] [[TheUnfettered She'll break her own rules]] [[TheFarmerAndTheViper and betray the man who saved her life, sheltered her and gave her a job]] to get herself there.]]

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* DrivingQuestion: As set up in the synopsis of the story, the question of whether Sarah can just stand idly by and watch while the Fall of Beacon happens, even if she's [[BadassNormal not empowered,]] [[WhatMeasureIsANonBadass much less ready to stare down threats like Adam and Cinder,]] Cinder, [[HeroismWontPayTheBills nor does she even have the ''money'' to get to Vale.]]
** [[spoiler:Ultimately, the question is finally resolved during ''Liar's Gambit.'' [[WhatYouAreInTheDark No, she ''won't'' just watch.]] [[TheUnfettered watch. She'll break her own rules]] rules [[TheFarmerAndTheViper and betray betray]] the man who saved her life, sheltered her and gave her a job]] job to get herself there.]]



* GunPorn: All over the place, and you'd think the gun-loving self-insert was the worst offender.

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* GunPorn: All over the place, and you'd think the gun-loving [[RevolversAreJustBetter revolver]]-carrying self-insert was the worst offender.



* ShipTease: Somewhat frequently, between the bisexual protagonist and a few other characters close to her age.

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* ShipTease: Somewhat frequently, between the bisexual protagonist and a few other characters close to her age.age, including [[HomoeroticSubtext May and Robyn]].



* ShownTheirWork: Mostly error-free research is done regarding firearms, chemistry, and a few other things, though in some areas this verges on

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* ShownTheirWork: Mostly error-free research is done regarding firearms, chemistry, and a few other things, though in some areas this verges on TechnoBabble.



* SlidingScaleOfGameplayAndStoryIntegration: In the rewrite, these elements are present from the very beginning, complete with a user interface with [[CountingBullets ammunition tracking]] and [[BreakableWeapons weapon fouling and item degredation]], with the entire prologue acting as a sort of JustifiedTutorial, introducing the reader to the game elements as Sarah re-learns how to survive. However, the mechanics are intended to represent [[DiegeticInterface real attributes, objectives and character growth]] rather than being a literal RPGMechanicsVerse.



** More or less literal in the rewrite, where Sarah sets off going in the wrong direction, [[DieOrFly running into a quickly-escalating series of threats.]] While she gets to show off her pre-existing skills in the new prologue, [[DentedIron she's so injured by the end of it]] that she needs [[BadassInDistress immediate medical treatment,]] and Mantle General is too far away. [[InSpiteOfANail Cue her getting dropped off at the Pharmacy]] by the soldiers that rescued her.
* SuddenGameInterface: Mostly in an out-of-universe way to demonstrate the protagonist gaining equipment and abilities [[spoiler:and in one notable case gaining a NewGamePlus "passive" strongly implying her to have unclear supernatural origins.]]
** In the rewrite, these elements are present from the very beginning, complete with [[CountingBullets ammunition tracking]] and [[BreakableWeapons item degredation]], with the entire prologue acting as a sort of JustifiedTutorial. Justified due to the story's underlying tabletop ruleset, [[AllThereInTheManual implied in author's notes and fluff]] to be a version of [[{{TabletopGame/GURPS}} GURPS]].

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** More or less literal in the rewrite, where Sarah sets off going in the wrong direction, [[DieOrFly running into a quickly-escalating series of threats.]] While she gets to show off her pre-existing skills in the new prologue, [[DentedIron she's so injured by the end of it]] that she needs [[BadassInDistress immediate medical treatment,]] treatment, and Mantle General is too far away. [[InSpiteOfANail Cue her getting dropped off at the Pharmacy]] by the soldiers that rescued her.
* SuddenGameInterface: Mostly in an out-of-universe way to demonstrate the protagonist gaining equipment and abilities [[spoiler:and in one notable case gaining a NewGamePlus "passive" strongly implying her to have unclear supernatural origins.]]
** In the rewrite, these elements are present from the very beginning, complete with [[CountingBullets ammunition tracking]] and [[BreakableWeapons item degredation]], with the entire prologue acting as a sort of JustifiedTutorial. Justified due to the story's underlying tabletop ruleset, [[AllThereInTheManual implied in author's notes and fluff]] to be a version of [[{{TabletopGame/GURPS}} GURPS]].
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* EarlyInstallmentWeirdness: Pietro's accent is almost entirely absent in earlier chapters, and Sarah's own personality is considerably livelier and less morose, especially in narration. Justified due to both CharacterizationMarchesOn and ContinuityDrift as the [=AU=] as a whole expanded.

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* EarlyInstallmentWeirdness: Pietro's accent is almost entirely absent in earlier chapters, and Sarah's own personality is considerably livelier and less morose, especially in narration. Justified due to both CharacterizationMarchesOn Fixed after a rewrite, and ContinuityDrift as the [=AU=] as a whole expanded.new opening is more consistent with both.
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* BeautyIsNeverTarnished: Subverted pretty hard in the new rewritten prologue. Chapter 2 shows her pristine and generally unharmed, but then in her next appearance in Chapter 3, she's being carried into the pharmacy, covered in wounds she presumably sustained on the tundra.
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** In the rewrite, these elements are present from the very beginning, complete with [[CountingBullets ammunition tracking]] and [[BreakableWeapons item degredation]], with the entire prologue acting as a sort of JustifiedTutorial. Justified due to the story's underlying tabletop ruleset, [[AllThereInTheManual implied in author's notes and fluff]] to be a version of [[TabletopGame/GURPS GURPS]].

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** In the rewrite, these elements are present from the very beginning, complete with [[CountingBullets ammunition tracking]] and [[BreakableWeapons item degredation]], with the entire prologue acting as a sort of JustifiedTutorial. Justified due to the story's underlying tabletop ruleset, [[AllThereInTheManual implied in author's notes and fluff]] to be a version of [[TabletopGame/GURPS GURPS]].[[{{TabletopGame/GURPS}} GURPS]].

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--> "So that's it. I'm in Remnant—a death world that should have been just fiction (...) but as long as I have my gun, I have all I need."
-->-- '''Sarah Sable'''

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--> "So that's it. I'm in Remnant—a death world that should have been just fiction (...) "I'm sorry. I know you're probably confused right now. I know you're cold and frightened, but as long as I have my gun, I have all I need.it's going to be okay."
-->-- '''Sarah Sable''''''[[Characters/AbyssalInfinitumSarahSable Sarah Sable]]'''



* TheAllConcealingI: The first-person chapters often blatantly lie about Sarah's past, and what details that can be gleaned in between her rambling narration are occasionally inconsistent. The third-person rewrite is a little more explicit at first... until it shifts ''back'' into first-person.

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* TheAllConcealingI: The first-person chapters often blatantly lie about Sarah's past, and what details that can be gleaned in between her rambling narration are occasionally often inconsistent. The third-person rewrite is a little more explicit at first... until it shifts ''back'' into first-person.



** [[spoiler:Ultimately, the question is resolved during ''Liar's Gambit'' [[WhatYouAreInTheDark No, she ''won't'' just watch.]] [[TheUnfettered She'll break her own morals]] [[TheFarmerAndTheViper and betray the man who rescued her]] [[JumpedAtTheCall to get herself there.]]]]

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** [[spoiler:Ultimately, the question is finally resolved during ''Liar's Gambit'' Gambit.'' [[WhatYouAreInTheDark No, she ''won't'' just watch.]] [[TheUnfettered She'll break her own morals]] rules]] [[TheFarmerAndTheViper and betray the man who rescued her]] [[JumpedAtTheCall saved her life, sheltered her and gave her a job]] to get herself there.]]]]]]



* EasingIntoTheAdventure: The first part is devoted to Sarah establishing herself in her new universe and learning how the rules work. In the rewrite, this also includes her learning about [[AmnesiacHero who Sarah she is]] to a greater degree. Justified, as it's a SelfInsertFic set in an AlternateUniverse. [[JustifiedTutorial As Sarah learns the rules,]] [[AudienceSurrogate so does the reader.]] Part 2 opens with the events of [[IncitingIncident The Breach]] and the story finally kicks firmly into gear.
* ForWantOfANail: In the rewrite, which is basically AlternateContinuity for the original version of [=WWF=], which still exists as a side-story. In the Prologue, what apparently separates Rewrite!Sarah from her less competent and less ''wounded'' original counterpart is that she started off walking into the tundra instead.

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* EasingIntoTheAdventure: The first part is devoted to Sarah establishing herself in her new universe and learning how the rules work. In the rewrite, this also includes her the protagonist learning about [[AmnesiacHero who Sarah she is]] to a greater degree. Justified, as it's a SelfInsertFic set in an AlternateUniverse. [[JustifiedTutorial As Sarah learns the rules,]] [[AudienceSurrogate so does the reader.]] Part 2 opens with the events of [[IncitingIncident The Breach]] and the story finally kicks firmly into gear.
* ForWantOfANail: In the rewrite, which is basically AlternateContinuity for the original version of [=WWF=], which still exists as a side-story. In the Prologue, what apparently separates Rewrite!Sarah from her less competent and less ''wounded'' ''[[DentedIron wounded]]'' original counterpart is that she started off walking into the tundra instead.away from Atlas instead of towards it.



* [[spoiler:OrphansPlotTrinket]]: [[spoiler:Played with. The necklace that Sarah starts off the story with is initially innocuous and played off as just a personal religious symbol, but with the reveal that she's actually a TomatoInTheMirror and the symbol is nearly-identical to an in-universe religious emblem she shouldn't have had on her, being from another world, it's strongly implied the necklace is evidence of Sarah's cosmic heritage.]]

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* [[spoiler:OrphansPlotTrinket]]: [[spoiler:Played with. The necklace that Sarah starts off the story with is initially just innocuous and played off as just a personal religious symbol, but with the reveal that she's actually a TomatoInTheMirror and the symbol is nearly-identical it's eerily similar to an in-universe religious emblem she shouldn't have had on her, being from another world, symbol, it's strongly implied the necklace amulet is somehow evidence of Sarah's cosmic heritage.]]



* ScenicTourLevel: Two of them, both framed explicitly to show the sheer scale of the world. The first is somewhat short and occurs during a Bullhead ride up to Atlas, and then a second one takes place later, using an old tram system in a blatant ShoutOut to [[VideoGame/HalfLife Half-Life]]. Sarah [[LampshadeHanging lampshades]] this.

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* ScenicTourLevel: Two of them, both framed explicitly to show the sheer scale of the world.Remnant Sarah's found herself in. The first is somewhat short and occurs during a Bullhead ride up to Atlas, and then a second one takes place later, using an old tram system in a blatant ShoutOut to [[VideoGame/HalfLife Half-Life]]. Sarah [[LampshadeHanging lampshades]] this.



* ShipTease: Occasionally, between the bisexual protagonist and a few other characters. Almost always [[ShipSinking sunk]] in the same breath, however, as the author confirms there won't be any [[spoiler:[[FriendsWithBenefits serious]]]] [[OriginalCharacter OC]]-on-Canon shipping. During a chapter where Sarah ''appreciated'' May's beauty:
--> '''[=WolfPrincessSarah=]:''' Sarah just really needs to be horny bonked. That being said, [[HomoeroticSubtext they are not immune to homoeroticism.]]
* ShoutOut: Many, given the protagonist is a modern-day human woman.
** In the very first chapter, Sarah references the HBO series Chernobyl as well as the {{Isekai}} genre by name:
---> '''Sarah:''' Fourty-two degrees fahrenheit… Two degrees celsius. Not great, not terrible.
** Then, during Chapter 3, when she's trying to activate her Aura, she goes through a few referential lines before trying a mantra similar to what Pyrrha does in RWBY.
---> [[Franchise/MastersOfTheUniverse "By the power of Greyskull!"]]
---> [[{{Franchise/Shazam}} "Shazam!"]]
---> [[Franchise/FantasticFour "It's Aura time!"]]
---> [[Franchise/GreenLantern "In brightest day, in blackest night, no evil will escape my sight—"]]
** The encrypted channel Pietro chooses to use for information regarding Sarah's weapon is [[ArcNumber Alpha-One-One-Three]].
** One of the "gap elements" used to prove Sarah's story, Molybdenum, has an Atomic Number of [[Franchise/TheHitchhikersGuideToTheGalaxy 42]].
** There's a few shout-outs to Half-Life, including one big one. See ScenicTourLevel.
** Sarah meets her security clearance interviewer, a man by the name of [[Creator/FoodNetwork Frank Fieri]].
---> '''Sarah:''' Well met, Mister Fieri. You're not quite what I expected.
---> '''Frank:''' And what were you expecting?
---> '''Sarah:''' From the name, frosted tips, maybe? A cheeky catchphrase? Maybe a love of flavor and spicy foods.
** She's not even the only one, and the story as a whole is ReferenceOverdosed.
* ShownTheirWork: Mostly error-free research is done regarding firearms, chemistry, and a few other things.
** Verification of Sarah's story is centered around 'Gap Elements' in Remnant's periodic table that haven't been discovered, but the specific alloy used in constructing her weapon has in its composition.
* StumbledIntoThePlot: After being in Mantle for less than ''one hour'', before she goes any further, she asks [[GoodLookingPrivates a friendly soldier]] at the wall to point her in the direction of Pietro's Pharmacy, setting the stage for more or less the ''entire'' story.
** More or less literal in the rewrite, where Sarah sets off going in the wrong direction, [[DieOrFly stumbling into a quickly-escalating hoard of Grimm.]] While she gets to show off her pre-existing skills in the prologue, [[DentedIron she's so injured by the end of the prologue]] that she needs [[BadassInDistress immediate medical treatment,]] and Mantle General is too far away. [[InSpiteOfANail Cue her getting dropped off at the Pharmacy]] by the soldiers that rescued her.

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* ShipTease: Occasionally, Somewhat frequently, between the bisexual protagonist and a few other characters. Almost always [[ShipSinking sunk]] in characters close to her age.
* ShoutOut: Many, given
the same breath, however, as protagonist is [[spoiler:at least partially]] a modern-day human woman, [[ReferenceOverdosed but she's far from the author confirms there won't be any [[spoiler:[[FriendsWithBenefits serious]]]] [[OriginalCharacter OC]]-on-Canon shipping. During a chapter where Sarah ''appreciated'' May's beauty:
--> '''[=WolfPrincessSarah=]:''' Sarah just really needs to be horny bonked. That being said, [[HomoeroticSubtext they are not immune to homoeroticism.
only one.]]
* ShoutOut: Many, given the protagonist is a modern-day human woman.
** In the very first chapter, Sarah references the HBO series Chernobyl as well as the {{Isekai}} genre by name:
---> '''Sarah:''' Fourty-two degrees fahrenheit… Two degrees celsius. Not great, not terrible.
** Then, during Chapter 3, when she's trying to activate her Aura, she goes through a few referential lines before trying a mantra similar to what Pyrrha does in RWBY.
---> [[Franchise/MastersOfTheUniverse "By the power of Greyskull!"]]
---> [[{{Franchise/Shazam}} "Shazam!"]]
---> [[Franchise/FantasticFour "It's Aura time!"]]
---> [[Franchise/GreenLantern "In brightest day, in blackest night, no evil will escape my sight—"]]
** The encrypted channel Pietro chooses to use for information regarding Sarah's weapon is [[ArcNumber Alpha-One-One-Three]].
** One of the "gap elements" used to prove Sarah's story, Molybdenum, has an Atomic Number of [[Franchise/TheHitchhikersGuideToTheGalaxy 42]].
** There's a few shout-outs to Half-Life, including one big one. See ScenicTourLevel.
** Sarah meets her security clearance interviewer, a man by the name of [[Creator/FoodNetwork Frank Fieri]].
---> '''Sarah:''' Well met, Mister Fieri. You're not quite what I expected.
---> '''Frank:''' And what were you expecting?
---> '''Sarah:''' From the name, frosted tips, maybe? A cheeky catchphrase? Maybe a love of flavor and spicy foods.
** She's not even the only one, and the story as a whole is ReferenceOverdosed.
* ShownTheirWork: Mostly error-free research is done regarding firearms, chemistry, and a few other things.
things, though in some areas this verges on
** Verification of Sarah's story is centered around 'Gap Elements' in Remnant's periodic table that haven't been discovered, but the specific alloy used in constructing her weapon has in its composition.
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* StumbledIntoThePlot: After being in Mantle for less than ''one hour'', before she goes any further, she asks [[GoodLookingPrivates a friendly soldier]] at the wall to point her in the direction of Pietro's Pharmacy, setting the stage for more or less the ''entire'' story.
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** More or less literal in the rewrite, where Sarah sets off going in the wrong direction, [[DieOrFly stumbling running into a quickly-escalating hoard series of Grimm.threats.]] While she gets to show off her pre-existing skills in the new prologue, [[DentedIron she's so injured by the end of the prologue]] it]] that she needs [[BadassInDistress immediate medical treatment,]] and Mantle General is too far away. [[InSpiteOfANail Cue her getting dropped off at the Pharmacy]] by the soldiers that rescued her.



** Later on, it becomes a little more present, mostly in form of dialogue choices, relationship building and the protagonist's slowly [[GrayingMorality evolving moral stance]].

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** Later on, it becomes a little more present, mostly in form of dialogue choices, relationship building In the rewrite, these elements are present from the very beginning, complete with [[CountingBullets ammunition tracking]] and [[BreakableWeapons item degredation]], with the protagonist's slowly [[GrayingMorality evolving moral stance]].entire prologue acting as a sort of JustifiedTutorial. Justified due to the story's underlying tabletop ruleset, [[AllThereInTheManual implied in author's notes and fluff]] to be a version of [[TabletopGame/GURPS GURPS]].



* [[spoiler:WhamEpisode]]: [[spoiler:''Tailor Maid'' and ''Jackals of Time'' start off relatively innocuously, with Sarah going into a tailor's shop to buy a work suit during her lunch break. Then the end of ''Jackals of Time'' comes and Sarah loses time again, but this time it's on a crowded street. She seems to think she's in a warzone, and she's armed. The thin implication is that she might have had a FreakOut and hurt someone, [[GetAholdOfYourSelfMan had [=Au.R.A.=] not physically intervened]] with a surveillance drone.]]
** [[spoiler:The end of the chapter isn't even the end of the reveals because the Author's Notes are ''interrupted'' by one of Sarah's nightmares; this one being a flashback to the death of her mother in what's implied to be a drive-by shooting. Along with the explicit reveal that the snarling "voice" that's been with her in Remnant has been with her all along.]]

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* [[spoiler:WhamEpisode]]: [[spoiler:''Tailor Maid'' and ''Jackals of Time'' start off relatively innocuously, with Sarah going into a tailor's shop to buy a work suit during her lunch break. Then the end of ''Jackals of Time'' comes and Sarah loses time again, but this time it's on a crowded street. She seems to think she's in a warzone, and she's armed. The thin implication is that she might have had a FreakOut and hurt someone, [[GetAholdOfYourSelfMan had [=Au.R.A.=] not physically intervened]] with a surveillance drone.]]
** [[spoiler:The end of the chapter isn't even the end of the reveals because the Author's Notes are ''interrupted'' by one of Sarah's nightmares; this one being a flashback to the death of her mother in what's implied to be a drive-by shooting. Along with the explicit reveal that the snarling "voice" that's been with her in Remnant has been with her all along.]]
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** [[spoiler:Ultimately, the question is resolved during ''[[Liar's Gambit]]'' [[WhatYouAreInTheDark No, she ''won't'' just watch.]] [[TheUnfettered She'll break her own morals]] [[TheFarmerAndTheViper and betray the man who rescued her]] [[JumpedAtTheCall to get herself there.]]]]

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** [[spoiler:Ultimately, the question is resolved during ''[[Liar's Gambit]]'' ''Liar's Gambit'' [[WhatYouAreInTheDark No, she ''won't'' just watch.]] [[TheUnfettered She'll break her own morals]] [[TheFarmerAndTheViper and betray the man who rescued her]] [[JumpedAtTheCall to get herself there.]]]]
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* ShipTease: Occasionally, between the [[BiTheWay bisexual]] protagonist and a few other characters. Almost always [[ShipSinking sunk]] in the same breath, however, as the author confirms there won't be any [[spoiler:[[FriendsWithBenefits serious]]]] [[OriginalCharacter OC]]-on-Canon shipping. During a chapter where Sarah ''appreciated'' May's beauty:

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* ShipTease: Occasionally, between the [[BiTheWay bisexual]] bisexual protagonist and a few other characters. Almost always [[ShipSinking sunk]] in the same breath, however, as the author confirms there won't be any [[spoiler:[[FriendsWithBenefits serious]]]] [[OriginalCharacter OC]]-on-Canon shipping. During a chapter where Sarah ''appreciated'' May's beauty:

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* TheAllConcealingI: The first-person chapters often blatantly lie about Sarah's past, and what details that can be gleaned in between her rambling narration are occasionally inconsistent.

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* TheAllConcealingI: The first-person chapters often blatantly lie about Sarah's past, and what details that can be gleaned in between her rambling narration are occasionally inconsistent. The third-person rewrite is a little more explicit at first... until it shifts ''back'' into first-person.



* ContinuityReboot: Given a rather sweeping one that covered most of the events of the opening, that's still underway.



* EasingIntoTheAdventure: The first part is devoted to Sarah establishing herself in her new universe and learning how the rules work. Justified, as it's a SelfInsertFic set in an AlternateUniverse. [[JustifiedTutorial As Sarah learns the rules,]] [[AudienceSurrogate so does the reader.]] Part 2 opens with the events of [[IncitingIncident The Breach]] and the story finally kicks firmly into gear.
* GunPorn: In the ''very first chapter'', Sarah describes her [[WeaponOfChoice Weapons Of Choice]] in pornographic detail, complete with an ExtendedDisarming sequence when she first meets Pietro. This just gets worse when John Silver, a gunsmith character and friend of Pietro's shows up.

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* EasingIntoTheAdventure: The first part is devoted to Sarah establishing herself in her new universe and learning how the rules work. In the rewrite, this also includes her learning about [[AmnesiacHero who Sarah she is]] to a greater degree. Justified, as it's a SelfInsertFic set in an AlternateUniverse. [[JustifiedTutorial As Sarah learns the rules,]] [[AudienceSurrogate so does the reader.]] Part 2 opens with the events of [[IncitingIncident The Breach]] and the story finally kicks firmly into gear.
* ForWantOfANail: In the rewrite, which is basically AlternateContinuity for the original version of [=WWF=], which still exists as a side-story. In the Prologue, what apparently separates Rewrite!Sarah from her less competent and less ''wounded'' original counterpart is that she started off walking into the tundra instead.
* GunPorn: In All over the ''very first chapter'', Sarah describes her [[WeaponOfChoice Weapons Of Choice]] in pornographic detail, complete with an ExtendedDisarming sequence when she first meets Pietro. This just gets worse when John Silver, a gunsmith character place, and friend of Pietro's shows up.you'd think the gun-loving self-insert was the worst offender.



* RecapEpisode: Chapter 28, which has a lot of links and references to older chapters, using the framing device of Sarah and Pietro discussing her future plans.
* ScenicTourLevel: Two of them, both framed explicitly to show the sheer scale of the world. The first is somewhat short and occurs during a Bullhead ride up to Atlas, and then a second one takes place during Chapter 15, using an old tram system in a blatant ShoutOut to [[VideoGame/HalfLife Half-Life]]. Sarah [[LampshadeHanging lampshades]] this.

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* RecapEpisode: Chapter 28, which has a lot of links and references to older chapters, using the framing device of Sarah and Pietro discussing her future plans.
* ScenicTourLevel: Two of them, both framed explicitly to show the sheer scale of the world. The first is somewhat short and occurs during a Bullhead ride up to Atlas, and then a second one takes place during Chapter 15, later, using an old tram system in a blatant ShoutOut to [[VideoGame/HalfLife Half-Life]]. Sarah [[LampshadeHanging lampshades]] this.



* SelfInsertFic: The general basis, but notably the protagonist is actually from a universe with a case of AlternateHistory.
* ShipTease: Occasionally, between the bisexual protagonist and a few other characters. Almost always [[ShipSinking sunk]] in the same breath, however, as the author confirms there won't be any [[spoiler:[[FriendsWithBenefits serious]]]] [[OriginalCharacter OC]]-on-Canon shipping. During a chapter where Sarah ''appreciated'' May's beauty:

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* SelfInsertFic: The general basis, but notably the protagonist is actually deviates a lot from the usual formula by having a universe heavy emphasis on technological worldbuilding, lowkey CosmicHorror, and being focused on a very low-powered heroine with a case ''lot'' [[SanitySlippage of AlternateHistory.
issues.]]
* ShipTease: Occasionally, between the bisexual [[BiTheWay bisexual]] protagonist and a few other characters. Almost always [[ShipSinking sunk]] in the same breath, however, as the author confirms there won't be any [[spoiler:[[FriendsWithBenefits serious]]]] [[OriginalCharacter OC]]-on-Canon shipping. During a chapter where Sarah ''appreciated'' May's beauty:



** The encrypted channel Pietro chooses to use for information regarding Sarah's weapon in Chapter 5 is [[ArcNumber Alpha-One-One-Three]].

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** The encrypted channel Pietro chooses to use for information regarding Sarah's weapon in Chapter 5 is [[ArcNumber Alpha-One-One-Three]].



** She's not even the only one, and the story as a whole is ReferenceOverdosed, though some of them are more subtle and fit in better than others.

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** She's not even the only one, and the story as a whole is ReferenceOverdosed, though some of them are more subtle and fit in better than others.ReferenceOverdosed.



** More or less literal in the rewrite, where Sarah sets off going in the wrong direction, [[DieOrFly stumbling into a quickly-escalating hoard of Grimm.]] While she gets to show off her pre-existing skills in the prologue, [[DentedIron she's so injured by the end of the prologue]] that she needs [[BadassInDistress immediate medical treatment,]] and Mantle General is too far away. [[InSpiteOfANail Cue her getting dropped off at the Pharmacy]] by the soldiers that rescued her.



* TemptingFate: In the first chapter, [[GoodLookingPrivates Ash Ederne]] boldly claims "Atlas is here to help, and his borders will never be closed to those in need." Come Volume 5...

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* TemptingFate: In the first chapter, prologue, [[GoodLookingPrivates Ash Ederne]] boldly claims "Atlas is here to help, and his borders will never be closed to those in need." Come Volume 5...



* UnreliableNarrator: Due to the protagonist's questionable sanity, a great many of the things she says in narration have to be taken with a grain of salt, and [[ContinuitySnarl there's a lot of inconsistencies.]]

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* UnreliableNarrator: Due to the protagonist's questionable sanity, a great many of the things she says in narration or to other characters have to be taken with a grain of salt, and [[ContinuitySnarl there's a lot of inconsistencies.]]
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--> "So that's it. I'm in Remnant—a death world that should have been just fiction (...) but at least I still have my gun."

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--> "So that's it. I'm in Remnant—a death world that should have been just fiction (...) but at least as long as I still have my gun.gun, I have all I need."
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* DrivingQuestion: As set up in the synopsis of the story, the question of whether Sarah can just stand idly by and watch while the Fall of Beacon happens, even if she's [[BadassNormal not empowered,]] [[much less ready to stare down threats like Adam and Cinder,]] [[HeroismWontPayTheBills nor does she even have the ''money'' to get to Vale.]]

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* DrivingQuestion: As set up in the synopsis of the story, the question of whether Sarah can just stand idly by and watch while the Fall of Beacon happens, even if she's [[BadassNormal not empowered,]] [[much [[WhatMeasureIsANonBadass much less ready to stare down threats like Adam and Cinder,]] [[HeroismWontPayTheBills nor does she even have the ''money'' to get to Vale.]]
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** [[spoiler:Ultimately, the question is resolved in the ''worst possible way.'' [[WhatYouAreInTheDark No, she ''won't'' just watch.]] [[TheUnfettered And she'll break her own morals]] [[TheFarmerAndTheViper and betray the man who rescued her]] [[JumpedAtTheCall to get herself there.]]]]

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** [[spoiler:Ultimately, the question is resolved in the ''worst possible way.'' during ''[[Liar's Gambit]]'' [[WhatYouAreInTheDark No, she ''won't'' just watch.]] [[TheUnfettered And she'll She'll break her own morals]] [[TheFarmerAndTheViper and betray the man who rescued her]] [[JumpedAtTheCall to get herself there.]]]]

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* DrivingQuestion: As set up in the synopsis of the story, the question of whether Sarah can just stand idly by and watch while the Fall of Beacon happens, even if she's not empowered, not ready to fight, [[nor does she even have the ''money'' to get to Vale.]] By the time she resolves that last problem thanks to Pietro, [[it's clear to her that she's going to need that money to make up for the first two,]] and that leaves her with the SadisticChoice of .

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* DrivingQuestion: As set up in the synopsis of the story, the question of whether Sarah can just stand idly by and watch while the Fall of Beacon happens, even if she's [[BadassNormal not empowered, not empowered,]] [[much less ready to fight, [[nor stare down threats like Adam and Cinder,]] [[HeroismWontPayTheBills nor does she even have the ''money'' to get to Vale.]] By ]]
** [[spoiler:Ultimately,
the time question is resolved in the ''worst possible way.'' [[WhatYouAreInTheDark No, she resolves that last problem thanks to Pietro, [[it's clear to ''won't'' just watch.]] [[TheUnfettered And she'll break her that she's going to need that money to make up for own morals]] [[TheFarmerAndTheViper and betray the first two,]] and that leaves her with the SadisticChoice of .man who rescued her]] [[JumpedAtTheCall to get herself there.]]]]
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* DrivingQuestion: As set up in the synopsis of the story, the question of whether Sarah can just stand idly by and watch while the Fall of Beacon happens, even if she's not empowered, not ready to fight, [[nor does she even have the ''money'' to get to Vale.]] By the time she resolves that last problem thanks to Pietro, [[it's clear to her that she's going to need that money to make up for the first two,]] and that leaves her with the SadisticChoice of .
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* TheyWouldCutYouUp: [[DiscussedTrope Discussed]] early on, w

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* TheyWouldCutYouUp: [[DiscussedTrope Discussed]] early on, wOccasionally brought up in narration, and mentioned as an anxiety that Sarah has. The fact that [[CoolOldGuy Pietro]] was willing to [[ScrewTheRulesImDoingWhatsRight break the law]] to get her a legal citizenship [[ProperlyParanoid strongly seems to imply this isn't an entirely unfounded fear.]]
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** She's not even the only one, and the story as a whole is ReferenceOverdosed, though some of them are more subtle and fit in better than others.


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* EasingIntoTheAdventure: The first part is devoted to Sarah establishing herself in her new universe and learning how the rules work. Justified, as it's a SelfInsertFic set in an AlternateUniverse. [[JustifiedTutorial As Sarah learns the rules,]] [[AudienceSurrogate so does the reader.]] Part 2 opens with the events of [[IncitingIncident The Breach]] and the stakes only escalate from there.

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* EasingIntoTheAdventure: The first part is devoted to Sarah establishing herself in her new universe and learning how the rules work. Justified, as it's a SelfInsertFic set in an AlternateUniverse. [[JustifiedTutorial As Sarah learns the rules,]] [[AudienceSurrogate so does the reader.]] Part 2 opens with the events of [[IncitingIncident The Breach]] and the stakes only escalate from there.story finally kicks firmly into gear.



* ShipTease: Occasionally, between the bisexual protagonist and a few other characters. Almost always [[ShipSinking sunk]] in the same breath, however, as the author confirms there won't be any [[OriginalCharacter OC]]-on-Canon shipping. During a chapter where Sarah ''appreciated'' May's beauty:

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* ShipTease: Occasionally, between the bisexual protagonist and a few other characters. Almost always [[ShipSinking sunk]] in the same breath, however, as the author confirms there won't be any [[spoiler:[[FriendsWithBenefits serious]]]] [[OriginalCharacter OC]]-on-Canon shipping. During a chapter where Sarah ''appreciated'' May's beauty:

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