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An [[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7560920/1/Children_of_the_Stars ongoing Drama/Romance Fanfic]] based on the ever popular {{World of Warcraft}} MMORPG.
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An [[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7560920/1/Children_of_the_Stars ongoing Drama/Romance Fanfic]] based on the ever popular {{World ''VideoGame/{{World of Warcraft}} Warcraft}}'' MMORPG.
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* {{Bookends}}: The beginning of chapter 14 has Keleria in a nightmare, trapped and sinking into darkness and screaming for Ayuri to help her. At the end, she's having the same nightmare, but Ayuri is there to "keep her safe" and she sleeps peacefully.
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* EnemyWithin: [[spoiler: Lexxias's "corruption" acts more like a separate entity only peripherally influenced by her feelings for Keleria, as when it's clear Keleria doesn't want to join her, Lexxias takes great pleasure in attempting to kill her.]]
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* EnemyWithin: [[spoiler: Lexxias's "corruption" acts more like is revealed to be a separate sentient demonic entity only peripherally influenced by that tried to hijack her feelings for Keleria, as when it's clear Keleria doesn't want to join her, Lexxias takes great pleasure in attempting to kill her.body.]]
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* WhamEpisode: Chapter 10 changes the tone of the story very quickly.
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* [[ManBitesMan Woman Bites Man]]: Keleria threatens to do this to the throat of a smith who is withholding her equipment (which she previously gave to him for free) which gives her a ''healthy'' dose of AxCrazy to go along with her previously very calm behaviour in the last scene.
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* [[ManBitesMan Woman Bites Man]]: Keleria threatens MindRape: ''Never'' hurt Ayuri or those she cares about. Being a shadow priest allows her to do this to the throat of a smith who is withholding her equipment (which she previously gave to him for free) which gives her a ''healthy'' dose of AxCrazy to go along with a wave of her previously very calm behaviour in the last scene.hand. And she will ruin you until you kill yourself to escape her.
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* [[ManBitesMan Woman Bites Man]]: Keleria threatens to do this to the throat of a smith who is withholding her equipment (which she previously gave to him for free) which gives her a ''healthy'' dose of AxCrazy to go along with her previously very calm behaviour in the last scene.
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** [[spoiler: Chapter 10 reveals Ayuri has one in the form of Revera Blackfang, the spirit of a Kal'dorei magus who fought during the War of the Ancients 10,000 years ago. Revera proceeds to unhinge whatever the hell is inside Keleria, giving her a taste of how Ayuri lives as well.]]
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* {{Gayngst}}: Subverted. Whilst Keleria does repeatedly note that Ayuri is already in a relationship with a male - [[BlatantLies thus totally wouldn't feel attracted to her]] - most of Keleria's pain is caused simply ''because'' she's in love with Ayuri. She inherently feels it is ''wrong'' for her to love Ayuri because the girl is already taken.
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* RelationshipUpgrade: Cemented as of Chapter 9.
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* LoveTriangle: A type 7 with Ayuri having to choose between Servestor and Keleria. Given how the story is tagged with "F/F" it should be obvious who she ultimately chooses. She does feel guilty for betraying Servestor however.
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* CannotSpitItOut: Keleria ''won't'' allow herself to spit it out.
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* LoveHurts: To the point where [[spoiler: Keleria tries to kill herself.]]
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* IncredibleShrinkingMan: Takes up the second half of the outtakes chapter, thanks to the Noggenfogger Elixir.
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* {{Kuudere}}: The second chapter shows Ayuri to be this.
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* LaserGuidedAmnesia: Keleria has this, missing exactly three years of her life. Granted this could have been an extremely ''severe'' [[HeroicBlueScreenOfDeath blue screen]] considering [[StakingTheLovedOne what happened]] right before it was induced. Too bad ''that'' wasn't the moment she specifically can't remember.
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* MasterOfTheMixedMessage: Ayuri, whether intentional or not, bringing vast degrees of confusion and undeserved self-deprecation to Keleria's life.
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* OneHeadTaller: Ayuri is relatively short for a Kal'dorei, being 6'6 and making her one head shorter than Keleria.
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* RedEyesTakeWarning: There's hints of it in the new first chapter when Keleria [[GroinAttack politely]] convinces a smith to give her back her equipment.
** It tends to happen whenever she enters her bloodrage state.
** It tends to happen whenever she enters her bloodrage state.
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* TechnicallyASmile: Keleria has this in the third chapter.
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* AntiHero: Keleria is a type III so far.
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* BadassGay: Keleria.
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* BrokenBird: Keleria deduces that Ayuri is this within the first few paragraphs.
* CastingAShadow: Ayuri, being a Shadow Priest, which may not have the same connotation for Kal'dorei as it does Humans and other fearful-of-the-dark races.
* CombatPragmatist: Keleria is far from nice in a fight.
---> '''Keleria:''' ''No! Let's see what noise '''you''' make corpse! (she then pries an undead's arms right out of his body by levering her blades up from underneath his shoulderblades)''
** As of chapter three she also isn't above using a GroinAttack in combat. After already having punctured both the guy's lungs.
* CastingAShadow: Ayuri, being a Shadow Priest, which may not have the same connotation for Kal'dorei as it does Humans and other fearful-of-the-dark races.
* CombatPragmatist: Keleria is far from nice in a fight.
---> '''Keleria:''' ''No! Let's see what noise '''you''' make corpse! (she then pries an undead's arms right out of his body by levering her blades up from underneath his shoulderblades)''
** As of chapter three she also isn't above using a GroinAttack in combat. After already having punctured both the guy's lungs.
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* DarkAndTroubledPast: Both Keleria and Ayuri.
** [[spoiler: Keleria lived through the War of the Ancients, which was already horrifying, and she's from Suramar which means her family was among those killed and raised as undead by the Nathreziem and their experiments on the city during the invasion. If that wasn't enough, her lover was forced to house a corruption inside her which eventually took control and forced Keleria to kill her. The corruption then forced itself inside Keleria and here she is now.]]
** [[spoiler: Blackouts while growing up that caused her family to be exiled to a strange, foreign land and then having that family brutally murdered while your sister hides you and takes whatever horrible tortures the Defias have planned. After this Ayuri had nothing and no one to help and guide her other than her belief in Elune.]]
* DeadpanSnarker: With some overlap of CaptainObvious.
---> '''Ayuri:''' ''What is that?''
---> '''Keleria:''' ''A journal.''
** [[spoiler: Keleria lived through the War of the Ancients, which was already horrifying, and she's from Suramar which means her family was among those killed and raised as undead by the Nathreziem and their experiments on the city during the invasion. If that wasn't enough, her lover was forced to house a corruption inside her which eventually took control and forced Keleria to kill her. The corruption then forced itself inside Keleria and here she is now.]]
** [[spoiler: Blackouts while growing up that caused her family to be exiled to a strange, foreign land and then having that family brutally murdered while your sister hides you and takes whatever horrible tortures the Defias have planned. After this Ayuri had nothing and no one to help and guide her other than her belief in Elune.]]
* DeadpanSnarker: With some overlap of CaptainObvious.
---> '''Ayuri:''' ''What is that?''
---> '''Keleria:''' ''A journal.''
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* DeflectorShields: As expected for a Priestess, Ayuri uses hers effectively in a fight. Namely she uses it in the first chapter on an undead psycho, causing him bounce off the shield and fall back on Keleria's swords.
* DualWielding: Keleria with her twin short swords.
* DualWielding: Keleria with her twin short swords.
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* HeroicBlueScreenOfDeath: [[spoiler: Keleria being forbidden to ever see or contact Ayuri again invokes this, as Keleria just shuts down. She doesn't even ''react'' when she collapses and breaks her wrist.]]
* HotAmazon: Keleria is 7'2, not too surprising since Kal'dorei are around 7 feet tall anyway, but she can also become an unstoppable berserker.
* HotAmazon: Keleria is 7'2, not too surprising since Kal'dorei are around 7 feet tall anyway, but she can also become an unstoppable berserker.
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** It's revealed Ayuri was thinking this way too, assuming that it was how friends felt about each other because she's never had one before.
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** Along with chapter 8 and the first outtake chapter.
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* KubrickStare: The way it's described, Keleria gives one of these to Servestor during their conversation in chapter 8.