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The first Pokémon that Ash caught, and one of his heavier hitters; Pidgeotto is still one of the boys, and more than willing to take part in the crews hijinks. [[spoiler:She evolves into Pidgeot and calls herself Morningstar]].
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The first Pokémon that Ash caught, and one of his heavier hitters; Pidgeotto is still one of the boys, and more than willing to take part in the crews hijinks. [[spoiler:She evolves into Pidgeot and calls herself adopted the nickname Morningstar]].
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* ADogNamedDog: Like Pikachu and Eevee, Pidgeotto is just called by her species name; though it's more along the lines of her wanting the right name and not wanting to be too hasty in choosing it. [[spoiler:Averted when she evolves into Pidgeot when she calls herself Morningstar]].
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* ADogNamedDog: Like Pikachu and Eevee, Pidgeotto is just called by her species name; though it's more along the lines of her wanting the right name and not wanting to be too hasty in choosing it. [[spoiler:Averted when she evolves into Pidgeot when she calls herself Pidgeot. Now going with the name Morningstar]].
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[[folder:Pidgeotto]]
The first Pokémon that Ash caught, and one of his heavier hitters; Pidgeotto is still one of the boys, and more than willing to take part in the crews hijinks.
The first Pokémon that Ash caught, and one of his heavier hitters; Pidgeotto is still one of the boys, and more than willing to take part in the crews hijinks.
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The first Pokémon that Ash caught, and one of his heavier hitters; Pidgeotto is still one of the boys, and more than willing to take part in the crews hijinks. [[spoiler:She evolves into Pidgeot and calls herself Morningstar]].
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* ADogNamedDog: Like Pikachu and Eevee, Pidgeotto is just called by her species name; though it's more along the lines of her wanting the right name and not wanting to be too hasty in choosing it.
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* ADogNamedDog: Like Pikachu and Eevee, Pidgeotto is just called by her species name; though it's more along the lines of her wanting the right name and not wanting to be too hasty in choosing it.
it. [[spoiler:Averted when she evolves into Pidgeot when she calls herself Morningstar]].
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* {{Manchild}}: A downplayed example. Despite ten being considered fairly mature for Pokémon, he mostly acts like how a ten-year-old human would. This is shown best when he encounters [[spoiler:a mischief of Zorua and discovers that one of the Zoroark chaperones was younger than him.]]
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* {{Manchild}}: A downplayed example. Despite ten being considered fairly mature for Pokémon, he mostly acts like how a ten-year-old human would. This is shown best when he encounters [[spoiler:a mischief bamboozle of Zorua and discovers that one of the Zoroark chaperones was younger than him.]]
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* TheNoseKnows: Due to being a Zorua, Ash's sense of smell is very sensitive. [[spoiler: This helped him identify that the Delia Team Rocket tried to hand back to Ash was a disguise.]]
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* TheNoseKnows: Due to being a Zorua, Ash's sense of smell is very sensitive. [[spoiler: This [[spoiler:This helped him identify that the Delia Team Rocket tried to hand back to in exchange for Ash was a disguise.]]
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Canonically the Charmander that was left to die by the abusive Trainer Damian; Sunny is Ash's third catch after rescuing the poor fire lizard from dying of exposure. Shy and withdrawn, Sunny still considers Ash his true trainer. [[spoiler: Sunny evolves into Charmeleon to save Ash from Giovanni's Persian.]]
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Canonically the Charmander that was left to die by the abusive Trainer Damian; Sunny is Ash's third catch after rescuing the poor fire lizard from dying of exposure. Shy and withdrawn, Sunny still considers Ash his true trainer. [[spoiler: Sunny [[spoiler:Sunny evolves into Charmeleon to save Ash from Giovanni's Persian.]]
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* HappilyAdopted: Ends up feeling this way [[spoiler: about Ash.]]
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* HappilyAdopted: Ends up feeling this way [[spoiler: about [[spoiler:about Ash.]]
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Ash's fourth catch, a gift after helping the Pokémon Scientist known as Bill. More analytical and logical of the group, she's less of a battler and more of a burgeoning scientist like her former caretaker; Eevee is still one to pack a punch if push comes to shove. [[spoiler: Evolves into Umbreon after the loss to Blaine and is now named Eve.]]
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Ash's fourth catch, a gift after helping the Pokémon Scientist known as Bill. More analytical and logical of the group, she's less of a battler and more of a burgeoning scientist like her former caretaker; Eevee is still one to pack a punch if push comes to shove. [[spoiler: Evolves [[spoiler:She evolves into Umbreon after the loss to Blaine and is now named Eve.]]
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** [[spoiler: By extension, Ash never had an Umbreon either, whereas Eevee, now nicknamed Eve, evolved into Umbreon after Ash lost to Blaine.]]
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Storm the Squirtle, formerly Numbah Five of the Squirtle Squad, was Ash's fifth catch. [[spoiler: She evolved into a Wartortle during the Fuchsia Gym battle.]]
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Storm the Squirtle, formerly Numbah Five of the Squirtle Squad, was Ash's fifth catch. [[spoiler: She [[spoiler:She evolved into a Wartortle during the Fuchsia Gym battle.]]
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* AdaptationRelationshipOverhaul: While Ash owns a Squirtle in canon, Storm wasn't the leader of the Squirtle Squad in Zorua Trainer (the leader became Misty's Pokémon instead), is female, and wasn't caught until later in the story. [[spoiler: Additionally, Squirtle never evolved into Wartortle in canon, whereas Storm evolved during the Fuchsia Gym battle.]]
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* AdaptationRelationshipOverhaul: While Ash owns a Squirtle in canon, Storm wasn't the leader of the Squirtle Squad in Zorua Trainer (the leader became Misty's Pokémon instead), is female, and wasn't caught until later in the story. [[spoiler: Additionally, [[spoiler:Additionally, Squirtle never evolved into Wartortle in canon, whereas Storm evolved during the Fuchsia Gym battle.]]
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Ash's sixth catch, Arthalothadamesh the Ralts, shortened as Art, dreams of wanting to evolve into a Gallade.
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Ash's sixth catch, Arthalothadamesh the Ralts, shortened as Art, dreams desires for adventure, dreaming of wanting to evolve into a Gallade.
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* AffectionateNickname: Art calls Ash, Dash, combining Dad and Ash together.
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* TheNoseKnows: Due to being a Zorua, Ash's sense of smell is very sensitive. [[spoiler: This helped him identify that the Delia Team Rocket tried to hand back to Ash was a disguise.]]
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Ash's second catch, a Clefairy that wanted to see the outside world; and was also grateful to Ash for saving her home from the clutches of Team Rocket. While more reserved and shy compared to the other team members, she's still a much appreciated addition.
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Ash's second catch, a Clefairy that wanted to see the outside world; and was also grateful to Ash for saving her home from the clutches of Team Rocket. While more reserved and shy compared to the other team members, she's still a much appreciated addition. [[spoiler: She evolved into Clefable for the rematch against Blaine.]]
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* AdaptationRelationshipOverhaul: Unlike in canon, where Ash never had a Clefairy; here, Selene is a core part of his team and a good friend as well.
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* AdaptationRelationshipOverhaul: Unlike in canon, where Ash never had a Clefairy; Clefairy [[spoiler: nor Clefable]]; here, Selene is a core part of his team and a good friend as well.
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Canonically the Charmander that was left to die by the abusive Trainer Damian; Sunny is Ash's third catch after rescuing the poor fire lizard from dying of exposure. Shy and withdrawn, Sunny still considers Ash his true trainer.
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Canonically the Charmander that was left to die by the abusive Trainer Damian; Sunny is Ash's third catch after rescuing the poor fire lizard from dying of exposure. Shy and withdrawn, Sunny still considers Ash his true trainer. [[spoiler: Sunny evolves into Charmeleon to save Ash from Giovanni's Persian.]]
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[[folder: Eevee[[spoiler:/Umbreon]]]]
Ash's fourth catch, a gift after helping the Pokémon Scientist known as Bill. More analytical and logical of the group, she's less of a battler and more of a burgeoning scientist like her former caretaker; Eevee is still one to pack a punch if push comes to shove. [[spoiler: Evolves into Umbreon after the loss to Blaine.]]
Ash's fourth catch, a gift after helping the Pokémon Scientist known as Bill. More analytical and logical of the group, she's less of a battler and more of a burgeoning scientist like her former caretaker; Eevee is still one to pack a punch if push comes to shove. [[spoiler: Evolves into Umbreon after the loss to Blaine.]]
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[[folder: Eevee[[spoiler:/Umbreon]]]]
Eevee[[spoiler:/Eve]]]]
Ash's fourth catch, a gift after helping the Pokémon Scientist known as Bill. More analytical and logical of the group, she's less of a battler and more of a burgeoning scientist like her former caretaker; Eevee is still one to pack a punch if push comes to shove. [[spoiler: Evolves into Umbreon after the loss toBlaine.Blaine and is now named Eve.]]
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** [[spoiler: By extension, Ash never had an Umbreon either, whereas Eevee, now nicknamed Eve, evolved into Umbreon after Ash lost to Blaine.]]
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* TheNeedsOfTheMany: Has no real bias towards any one possible evolution, instead deciding based on what the team needs.[[spoiler: She ends up picking [[CastingAShadow Umbreon]].]]
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* TheNeedsOfTheMany: Has no real bias towards any one possible evolution, instead deciding based on what the team needs.[[spoiler: She [[spoiler:She ends up picking [[CastingAShadow Umbreon]].]]
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* TheNeedsOfTheMany: Has no real bias towards any one possible evolution, instead deciding based on what the team needs.[[spoiler: She ends up picking (CastingAShadow\Umbreon).]]
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* TheNeedsOfTheMany: Has no real bias towards any one possible evolution, instead deciding based on what the team needs.[[spoiler: She ends up picking (CastingAShadow\Umbreon).[[CastingAShadow Umbreon]].]]
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[[folder: Eevee]]
Ash's fourth catch, a gift after helping the Pokémon Scientist known as Bill. More analytical and logical of the group, she's less of a battler and more of a burgeoning scientist like her former caretaker; Eevee is still one to pack a punch if push comes to shove.
Ash's fourth catch, a gift after helping the Pokémon Scientist known as Bill. More analytical and logical of the group, she's less of a battler and more of a burgeoning scientist like her former caretaker; Eevee is still one to pack a punch if push comes to shove.
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Eevee[[spoiler:/Umbreon]]]]
Ash's fourth catch, a gift after helping the Pokémon Scientist known as Bill. More analytical and logical of the group, she's less of a battler and more of a burgeoning scientist like her former caretaker; Eevee is still one to pack a punch if push comes to shove. [[spoiler: Evolves into Umbreon after the loss to Blaine.]]
Ash's fourth catch, a gift after helping the Pokémon Scientist known as Bill. More analytical and logical of the group, she's less of a battler and more of a burgeoning scientist like her former caretaker; Eevee is still one to pack a punch if push comes to shove. [[spoiler: Evolves into Umbreon after the loss to Blaine.]]
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* TheNeedsOfTheMany: Has no real bias towards any one possible evolution, instead deciding based on what the team needs.[[spoiler: She ends up picking (CastingAShadow\Umbreon).]]
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* AnimalDisguise: A given, seeing as how he's a Zorua disguising himself as a human.
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* CunningLikeAFox: As a Tricky Fox Pokémon, Ash used his illusions to trick many people, including his own trainer Delia at times.
* DeliberatelyCuteChild: More like "Deliberately Cute Zorua Kit", but there are a few times in his younger days when Delia is raising him that Ash plays up his cuteness to try and get out of trouble.
* GoodIsNotSoft: Ash may be one of the nicest people (or rather Pokémon) you will ever meet, but God help you if you piss him off and press any of his berserk buttons.
* DeliberatelyCuteChild: More like "Deliberately Cute Zorua Kit", but there are a few times in his younger days when Delia is raising him that Ash plays up his cuteness to try and get out of trouble.
* GoodIsNotSoft: Ash may be one of the nicest people (or rather Pokémon) you will ever meet, but God help you if you piss him off and press any of his berserk buttons.
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* HumanDisguise: A given, seeing as how he's a Zorua disguising himself as a human.
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* MeaningfulName: In this fic, Delia named the Zorua Ash because of his black fur with red highlights. Cinder was another possible candidate, but she preferred Ash as a name.
* SpeaksFluentAnimal: As a Pokémon who can speak the human language, when he is in his true form around other humans (besides his traveling companions), he talks in the Pokémon language.
* SpeaksFluentAnimal: As a Pokémon who can speak the human language, when he is in his true form around other humans (besides his traveling companions), he talks in the Pokémon language.
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* AnimalTalk: Before he learned how to speak like a human, Ash talked just like any other Zorua or Pokémon; and he does occasionally slip up and speak pokemon at times.
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* AnimalTalk: Before he learned how to speak like a human, Ash talked just like any other Zorua or Pokémon; and he does occasionally slip up and speak pokemon Pokémon at times.
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* TalkingAnimal: Ash taught himself how to speak the human language (without the use of an illusion) after hearing Delia and Spencer discuss about Molly learning how to talk. It took a couple of months for Ash to learn and master making the sounds, with the letter "P" being the hardest for him to produce due to his Zorua lips being not as flexible as a human's.
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!!Ash's Travelling Companions
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!!Ash's Travelling Traveling Companions
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Canonically the Charmander that was left to die by the abusive Trainer Damien; Sunny is Ash's third catch after rescuing the poor fire lizard from dying of exposure. Shy and withdrawn, Sunny still considers Ash his true trainer.
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* AbandonedPetInABox: As in canon, Sunny was left to die on a rock by Damien because he was too weak. What makes this even worse is that it's made clear in later chapters that Sunny is only a year old at the oldest; essentially the mental equivalent to a five-year-old kid. Damien is one of the few people on Ash's permanent shit list because of this.
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* AbandonedPetInABox: As in canon, Sunny was left to die on a rock by Damien Damian because he was too weak. What makes this even worse is that it's made clear in later chapters that Sunny is only a year old at the oldest; essentially the mental equivalent to a five-year-old kid. Damien Damian is one of the few people on Ash's permanent shit list because of this.
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* AdaptationalExplanation: Instead of Ash and the group leaving him alone in the dark and the rain until he nearly dies from exposure; Ash (after nearly blowing his cover due to losing his temper with Damien) comes over to see Sunny and the two talk things out, with Sunny breaking down once he finally acknowledges that Damien isn't coming back for him.
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* AdaptationalExplanation: Instead of Ash and the group leaving him alone in the dark and the rain until he nearly dies from exposure; Ash (after nearly blowing his cover due to losing his temper with Damien) Damian) comes over to see Sunny and the two talk things out, with Sunny breaking down once he finally acknowledges that Damien Damian isn't coming back for him.