This is discussion archived from a time before the current discussion method was installed.
Working Title: Time to Step Up Commander
Hylarn:Can someone trim the description down a bit?
: I had a go. I chopped out bits that repeat, a few areas that were of dubious value to the trope (or that probably belong in a yet-to-be-made trope) and shortened anything that could be said in fewer words. Its still long but hopefully there should be less blather and more substance.
Beyond that, we need a full re-write for conciseness. Anyone here a good summariser?