From the moment we're introduced to Hope it's evident that she's going to be far more tragic than Harry from the extra injuries she's incurred during her stay at the Dursleys, to the extent she has a brace on her leg and a cane, and the fact she hates her appearance because she so strongly resembles Lily. A single scene later and it's revealed that she's also a know-it-all, pegging George as a wizard from the moment she meets him (after we get an inner monologue gushing over how pretty Hope and her 'orbs' are) while she's clutching several books that are 'advanced for her age'. This happens before she even attends her first year at Hogwarts.
The focus on Hope's injured leg and cane isn't necessarily bad, but it is excessive and is often an excuse for the canon characters to help her. In the first book alone Hope falls from the Hogwarts Express, trips in the mud and has to cling onto Ron, is one of the last to reach the boats because of her leg, is the centre of attention through concerned whispers about her injury from complete strangers and struggles to get through the portrait hole to the Gryffindor common room. Also despite the fact that magic could clearly fix Hope's leg and the fact it causes her a lot of difficulty with day-to-day activities, Madam Pomfrey strangely insists it's left to heal naturally.
In addition to this, Hope is apparently 'prone' to being injured more than other people somehow and no-one ever thinks to heal her with magic, instead choosing more muggle methods so she can 'bravely suffer' through it.
Hope veers into Mary Sue territory as early as the first book. She has an Orphan's Plot Trinket and loving letter from her parents, suffers from Iam Not Pretty while everyone else internally gushes about her beautiful she is, is able to change her hair colour and eye colour at will, knows far more about the magical world than those who grew up there, she effortlessly outpranks the Weasley twins, is more of a bookworm than Hermione and catches onto the main plot far too quickly. Hope's 'sassy and witty' nature ends up with her being rude and condescending. She's needlessly sarcastic to Madam Pomfrey who is only trying to help her with her injured leg, she's rude to her teachers but is merely labelled a 'prankster' and she apparently shouts 'derogatory comments' when her concerned friends take her to the hospital wing.
Her relationship with George is explored as early as the first chapter, with a series of forced encounters that have a strange romantic edge given that it's between two pre-teens. It's somewhat uncomfortable about how there's apparently a betting pool on them dating when they're older, everyone is strangely obsessed with their relationship to the extent of being OOC. A lot of the issues here would have been solved had the relationship been explored in a romantic way when they were older.
I stopped reading when Hope makes the ridiculous decision to 'fall bravely from her broomstick' in the middle of a Quidditch match into George's waiting arms. It's possible that Hope improves further into the books and it's clear that the author was very young when this was written. The writing itself isn't bad, though the pacing can be off and there are certain scenes that could be removed in order to improve the flow of the story. The PO Vs are all over the place, and honestly seem to exist just so other characters can gush about how amazing Hope is.
FanficRecs Hope Potter: Mary Sue
From the moment we're introduced to Hope it's evident that she's going to be far more tragic than Harry from the extra injuries she's incurred during her stay at the Dursleys, to the extent she has a brace on her leg and a cane, and the fact she hates her appearance because she so strongly resembles Lily. A single scene later and it's revealed that she's also a know-it-all, pegging George as a wizard from the moment she meets him (after we get an inner monologue gushing over how pretty Hope and her 'orbs' are) while she's clutching several books that are 'advanced for her age'. This happens before she even attends her first year at Hogwarts.
The focus on Hope's injured leg and cane isn't necessarily bad, but it is excessive and is often an excuse for the canon characters to help her. In the first book alone Hope falls from the Hogwarts Express, trips in the mud and has to cling onto Ron, is one of the last to reach the boats because of her leg, is the centre of attention through concerned whispers about her injury from complete strangers and struggles to get through the portrait hole to the Gryffindor common room. Also despite the fact that magic could clearly fix Hope's leg and the fact it causes her a lot of difficulty with day-to-day activities, Madam Pomfrey strangely insists it's left to heal naturally.
In addition to this, Hope is apparently 'prone' to being injured more than other people somehow and no-one ever thinks to heal her with magic, instead choosing more muggle methods so she can 'bravely suffer' through it.
Hope veers into Mary Sue territory as early as the first book. She has an Orphan's Plot Trinket and loving letter from her parents, suffers from Iam Not Pretty while everyone else internally gushes about her beautiful she is, is able to change her hair colour and eye colour at will, knows far more about the magical world than those who grew up there, she effortlessly outpranks the Weasley twins, is more of a bookworm than Hermione and catches onto the main plot far too quickly. Hope's 'sassy and witty' nature ends up with her being rude and condescending. She's needlessly sarcastic to Madam Pomfrey who is only trying to help her with her injured leg, she's rude to her teachers but is merely labelled a 'prankster' and she apparently shouts 'derogatory comments' when her concerned friends take her to the hospital wing.
Her relationship with George is explored as early as the first chapter, with a series of forced encounters that have a strange romantic edge given that it's between two pre-teens. It's somewhat uncomfortable about how there's apparently a betting pool on them dating when they're older, everyone is strangely obsessed with their relationship to the extent of being OOC. A lot of the issues here would have been solved had the relationship been explored in a romantic way when they were older.
I stopped reading when Hope makes the ridiculous decision to 'fall bravely from her broomstick' in the middle of a Quidditch match into George's waiting arms. It's possible that Hope improves further into the books and it's clear that the author was very young when this was written. The writing itself isn't bad, though the pacing can be off and there are certain scenes that could be removed in order to improve the flow of the story. The PO Vs are all over the place, and honestly seem to exist just so other characters can gush about how amazing Hope is.