Upon reflection, a lot of the darkness in Anno's world comes from there being no therapists. No-one to talk to, no-one to sort through his characters' serious issues. Upon reflection, it does make more sense that Nerv would want to invest in its pilots' mental health. A comatose pilot is a useless pilot, after all.
I would have to agree with my peers; the story progresses well enough until Kaworu appears on the scene and, with his colleagues, takes things in a rather... different
direction, one that I'm not 'happy' with. As a whole there's satisfactory characterisation and reasonable dialog, though grammatical/word choice errors are frequent; its a satisfactory waff fic, but not one of the greats.