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As a small side note, I had to sort of guess when most of Jade\'s timeline events occurred, like her strife with Bec. If you have any better idea when they happened, by all means feel free to move them.
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As a small side note, I had to sort of guess when most of Jade\\\'s timeline events occurred, like her strife with Bec. If you have any better idea when they happened, by all means feel free to move them.
E: I\\\'m holding off on future edits till you reply at some point.
E: I\\\'m holding off on future edits till you reply at some point.
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I think your meaning was probably that I removed the mentions of all the pesterlogs that happened on their birthdays. With exception to John\'s changing of his name (and perhaps Rose expressing interest in working with the trolls) none of those conversations are really that important in the scheme of the plot. Character interactions oh yeah! But plot? Not so much. Perhaps why I have this belief is that as history goes, we focus on high points and dramatic events; in short we don\'t need to explain what happens in every panel.
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I think your meaning was probably that I removed the mentions of all the pesterlogs that happened on their birthdays. With exception to John\\\'s changing of his name (and perhaps Rose expressing interest in working with the trolls) none of those conversations are really that important in the scheme of the plot. Character interactions oh yeah! But plot? Not so much. Perhaps I just think that we don\\\'t need to explain what happens in every panel.
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I think your meaning was probably that I removed the mentions of all the pesterlogs that happened on their birthdays. With exception to John\'s changing of his name (and perhaps Rose expressing interest in working with the trolls) none of those conversations are really that important in the scheme of the plot. Character interactions oh yeah! But plot? Not so much. Perhaps why I have this belief is that as history goes, we focus on high points and dramatic events; in short my edits are characterized by a reduction in granularity.
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I think your meaning was probably that I removed the mentions of all the pesterlogs that happened on their birthdays. With exception to John\\\'s changing of his name (and perhaps Rose expressing interest in working with the trolls) none of those conversations are really that important in the scheme of the plot. Character interactions oh yeah! But plot? Not so much. Perhaps why I have this belief is that as history goes, we focus on high points and dramatic events; in short we don\\\'t need to explain what happens in every panel.
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Identifying every single time a pesterlog occurs is way too granular and unneeded; most of them are irrelevant to the plot at any rate. This is the barest bones anyways. Pretty much every major event and nothing else. It\'s easier to flesh out from the ground up rather than prune from the top down.
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Identifying every single time a pesterlog occurs is way too specific; most of them are irrelevant to the plot at any rate. This is the barest bones anyways. Pretty much every major event and nothing else. It\\\'s easier to flesh out from the ground up rather than prune from the top down.
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I think your meaning was probably that I removed the mentions of all the pesterlogs that happened on their birthdays. With exception to John\'s changing of his name (and perhaps Rose expressing interest in working with the trolls) none of those conversations are really that important in the scheme of the plot. Character interactions oh yeah! But plot? Not so much.
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I think your meaning was probably that I removed the mentions of all the pesterlogs that happened on their birthdays. With exception to John\\\'s changing of his name (and perhaps Rose expressing interest in working with the trolls) none of those conversations are really that important in the scheme of the plot. Character interactions oh yeah! But plot? Not so much. Perhaps why I have this belief is that as history goes, we focus on high points and dramatic events; in short my edits are characterized by a reduction in granularity.
