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In second paragraph: \"A eco-terrorist organisation\" should read \"An eco-terrorist organization.\"
Under \"Ascend to a Higher Plane of Existence,\" the whole sentence \"Backstory for Advent Children establish his three remnants being formed from pure spiritual energy with a need for any Jenova cells, though the three are incomplete copies of him without them\" is a confusing mess.
Under \"Black Best Friend,\" the \"specially\" in \"Barret, specially if you choose him for the tram cut-scene.\" should be either \"specifically\" or \"especially.\"
Under \"Cognizant Limbs,\" it says \"Emerald Weapons\" when it should be singular, not plural.
Under \"Damage-Sponge Boss /Marathon Boss,\" the sentence \"Ruby and Emerald WEAPON, who have eight hundred thousand and one million hp , respectively, and you are only able to do 9999 at once, typical strategies for beating them involve using the Game-Breaker summon a couple dozen times\" should read, \"Ruby and Emerald Weapon have eight-hundred thousand and one million HP respectively, and you are only able to deal 9999 damage at once. Typical strategies for beating them involve using the GameBreaker summon a couple dozen times.\" The sentence, \"The fight against Emerald WEAPON takes place underwater; you have to either kill it in 20 minutes, or undergo a simple sidequest to allow you to breathe water\" utilizes a semicolon and comma incorrectly. It should read, \"The fight against Emerald Weapon takes place underwater, and you have to kill it in 20 minutes or undergo a simple sidequest to allow you to breathe underwater.\" The sentence \"Since that isn\'t very long against something with as many hp as Emerald WEAPON, most people go for the sidequest\" should have \"HP\" capitalized.
Under \"Boss Battle,\" the sentence that says \"During the final battle with Sephiroth, you can switch your party members\" isn\'t totally accurate and should read, \"During the first segment of the final battle with Sephiroth, you can switch your party members.\" The segment that reads, \"If you bring the hurt and totally wreck Jenova\'s stuff, you have to split your equipment and materia three ways; having one team defeat Sephiroth\'s left arm, one team for the right arm, and one team for his core... which will heal the arms back if you take too long. And if you used the infinity plus one summon on it, the final boss gets a boost to its HP. And what\'s even worse, the numerous parties need to be properly equipped, but once you beat the boss, your main party goes straight on to the Final Boss battle without giving you a chance to swap equipment in-between\" is a grammatical nightmare, with sentence fragments and improper punctuation everywhere. It should read, \"If you bring the hurt and totally wreck Jenova\'s stuff, you have to split your party and material three ways, having one team to defeat Sephiroth\'s left arm, one team for the right arm, and one team for his core...which will heal the arms back if you take too long. If you use the InfinityPlusOne summon on it, the final boss gets a boost to its HP. Even worse, the numerous parties need to be properly equipped, but once you beat the boss, your main party goes straight on to the Final Boss battle without giving you a chance to swap equipment in-between.\" The segment that reads \"It\'s also made worse that if one of your team gets taken down, instant Game Over, even if it\'s not the team fighting the core (which fights Sephiroth\'s final form)\" should read \"It\'s also made worse that if one of your teams gets taken down, it\'s instant Game Over, even if it\'s not the team fighting the core (which fights Sephiroth\'s final form).\"
Under \"Broken Aesop,\" the sentence \"The original game had an environmental message about the Lifestream and humans abusing the planet\'s natural resources to the point there was the chance Holy would see them as a threat and destroy the species\" should say \"to the point where there was the chance that Holy would,\" etc.
Under \"Can\'t Drop the Hero,\" the sentence \"Both subverted and played straight; at a couple times in the game, you lose Cloud for a while, to be replaced by Tifa and Cid. Outside of this, however, you truly can\'t drop the hero\" should be split into two sentences, with a period where the semicolon is.
Under \"Chekhov\'s Gunman/Chekhov\'s Army,\" the sentence \"The connection the events at Nibelheim can be easily missed if the player doesn\'t stop at Gongaga (or if they do but don\'t have Aerith in the party) and meet his parents, revealing his actual name\" needs fixing. Not sure what it\'s trying to say, so needs to be rewritten in a way that makes sense.
Under \"Chest Monster,\" in the sentence \"Oh, and getting hit by the second hand dumps you into a pit, forces you to fight a pair of Ancient Dragons that surround you, and send you back to near the start of the dungeon (you\'ll find Cloud\'s Nail Bat weapon in this pit),\" it should say \"surrounds you\" (since it is worded as the \'\'pair\'\' that surrounds you) and \"send you back\" should say \"sends you back,\" since it\'s getting hit by the second hand that sends you back, not the dragons that send you back.
The \"Combat Pragmatist\" entry should be removed since it does not happen in this game.
Under \"Comically Small Bribe\" the spacing is odd on the attempted ellipses before \"10 gil\" and needs to be fixed. Furthermore, after \"You can walk out of town, kill some pansy monsters, and rake in a few hundred,\" I would like to add \"The guard fittingly calls you a cheapass for declining.\"
Under \"Corrupt Corporate Executive,\" the sentence \"The entire senior management of the Shinra company... Cranked Up to Eleven\" should remove the space before \"Cranked\" and the \"c\" should be lowercase.
Under \"Cosmic Keystone,\" the word \"Aptly\" should be lowercase.
The \"Cry Cute\" entry needs removal since Kadaj is not in this game.
Under \"Dark and Troubled Past,\" the weirdly first-person \"If that\'s not dark and troubled, I don\'t know what is\" should be changed to \"If that\'s not dark and troubled, what is?\"
Under \"Debut Queue,\" the \"(when Cid, the last mandatory member joins)\" segment should read either \"(when Cid, the last mandatory member, joins),\" or \"(when the last mandatory member Cid joins).\"
The \"Also qualifies to Rufus and the Turks in Final Fantasy VII: Advent Children\" segment tacked onto the \"Defeat Means Friendship\" entry should be removed since it\'s irrelevant to this particular game and should be left to the Advent Children page.
Under the \"Very Definitely Final Dungeon\" segment of \"Dungeon Crawling,\" the word \"disks\" should be spelled as \"discs.\"
Under \"Eco-Terrorist,\" \"AVALANCHE believe\" should read as \"AVALANCHE believes,\" since AVALANCHE is the name of a unit, which is singular.
Under \"Eldritch Abomination,\" the sentence \"The whole turning people into monsters and driving them insane and impersonating the native race and turning on them after gaining acceptance is kind of pushing it though\" should read, \"The whole \'turning people into monsters, driving them insane, impersonating the native race, and turning on them after gaining acceptance\' thing is kind of pushing it, though.\"
Under \"Even Bad Men Love Their Mamas,\" the segment about Kadaj should be removed since this character is not in this game.
Under \"Everything Trying to Kill You,\" the sentence should read, \"The Sector 6 slums have the Hell House enemy, which is...a small house...that sprouts arms legs and tries to kill you...and for some reason, also shoots out bombs.\"
...And this is only the first \"A-E\" section, let alone the entire rest of the page. I\'ll go ahead and stop noting everything that needs fixing now, as I\'m sure my point has been very clearly made. Please consider unlocking this page so people who care about improving it can do so. Thank you.
Under \"Ascend to a Higher Plane of Existence,\" the whole sentence \"Backstory for Advent Children establish his three remnants being formed from pure spiritual energy with a need for any Jenova cells, though the three are incomplete copies of him without them\" is a confusing mess.
Under \"Black Best Friend,\" the \"specially\" in \"Barret, specially if you choose him for the tram cut-scene.\" should be either \"specifically\" or \"especially.\"
Under \"Cognizant Limbs,\" it says \"Emerald Weapons\" when it should be singular, not plural.
Under \"Damage-Sponge Boss /Marathon Boss,\" the sentence \"Ruby and Emerald WEAPON, who have eight hundred thousand and one million hp , respectively, and you are only able to do 9999 at once, typical strategies for beating them involve using the Game-Breaker summon a couple dozen times\" should read, \"Ruby and Emerald Weapon have eight-hundred thousand and one million HP respectively, and you are only able to deal 9999 damage at once. Typical strategies for beating them involve using the GameBreaker summon a couple dozen times.\" The sentence, \"The fight against Emerald WEAPON takes place underwater; you have to either kill it in 20 minutes, or undergo a simple sidequest to allow you to breathe water\" utilizes a semicolon and comma incorrectly. It should read, \"The fight against Emerald Weapon takes place underwater, and you have to kill it in 20 minutes or undergo a simple sidequest to allow you to breathe underwater.\" The sentence \"Since that isn\'t very long against something with as many hp as Emerald WEAPON, most people go for the sidequest\" should have \"HP\" capitalized.
Under \"Boss Battle,\" the sentence that says \"During the final battle with Sephiroth, you can switch your party members\" isn\'t totally accurate and should read, \"During the first segment of the final battle with Sephiroth, you can switch your party members.\" The segment that reads, \"If you bring the hurt and totally wreck Jenova\'s stuff, you have to split your equipment and materia three ways; having one team defeat Sephiroth\'s left arm, one team for the right arm, and one team for his core... which will heal the arms back if you take too long. And if you used the infinity plus one summon on it, the final boss gets a boost to its HP. And what\'s even worse, the numerous parties need to be properly equipped, but once you beat the boss, your main party goes straight on to the Final Boss battle without giving you a chance to swap equipment in-between\" is a grammatical nightmare, with sentence fragments and improper punctuation everywhere. It should read, \"If you bring the hurt and totally wreck Jenova\'s stuff, you have to split your party and material three ways, having one team to defeat Sephiroth\'s left arm, one team for the right arm, and one team for his core...which will heal the arms back if you take too long. If you use the InfinityPlusOne summon on it, the final boss gets a boost to its HP. Even worse, the numerous parties need to be properly equipped, but once you beat the boss, your main party goes straight on to the Final Boss battle without giving you a chance to swap equipment in-between.\" The segment that reads \"It\'s also made worse that if one of your team gets taken down, instant Game Over, even if it\'s not the team fighting the core (which fights Sephiroth\'s final form)\" should read \"It\'s also made worse that if one of your teams gets taken down, it\'s instant Game Over, even if it\'s not the team fighting the core (which fights Sephiroth\'s final form).\"
Under \"Broken Aesop,\" the sentence \"The original game had an environmental message about the Lifestream and humans abusing the planet\'s natural resources to the point there was the chance Holy would see them as a threat and destroy the species\" should say \"to the point where there was the chance that Holy would,\" etc.
Under \"Can\'t Drop the Hero,\" the sentence \"Both subverted and played straight; at a couple times in the game, you lose Cloud for a while, to be replaced by Tifa and Cid. Outside of this, however, you truly can\'t drop the hero\" should be split into two sentences, with a period where the semicolon is.
Under \"Chekhov\'s Gunman/Chekhov\'s Army,\" the sentence \"The connection the events at Nibelheim can be easily missed if the player doesn\'t stop at Gongaga (or if they do but don\'t have Aerith in the party) and meet his parents, revealing his actual name\" needs fixing. Not sure what it\'s trying to say, so needs to be rewritten in a way that makes sense.
Under \"Chest Monster,\" in the sentence \"Oh, and getting hit by the second hand dumps you into a pit, forces you to fight a pair of Ancient Dragons that surround you, and send you back to near the start of the dungeon (you\'ll find Cloud\'s Nail Bat weapon in this pit),\" it should say \"surrounds you\" (since it is worded as the \'\'pair\'\' that surrounds you) and \"send you back\" should say \"sends you back,\" since it\'s getting hit by the second hand that sends you back, not the dragons that send you back.
The \"Combat Pragmatist\" entry should be removed since it does not happen in this game.
Under \"Comically Small Bribe\" the spacing is odd on the attempted ellipses before \"10 gil\" and needs to be fixed. Furthermore, after \"You can walk out of town, kill some pansy monsters, and rake in a few hundred,\" I would like to add \"The guard fittingly calls you a cheapass for declining.\"
Under \"Corrupt Corporate Executive,\" the sentence \"The entire senior management of the Shinra company... Cranked Up to Eleven\" should remove the space before \"Cranked\" and the \"c\" should be lowercase.
Under \"Cosmic Keystone,\" the word \"Aptly\" should be lowercase.
The \"Cry Cute\" entry needs removal since Kadaj is not in this game.
Under \"Dark and Troubled Past,\" the weirdly first-person \"If that\'s not dark and troubled, I don\'t know what is\" should be changed to \"If that\'s not dark and troubled, what is?\"
Under \"Debut Queue,\" the \"(when Cid, the last mandatory member joins)\" segment should read either \"(when Cid, the last mandatory member, joins),\" or \"(when the last mandatory member Cid joins).\"
The \"Also qualifies to Rufus and the Turks in Final Fantasy VII: Advent Children\" segment tacked onto the \"Defeat Means Friendship\" entry should be removed since it\'s irrelevant to this particular game and should be left to the Advent Children page.
Under the \"Very Definitely Final Dungeon\" segment of \"Dungeon Crawling,\" the word \"disks\" should be spelled as \"discs.\"
Under \"Eco-Terrorist,\" \"AVALANCHE believe\" should read as \"AVALANCHE believes,\" since AVALANCHE is the name of a unit, which is singular.
Under \"Eldritch Abomination,\" the sentence \"The whole turning people into monsters and driving them insane and impersonating the native race and turning on them after gaining acceptance is kind of pushing it though\" should read, \"The whole \'turning people into monsters, driving them insane, impersonating the native race, and turning on them after gaining acceptance\' thing is kind of pushing it, though.\"
Under \"Even Bad Men Love Their Mamas,\" the segment about Kadaj should be removed since this character is not in this game.
Under \"Everything Trying to Kill You,\" the sentence should read, \"The Sector 6 slums have the Hell House enemy, which is...a small house...that sprouts arms legs and tries to kill you...and for some reason, also shoots out bombs.\"
...And this is only the first \"A-E\" section, let alone the entire rest of the page. I\'ll go ahead and stop noting everything that needs fixing now, as I\'m sure my point has been very clearly made. Please consider unlocking this page so people who care about improving it can do so. Thank you.
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A whole lot of bad grammar needs fixing. It would be easier if you would unlock this page so I could make these edits myself, but alas...I suppose you want to make more work for yourself than let others do it for you?
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A whole lot of bad grammar needs fixing. It would be easier if you would unlock this page so I could make these edits myself, but alas...I suppose you would rather make more work for yourself than let others do it for you?
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In second paragraph: \"A eco-terrorist organisation\" should read \"An eco-terrorist organization.\"
Under \"Ascend to a Higher Plane of Existence,\" the whole sentence \"Backstory for Advent Children establish his three remnants being formed from pure spiritual energy with a need for any Jenova cells, though the three are incomplete copies of him without them\" is a confusing mess.
Under \"Black Best Friend,\" the \"specially\" in \"Barret, specially if you choose him for the tram cut-scene.\" should be either \"specifically\" or \"especially.\"
Under \"Cognizant Limbs,\" it says \"Emerald Weapons\" when it should be singular, not plural.
Under \"Damage-Sponge Boss /Marathon Boss,\" the sentence \"Ruby and Emerald WEAPON, who have eight hundred thousand and one million hp , respectively, and you are only able to do 9999 at once, typical strategies for beating them involve using the Game-Breaker summon a couple dozen times\" should read, \"Ruby and Emerald Weapon have eight-hundred thousand and one million HP respectively, and you are only able to deal 9999 damage at once. Typical strategies for beating them involve using the GameBreaker summon a couple dozen times.\" The sentence, \"The fight against Emerald WEAPON takes place underwater; you have to either kill it in 20 minutes, or undergo a simple sidequest to allow you to breathe water\" utilizes a semicolon and comma incorrectly. It should read, \"The fight against Emerald Weapon takes place underwater, and you have to kill it in 20 minutes or undergo a simple sidequest to allow you to breathe underwater.\" The sentence \"Since that isn\'t very long against something with as many hp as Emerald WEAPON, most people go for the sidequest\" should have \"HP\" capitalized.
Under \"Boss Battle,\" the sentence that says \"During the final battle with Sephiroth, you can switch your party members\" isn\'t totally accurate and should read, \"During the first segment of the final battle with Sephiroth, you can switch your party members.\" The segment that reads, \"If you bring the hurt and totally wreck Jenova\'s stuff, you have to split your equipment and materia three ways; having one team defeat Sephiroth\'s left arm, one team for the right arm, and one team for his core... which will heal the arms back if you take too long. And if you used the infinity plus one summon on it, the final boss gets a boost to its HP. And what\'s even worse, the numerous parties need to be properly equipped, but once you beat the boss, your main party goes straight on to the Final Boss battle without giving you a chance to swap equipment in-between\" is a grammatical nightmare, with sentence fragments and improper punctuation everywhere. It should read, \"If you bring the hurt and totally wreck Jenova\'s stuff, you have to split your party and material three ways, having one team to defeat Sephiroth\'s left arm, one team for the right arm, and one team for his core...which will heal the arms back if you take too long. If you use the InfinityPlusOne summon on it, the final boss gets a boost to its HP. Even worse, the numerous parties need to be properly equipped, but once you beat the boss, your main party goes straight on to the Final Boss battle without giving you a chance to swap equipment in-between.\" The segment that reads \"It\'s also made worse that if one of your team gets taken down, instant Game Over, even if it\'s not the team fighting the core (which fights Sephiroth\'s final form)\" should read \"It\'s also made worse that if one of your teams gets taken down, it\'s instant Game Over, even if it\'s not the team fighting the core (which fights Sephiroth\'s final form).\"
Under \"Broken Aesop,\" the sentence \"The original game had an environmental message about the Lifestream and humans abusing the planet\'s natural resources to the point there was the chance Holy would see them as a threat and destroy the species\" should say \"to the point where there was the chance that Holy would,\" etc.
Under \"Can\'t Drop the Hero,\" the sentence \"Both subverted and played straight; at a couple times in the game, you lose Cloud for a while, to be replaced by Tifa and Cid. Outside of this, however, you truly can\'t drop the hero\" should be split into two sentences, with a period where the semicolon is.
Under \"Chekhov\'s Gunman/Chekhov\'s Army,\" the sentence \"The connection the events at Nibelheim can be easily missed if the player doesn\'t stop at Gongaga (or if they do but don\'t have Aerith in the party) and meet his parents, revealing his actual name\" needs fixing. Not sure what it\'s trying to say, so needs to be rewritten in a way that makes sense.
Under \"Chest Monster,\" in the sentence \"Oh, and getting hit by the second hand dumps you into a pit, forces you to fight a pair of Ancient Dragons that surround you, and send you back to near the start of the dungeon (you\'ll find Cloud\'s Nail Bat weapon in this pit),\" it should say \"surrounds you\" (since it is worded as the \'\'pair\'\' that surrounds you) and \"send you back\" should say \"sends you back,\" since it\'s getting hit by the second hand that sends you back, not the dragons that send you back.
The \"Combat Pragmatist\" entry should be removed since it does not happen in this game.
Under \"Comically Small Bribe\" the spacing is odd on the attempted ellipses before \"10 gil\" and needs to be fixed. Furthermore, after \"You can walk out of town, kill some pansy monsters, and rake in a few hundred,\" I would like to add \"The guard fittingly calls you a cheapass for declining.\"
Under \"Corrupt Corporate Executive,\" the sentence \"The entire senior management of the Shinra company... Cranked Up to Eleven\" should remove the space before \"Cranked\" and the \"c\" should be lowercase.
Under \"Cosmic Keystone,\" the word \"Aptly\" should be lowercase.
The \"Cry Cute\" entry needs removal since Kadaj is not in this game.
Under \"Ascend to a Higher Plane of Existence,\" the whole sentence \"Backstory for Advent Children establish his three remnants being formed from pure spiritual energy with a need for any Jenova cells, though the three are incomplete copies of him without them\" is a confusing mess.
Under \"Black Best Friend,\" the \"specially\" in \"Barret, specially if you choose him for the tram cut-scene.\" should be either \"specifically\" or \"especially.\"
Under \"Cognizant Limbs,\" it says \"Emerald Weapons\" when it should be singular, not plural.
Under \"Damage-Sponge Boss /Marathon Boss,\" the sentence \"Ruby and Emerald WEAPON, who have eight hundred thousand and one million hp , respectively, and you are only able to do 9999 at once, typical strategies for beating them involve using the Game-Breaker summon a couple dozen times\" should read, \"Ruby and Emerald Weapon have eight-hundred thousand and one million HP respectively, and you are only able to deal 9999 damage at once. Typical strategies for beating them involve using the GameBreaker summon a couple dozen times.\" The sentence, \"The fight against Emerald WEAPON takes place underwater; you have to either kill it in 20 minutes, or undergo a simple sidequest to allow you to breathe water\" utilizes a semicolon and comma incorrectly. It should read, \"The fight against Emerald Weapon takes place underwater, and you have to kill it in 20 minutes or undergo a simple sidequest to allow you to breathe underwater.\" The sentence \"Since that isn\'t very long against something with as many hp as Emerald WEAPON, most people go for the sidequest\" should have \"HP\" capitalized.
Under \"Boss Battle,\" the sentence that says \"During the final battle with Sephiroth, you can switch your party members\" isn\'t totally accurate and should read, \"During the first segment of the final battle with Sephiroth, you can switch your party members.\" The segment that reads, \"If you bring the hurt and totally wreck Jenova\'s stuff, you have to split your equipment and materia three ways; having one team defeat Sephiroth\'s left arm, one team for the right arm, and one team for his core... which will heal the arms back if you take too long. And if you used the infinity plus one summon on it, the final boss gets a boost to its HP. And what\'s even worse, the numerous parties need to be properly equipped, but once you beat the boss, your main party goes straight on to the Final Boss battle without giving you a chance to swap equipment in-between\" is a grammatical nightmare, with sentence fragments and improper punctuation everywhere. It should read, \"If you bring the hurt and totally wreck Jenova\'s stuff, you have to split your party and material three ways, having one team to defeat Sephiroth\'s left arm, one team for the right arm, and one team for his core...which will heal the arms back if you take too long. If you use the InfinityPlusOne summon on it, the final boss gets a boost to its HP. Even worse, the numerous parties need to be properly equipped, but once you beat the boss, your main party goes straight on to the Final Boss battle without giving you a chance to swap equipment in-between.\" The segment that reads \"It\'s also made worse that if one of your team gets taken down, instant Game Over, even if it\'s not the team fighting the core (which fights Sephiroth\'s final form)\" should read \"It\'s also made worse that if one of your teams gets taken down, it\'s instant Game Over, even if it\'s not the team fighting the core (which fights Sephiroth\'s final form).\"
Under \"Broken Aesop,\" the sentence \"The original game had an environmental message about the Lifestream and humans abusing the planet\'s natural resources to the point there was the chance Holy would see them as a threat and destroy the species\" should say \"to the point where there was the chance that Holy would,\" etc.
Under \"Can\'t Drop the Hero,\" the sentence \"Both subverted and played straight; at a couple times in the game, you lose Cloud for a while, to be replaced by Tifa and Cid. Outside of this, however, you truly can\'t drop the hero\" should be split into two sentences, with a period where the semicolon is.
Under \"Chekhov\'s Gunman/Chekhov\'s Army,\" the sentence \"The connection the events at Nibelheim can be easily missed if the player doesn\'t stop at Gongaga (or if they do but don\'t have Aerith in the party) and meet his parents, revealing his actual name\" needs fixing. Not sure what it\'s trying to say, so needs to be rewritten in a way that makes sense.
Under \"Chest Monster,\" in the sentence \"Oh, and getting hit by the second hand dumps you into a pit, forces you to fight a pair of Ancient Dragons that surround you, and send you back to near the start of the dungeon (you\'ll find Cloud\'s Nail Bat weapon in this pit),\" it should say \"surrounds you\" (since it is worded as the \'\'pair\'\' that surrounds you) and \"send you back\" should say \"sends you back,\" since it\'s getting hit by the second hand that sends you back, not the dragons that send you back.
The \"Combat Pragmatist\" entry should be removed since it does not happen in this game.
Under \"Comically Small Bribe\" the spacing is odd on the attempted ellipses before \"10 gil\" and needs to be fixed. Furthermore, after \"You can walk out of town, kill some pansy monsters, and rake in a few hundred,\" I would like to add \"The guard fittingly calls you a cheapass for declining.\"
Under \"Corrupt Corporate Executive,\" the sentence \"The entire senior management of the Shinra company... Cranked Up to Eleven\" should remove the space before \"Cranked\" and the \"c\" should be lowercase.
Under \"Cosmic Keystone,\" the word \"Aptly\" should be lowercase.
The \"Cry Cute\" entry needs removal since Kadaj is not in this game.
