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I find the opening for this page rather confusing and badly written. Descriptions for the different factions change between the different types of balance but usually just to describe how the new faction is different. The page also makes constant comparisons to real life governments and organizations, which mean nothing -- presuming the comparisons are being made because of how many games organize the faction types, the examples list will cover this fine. The various faction types can be described without having to draw these comparisons, and a reader can read them and draw their own parallels to games they've played to understand what is being said.
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I find the opening for this page rather confusing and badly written. Descriptions for the different factions change between the different types of balance but usually just to describe how the new faction is different. The page also makes constant comparisons to real life governments and organizations, which mean nothing -- presuming the comparisons are being made because of how many games organize the faction types, the examples list will cover this fine. Stating these comparisons in the intro without context is just going to make a reader wonder what all these governments and races mean to defining the trope and factions. The various faction types can be described without having to draw these comparisons, and a reader can read them and draw their own parallels to games they\'ve played to understand what is being said.
