Trying to cross the line twice

So I'm editing my comedy story and there's one scene that bugs me. It's a parody of vampire fiction, and I tried to Crossing the Line Twice humor by having my Friendly Neighborhood Vampires feed on a bunch of adorable puppies. But I'm afraid this will simply alienate the audience, since many people have an inexplicable attachment to cute animals in stories (myself included). However, that scene where the bunny gets mauled by a bear in Futurama was funny. I want a scene where my vampires show they're "good guys", while doing something most people consider deplorable, but still have it be funny?

Can you please post the passages with the puppy eating?

It's two different scenes, but they play out similarly. Cages of strays lined up on a dinner table, and they all open them and maul the animal all at once.

If you're trying to write outrageous comedy, why are you worried about taboos? The whole point of "crossing the line twice" is that you are crossing a line. You are, by design, doing something that is potentially offensive. That's why it's funny. If no-one gave a damn about animal welfare, a bunch of vampires eating dogs alive would not be shocking, and it certainly wouldn't be amusing.

edited 8th Mar '15 8:30:35 AM by Tungsten74

True, but I want a whacky, violent comedy. Not something written for a serial killer.

The thing is you need to portray it as something outrageous to laugh at. South Park writes offensive humor, the basic joke is supposed to offend someone yes, but it's too outrageous and outlandish to properly be upset about.

A somewhat funny example was from a Survival Series I've been watching on Youtube, in it a character who is clearly not a nice person at all mentions that Puppysacking is a effective way of interrogation, they stick puppies in a sack and beat them. They never specify if the puppies are being beat, threatened to be beat, or beating the Interrogatee with said sack. Now in no way would this be considered anything that ever happens in reality and the further it went the more outrageous it became.

So just be prepared to go all out and make it crazy. Make the joke so mean that it steps out of the line of reality and into outrageous.

I'd still advise to find some other way to feed them because pulling off humor with puppies suffering is hard. And my example I only found somewhat humorous.

edited 11th Mar '15 6:34:30 AM by EchoingSilence

OK, I think I got it now. Instead of a straight feeding, have them pop the heads off and blood sprays like champagne, and use the corpses in an impromptu pillow fight.

That had me laughing and cringing at the same time. So.... success?

edited 11th Mar '15 7:26:16 PM by Wolf1066

Possible success. Now is this going to be visual or purely written? Also if so have them keep bottles of puppy blood and have that whole champagne cork thing as a mention, just the mention of it is outrageously offensive but since it hasn't happened on screen you risk less chance of turning people away.

edited 12th Mar '15 7:37:05 AM by EchoingSilence

Purely written.