Help Revising a Problematic Scene :

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1 TheMuse6th May 2013 05:19:42 PM , Relationship Status: Browsing the selection

edited 18th Jun '13 9:11:31 AM by TheMuse

2 Ogodei6th May 2013 07:23:00 PM from Megakat City
Totally Radical never looked so good
The only possible problem would be the one you pointed out yourself: is there enough signalling going on here? Will it feel like this comes out of nowhere to the point that the reader is just leafing through to try to figure out why the characters are reacting as they do?

Otherwise it seems fine.
3 TheMuse7th May 2013 04:27:06 AM , Relationship Status: Browsing the selection

edited 18th Jun '13 9:11:39 AM by TheMuse

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