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Help Revising a Problematic Scene :
edited 18th Jun '13 9:11:31 AM by TheMuse
go on, pet himThe only possible problem would be the one you pointed out yourself: is there enough signalling going on here? Will it feel like this comes out of nowhere to the point that the reader is just leafing through to try to figure out why the characters are reacting as they do? Otherwise it seems fine.
edited 18th Jun '13 9:11:39 AM by TheMuse
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